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Review of Lizzie vs. Emma  
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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello June Afternoon,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your ninth year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a whole lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is a story about a couple who is having a conversation via texting. At first I thought it was a long distance relationship. I also thought they were talking via the phone instead of texting. But as I read on I realized I was wrong. I’m also wrong about it being just texting. They do meet in person too.


Where Your Location Is: I’m not exactly sure where this texting is going on. There doesn’t seem to be an exact location in this story. Personally, I try to have at least one location in all of my stories. It depends on what my Word Count Limitations as to how much detail I put into them. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. But usually it’s a little bit, if not a lot, more than that.


Your Main Character: Whoever is telling this story is the main character in it. Personally, I would have given them names. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There was a lot of dialogue in this story. At least I think it’s dialogue. But since it’s single Quotation Marks I’m not sure. Up until recently I thought single Quotation Marks were used for thinking. Now I know it’s not. Thoughts was now done with italics.


Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have indented the paragraphs. I don’t think it’s a grammar rule that you should. In fact, I am sure that it’s not. Most writers don’t – especially for short stories. That’s just the way that I write my stories.



I liked your story a whole lot. Keep on writing.



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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello jaywah,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your fifth year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is a story about a couple who meet at a bus stop. And then on a bus. But then they got separated. Only to find their way back to each other. At least I think that’s what this story is about. Am I wrong?


Where Your Location Is: The bus stop and bus are the main locations for this story. But it’s not the only ones. One of the reasons why I like this story so much is because of your locations. I try to have at least one location for all of my stories. It depends on what the Word Count Limitations are as to how much detail I put into them. Sometimes it’s just the location itself – like this one. But it’s usually a little bit, if not a lot, more than just that.


Your Main Character: Of course, the couple is the main characters in this story. Personally, I would have given them names. I try to give all of my characters a name – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if I they have a name. But that’s just the way I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There is no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.


Any Last Thoughts: I noticed that you didn’t capitalize the letter ‘I’ a lot in this story. You also missed a few words in it too. Personally, I would have separated this one paragraph into two, maybe even three or four, paragraphs. I don’t think it’s a grammar rule that you should. But I think it’s easier to read a story if you do.



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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Review of The Prediction  
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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello writeaway,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your third year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it very much. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is a story about a couple who met in college. And despite a separation because a death in his family they still remained together. In fact, it’s about to get even better between them.


Where Your Location Is: The main location for this story is the College where they met. He went to London right after graduation. But she remained in college until her graduation. Personally, I try to have at least one location in all of my stories. It depends on what my Word Count Limitations are as to how much detail I put into them. Sometimes it’s just the location itself – like this one. But it’s usually a little bit, if not a lot, more than that.


Your Main Character: Kat and Charlie are the main characters in this story. One of the things, if not the only thing, I like about this story is that you gave them names. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if it’s they have a name. But that’s just how I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t a lot of dialogue in this story. But there was some. And what dialogue there was looked good. At least it did to me.


Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have indented the paragraphs. I don’t think it’s a grammar rule that you should indent them. In fact, I know it isn’t – especially when it comes to short stories. That’s just the way I write my stories.



I liked your story very much. Keep on writing.



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Review of Children  
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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello M. E. Levin,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eleventh year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is a story about a couple who have just had another miscarriage. But it’s not only a story about a miscarriage. It’s also about a couple that is going to through problems with their marriage. Part of it is because she wants children. But that isn’t the only, or even the main reason, for their problems.


Where Your Location Is: The location for this story is a bedroom. It’s the only one in this story. One of the things, maybe the only one, I like about this story is the fact that you gave it a location. I try to have at least one location in all of my stories. It depends on the Word Count Limitations as to how much detail I put into them. Sometimes it’s just the location itself – like this one. But usually there is a little bit, if not a lot, more than just that.


Your Main Character: Of course, the couple are the main characters in this story – especially the female. Personally, I would have given them a name. I try to give all of my characters a name – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There is no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.


Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have indented the paragraphs. I don’t think it’s a grammar rule that you should. In fact, I am sure it isn’t – especially when it comes to Short Stories. But that’s just the way I write my stories.



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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Review of The Spirit Guide  
Review by PureSciFi
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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello Maryk,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your tenth year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a whole lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is a story about a girl name Danielle. Who was born in 1986. But she wasn’t born alone. No it wasn’t a twin like I thought it was going to be. It’s was her Spirit Guide. And his name was Teddy. The first few years of her life was pretty normal. But it started going downhill fast after she turned eight.


Where Your Location Is: I’m not exactly sure where this story takes place. It started with her birth. But the rest of it isn’t clear. I’m sure most of it takes place at her house. Where else it takes place is unknown. Personally, I try to have at least one location in all of my stories. It depends on what my Word Count Limitations are as to how much detail I put into them. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. But usually it’s a little bit, if not a lot, more than that.


Your Main Character: Danielle is the main characters in this story. But Teddy is a close second. One of the things, if not the only one, I liked best about this story is that you gave them names. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There was no dialogue in this story so I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.


Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have split this one paragraph into two, maybe even three or four, paragraphs. I don’t think it a grammar rule that says you should break it up. But I think it makes it more easier to read if it is.



I liked your story a whole lot. Keep on writing.



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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello maleika winfield,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your sixth year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is a story about an 14 year old girl named Abby Cromwell, the proper way to place capitalization, who gets three wishes because she helped a Leprechaun a year ago. Why it took a year to get back to her isn’t explained.


Where Your Location Is: The main location for this story is Abby’s bedroom. But there are several other locations in this story too – especially her Grandmother’s house. One of the things I like about this story is that you did have at least one location for this story. I try to do that with all of my stories too. But that’s just the way that I write my stories.


Your Main Character: Abby is the main character in this story. But the Leprechaun is a big part of it too. Personally, I would have given him a name too. I try to give all of my characters a name – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have one. But that’s just the way I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There was no actually dialogue in this story. But there was a references to some. And there was one Quotation Mark. Neither one indicated dialogue.


Any Last Thoughts: I noticed that you had some problems with punctuation, misspelling and spacing between sentences too. Personally, I would have also broken up this one paragraph into two, maybe three or four, separate paragraphs. But I don’t think there is a grammar rule that says that you should break it up. That’s just the way I write my stories. I’m also curious about a couple of things: What about her other two wishes? Was there a Word Count Limitation on this story. And what was that about the French? Did the Leprechaun make a mistake?



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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Review of The Dreamer  
Review by PureSciFi
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Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello Dreambeliever,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your fifteenth year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is a story about a female, name unknown – but she is an adult because it’s erotica, who is dreaming about an encounter with a male. At least I think that’s what it’s about. It sounds like it is from what I read. But it could be about something else too.


Where Your Location Is: I’m not exactly sure where this location is at. But from what I read it sounds like it’s a bedroom somewhere. Personally, I try to have at least one location in all of my stories. It depends on what my Word Count Limitations are as to how much detail I put into them. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. But usually it’s a little bit, if not a lot, more than that.


Your Main Character: Whoever is telling this story, the female, is the main character in it. But the male is a big part of this story too. Personally, I would have given them a name. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There was no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.


Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have indent my paragraphs. But I don’t think it’s a grammar rule that says you should. In fact, I am sure there isn’t because most writers, especially those who write short stories, don’t. That’s just the way I write my stories.



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello MissyBlack,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your ninth year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is a story about four individuals. Who are all different in one very special way. At least I think that’s what it was about. But it was a little bit confusing to me.


Where Your Location Is: I’m not exactly sure where the location is for this story. It doesn’t look like there is one. Personally, I try to have at least one location for all of my stories. How much detail I put into it depends on what my Word Count Limitations are. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. But it’s usually a little bit, if not a lot, more than that.


Your Main Character: There are four main characters mentioned in this story: Elizabeth, Jake, Alex and Rachel. One of the things, if not the only one, that I liked about this story is that you gave them names. That’s what I try to do with all of my characters – especially the main ones.


How They Spoke to Me: What dialogue? There is no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.


Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have separated this one paragraph into at least two, maybe three or more, paragraphs – especially when you mentioned the four names. Each one of them should have their own paragraph. But I don’t think that it’s a grammar rule that says you should do that. That’s just the way that I write my stories.



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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Review by PureSciFi
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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello GreySquirrel,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eleventh year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a whole lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is a story about a male who joins his true love by becoming like her. Which is a blob. And I’m not talking about her being overweight. At least it looks like that’s what it’s about.


Where Your Location Is: I’m not exactly sure where this story is taking place. It doesn’t look like there is a location for this story. Personally, I try to have at least one location in all of my stories. How much detail I put into them depends on what my Word Count Limitations are. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. But it’s usually a little bit, if not a lot, more than that.


Your Main Character: Leonora is a big part of this story. But she isn’t the main character in it. The male is. And he doesn’t have a name. Personally, I would have given him a name too. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t a lot of dialogue in this story. But there was some. And what dialogue there was looked good. At least it looked good to me.


Any Last Thoughts: What I liked most about this story is the weirdness of it. I liked that part of it a lot.



I liked your story a whole lot. Keep on writing.



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Review by PureSciFi
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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello Tanichka,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your fifth year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: I’m not exactly sure what this story is about. I know it’s about New York City. And I’m not even sure about that. I’m also not sure if it’s a romance/love story too. It sure doesn’t look like it is.


Where Your Location Is: New York City is the location for this story. At least I think it is. But I’m to even sure about that. Personally, I try to have at least one location in all of my stories. It depends on what the Word Count Limitations is as to how much detail I put into them. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. Bit usually a little bit, if not a lot, more than just that.


Your Main Character: Whoever is telling this story is the main, and it looks like the only, character in this story. Personally, I would have given them a name. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There is no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.


Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have separated the two paragraphs by a Space. I don’t think this is a grammar rule that you should do it. But I think it makes a story easier to read if it is. That’s also true about the first paragraph too. I think it should be split up into two, maybe even two or three, separate paragraphs. But that’s just the way I write my stories.



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello Hotchic1,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your ninth year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: I’m not exactly sure what this story is about. I know it’s about romance/love. But I’m not sure if it’s about anything else or not.


Where Your Location Is: Like I just said about the story I’m not sure where the location is for this story. It doesn’t look like there is one. Personally, I try to have at least one location in all of my stories. How much detail I put into it depends on what my Word Count Limitations are. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. But usually it’s a little bit, if not a lot, more than that.


Your Main Character: Whoever is telling this story is the main, and it looks like the only, character in this story. Personally, I would have given this character a name. I try to give all of my characters a name – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real. I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There isn’t any dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewer who might. And at least one Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.


Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have split this up into at least two, probably three or four, other paragraphs. I don’t think that it’s a grammar rule that you should. But I think it’s easier to read if you do.



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello Bunty,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eighth year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: I’m not exactly sure what this story is about. I know it’s supposed to be a romance/love story. And it kind of reads like one. But it also doesn’t read like one either.


Where Your Location Is: The location for this story is unknown. At least I don’t think there is a location in this story. Personally, I try to have at least one location in all of my stories. It depends on what my Word Count Limitations are as to how much detail I put into them. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. But it’s usually a little bit, if not a lot, more than just that.


Your Main Character: Whoever is telling this story is the main character in it. Personally, I would have given them a name. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There was no real dialogue in this story. I know you have put Quotation Marks around this one large paragraph. But that doesn’t make it dialogue. At least it doesn’t look like that to me.


Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have broken the one paragraph into at least two, maybe three or more, smaller ones. Especially since it reads like it’s a lot more than just one big dialogue paragraph.



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello da_ddq,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your fourteenth year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I like it very much. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is a story about a male who is in love with a female. But it’s not your typical boy meets girl story. There’s a little horror it there too. I think I like that part the best.


Where Your Location Is: I’m not exactly sure where this story takes place. I don’t think you had one. Personally, I try to have at least one location in all of my stories. It depends on what my Word Count Limitations are as to how much detail I put into them. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. But usually it’s a little bit, if not a lot, more than that.


Your Main Character: Whoever this male is he’s the main character in this story. But the female is a big part of it too. Personally, I would have given them names. I try to give all of my characters a name – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write my stories.



How They Spoke to Me: There was no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.


Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have separated my paragraphs with a Space. I don’t think it’s a grammar rule that says you should. But even if there isn’t I think it makes a story easier to read if it is.



I liked your story very much. Keep on writing.



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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello Dippy,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your ninth year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: I’m not exactly sure what this story is about. I know it’s supposed to be a romance/love story. But I don’t see that in it either. What is this story about?


Where Your Location Is: The beach is where this story takes place. Where this beach is at is unknown.


Your Main Character: Whoever is telling this story is the main character in it. Personally, I would have given them a name. I try to do that with all of my stories. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There is not dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are a few Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.


Any Last Thoughts: Is this a Short Story or a beginning of a Novel? You categorized it as a Short Story. But it looks like it’s a novel, because of the title, to me.



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello dylan1988,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your seventh year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I like it a whole lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is a story about a female falling. And the male who catches her. It’s love at first fall.


Where Your Location Is: I’m not exactly sure where the location is for this story. I know it’s outside. And a cliff was mentioned. But I’m not sure if that’s the location or not. Or if it’s the only one.


Your Main Character: Whoever is telling this story is the main character in it. Personally, I would have given them a name. I try to give all of my characters a name – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There is no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are a few Reviewers who still might. And at least one Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.


Any Last Thoughts: I think you did a very good with this story. Personally, I would have beefed it up a little with some dialogue and a few more paragraphs. But I understand why you didn’t if you had a Word Count Limitation. I have a big problem with that too.



I liked your story a whole lot. Keep on writing.



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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello Tessa Marie,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eighth year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it very much. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop reading until I finished it.


The Story: This is a story about true love - in the making. What I liked best about it is how it was written. I’ve never seen it written like this. At first I thought it was a poem. But as I read it I realized it wasn’t. Is that the way you write all of your stories?


Where Your Location Is: I’m not sure where this story is taking place. It doesn’t look like there is a location in this story. Personally, I try to have at least one location in all of my stories. How much detail I put into it depends on what my Word Count Limitation is. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. But it’s usually a little bit, if not a lot, more than that.


Your Main Character: Whoever is telling this story is the one main, and it looks like the only, character in this story. Personally, I would have given them a name – especially the main ones. I think it makes them feel more real if they have a name. but that’s just the way that I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t a lot of dialogue in this story. But there was some. And what there was looked good. At least it did to me.


Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have separated each one of these paragraphs by a space. I don’t think it’s a grammar rule that you should. But I think it’s easier to read if you do.



I liked your story very much. Keep on writing.



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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello weshall,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your seventh year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. At least I did what I could understand of it. I was a bit confused about this story. It didn’t make any sense to me.


The Story: I’m not sure what this story is about. Is it about a dog or a cow – or something else? What was this story about?


Where Your Location Is: This is another part of your story I’m not sure about. I know it mentioned India. But I’m not sure if that’s the location for this story or not. Personally, I try to have at least one location in all of my stories. How much detail I put into it depends on the Word Count Limitations. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. But it’s usually a little bit, if not a lot, more than that.


Your Main Character: Whoever is telling this story is the main character in this story. Personally, I would have given them, whoever they are, a name - it doesn’t matter if they are humans, aliens or animals. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main one. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. but that’s just the way that I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: there was no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.


Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have broken this one paragraph into several other paragraphs. I don’t think it’s a grammar rule that you should. But it usually makes it easier to read a story if it is.



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello Sean K,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your third year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a whole lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is the story about a glass sitting on a table next to The Woman. What I liked the best about this story is that it was written from the POV of the glass.


Where Your Location Is: The bedroom where the glass is at is the setting for this story. A little bit more detail would have been nice. I would have done it. But that’s just the way that I write my stories.


Your Main Character: Of course, the glass is the main character in this story. But The Woman is also a big part of this story too. Personally, I would have given The Woman a name. I try to give all of my characters a name – especially the main one. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There was no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.


Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have split this one paragraph into two or maybe three paragraphs. I don’t think it’s a grammar rule that you should. But I think a story is usually easy to read if it is.



I liked your story a whole lot. Keep on writing.



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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello annethony™ passeddboardexams,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your ninth year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is a story about a wife who is getting ready for work when her husband calls her down to breakfast. At least I think that’s what it’s about. Unless maybe two married males. Is it?


Where Your Location Is: If I am reading this story right then the main location for this story is the bedroom. But I’m not sure. Personally, I try to have at least one location in all of my stories. It depends on what my Word Count Limitations are as to how much detail I put into it. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. But it’s usually a little bit, if not a lot, more than that.


Your Main Character: The female? who is telling the story is the main character in it. But the husband is also a bit part of it too. Personally, I would have given them names. It would help with gender too – maybe. I try to give all of my characters a name - especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There was only that one line of dialogue. And that one line looked good. At least it did to me.


Any Last Thoughts: I don’t understand what that last sentence means. What does a rose have to do with the story?



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello devinspoems,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your tenth year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: I’m not exactly what this poem is about. I know it’s about love. But other than that I’m not sure.


Where Your Location Is: This time it’s the location that I’m not sure about. It doesn’t look like there is one for this poem. Personally, I try to have at least one location in all of my stories. How much detail I put into it depends on what the Word Count Limitation is. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. But it’s usually a little bit, if not a lot, more than that.


Your Main Character: Whoever is telling this poem is the main, and I think the only, character in this poem. Personally, I try to give a name to all of my characters – especially the main ones. I think it makes them feel more real if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There was no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on that. But there are a few Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.


Any Last Thoughts: I don’t know too much about Poetry. But I have never seen a poem written like this before. Usually they are written one line at a time with about four lines per paragraph. Is this something I have just never seen before or is it something you just created. I’m also curious about something else too. If this is a poem like you said in your description then why did you categorize it as a Short Story?



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello Nova Dove,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your eighth year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. At least I did what I could understand of it. I was a little confused by it. It didn’t make much sense to me.


The Story: I’m not exactly sure what this story is about. But it looks like it’s about a female, and I’m not even sure about that, who is mad at someone because they left her? a ‘post it’ notes.


Where Your Location Is: Once again, I’m not sure where this story takes place. Personally, I try to have at least one location in all of my stories. It depends on what my Word Count limitations as to how much detail I put into it. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. But it’s usually a little bit, if not a lot, more than that.


Your Main Character: Whoever is telling this story is the main, and only, character in this story. Personally, I would have given them a name. I think it makes them feel more real if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write more stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There was only one dialogue in this story. And I’m not sure if it’s even considered dialogue. If she? Is reading the Post-It then it is dialogue. But if that is just what’s on that Post-It then it isn’t.


Any Last Thoughts: I know all about Word Count Limitations. I’m involved with several contest myself. I’ve never done a fifty-five-word contest though. I don’t think I could do it. I’m having trouble keeping up with the ones that I think I can handle.



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello Elizabeth Sheryl,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your twelfth year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is a story about a distance romance that isn’t distance anymore. At least I think that’s what it’s about.


Where Your Location Is: I’m not sure where the location is for this story. I understand why you didn’t have one. It’s hard write in a location because of a Word Count Limitation. Personally, I try to give all of my stories at least on location. It depends on the Word Count Limitations as to how much detail I put into it. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. But it’s usually a little bit, if not a lot, more than that.


Your Main Character: Whoever is telling this story is the main character in it. Personally, I would have given them a name. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There is no dialogue in this story. So I can’t comment on it. But there are some Reviewers who might. And at least one Reviewer who would consider this telling instead of showing.


Any Last Thoughts: I think you did a good job with this story. Did you win that contest? Do you have any others like this one?



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello Hopeful Writer,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your fifth year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a whole lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started I couldn’t stop reading it until I finished it.


The Story: This is the story about a man named Jack who rushes to meet his wife Beth for her birthday. At first I thought you made a big mistake when I thought, ‘why didn’t they live together if they married?’ Then as I read on I realized the reason why. Good job.


Where Your Location Is: The main location for this story is where he ends up. But how he got there, aka the bus he rushed to catch, is also a big part of this story.


Your Main Character: Jack is the main character in this story. But so is Beth – sort of. I like that you gave them names. Personally, I would have tried to come up with a way to give a name for the bus driver and the man who helped him too. But I can understand why you didn’t in this story. Jack didn’t know them – especially the one who helped him. The bus driver could have had a name on his shirt though.


How They Spoke to Me: There wasn’t a lot of dialogue in this story. But what dialogue there is looked good. At least it did to me.


Any Last Thoughts: I noticed that you have written other Short Stories. If I get the chance to do them I would like to review some of your other stories - if that’s okay with you. The reason why I am asking you this is because I reviewed a writer several times, probably too much, a few months ago. And he didn’t like that too much. That’s why I ask before I do any more than one review per writer.



I liked your story a whole lot. Keep on writing.



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#1300305 by Maryann





Hello celerystalk,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your tenth year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading your Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: I’m not exactly sure what this story is about. I know it’s about a couple not talking to each other. But what they aren’t talking about.


Where Your Location Is: This is something else I’m not sure about. It read like they were parked somewhere. But I’m not even sure about that. Personally, I try to have at least one location in all of my stories. It depends on my Word Count Limitations as to how much detail I put into them. Sometimes it’s just the location itself. But usually it’s a little bit, if not a lot, more than that.


Your Main Character: The couple in this story are the main characters in it. Personally, I would have given them a name. I try to do that with all of my characters – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way that I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There was only that one line of dialogue. But that one line looked good. At least it did to me.


Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I would have separated the paragraphs with a space. I don’t think that it’s a grammar rule that you should. But I think it’s easier to read a story if it is.



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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#1300305 by Maryann




Hello Marisa,

I saw your name on the Anniversary Review List. And I wanted to give you an Anniversary Review. This is your tenth year with us. *Smile* Happy Anniversary *Smile*



Now for the good stuff:  The Review.



Overall Impression: I just finished reading this Short Story. And I liked it a lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end. Once I started reading it I couldn’t stop until I finished it.


The Story: This is a story about Aphrodite and her revenge against Psyche. I’m not sure what the Romance/Love is in this story.


Where Your Location Is: I’m not exactly sure what the location is in this story because I don’t know too much about Aphrodite and where she lives except for the Hercules and Xena television series’. Personally, I try to have at least one location for all of my stories. It depends on my Word Count Limitations as to how much detail I put into them. Sometimes it’s just the location themselves. But it’s usually a little bit, if not more, than that.


Your Main Character: Aphrodite and Eros are the main characters in this story – mostly Aphrodite. But Psyche is also a big part of it too. I like that you gave them all names. Personally, I try to give all of my characters a name – especially the main ones. It makes them feel more real, I think, if they have a name. But that’s just the way I write my stories.


How They Spoke to Me: There was a lot of dialogue in this story. And what dialogue there was looked good. At least it did to me.


Any Last Thoughts: I noticed you have written other Short Stories. If it’s okay with you could I review them – if I get the chance to do it. The reason why I ask is because a few months ago I reviewed one writer a lot, probably too much, and he thought I was stalking him for a while. That got resolved. But now I ask anyone before I review them more than once.



I liked your story a lot. Keep on writing.



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