Clearly, a very personal poem written from the depth of experience. I appreciated your clarity. My favorite stanza is We destroy worlds.
We make "we"
To be obsolete.
Wonderful simplicity that tells the sad story of everyday humanity. Well done.
Let this old crow be the first to congratulate you on prose well-written. This is very lovely love prose. It has a very light and airy quality. Well done.
This was a wonderful story and you did an excellent job writing it. How mysterious is the act of dying. No matter how much we study the process, we can never understand it. Can you really blame people for being fascinated with death? Of course, morbid fascination is one thing, and being in awe of it is quite another.
Well, why shouldn't I be the first to welcome you with a review? It sounds as though you have been through the mill. The good thing is that you are on the mend. I'm happy to hear that. Since you can't do much else, you may as well write. I hope to hear more from you as you continue to improve.
You are a true inspiration. I cannot imagine the things that you must deal with on a daily basis. It may sound bizarre to say that I enjoyed reading about your daily and seasonal challenges, but I have been interested in your circumstances since I met you. You may not realize how much you have to offer the rest of us, but keep writing and being an example to us all. I hope that I can be considered a part of your pack.
With My Compliments,
Crow
Just a note about my salutary phrase: Durning the Civil War, Officers would send messages to one another on the battlefield. They would often tell the runners to deliver the message "with their compliments." Being an amateur Historian, I use this as a salute for a job well done and a sign of respect.
This is indeed an interesting beginning. It is, however, contradictory in one sense. You say that he is searching for a greater form of existence but then describes a life of seeming desolation. Therefore, he has not achieved that for which he sought. As the novel progresses, there may be a resolution to this conundrum. It would be interesting to see how you work it out. It is, however, good writing.
I read the two offerings in your port, and I want to encourage you to get busy writing. Why just two pieces in around two years? Are you a serious writer or just a hobbyist? You say you have words burning within. If you don't let them out, you might spontaneously combust. Also, you need to art up your port to attract readers. Do something to get people's attention.
You have the talent, so use it. Start writing and give us something to read. Your two works are fine, and with a little work, they can be even better.
I don't think it will take you but a second to understand why I was attracted to your poem. The only thing I question is why you failed to use any punctuation. I realize that some poets don't get caught up in dots and commas, but those diacritical markings can change the flow and meaning. And, may I ask who Clancy is, another crow, I suppose.
If your poem is written in an artsy form, then you achieved your goal. All in all, I did like this piece. I will be interested in visiting your port to browse your other offerings.
A most illuminating article, Jay. It requires one to think, and that always a positive thing. As two individuals go, we are probably different in many ways. I assume that we are both Christians. However, being a Calvinist, we would probably disagree on theology. That being said, I will rarely dispute another's beliefs unless they border on the absurd and have no scriptural foundation. I have also reached the age where I believe that I can say whatever I want. Of course, such a belief is COMPLETELY FALSE. Yes, I have strong opinions, but I will not force them on anyone. Finally, I have a naturally suspicious nature. I am very wary of opening myself up to strangers.
Now that I have spent all of this time speaking about myself (something which I hate), I need to review your Essay. I did find it clear and informative. You clearly thought it out before going to press. There is good sound advice in this piece. You seem to honestly believe what you are saying. This fact is something perceived in the inner man. You are absolutely correct in what you say and it reminds me of a scripture. "He that will have friends must show himself friendly." You have certainly shown the truth of the axiom which says that you always catch more flys with honey. I believe that is the way it usually works on Wdc. Excellent job.
Robert, you have our young man in a heart wrenching and difficult spot. It is one of the worst places a man can be. Love unrequited can tear the soul apart. You did a fine job with this work. I enjoyed reading and relating on certain levels.
Excellent work, Robert. From what you list I take it that this is your experience. All that you say is true about this disease that pilfers the mind of its most precious memories. There is no ambiguity in this piece. It is bare-bones and clear to the reader. Well done.
A most excellent and stimulating read, Terrence. Having been an ordained Baptist Minister for around thirty years, I understand exactly what you are saying, and it mirrors to a great extent my own experience and thinking. Your first two paragraphs concerning the nature of faith are spot on. Also, the fact that higher education - or is it indoctrination - changes the intellectual terrain is also a key element in the mind's obsession for exploring. In any case, I will not belabor this review further.
I thoroughly enjoyed the work done here. It reflects my own style and I wish I had written it, but you get the kudos for that. Yours is an adroit probing on the classic conundrum.
Hi, Crissy. I was strolling through your port and came upon this oldie but goodie. Lying is very philosophical in its essence. Surely it is a topic that could be discussed at length, and because it is a point of philosophy there may never be a clearly defined answer. But this one thing I will say. Lying in some may seem to be from craft or subterfuge; I rather believe it to be from fear. No matter how important or powerful a man may be in his station, he lies because he is afraid in a hundred ways. His power and importance is an illusion.
This essay was well written. You might consider lengthening it. It is an excellent choice of topics.
I really love this poem and the cover picture you chose is exquisite. This was a great idea for a short work. I love this genre. I can't wait to get into your political folder.
Come on, suemar, let's get this portfolio in shape. You need to start writing. You've been around long enough to be much further along. Of course, I am not chastising you. It's more a case of tough love. I realize that you have suffered stress that didn't help matters. Of course, you can always be most helpful to yourself and others by writing about your experiences.
Now, when it comes to this jogging business, you've come to the right place. There isn't a whole lot I don't know about jogging. I am sixty-eight this March and I can truthfully say that I have been jogging on and off for thirty-five years. For me, it has always been about healthy weight control. Where I live in the states, the winters are mild, but that's not to say that we don't get some really cold stretches. And I will say without apology, I hate to run in the cold. Spring and Summer are my times to hit the streets and backroads. I can't afford the extra expense of the Health Club.
Let me encourage you by revealing that I have lost as much as forty pounds by watching what I eat and running regularly. Of course, in those Winter and Holiday months is when I start to see the weight sneaking up on me. It has always been a constant battle. Recently, I came upon a game-changer. A high protein diet, water, and regular exercise. If you don't cheat, the weight will come off.
You can do this and you won't die, although it may feel like you will at first. Your body is wonderfully designed. It begins to respond the first time you do something good for it. You may start with a light jog and before long find yourself running your first mile. It's amazing how quickly the body begins to respond.
Well, I've droned on enough. You can do this thing. Of that, I have no doubt. And what better place to record your progress the WDC. I look forward to hearing from you. We'll fight this battle together.
This was a good one, Don. As Yoda might say, clever and funny it was. The rhythm was fine and the word choice excellent. As I read, I wanted to see what would happen to the fearless family. I'm glad they came through. Good work, Don.
Greetings, Longtall8. I'm happy that you found us and decided to become a part. Let me say that you are very welcome.
I found this work most interesting. I am always glad to see writers that can say what they wish without filling the page with unnecessary verbiage. Also, I appreciated the theme of the work. As an older gentleman, I am beginning more and more to realize that there will be an increasing number of things to overcome. You took what most would call a disadvantage and turned it around. I'm sure that that will be encouraging to many. Well done.
Hello, Jim. This is a clever piece of work. It is a piece that one would expect from you. I'll admit, I had to read it a couple of times to be certain I followed all the diacritical marking correctly. It's a great birthday offering. Well done, Jim.
Hello, Rosie. I have never heard of the guy you mentioned. However, whatever confidence you may have in him, you must surely realize that he has no chance of getting on the ballot. Being young and full of energy means nothing when you enter the Washington arena. He could be the brightest bulb in the box, but when they finish with him he won't shine so brightly, if at all. Also, I don't know where you are getting your information from, but automatic weapons are not available to the public. The only groups who use full auto weapons besides the police and military are drug cartels, terrorists, and other criminal factions. The Los Vegas shooter used what is called a 'bump-stock.' which allowed his semi-auto to become what could be described as automatic. Bump-stocks have now been banned. The public is only allowed to have semi-auto firearms which means that you have to pull the trigger for each shot. These can be deadly, but they do not possess a fully automatic setting.
Hello, Prosperous. I usually don review your work to any great extent because I have a certain resistance to what I consider the incongruous fact that you have adopted. I cannot imagine how you became attached to a faith that is so out of keeping with western values. What drew to this? How did such a foreign philosophy become your standard? Certainly, you have a right to believe what you will. I will not censure you for your beliefs.
As far as this philosophical piece in question, I find it as I do most within this genre. There are no conclusions reached because philosophy can never reach a definitive conclusion. The same questions have been asked for millennia and we are no closer to an answer. I am quite certain that we should never have expected that we would find one. It was in the asking that we found our reason for being as Descartes said, "I think, therefore I am."
It is good that anyone would explore the void of man's origins? The problem encountered is that the inquires have never changed. They are expressed in a different language and by different self-styled gurus but in the end, they are all the regurgitated thoughts and words of those who will continue to emerge as new lights of divine knowledge.
Hello, Nwriter. Let me be the first to comment on this article. This piece will be difficult for most to read, especially since you are referring to things like Sanscript (or Sanskrit) and other Indian systems of belief and philosophy. Very few Americans not of Indian heritage would know anything about Tattvarthasutra. That being the case, it is no wonder that this work has received no reviews. I found the piece interesting to read and consider, yet I will not pretend to understand the whole of it. Still, it is an enticing piece of work for those who enjoy more cerebral forays.
I found your work well written and informative, even for the uninitiated. Keep up the good work.
Twila, this is an absolutely beautiful poem. For some readers, it might be a good idea to have a tissue at hand. The question I will venture to ask is whether he knew he was dying and hadn't told you? I have had dreams of loved ones that had already died, but never of any shortly before their passing. This account fascinates me greatly. What a treasured memory.
The form this piece takes is superb. The recurring last line is a favorite of mine. What a wonderful piece of writing.
Take good care of that grandbaby and study hard. To me, you will always be an exceptional lady.
With My Compliments,
Crow
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