ShelleyA~13 years at WDC's (shelleya) Reviews

ShelleyA~13 years at WDC

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#3293705

Review of The Widow and the Poppy

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good heartfelt write about love and loss due to war as experienced by this widow. Heartfelt and poignant. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, in line three of stanza two, I would change "the" to 'their or her' after tell in that line and in line three of stanza four I would change "going" to 'coming' which will make the flow even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near rhyme and perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this poem.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. In this story poem you capture the love and grief a widow has for the husband she lost in war and how she expresses his love for her and their unborn child to this little girl who will only know her father through stories told her by her mother.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, consonance and nice assonance.

Overall:

Well penned. Write on.

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#3293696

Review of What is love, Daddy?

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about a father who explains what love is to his daughter. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm. Just one suggestion, in line two of your second stanza, I would change the semi-colon to a period. This will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: aabb ccdd eeff gghh. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed with precision in this piece.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. You capture a wonderful conversation between father and daughter about love that is passionate and loving.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the dialogue. Nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3293536

Review of Haunting Shadow

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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Title:

Your possible title "Your Haunting Shadow" works well with your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about verbal abuse and how it tears down a person's self-worth. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free verse poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. The reader can see you curled up, alone, deep within yourself as you listen to the abusive words hurled at you causing fear and pain.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good, line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice use of simile: 'words like daggers' - good descriptive/comparison of "this weapon" that words can be.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Dark. You express the hurt, pain and sadness that you feel that comes from the hands (or voice in this instance) of your abuser, words that haunt you and make you feel worthless. No one deserves this kind of treatment and this is a relationship that needs to be left behind.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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#3293530

Review of Hallways

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about your school days. Heartfelt. Well crafted free verse that I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye, the reader sees hallways filled with students, an ocean of color with laughter, yelling and bad language that flows through the air.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: students in packed hallways being 'a sea of colors' - a good descriptive/comparison of hallways as students move to their next class before the bell rings.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling of hurt and sadness. The reader can sense how uncomfortable you are with all that is happening around you while you try to maneuver through the halls being ignored by its occupants.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3293502

Review of Me, Myself, and I

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about how you feel about yourself. Introspective and heartfelt. Well crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express yourself boldly with a positive attitude of self-worth. You live your life as it suits you and what's good for you no matter what others might think of you.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of how you feel about yourself. Good alliteration, nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3292814

Review of I Believe

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the things you believe. Heartfelt and introspective. Nicely crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is nice. Line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good with a nice rhyme scheme. Near perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed nicely in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your thoughts about chance and how you believe through math and logic.

Word Choice:

Word choice is nice as is the alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned. Write on.

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#3291901

Review of He Is

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about God and what He means to you. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free verse poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Your faith shines in this piece. Beautiful words of praise and adoration to the Lord. A lovely testimony. I can relate to these thoughts very well.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and an inspirational read.

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#3291890

Review of A thought with a little secret inside

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A nice title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message for your friend that is encouraging and uplifting. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. An edifying 'secret message' "I'm always with you," inspiration for this person whom God sends a friend for care and support.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration and nice assonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3291283

Review of Lonely Boughs

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about separation as you are left with sweet memories and loneliness because you had to say goodbye to those you love, those friends you spent so much time with and will miss deeply. A nice blend of free verse and free style metered rhyming poetry.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Through the lens of your eye you paint vivid pictures of your time together, the beauty of the trees, the season and the sun painting its shadows here and there.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme in the second stanza of your poem. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece (street, incomplete, sweet, heat).

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Lamentful. You express your sadness as your friends embark on their new journies, a parting that brings you reflection as you say your goodbyes. I can relate to these feelings.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3291271

Review of The Return of My Desperation

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that suits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the loss of someone you loved. Imaginative, introspective and heartfelt. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good with a nice rhyme scheme. A nice mix of near rhyme and perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Lamentful. You express your dark thoughts because the one you loved has gone away from you.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Write on.

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#3291266

Review of O my friend across the border

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about your longing for a friend you miss so much. Heartfelt and introspective. A well crafted free verse poem with a tinge a rhyme that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at a natural pause will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express your thoughts about missing this special friend deeply in this piece. I can relate to these feelings.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good masculine end line rhyme in lines two and three (you, anew). Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3289596

Review of Sea of Humanity

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about loneliness even in a crowd of people and how it affects you. Heartfelt and introspective. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture that any reader can see in their minds eye. You walk with a crowd of people, scurrying to their destinations as you see them checking their blackberries, texting messages and something all of us can relate to.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Metaphor or Simile:

Nice metaphor: 'I tread alone this sea of humanity' - very nice descriptive/comparison.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. Lamentful. You express your feelings how a person can feel so alone amongst so many people.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3289577

Review of In the beginning...

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Rated: E

| (4.5)

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General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

"This is an official Paper Doll Gang Poetry Review"

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about new beginnings and reaching ones goals. Heartfelt. A skillfully crafted free style metered rhyming acrostic which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to a thought as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is nice as is the rhyme scheme: abccddefa. Perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed nicely in this piece.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. An uplifting and encouraging message.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3289410

Review of I Feel You

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the loneliness you feel because the one you love is so faraway from you. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free style metered rhyming poetry which I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the loneliness you feel in bed each night without him as you imagine the pillow you hug to yourself is his chest, the sheets tangled at your waist, his arms wrapped around you from behind; the gentle summer breeze, his fingers in your hair.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme. Every second/fourth line in stanzas two through five are perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed very well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love for him with passion in this poem.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance with nice consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3289399

Review of The Prettiest Star

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about the one you love. Heartfelt and romantic. Well crafted free style metered poetry which I enjoy.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb defe ghih jkle. A nice mix of near rhyme (stanza four) and every second/fourth line in first three stanzas are perfect masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your love for her romantically in this poem. To you she is the prettiest star, outshining any star in the universe.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3289378

Review of "Strengthen by Faith"

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write about the love you have for this special person. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free verse that is short concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment. Just a note, in line three the word should be 'presence' (singular) in my opinion.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. You express your feeling for him, his warm embrace and love for you that fills your soul beautifully in this piece. He is someone who strengthens faith in your love. Delightfully sensual and romantic.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3289369

Review of Architect

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write and message about achieving ones destiny. Well crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. A message that is uplifting and encouraging that inspires determination to reach ones goals.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis on ones goals. Good alliteration, assonance and consonance. Just a note, there are a couple of misspellings: line two, should be 'perseverance' and in line three should be 'achieving'.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3288731

Review of Set Free

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about detachment. Heartfelt and introspective. Nicely crafted free verse.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm and use of enjambment.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling as you separate yourself from everything around you to find contentment in simply being.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the use of repetition. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned, write on.

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#3288727

Review of Gray

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write defining your idea of grayness. Abstract. Nicely crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Nice depth of feeling. You express your thoughts of gray and its subduing personality well in this piece.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of its shading. Nice assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3288721

Review of A Whisper

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is fitting to the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about your love for the woman in your life. Heartfelt. Well crafted free verse that I enjoy.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Nice setting. Through the lens of his eyes the reader can see the love he has for her as the flames from the hearth flickers their silhouette on the wall while she sleeps peacefully in their bed.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Lovely depth of feeling. He whispers lovingly to her 'I love you'. Then joins her in sleep. Romantic.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3288712

Review of Lovers

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good short write about lovers. Nice form. Well crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct.

Imagery:

Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of the act of love.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm. Just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Tone:

Deep expression of emotion. Delightfully sensual.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Overall:

Nicely penned and a good read. Write on.

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#3288523

Review of To Count the Stars

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: E

| (5.0)

MY PAPER DOLL GANG FORM POETRY CONTEST REVIEW

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A very good write about time, the future and the work of the nocturnal gazer. A very good interpretation of the picture prompt. A skillfully crafted free verse acrostic.

Originality/Imagination:

An original piece about this nocturnal gazer who is counting the heavenly bodies in the sky.

Content:

Content is very good.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Very nice rhythm.

Emotion/Depth of Feeling:

Good depth of feeling with a bit of humor.

Imagery:

Imagery is nice as are the descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of this man who is gazing up at the night sky counting the stars and other heavenly bodies he can see with his naked eye.

Alliteration/Assonance/Consonance:

Good alliteration, assonance and consonance.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of the scene where the old man sits and watches the sky. No spelling errors. Punctuation: just a suggestion, in line nine remove the period after alone; it's not needed and it smooths out the flow into the following line in my opinion.

Overall:

Well penned and a good read. Thank you for participating in my contest. Write on.

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#3288493

Review of dream writing: contest Entry

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

MY PAPER DOLL GANG FORM POETRY CONTEST REVIEW

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about ones dreams and what they're made of. Introspective. A nice take on the picture prompt. A well crafted free style metered rhyming acrostic.

Originality/Imagination:

An original concept on dreaming, the wondering of where
they come from.

Content:

Content is good.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.

Emotion/Depth of Feeling:

Nice depth of feeling in ones search for understanding concerning dreams, or memories that hold the key to your thoughts.

Rhyme:

Rhyme is good as is the rhyme scheme: abcb dded fghg. A nice mix of perfect dactylic and masculine end line rhyme that is executed well in this piece (mind, find; key, be, insanity; heart, part). Nice internal rhyme in line one (do, you).

Alliteration/Assonance/Consonance:

Good alliteration, consonance and nice assonance.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good; nice call and response in stanza one (question/answer/question/answer). Spelling: in line five, should be 'the' instead of they. Punctuation: just a suggestion in the last two stanzas, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will give emphasis to your thoughts as well as make the flow and rhythm even better in my opinion.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Thank you for participating in my contest. Write on.

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Review of THE SAGE SAT BUT COULD NOT THINK

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers

Rated: ASR

| (4.0)

MY PAPER DOLL GANG FORM POETRY CONTEST REVIEW

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that fits the theme of your poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about a sage waiting to be inspired. A good take on the picture prompt. A well crafted free verse acrostic.

Originality/Imagination:

An original write about a wise old man eagerly awaiting inspiration, but has drawn a blank; even God was quiet as he sat there thinking.

Content:

Content is good.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; nice line to line transition and breaks. Nice rhythm.

Emotion/Depth of Feeling:

Nice depth of feeling as he concludes that not to be or think was his inspiration of the day. Nice humor.

Alliteration/Assonance/Consonance:

Nice alliteration, good assonance and consonance.

Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation:

Word choice is good. No spelling errors. Punctuation: just a suggestion, a strategically placed comma at natural pauses will make the flow and rhythm better in my opinion. Also, since this is an acrostic, it would be better in my opinion that it is left justified so that the reader can plainly see the acrostic. It spells out: The Sage Sat but Couldn't Think.

Overall:

Nicely penned and an enjoyable read. Thank you for participating in my contest.
Write on.

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#3288089

Review of A Heart Without a Home

Review by ShelleyA~13 yea...

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

General Disclaimer: This review reflects my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive and encouraging. I hope you find this review helpful.

Title:

A good title that is suitable to the subject of the poem.

Form/Style:

A good write about life, living alone due to never finding true love. Heartfelt and introspective. Well crafted free verse with a tinge of rhyme.

Flow/Rhythm:

Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice rhythm.

Tone:

Good depth of feeling. You express how you're resigned to the fact that you will live your life but it will always be with a heart without a home. Poignant.

Word Choice:

Word choice is good; nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Good alliteration, assonance and nice consonance. Good masculine end line rhyme in lines two and four of stanza two (love, above).

Overall:

Well penned, write on.

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