I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eighth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Fiction story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.
The Story: This story is about a schoolage girl who is weird. At least it sounds like she is school age. About thirteen give or take a year or two.
Where Your Location Is: I’m not exactly sure where the location is for this story. But my guess it’s her room. Personally, I try to have at least one location in my stories. It depends on the Word Count limitations as to how much detail I put into them. Sometimes it just the location itself. But it’s usually a little more than that.
Your Main Character: Whoever the girl is she is the main character, and only, character in this story. Personally, I would have given her a name. I try to give all of my characters a name – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. but that’s just the way I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There is no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.
Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have put a space between paragraphs. I don’t think there is a grammar rule that you should. But even if there isn’t I think it makes a story easier to read if it is.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your sixth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Fiction story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.
The Story: This is a story about an old retired CIA employee who spend his days living by a swamp. His life might sound kind of dull right now. But it isn’t.
Where Your Location Is: The location for this story is South Florida near a swamp. It looks like the only location for this story.
Your Main Character: Whoever this retired CIA man is he is the main, and only, character in this story. Personally, I would have given him a name. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have names. But that’s just the way that I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There is no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.
Any Last Thoughts: I think you did a very good job with the Prompts with this story. I’ve been involved with one, formerly two, daily, and several monthly, contest that involve Prompts and Word Count limitations. So I know how hard it is to write a story with prompts.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your ninth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Fiction synopsis. And I found it very promising. It’s classified as a Fiction story. But it looks more like a synopsis for a Short Story or probably a Novel.
The Story: This is a story about a female named Destiny. At least I think that’s her name.
Where Your Location Is: I’m not sure where this story takes place. It doesn’t say.
Your Main Character: Destiny is the main, and only, character so far in this synopsis. But from the sound of it she isn’t going to be the only one. I like that you gave her a name - if that is her name. Personally, I try to give all of my characters a name. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There was no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.
Any Last Thoughts: Is this a synopsis for a Novel. If so has it advanced to an Outline and Novel yet.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eleventh year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Fiction story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.
The Story: This is the story about a school-age girl name Michelle. And the very bad, nightmare, dream she had. Only in the end it didn’t look like it was a dream after all.
Where Your Location Is: It appears that the main setting for this story is the cemetery. But it began and end in her bedroom.
Your Main Character: Michelle is the main character in this story. But her mother is a big part of this story too. Personally, I would have given her mother a name too. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main one. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have names. But that’s just the way I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t a lot of dialogue in this story. But there was some. And what there was looked pretty good to me.
Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have separated the paragraphs with a space. I’m not sure, but I don’t think there is any grammar rule against spacing in between paragraphs. But I think it’s easier to read a story it if it is. I also think you should give your dialogue separate paragraphs too.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your seventh year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Fiction story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.
The Story: This is a story about a male named Jim. Who is in Texas under mysterious circumstances. But the female he picked up alone the way doesn’t know that – yet.
Where Your Location Is: The location for this story is the car, and its surrounding, that Jim and Helen are in. But Texas is also a big part of this story too.
Your Main Character: Jim is the main character in this story. But Helen is a close second.
How They Spoke to Me: There was a lot of dialogue in this story. And what dialogue there is looked good to me.
Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have put a space in between paragraphs. I don’t think it’s a grammar rule. But I think it makes a story easier to read if it is. Also this story just seemed to end. If it did have you continued it to completion?
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your second year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Fiction Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.
The Story: This is a story about a young female, at least she sounds young, who has just come home – to find a mysterious note, not the word not that is in your story, in the bottom of a fruit bowl. After contacting her friend, she discovers the truth.
Where Your Location Is: The location for this story is her house. At least it is at first. Once they decipher the note she heads for Celebration Avenue.
Your Main Character: Ella is the main character in this story. But her friend Haley is a close second.
How They Spoke to Me: There is some dialogue in this story. And what dialogue there is looked good to me.
Any Last Thoughts: I think I have found a few mistakes you have made. Mostly with capitalization. And with a misspelled word or two. Personally, I would have separated this one paragraph into several – especially with the dialogue. I don’t think it’s a grammar rule that it should be. But even if it isn’t I think a story is easier to read if it is.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your third year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Fiction story. And I like it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.
The Story: This is a story about a female named Aliviana. Who is about to find out she is blessed by the gods. What exactly that means she doesn’t know yet.
Where Your Location Is: The location for this story is mixed. It started out at her home. But thanks to a cruise to Greece she learned who she really is.
Your Main Character: Aliviana is the main character in this story. But Graven is a close second.
How They Spoke to Me: There is not dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.
Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have broken this one paragraph into several. I don’t think that it’s a grammar rule that you should. But I think it’s a lot easier to read it if it is.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your fifth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Fiction story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.
The Story: This is a story about a thirteen year old - age and name unknown in story itself. Who has the power to transport herself.
Where Your Location Is: The friend’s house is the location for this story. At least it is at the beginning. But when she uses a mysterious crystal stone she transport back to her house.
Your Main Character: Whoever this thirteen year old girl is that’s the main character in this story. Personally, I would have given her a name, and age, within the story. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main ones. It makes a character feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just how I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There is no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.
Any Last Thoughts: It looks like this is a beginning of a Novel – especially since it started out with ‘Chapter one.’ Is it? If so have you expanded on it.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your seventh year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Fiction story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.
The Story: This is a story about Elyse. Who has the only key to a mysterious, scary, house. A key that all her friends want.
Where Your Location Is: Most of this story takes place in that house the key belonged to. At least it is for the friends who enter into complete darkness.
Your Main Character: Elyse is the main character in this story. But her begging friends a close behind. I like that you gave her a name. Personally, I try to do that with all of my characters. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There was a thought at the beginning of this story. And I do consider that dialogue. But some of the other Reviewers might not.
Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have given this story a different title like ‘Enter at Your Own Risk’ or something like that. But that’s just the way I write.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eighth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Fiction story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.
The Story: This is a story about an alien named Samus. And how she gains royalty but subjugating first Peach and the Toad.
Where Your Location Is: I’m not exactly sure where the location is for this story. But since there is a Crown involved I would guess it’s probably a Palace of some kind.
Your Main Character: Samus is the main character in this story. But Peach is right there beside her. And Toad isn’t too far behind. I liked that you gave all of your characters a names.
How They Spoke to Me: The dialogue in this story looked good to me. Personally, I would have separated the dialogue into separate paragraphs for each person. I don’t thinks it’s a grammar rule that you do. But I think it’s easier to read if you do.
Any Last Thoughts: I think you might have missed a few comma after words – especially in that first paragraph. You might want to check into that.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eleventh year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Fiction story. And I liked it very much. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.
The Story: This was the story about a demonstration of a new weapon called AI-145. And AI-145 proved itself against another equally deadly robot – H45-M2.
Where Your Location Is: I’m not exactly sure where the location is for this story is. But it sounds like it might be a testing field at some military operation.
Your Main Character: Glenn is the one who is showing the demonstration. So you would think he’s the main character in this story. And he is. But he’s not alone. So is AI-145. Personally, I don’t care if it’s a child, or in this story a robot, it’s whoever is in the story the most that gets top billing to me.
How They Spoke to Me: The dialogue in this story looked very good. At least it did to me.
Any Last Thoughts: I think you should have given yourself a title for this story. The story has more impact, I think, if there is a title. And you can always change it later on if you change your mind. I do that a lot with my stories. Personally I wouldn’t put ‘unfinished’ in the title either. I’m curious about one thing though: Did you every finish it?
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your fourth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Fiction Story. And I liked it very much. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.
The Story: This was a story about the death of our solar system. At least it would be by the time Friedler got to the freeway.
Where Your Location Is: The location for this story was Friedler’s bedroom at the beginning of this story. But by the end of it he was about to leave his house.
Your Main Character: Friedler was the main character in this story. But the boy he was talking to was also a big part of it. Personally, I would have given the boy a name too. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main one. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write.
How They Spoke to Me: I think you did a good job with your dialogue. At least it looked good to me.
Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I wouldn’t have started a paragraph with the same word next to each other. Which you didn’t do. But they were only one paragraph separating them. I have to have a least two paragraphs in between them before I use a word again. But that’s just how I write.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your ninth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Fiction Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.
The Story: This was a story about a beast that was terrorizing all the houses in that part of town. At least it sounded like it was – until the end of this story. Then it turned out to be a bedtime story.
Where Your Location Is: The location for this story was really a child’s bedroom. But the story itself sounded like it was the streets where the houses where being terrorized.
Your Main Character: Cheryl, an Elderly Officer and Tom where the main characters in the story. But it was really whoever was telling this story to the son. Personally, I would have given them names too. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main one. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have names. But that’s just the way that I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There was a lot of dialogue in a story this short. But that is good. At least I think so. I also think it looks pretty good too.
Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I wouldn’t have left ‘(A Bedtime Story)’ in the title. It give a little more power to the last lines of your story, I think, without it. Also you might want to check your Tenses. I think you mixed them in this story.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your sixth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Fiction story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested from beginning to end. Once I started it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.
The Story: This was a story about abduction. First by Jack. And then by Bill. Personally, I don’t really like stories like this – because I know that isn’t how aliens study us.
Where Your Location Is: I’m not sure if this story is taking place only at Bill’s place or if it’s at Jack’s house too. But it sounds like it might be only at Jack’s place.
Your Main Character: Jack and Bill are the main, only, characters in this story. And they are both about equal within it too. I like that you gave them names. Personally, I try to give all of my characters a name – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just how I write.
How They Spoke to Me: The first part paragraph in this story is good dialogue wise. At least it looks good to me. So do the other two too. But I think the second one could have been broken up a little by characters. I don’t think it’s a grammar rule if you don’t. That’s just what I would have done.
Any Last Thoughts: I think you did a very good job with this story. Good Job.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your seventh year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Fiction Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.
The Story: This is a story about a journey to the other planets in or solar system. It sounded like it was supposed to be a vacation. But what conversations took place on those other worlds it didn’t sound like a vacation to me. The only one that kind of sounded like one was Venus.
Where Your Location Is: The other planets in our solar system were the locations for this story. How whoever is recalling this story got there isn’t exactly known. There was a hint to it a couple of times. But it was never specified.
Your Main Character: Whoever is thinking this story is the main character in it. Personally, I would have given him, it sounds like it’s a male because of the lesbian reference, a name. I try to give all of my characters a name – especially my main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have names. But that’s just the way I write.
How They Spoke to Me: It looks like this is one big thought – broken down into sentences and paragraphs. There is nothing wrong with that, as far as I know, but according to at least one Contest Judge they should be enclosed with single quotation marks.
Any Last Thoughts: I know it’s hard to create a character for a story like it – especially if there is a Word Count Limit. But it can be done. For example: Medz leaned back in his chair as he thought to himself.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eighth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Fiction Story. And I like it. I’m not a big fan of Poetry. Probably because I couldn’t write one to save my life. But it came up in the Fiction category so I decided to read it.
The Story: I’m not exactly sure what this story is about. You mention a gem and night. But they don’t appear to go together. That could be because of my limitations when it comes to Poetry.
Where Your Location Is: Once again I’m not sure exactly where this story takes place. Because of the night mentioned it could be outdoors somewhere. Then again in could be someone looking up at the night from indoors too.
Your Main Character: There are no characters in this Poetry. In fact, there aren’t many, if any, characters in most Poetry.
How They Spoke to Me: There isn’t any dialogue in this Poetry. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might.
Any Last Thoughts: I’m curious about something: Why did you classify this as fiction instead of Poetry?
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your fifth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Fiction Story. And I liked it. But I am also a little confused by it too.
The Story: I’m not exactly sure what this story was about. It started out with a boy named Josh in Bunker One. Then it shifted to a boy named Davey and Christmas.
Where Your Location Is: Bunker One I think is one of the locations for this story. But where it is as and if there are any other locations, it sounds like there is at least one more, is unknown.
Your Main Character: Josh and Davey are the two main, and only, characters in this story. And I am glad that you gave them a name. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they do. But that’s just how I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There is a lot a dialogue in this story. And I like that too. What dialogue there is looked good to me too – except maybe the spacing. Personally, I would have given the dialogue its own paragraph. At least I would have broken it up with each speaker. I don’t think it’s a grammar rule if you do it this way. But I think it’s a lot easier to read if it is.
Any Last Thoughts: I don’t understand what the two paragraphs have in common – except for Josh being in both. What else do they have in common?
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your fourth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.
The Story: This is a story about a twelve year old girl who got nightly visits by her father since her mother died six years ago. And what her final solution to those visits was.
Where Your Location Is: I’m not exactly sure what all the locations are in this story. I know there are a couple: a school and her house.
Your Main Character: The girl is the main character in this story. Personally, I would have given her, and her daddy, a name. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main one. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have names. But that’s just the way that I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There was only that one line of dialogue in this story. But that one line looked pretty good to me.
Any Last Thoughts: I like the way that you ended your story. I’m not talking about the solution to her problems. But the way you said what was happening to her without coming out and saying it.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your twelfth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.
The Story: This is a story about the death of a mother and wife. And the aftermath of that death with her family at her funeral.
Where Your Location Is: The grave site is the location for this story. At first I wasn’t sure where this setting was. But by the end of the story I did.
Your Main Character: Michael is the main character in this story. So is his sister and father. Personally, I would have given all of them names. I try to do that with all of my characters. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name.
How They Spoke to Me: There was a lot of dialogue in this story. And what there was looked pretty good to me. But you might have made a mistake or two with it. According to at least one Contest Judge a thought should be single quotations marks instead of doubles.
Any Last Thoughts: I think you might have made a mistake or two with your spelling. One is ‘grave sight’ instead of ‘grave site.’ I’m not sure if there are anymore. But there might be. You might want to look into that.
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your second year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.
The Story: This is a story about a female, named Regina according to the title description, who witnessed her parents die from cancel. But that isn’t what killed her though. She did it to herself.
Where Your Location Is: I’m not sure where the location for this story is at. Personally, I would have given this story a location. I try to give at least one location in my stories. It depends on my Word Count Limitations as to how much detail I give to my locations. Sometimes it just the location itself. But usually I will describe it a little.
Your Main Character: Regina, if that is her name, is the main character in this story. Personally, I would have given her a name in the story itself too. But that’s just the way that I write my stories.
How They Spoke to Me: There is no dialogue in this Short Story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who considers this telling instead of showing.
Any Last Thoughts: Is this part of a Novel? It’s categorized as a Short Story. But part of the title for this story is ‘Chapter 8.’
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your twelfth year with us. Happy Anniversary
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it very much. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.
The Story: This is a story about a couple who is eating. But it’s not really about the eating. It’s about what happened while they were eating.
Where Your Location Is: The location for this story is a dining room, I think, in their house. Where this house is at is unknown. Personally, I would have given more details about this location – unless there was a Word Count Limit with this story.
Your Main Character: Emma was the main character in this story. But he was also a big part of this story. Personally, I would have given him a name too. I try to give all of my characters a name – especially a main one. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There was a lot of dialogue in this story. And what dialogue there was looked good to me.
Any Last Thoughts: I think you did a real good job with this story. I am a little curious about one thing though: Why did Emma do it?
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. I kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it. But I was a little confused about the last few sentences though.
The Story: This is a story about whoever is telling this story. I’m not sure if they are male or female. And the love of his/her teenage life.
Where Your Location Is: I’m not sure where the location is in this story – except the haunted house at the end of it. You also mentioned classes together. Which tells me another location was a school.
Your Main Character: The main character is whoever is telling this story. But the girl, and her friends, are also very important in this story too. Personally, I would have given them all names. I try to give all of my characters a name. It makes a character feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There was no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are a few Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.
Any Last Thoughts: I think you might have made a few mistakes when it comes to mixing your Present Tense with you Past Tenses. You might want to check into that.
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it very much. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.
The Story: This is the story of a couple celebrating, or about to celebrate, their fiftieth anniversary. But it’s a sad time, and a happy one sort of too, instead of a happy one because he is about to die.
Where Your Location Is: I’m not exactly sure where the location is for this story. But it sounds like it might be a hospital. Personally, I would have given a little bit more detail to my location. It also depends on my Word Count Limitations as to how long that detail is.
Your Main Character: The couple are the main characters in this story. Personally, I would have given this couple names. I try to do that with all of my characters a name – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have names. But that’s just the way I write.
How They Spoke to Me: There was a lot of dialogue in this story. And I liked that. I think dialogue makes a story move along more smoothly. What dialogue there was in this story looked good to me.
Any Last Thoughts: I think you did a very good job with this story. It was a simple one. But it was also a strong one too.
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Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it. But I am a little bit confused by it too.
The Story: This is the story about a woman who would do or say anything to get the man she loves. And that includes claiming a baby is his when it isn’t.
Where Your Location Is: I’m not exactly sure where the location is with this story – because there isn’t a location mentioned. Personally, I try to include at least one location in all of my stories. It depends on what my Word Count Limitations are as to how much detail goes into that location. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. But usually it a little bit more than that.
Your Main Character: The couple are the main characters in this story. Personally, I would have given them names. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main one. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way I write my stories.
How They Spoke to Me: According to the Dialogue 500 Contest all of this story is supposed to be Dialogue only. But
It sure doesn’t look like it. At least not the way I was taught how to write dialogue. I have been entering this Contest for the last few months. So I know how most people who enter is now. Has it changed since you entered this one?
Any Last Thoughts: I’m curious about something. What was the Prompt for this Contest?
I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your third year with us. Happy Anniversary
Now for the good stuff: The Review.
Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.
The Story: This is a story about a man named Mr. Roster. Who gives new meaning to the word eccentric.
Where Your Location Is: Richards Avenue aka Death’s Cradle is the location in this story. Where exactly Richards Avenue is it’s unknown.
Your Main Character: Mr. Roster is the main character in this story. But whoever it telling this story I think is the main one. I liked that you gave him a name. But what about the narrator. Personally, I would have given them a name too. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main ones. It makes a character more real, I think, if they have a name.
How They Spoke to Me: There was no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.
Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have separated the two paragraphs with a space. But I don’t think it’s a grammar rule that you should do it. It’s just how I write my stories.
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