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Review of A Soul is Seeking  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi JSeanAuthor,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem takes a look at homelessness and its effects. I have a roof over my head and food on the table and will do anything to help those who don't have these basic necessities. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have not used punctuation here, but this does not interfere with the flow of the poem. You have used grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of A Boy and his Dog  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi ScaryBee,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about a boy who wakes up to find that his dog can talk. I love poems which tell stories. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi GhostlyPotato,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is filled with confusion and anticipation. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering what has happened to the cat who approaches Emilda. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a sorceress who helps solve a murder of a princess at the behest of the princess's cat. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Tim,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about a mouse who cannot find any food in the house he currently inhabits. I love poems which tell stories. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi lucifer,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about how creativity equals creation. We create everyday and, sometimes, don't realize how much we are contributing to the world around us. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have not used punctuation in this poem, but this does not interfere with the flow. You have used grammar consistently here. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Anetra,

This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read immediately to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about the sudden fear your feel as you realize that your life is not the life you intended it to be, and you want something more. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person even as they deeply hope your find peace. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of CLEARLY ESTRANGED  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Hrafnar,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. In the poem, a couple sees their marriage dissolve when the emotional needs of the couple are not taken care of. I am hoping that this couple will stay together and appreciate their union. I read to the last word to see if this happened. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Korosu,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is tinged anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who is struggling to find a direction for their life. I am hoping that the speaker finds the direction and focus they need in their life. I read to the last word to see if this happens. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Curtis,

This is a wonderful story. The tone is light and informal. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering how buying gas could get complicated, as the first sentence implies. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a man who struggles to decide between a making a wise choice of buying a nutritious drink as opposed to one that was not as much of a wise choice. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on Caleb, and he comes across as a real person. The dialogue is well done and realistic. Caleb speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:


1)"a Coca-Cola would be so refreshing on such a hot day,-Should read "A Coca-Cola would be so refreshing on such a hot day,"

2)content pumping-Should read "contentedly pumping"

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi James,

This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It connects the A-Team to a dog. The reader is fascinated and will begin right away to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about your son's tenth birthday party at which the cake almost got ruined. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a light style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Eloi,

This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read immediately to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have written about an incident in your life which helped you appreciate the people who work with. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Review of Hello  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Anetra,

This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the piece is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word. You have introduced yourself and shared with the reader what your intentions are for coming to the site. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Serena,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is aggressive. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. In the poem, you point out that we have to be leery of people that would do us harm and lead us away from God. I am good at reading people's intentions. I have only been really fooled twice. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of FROZEN  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Stargazer,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of pain and agony. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone struggling with childhood abuse they still blame themselves for. The reader is hoping that the speaker will be able to put their pain behind them. They will read to the last word to find out if this happens. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There us a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Protectress  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Windtalker,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone formal, but, also, aggressive. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about someone who has cared for an injured or sick person for a long while and gained their trust. I am hoping that the injured person will gain their strength. I read to the last word to find out. I loved this poem. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Statue in Bloom  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hi Axel,

These are wonderful chapters.

The first chapter opens with a tender moment between Chantal and Avery. The reader gets completely involved with the strong emotions in the chapter. They will read on. This is a fantastic opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. You have set up your main characters and plot very well for the reader. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people.

The second chapter opens with Avery and Chantal going to a coffee shop. The reader is wondering if it will be just the two of them or with friends. They will read on to find out. This is a fantastic opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. They get a good look at Avery and Chantal's relationship and how they are navigating it. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people.

I would change only two things:

1)In a few places you have neglected to double space between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

2)I would suggest that you create a book item and start putting the individual chapters in that. It will make it much easier for those reviewing your work.

Great job.

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Review of Forgiveness  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Ned,

This is a fantastic, heart breaking story. The tone is full of anguish and suffering. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the dead child is the speaker's son. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a man who is agonized over the death of a twelve year old who couldn't understand that others might not realize the toy gun he was carrying was not real. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on Martin, and he comes across as a real person. The dialogue is well done and realistic. Martin speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of Cucumbers  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Bob,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering why, exactly, the speaker's mother used cucumbers as her main ingredient. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, someone is put off cucumbers by their sister's unconventional use of one. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.

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Review of Pearls the Mouse  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi George,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is light. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if Pearls' neighbors actually need help or just want her pearls. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a mouse who learns the joy of giving to others. The story is narrative as opposed to conflict based. This is rare in literature and very interesting. There is no doubt about what is going here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of Overnight Snack  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi NormaJean,

This review comes with a huge thank you for reviewing me. This is a wonderful story. The tone is light. You identified it as a children's story, so this tone is just perfect. I was wondering the Mouse will be caught by Mouser as he looks for food. I read to the last word to find out. The story is about a mouse who goes looking for something to eat while trying to avoid the family cat. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. I love stories in which animals are given personalities. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)In a few places you have neglected to double space between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi Frighten Dead the Witch Warp,

This is a fantastic Word Search puzzle. I used to love these as a kid, and, it turns out, I still do. The title is engaging. I love Horror movies and started to read right away to find out more. The puzzle is well organized and easy to do. You have made it easy for even someone who has never done a word search before. I haven't seen many of the movies listed, and, now, I can't wait to find them. This is the perfect time of year for a puzzle like this. Great job.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi chuckles,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is full of joy. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about the blessings God has given this world and us. I believe in God and enjoy, everyday, everything He as given to this world and my life. I loved this poem and read to the last word. the free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have not used punctuation in this poem, but this does not interfere with the flow. You have used grammar consistently here. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Black Eyes  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Axel,

This is a wonderful story. The tone is dark and full of anxiety, sorrow and acceptance. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if Alex will get out of her plight and out of the dark place she has lived in. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a 16 year old girl who is transformed into a dark being. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:


1)take my advice-Should read "Take my advice,"

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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Review of My Truths  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Constance,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal but tinged with sorrow. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The poem is about the truths about you and exist in your life that you are dealing with. I am delighted with the look I get at you as a person as well as a writer as I read. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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Review of Fallen leaf  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Raven,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about things changing whether to rise or fall. I have always looked at change as an opportunity to discover new things. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The free verse works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have not used punctuation in this poem, but this does not interfere with the flow. You have used grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.

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