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Review by Ⱳƹ₿~ŴitcӉ
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Angel&Witch


Hello Joy
This is a bitem:army} Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because it popped-up on the random Read & Review. *Smile*

Initial Thoughts:

The title and brief description hook the reader. I had it in my mind this would be a murder mystery.

Further Impressions:

I knew it would be a strange airplane ride with a casket coming onboard and the mother of the deceased exclaiming it was her dead son after another passenger made a wise crack about having to sit on top of a coffin. *Shock*

I liked how the story unfolded leaving a reader to try and guess what really caused Johnny's death. He was young, handsome and very intelligent. He was aces as a student and loved by fellow faculty members. *DoorBl*

And still we must ask ... Who killed Johnny? He had been pushed to the edge by something or someone. Yes, drug taking was involved but there was so much more!

Parting Thoughts:

The truth is, even with drugs and an overbearing parent, Johnny had a secret. It lie in wait for the final straw to break.

*HeartBroken* Suicide victims don't go out alone. They leave behind deep scars and guilt. Whoever is close to the person wonder if they could have been better at spotting it and perhaps have saved a life.

*Glasses* I saw no errors that jumped out at me. The story is one of sadness and forewarning. Try to recognize those around you and see if things look a bit off with them. Many families are shocked when someone they knew ended their life.

Good work, Joy! *Quill*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*






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Review by Ⱳƹ₿~ŴitcӉ
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Angel&Witch


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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review!*Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering the April Original Photo & Haiku contest. *Bigsmile*

The Photo:

It's a reminder of a fateful day during WWI. Lives were lost, there, yet the photo appears to be reverent, serene and surrounded by gleaming beauty as the sun awakens for the day. The pinkish hues of twilight's last gleam as the sun rises.

The peaceful view hides the secret of what happened there. Yet, the memories will never fade.


The Haiku:

Not the traditional 5-7-5 Haiku. Beautiful nevertheless with its strength of remembrance. The symbolism really stands out. It is in one respect a place where the fallen lie, yet they are surrounded by peaceful beauty.

Heartbreaking yet beautiful at the same time. *AwarenessW*

Well done! *Salute*


Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*









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Review of Leaving  
Review by Ⱳƹ₿~ŴitcӉ
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Angel&Witch


Hello there, PiriPica
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I'm also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering the April Original Photo & Haiku contest! *Bigsmile*


Photo:

The photo shows the leaf in decay, it's time for spring to take its place with new life as shown with the dandelion. The colors and the decay surrounding the dandelion paint a perfect picture of end of life-cycle for the leaf and the beginning for the brilliant yellow weed.

Beautiful contrast!
The photo tells a complete story. Creative use of a common weed and the leftover leaf from another season.


Haiku:


I'll start with the title. Great teaser to pull the reader into the poem. *LeafBr*

*FlowerY* It works magically with the photo and Haiku. "Leaving." My mind pictures leaf, leaves -- leaving. Clever play on words! It is indeed time for the leaf to make room for the rebirth of nature.

Form:

Traditional 5-7-5 Haiku


Classy Style:

*Quill* Love the Sibilance: "sigh, supine, shift sublime."

*Target2* Strong word choices [supine, sublime] make this simple 3-lined classic involving nature pop-out for the reader! Big plus!!!

You did a remarkable job with the photo portraying such simplicity and the poetry complementing it brilliantly. It's well-crafted all the way through.

Good job!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*









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Review of Jumping Dolphins  
Review by Ⱳƹ₿~ŴitcӉ
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Angel&Witch


Hello there, The Puppet Master
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering our April Original Photo & Haiku contest! *Bigsmile*

The Photo:


Your photo brings the action of the sea to life with the dolphins diving in play, or in search of scrambling up some seafood for dinner. *Dolphin*

I loved to watch porpoises following the ferry in Texas, and the dolphins teaching their young ones how to fish in Florida. They'd come so close to the shore. They are amazing to watch and this photo brings me there, right up close and personal. It's well-defined, lighting balances the contrast of colors with the dark grey dolphins, the gorgeous blue sea and the white foam left in their flipper-tracks.

The Haiku:

The poetry paints the story to go along with the picture. It describes the action as well as the mood. Sunny California plays off the ocean with its brilliance making the reader feel surrounded by the sunshine picturing the dolphins at play or hunt whichever it may be when this photo was taken. Words and photo are totally in sync.

Form:

Traditional 5-7-5 syllable Haiku. *CheckGr*

Suggestion:

If I had one suggestion to make it would be to have some ordinary words used to describe the event and replace with some words that leave an impact with the reader at the end of the verse.

For example: "Jumping through the air," TRY: [Leaping through the surf]
(Puts the reader right into the seascape where the dolphins live.)

Just one little example. Jump is more common, whereas leap has a sense of purpose -- or porpoise. *Laugh*

All-in-all:

*Wave1* Gorgeous photo, perfect nature shot of playful dolphins!

Haiku in true form meshes together neatly with the image *CheckY*

Well done! *ScallopB*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*







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Review of Fyn Wave  
Review by Ⱳƹ₿~ŴitcӉ
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Angel&Witch


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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering the April Original Photo & Haiku contest! *Bigsmile*

The Photo:


What a great capture of the whale showing itself up close and personal! It presents with the power of nature,a mammal which commands attention with its large size and ability to take on the force of the unpredictable sea. It keeps reminding us that it is a formidable creature indeed!

The Haiku:

You used the traditional syllable count 5-7-5 within the three lines.

*CheckY* Words chosen are strong -- "whale" "waved." Clever! It keeps the reader focused on the sea and sea creature. The word "wave" applies to the ocean itself with its waves. And the act of a whale waving for the picture -- priceless! *Bigsmile*

*PointRight* And, may I add a little play on words, here? "Fyn -- sounds like "fin" again returning the mind's eye to the sea where fins are in their natural element guiding the fish that wear them! *FishB*

This was a great combination of photo and poem. And well-constructed use of words to play with the reader's imagination. *Whale1*

Good job!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*










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Review of PINK AND BLUE  
Review by Ⱳƹ₿~ŴitcӉ
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Angel&Witch


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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall ContestThank you for entering our April Original Photo and Haiku contest. *Bigsmile*

The Photo:


Whether it be the dawning of a new day or nearing the end, the sweet pastels paint the sky as is seen in this photo. The trees lie within the shadows awaiting more light to bring forth their color. There is such warmth and serenity captured in this photo. *Paintbrush*

The Haiku:

The words describe the handiwork of our Creator. It's a perfection woven into each day that is a gift to all whose eyes behold it.

Style:

This would not be called a "Traditional" Haiku, as it is not the usual 5-7-5 syllable count.

This poem's style is 5-10-6 syllables within the three lines. It is a different/modern Haiku.

Result:

The words and photo blend nicely to produce the imagery in the reader's imagination.

Well done!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*







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Review of Antheraea  
Review by Ⱳƹ₿~ŴitcӉ
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Angel&Witch



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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review!

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering our April, Original Photo and Haiku contest! *Bigsmile*

The Photo:


Ahh, this one got me! I so enjoy watching nature and the surprises that may result. Here, the moth gets caught between the window and the screen. It seemed quite unbothered by your removing of the screen and using the tape measure to make that moth pop for the viewer's mind's eye. It brings it to life more because both nature and man-made items blend together in an odd, yet serene way. I really like that! *Delight*

The Haiku:

*InLove2* Loved these descriptive words:

Midnight wind
Heart pounding
Trapped


These are strong, well chosen words to fit within the total picture of the scene.

Form:


Traditional 5-7-5 syllabic count Haiku. *CheckY*

*Yinyang* Perfectly complementing the photo. They are companions of the creative juices of the muse brought to life.

Lovely imagery produced by the combination of the two! *Infinity*

Well done! *Butterfly2O*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*







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Review by Ⱳƹ₿~ŴitcӉ
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Angel&Witch


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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because it popped up on the random Read & Review. *Smile*

This is too, funny, Jody. I'm really trying to picture you on the route doing the job. Did you watch "Dirty Jobs" years ago? Although I must admit I was quite close to a garbage pickup person many years ago. The hours were great, he stated as the job was completed early enough in the day to head to a bar. *Rolleyes* Ah, youth! That relationship did not last long. Not because of the garbage man stuff but because of the bar stuff. *Laugh*

I read your author's note that this profession did not come true, but rather, it was desired throughout childhood. You were a tomboy, too, I take it? So was I -- I think I still am! *Rolling*

*Rabbit2* Your story was well-written, and filled with imagery. You made it real as if it were indeed a non-fiction. I admire your spunk and independent choice of professions from a young age. My daughter wanted to be a mortician. Hey, some-body has got to do it!


Observation:

I remember them talking to be to me about various jobs--Didn't I want to be a teacher?

This was a fun read, and neither one of us had to get our hands dirty. *Ha*

Good job!*Trash*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Dew Drop  
Review by Ⱳƹ₿~ŴitcӉ
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Angel&Witch


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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because it popped-up on the random Read & Review. *Smile*

First Impressions:

*LeafG* Falling drops of water and leaves make a glorious backdrop for poetry. So much can be visualized through this image that it reminiscent of one's life and times.

Further Impressions:

*GemV* The metaphor of the water drop collects into another drop merging as one, and love relationships make it meld beautifully. You brought the reader up close and personal by bringing fond memories of days of youth.

Parting Thoughts:

*PaintBrush* Lovely imagery with well-woven words that fit together perfectly into the tapestry of this poem. It is nature and love, beginning and end. It is life itself.

Well-done! *Leaf2G*

Until next time--write on!

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WebWitch *Witch*











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Review of Once More Now  
Review by Ⱳƹ₿~ŴitcӉ
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Angel&Witch


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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering our dialogue with an invisible entity prompt in March. *Shamrock*

Initial Thoughts:

The plot was set up quickly as the reader is taken to the Irish pub on St. Patrick's day. One patron seeks an empty stool at a table where another patron sat. He was told the seat was saved for a friend. That patron found a seat another spot over and began hearing a dialogue between that patron and , well, nobody visible! *Ha*

Further Thoughts:

The patrons were quite curious about the disembodied voice being heard at a table where only one patron was sitting. It became a full pub curiosity as others wondered if the strange voice was from the seat-saving friend, Dylan, who may have been a ventriloquists. By then the drinks were flowing pretty quickly on this special night.
Annie the barmaid, delivered drinks to that table and heard the disembodied voice speak of her loveliness, and that she'll have men lined up outside the door awaiting a date with her.

Odd Happenings:

Magic happens as what the invisible voice predicted was happening to Annie right at that moment. Annie began to sense he was something quite special, but wondered why he could not be seen if he's so magical.

Mystery Solved:

Annie, is told by his friend Dylan, the story of the beginning of the end of his friend's visibility. *Ghost*

Parting Thoughts:

Humorous!!! I loved the conclusion that wrapped that night up at the Irish pub with fun and a big "Aha!" moment. *Laugh* It only took a hundred years to figure it out. But then, all good things come to those who wait! *Rolling*

Conclusion:


One or two quotation mishaps, but otherwise a fun, quick and very quirky story. You followed the tough prompt easily and made it your own. You added the humor and it fit with the substance of the tale.

Fine entertainment! *Glass3*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*








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Review by Ⱳƹ₿~ŴitcӉ
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because it popped-up on the random Read & Review. *Smile*

Initial Thoughts:

I knew I was entering a world, another world, a world where trees glow.

Further Thoughts:

I enjoyed the slow build-up of the mystery as the trees were being examined by taking a bit of bark scrapings. Nothing could be found out as each new vial was used to gather information. Seth was a fine partner in the paranormal experience as he did his best to control his nervousness while Jim did the bark-scrapings. The trees glowed, but nothing gave them a hint of where the glow was coming from. Until ... *BareTree2*


Observation:

Seth's is simply wondering if the trees are going to suddenly come to life and eat them. [Seth is OR Seth's simply wondering]

Loved this Part!

"And warmth can mean life and the last thing he wanted was to make a tree angry by copping a feel without asking."

*Rolling*! I loved that unexpected bit of humor amid the tense moments.


Parting Thoughts:


Just as the reader felt secure to go back into the forest ... *Shock2*

*Mountains* Yes, this was a cliffhanger. It would have been unexpected had it not been stated in the brief description. But then, nothing says paranormal better than trees all aglow and the picture of Jim's eyes growing wide. Poor Seth, hope he decided the right option.

Well done
, and a fun read! *Ha*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*



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Review of Festive and Green  
Review by Ⱳƹ₿~ŴitcӉ
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review!

I am also reviewing your item because I found it while perusing the Comedy Genre page looking for an amusing piece that would fit within my Comedy Newsletter theme. Since the Newsletter is due out tomorrow, 3/17, I wanted a couple St Paddy's day items to highlight. Yours will be one. *Ha*

Initial Impressions:

Someone is going to explain what St. Patrick's Day is all about to aliens. Now I knew it would be amusing, and anxiously read on! *Shamrock*

Further Thoughts:


O'Sullivan actually blasted off to outer space to land on another planet and bring all of his knowledge about St. Patrick, Christianity, parades, and all things green to the inhabitants. He did a fine job in the explaining department.

Parting Thoughts:

Your poem flowed smoothly and rhymed just right. *Rolling* I enjoyed the transformation of the aliens. They really got the St. Patrick's Day spirit and even began to dance arm in arm while turning from their alien-grey skin color to bright green! *AlienG*

Conclusion:


Well done! And ,lots of fun to picture in my mind's eye. Yup, it will be highlighted on the 3/17 Comedy Newsletter. *Ha*

Until next time--write on!

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WebWitch *Witch*







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Review by Ⱳƹ₿~ŴitcӉ
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Angel&Witch


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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I'm also reviewing your item because I found it while perusing the Comedy Genre page. *Bigsmile*

*Rolling* Oh, my, this is so funny! I could picture the whole baby delivery drama with a husband who let's just say, has a weak stomach around blood.

Birthing is not without some messy stuff happening. And, yes, years ago the husband always remained outside the delivery room process and anxiously waited in a room with other dads wondering if they would be the dad of a girl or a boy. Yeah, they weren't doing sonograms back then! It truly was a mystery until the actual birth.

I congratulate your hubby for lasting it out and even being convinced to cut the cord. *Laugh*

*BabyGirl* I am highlighting this story in the 3/17 Comedy Newsletter. It falls with the theme of deliveries -- although not quite the same type of delivery, but humorous enough to have its spot in the newsletter. *Ha*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*






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Review by Ⱳƹ₿~ŴitcӉ
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your it because it popped-up on the random Read & Review. *Smile*

The Hands of Time:

Your title and brief description made me want to read the poem and see just where time would take me.

Minutes Pass:

You hit an interesting topic about clock watching. I know it's easy to feel like time has seemed to slow down or even stop momentarily. It seems we can drift off into a world totally unrelated to the clock. It's as if the digits turn and we are lost in thoughts and surprised to find that ten minutes have already passed. I get tuned into time when it's close to 11:11. I am always reminded of my mother at that time. She loved 11:11! I try to watch for it and spend a minute talking to her
and remembering beautiful times. Then I realize that 11:09 is now 11:13 and I totally missed her favorite time. It makes me a little upset that I drifted away in my mind rather than spending that special minute with her memory. Then I realize that I was already thinking about her and enjoying fond memories while the minutes rolled on.

Time's Gears:

Gears of time keep moving forward. Your poem brought in the sense of time from a clock watcher's point of view. Your free verse poem moved along as rhythmically as hands on a clock. I found no gear-grinding nor batter hiccup along the way. It is a poem that makes one stop and think and realize others do look at time but sometimes don't see that which is right in the face of the clock. Whatever the reason there is a time loss, time stops for no one.

Wake Up:

In the end, time is infinite. It is both calming and nerve-wracking depending on what is to be done at a certain time. The fact is, whether time is forgotten or set to an alarm, it continues whether we watch it or not.

I'm Off the Clock:


I do enjoy your poetry. Some really make me stop and think. They have a philosophical feel about them. *Thinker*

So all I can say is ... Well done! *Clock*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*





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Review by Ⱳƹ₿~ŴitcӉ
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because I was perusing the Comedy Genre to find some goodies for an upcoming Comedy Newsletter. *Bigsmile*

My Initial Impressions:

The title caught my attention, immediately! Being an expert in Amazon ordering, I was convinced this read would be right up my alley. However, since I don't have an alley cat, I was going to be heading into deep Amazon secret deliveries! *Ha*

Further Impressions:

Oh, my, this is going to be some treat to read! I hadn't decided yet if it was going to be about "cat treats" or "dog treats." Simply put, it was a treat to read! *Laugh* Did I mention my love for 2-day Prime delivery? *Delight*

This poem painted some pictures in my mind's eye. The couple walking their Basset Hound lazily through the picturesque are with cobblestone paths. The dog sniffing along, picking up a familiar doggy-treat scent that makes her tail wag in joy as the UPS truck comes into view. *Dog1**Cat*

Heart Stopping Moment:


"Kitty cat with a present
Giving us a bit of fright!"


*Mouse* When I think of a cat with a present, I assume it is something of the rodent variety. *Sick* However, I was proven wrong to my delight. *Delight*

Parting Thoughts:

This was such an amusing poem especially when one reads between the lines and can actually picture both animal and human characters. I like that it had hidden surprises that led to a sweet and satisfying ending.

Good job! In fact, it will be highlighted in next week's Comedy Newsletter. It does fit into the Amazon delivery theme of it! *Laugh*

Until next time--write on!

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WebWitch *Witch*













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Review by Ⱳƹ₿~ŴitcӉ
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because I found it while perusing the Comedy Genre pages. The title drew me in because it fell with the theme of my upcoming Comedy Newsletter. *Bigsmile*

First Impression:


This would be a fast, and humorous piece. It's a limerick, this prone to a bit of quirky comedy. I like that!

Further Impressions:

I wasn't disappointed as it pulled in one of my favorite ways of shopping -- Amazon! Ordering an item from Timbuktu, could be quite difficult for Prime shoppers in the States, to get their item within two days. *Laugh*

Loved the package's travel path and the wit.

Naturally, traveling such distances via plane, train and canoe, could result in a delivery being "overdue."

Lesson learned!

If you need it fast, order close-by!

I am highlighting this little poem in next week's Comedy Newsletter. It will fit well with the newsletter's subject matter. *Bigsmile*


Until next time--write on!

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WebWitch *Witch*








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Review of Masquerade  
Review by Ⱳƹ₿~ŴitcӉ
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hello there, Jacky
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I'm also reviewing your item because it popped-up on the random Read & Review! *Delight*

What I liked:

I liked the dialogue between Joe and Angie. She was trying to convince him to go to their friend's masquerade party. He was not interested, but she had baited him to go convincing him he'd never be able to find her in her costume. He bit and left before her to attend the party.

Further Observations:

You get your readers wondering if Joe will really figure out which guest is his wife. We, of course were led to a twisted, surprising ending!


Observations:

By eleven thirty, though[,] Joe has [had] guessed all of his friends,


Further Observations:

"having been convicted of her murder since she was never found,"

Hmmm, My mystery brain just kicked-in. I do get that this was a Flash Fiction and had to be wrapped up quickly, but there's things to be considered in order to jump to the conclusion of murder. *Shock2*

Since there was no body found when the wife went missing, there had to be some incriminating evidence of a crime, such as her blood, on some weapon with his fingerprints, etc. It needn't be a huge explanation, but just some clues to make it more convincing.


Otherwise, this was a fine little story with a big twist at the end. It just needs a few more facts to answer a reader's questions about his conviction.

Poor Joe!!! *Laugh*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*








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Review by Ⱳƹ₿~ŴitcӉ
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Angel&Witch

Hello there, Trav ... Welcome to WDC! *Bigsmile*
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review. *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because it popped-up on the randome Read & Review. *Smile*

I loved your retelling of a story told to you when you were a youth. It is humorous and neatly written to capture the reader's attention. Of course I love stories about a mom's favorite things. I have experienced many of those told in stories passed on to my mother and then to me. Stories keep family history thriving for each new generations.


Observation:

"It was a short round, almost orb stubby like cactus, with many sharp spikes." A little awkwardly stated.

*Idea* Try: It was a short, stubby, orb-like cactus with many sharp spikes.


Parting Thoughts:

Oh, the trouble parents get into when the kids are away! *Laugh* I love the image you painted of your father's contact with that poor little cactus. Those little thorny coverings are difficult to remove, especially from a tender foot!

Vivid imagery, you've got going there! *PaintBrush*

Conclusion:

I think this story will continue to be treasured for years to come. Please continue to write more of them! *Cool*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*





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Review of Stupid Cupid  
Review by Ⱳƹ₿~ŴitcӉ
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (1.0)
Angel&Witch


Hello there, Beholden
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering our annual, Slam Cupid, intentionally bad poetry in February. *Bigsmile*

Connie Francis. *Thinker* Haven't heard her songs for years. I remember her in my youth, on vinyl. *Smile* And, if C.F. had a beef with Cupid, then that little creature is a problem!

Your poem was a well-balanced poem of rhymes and slams at Cupid. It paints a vivid picture of a lifetime of bad relationships due to the ineptness of that little beast. One must always question, Was it love OR Cupid that put two people together?

Favorite Lines:


"My rearguard lasted all of a year
Now I’m drowning memory in beer"


That just about says it all as relationships fail and we have someone to blame ... CUPID!

As you might guess, we judges must go through the depths of hell to pore through the worst of the worst 1-star poetry. Many reach the 1-star rating but then have to go through a rigorous Slam Cupid test. It's not always "Slam dunk!" *Smirk2*

Good job being bad!

Until next time--Slam on! *Angelic*

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*






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Review by Ⱳƹ₿~ŴitcӉ
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Angel&Witch


Hello there 💙 Carly - BLUE!!💙
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review!

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering February's Slam Cupid, Intentionally bad poetry. The object of this contest is to write the worst poetry possible to get the coveted 1-star rating. *Bigsmile*


My First Impression:

I liked the title, "Conjured Heartbreak." I entered the poem with visions of some really horrible Cupid Slamming about to happen. *Shock2*

Further Impressions:


I couldn't help myself. I had to read and reread this poem trying to find something to sink my teeth into that would grab me in a way to deal out a one-star. This is the purpose of the contest. However, I found there was so much saving grace, so well-penned and filled with imagery, I just didn't have the heart to down-rate this poem.

It really is a good poem! Dark, as love can have a darker side that doesn't involve the Cupid arrow. It shows many points (not arrows) about the disappointment of love and the heartbreak.

Did I miss something? This poem is well crafted and rather deep. Much more so than Cupid deserves.

My Dilemma:

I know the object of this contest is to find the baddest of the bad out of available 1-star ratings, but I think this poem deserves better ratings. If it were to be covered with 1-star ratings, it would have a difficult time recovering. And I repeat, it's much better than a 1-star rating. The ratings you have brought it up to 3-stars, far removed from the needed 1-star. I think it's better than 3 stars (average), so my rating should get it lifted a bit for you.

So, not to pull down your ratings any more, I am giving this a 5-star rating for being a fine poem that allows the reader to actually feel the emotions that come through woven within the lines. It did not truly "Slam" Cupid as it took a more serious path. It is dark, but well-written. Cupid does make a showing but merely as a character for whom one blames when love turns bad, not the sickly-sweet character we imagine during this contest. *HeartBroken*

Thank you again for entering the contest. We Slam Cupid annually in February. Do join in, again. *Smile*

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*










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Review of Love Struck  
Review by Ⱳƹ₿~ŴitcӉ
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (1.0)
Angel&Witch


Hello there, Bob'n Around

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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering our annual, Slam Cupid, bad poetry contest in February! *Bigsmile*

Well this was quite a bad bunch of lines tossed together in the hopes of achieving the best of the worst. *Laugh*

*BurstR* Your poetry was fast and furious and filled with fighting arrows, pain and determination to find love that is, well, not a diapered demon of Valentine's Day! There were some heart-stopping moments woven into the lines. Getting even with Cupid is a whole different image that is difficult to clear from my mind's eye. Arrows going from breat to breast has got to be exhausting! *Laugh*

You filled the prompt with badness as needed. You followed all the rules.
*BoxCheckR*

In the end, it's a difficult choice as we judges go through the pits of hell to find the worst of the worst. It's hard to imagine it can get much badder than this .. but you never know! *Rolling*

Thank you again for sharing this Valentine's heart attack while fighting off the sickly sweet arrow tosser!

Good luck with the contest.

Until next time--Slam On! *Smirk*

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*








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Review by Ⱳƹ₿~ŴitcӉ
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Rated: E | (1.5)
Angel&Witch


Hello there, Jeannie💐
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering our annual Slam Cupid one-star rated poetry prompt in February. *Bigsmile*

Well, it's bad. The arrows, diapers that sag, and the persistence of Cupid with his never-give-up his love-sickening plan! How he still shows up on Valentines is beyond me! *Laugh*

Observation:

"Plus, what you, in your silly diaper, do is a farse." [farce]

You did the job and did it mighty fine -- you gave Ol' Cupid a kick in the behind! *Rolling*

It is daunting judging these Slam poems because every time we think we've reached the bottom of the pit of bad poetry, another one comes along to out-stink the previous ones. Yup, it's a tough job, but we judges voluntarily dig through the stink to fine the baddest of the bad. *Vomit*

Good luck with the contest! *Ha*

Until next time--Slam On! *Smirk2*

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*






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Review by Ⱳƹ₿~ŴitcӉ
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Rated: ASR | (1.0)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, Mordee2
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering our February Slam Cupid, 1-star, intentionally bad poetry contest! *Bigsmile*

Oh, my gosh! This was simply terrible, horrible, gross, and just bad to the core poetry! I do like that BTW! *Laugh*

The things that Cupid did frightening that child, is simply beyond words! The things done in response was humorous, and, it was all woven together in rhyming quatrains, that bring the melodious flow whilst the imagery grow, into the depths of a judge's mind. Yes, it takes a fine-tuned one-star aficionado judge mind to pore through the baddest of the bad, and even poetry that seems "good" on first glimpse. But it is a job I'm up to! *Smirk2*

TMI Moment:

Diaper antics of Cupid! That really made the imagery pop!


I will need to get out the eye bleach after reading that! *Facepalm*



Good job being so bad!
As you may know, we judges go into the deepest garbage bin to find the worst of the worst 1-star poetry. This one may have received 1/2-star if possible.

Good luck with the contest!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*




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Review of Cupid Plucks  
Review by Ⱳƹ₿~ŴitcӉ
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Rated: 13+ | (1.0)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, Words Whirling 'Round
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Bigsmile*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thank you for entering our February SLAM CUPID, 1-STAR Poetry Month prompt!

Initial Impressions:

Loved the first lines with the rhythmic rhyme and use of alliteration. I knew at that moment the rest of the poem would be a fun read. Good way to hook a reader! *Bigsmile*

Further Thoughts:


This poem was quick and quirky and totally falls within giving Cupid the old Slam! It was a humorous read all the way until the end.

Parting Thoughts:

Got a kick out of this:
"Candy, gifts, and banjo muse all failed to impress her
but still his urges Rose again, Beau wanted to undress her."
*Rolling*

Conclusion:


Your intentionally bad poem did what it intended to do -- it was awfully bad, yet terribly good at producing images in the mind of the reader about Cupid and Rose. The one with the thorns beats the one with an arrow who can't put his hands on his thorny love interest! *Laugh*

As you might guess, it is a difficult job for the judges to pore through the pits of Hades to find the best of the worst. Yup, it's a tough job, but somebody's got to do it!

Good luck with the contest!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*





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Review of A letter to Cupid  
Review by Ⱳƹ₿~ŴitcӉ
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Rated: E | (1.0)
Angel&Witch


Hello there, Sumojo
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest Thanks for entering February's Slam Cupid, intentionally bad poetry contest, where one-star is coveted. *Bigsmile*

Initial Impression?

*Rolling**Rolling*

Further Thoughts:

Okay, this was a cleverly crafted version of bad-poetry, whereas the reader seems to be lulled into the warmth of lovely rhyming couplets only to be smacked alongside the sleeping mind and pulled into reality.

It takes a trained bad-poetry mind to sift through the smoke screen and see the BAD! *Shock2*

This is a bad-poetry contest prompt. Despite the cute couplets about modern day dating online, which should be a real lesson for Cupid to learn, the one-star rating wormed its way through to my brain. I mean, that is the purpose of the Slam Cupid, contest, right? *Smirk*

Parting Thoughts:

So, although I hate to have to break apart the lovely shiny stars you got ... I just can't resist giving this the coveted badge of honor ... 1-Star! *Star* This is why the contest exists, is it not? *Smirk2*

As you might realize, it's difficult for us judges to find the baddest of the bad that is also soooooo good in its badness. *Ha*

Good Luck!

Until next time--Slam On! *Smirk2*

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*






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