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Review of Life's Rose  
Review by spidey
Rated: E | (4.5)
Thank you for sharing this lovely poem!! I really love the theme of comparing someone to a rose, and you did a great job in keeping the theme throughout the poem!

I really liked the rhyme scheme in the poem. I think that it fit this poem very well! My only suggestion would be changing the last word of the second line in the third stanza:

Living life to capture everyone's heart

I really like the line, but it bothers me a little that it's not an exact rhyme. You may want to change it to:

Living life to capture our hearts

(So that it's an exact rhyme with 'parts'.) Just a suggestion.

Thanks so much for sharing this! I really enjoyed it! Keep up the great work!!
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Review of Plop  
Review by spidey
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Nice poem!! I love that your poem relies greatly on sound, on the sound of the word 'monsieur' and the words that sound similar to it. It makes the poem very easy to read and follow. It also makes the poem almost comical, or light-hearted, which compliments the tone very well!

For me, the poem seemed to end too quickly. I would have liked to have another quatrain or couplet, to round off the poem. It seems to end in the middle to me.

Great rhyme scheme and internal rhyme. I really enjoyed the poem! Keep up the great work!!
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Review by spidey
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Amazing!! I applaud anyone who even attempts to write a sonnet! I'm not sure I could do it! I had a class on Shakespeare in college, and from what I can remember, you have several elements, besides the stucture, that are similar to Shakespeare's sonnets.

There are three elements that I noticed that work quite well in your poem:

1. Nature. In the second stanza, you have allusions to autumn and leaves. That imagery worked really well in your poem.

2. Sex/Romance. You use "love's nectar" and "steamy breath," which work very well in creating the tone between the speaker of the poem and the object. I remember in one of Shakespeare's sonnets where he referred to "little death" because it was believed that a man lost a piece of his soul, when he coupled with someone.

3. Addressing the heart. I love that the couplet at the end is directed to the speaker's heart! I think that is a perfect end to this poem!
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