I gave it a five star because I share the belief of the last line. Saint John's chapter one ,verse one for cross reference. I love the poem speaking to the world in the world's lanquage. I am also fascinated about "I am" being recited sixteen consecative time. i will look forward to reading this one again. It will probaly look nice on a t-shirt, plaque greeting card or coffee mug, Congratulations.
This poem is a emotional poem. I say this not because it generated concern for it's creator. i say this because it pulled at all my emotions while reading this. Thievery at t he grocery store, alas our preteens. murder and suicide as imaginary finishes of life. The statement of feeling as if you are unborn within your mother's womb currently is a metaphor for Geographic eartlhly awareness. The poem continued it's theme at a rhythmic pace to suggest that the theme was in fact rocking while the author continued to lament about his or her desires to be rocking on the radio instead of within the framework of a poem. Very bold topics and i hope I read them correctly. Impressive writing for a lenghty amount of stanzas. This piece transends audio and life.
This poem addresses the power of forgiveness found within Christianity. As imperfect as we are as humanity, rarely can we find acceptence of our flaws. This poem reminds us of the healing ability of Christ once we admit that we are in fact sinners and have flaws. Just what the doctor ordered..
This piece says an aweful lot with very few words. A vivid picture of substance abuse. The last stanza illustrates how the author would have desired to escape what he was witnessing.
I liked it. A very wonderful daydream shared. An excellent evaluation of a painting and a pretty interesting lecture conviently interwoven within the story. Lovely.
Valued research. English 101 at it's best. It felt good to have a basic grammer lesson at my disposal. The grammer "etiquettes" is a nice refresher and should strengthen and improve the quality of writing available on the site. Just an amatuer poet and avid reader challenging myself to do reviews. I currently find myself self- editing as a poet. Ironically, I am harboring interest in strengthening my ability to write a paragraph. Very motivational piece.
Just re-read this item and gave it five stars. It is completed and excellent. My original review. Was as follows..
This piece is very vivid and filled with action. I enjoed the narration. I felt it borrowed from Star Wars but I realize every battle that includes theocracy, destin y and swords will probaly be burdened with borrowing from Star Wars accusations. A nice story that doesn't need a sketch artist yet you might enjoy feedback from them as well. I felt it definitely had marketing potential and I withheld giving five stars because it is a small part of a bigger body of work that I haven't read yet. Also the names of the character are sticking in my mind. I am just personally wondering how they got their names? With that being said, I am probaly hooked. Keep writing.
I liked it and could definitely relate. I think moment like the one you described, when shared make excellent stories. Thanks for sharing it. It was also very visual.
I enjoyed this piece of work. I love the feel of the words. I wanted to offer words of encouragement at some point. This piece actually asks to be read again and I probaly will do just that. excellent.
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