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Review by Sssssh! I'm...
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Graywriter

I am reviewing your story as a judge for
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Create a memorable character using the given prompt for huge prizes!
#1679316 by Writing.Com Support
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Thank you for entering December's What A Character Contest! *Bigsmile*


Initial Thoughts:

A responsible twelve year old girl goes on an errand for her mom. Her young brother wanted to tag along.

Further Thoughts:

This was sweet story of a couple precocious kids who knew how to handle themselves at a butcher shop with a nasty, rude customer stepping ahead in line.

Dickie? Well he was quite the character!

What Amused me:

The whole chicken feed talk was hilarious! The young brother, Dickie, certainly knew about farming chickens and told that lady why they aren't just "grass fed." free range. It was quite an education, actually to anyone thinking chickens are completely vegetarian as they run around those ranges. Bugs and other small critters add to their diet. *Ha*


Another Amusing Moment, if only it were true these days!

"... pick up some steaks at the butcher? Dad's bringing some friends over for supper tonight and I phoned the order in. Here's a twenty, that should cover it. Bring back the change."

I need to know where this mom shops for steaks for that low price. *Laugh*


Conclusion:

Well done, fast-paced and infused with a quirkiness and humor that painted images in my mind's eye of the children and the now probably vegetarian rude lady. *Laugh*

That'll teach her to take her proper place in line. I doubt she'll enjoy another bite of chicken again. *Chicken*


Good job!


Until next time--write on! And, good luck with the contest! *Bigsmile*

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*

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Review by Sssssh! I'm...
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)


Hello LightinMind
I am reviewing your story as a judge for
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Create a memorable character using the given prompt for huge prizes!
#1679316 by Writing.Com Support
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Thank you for entering the December, What A Character contest!


Initial Thoughts:

I knew this would be a fight to the finish. I was ready to watch David beat Goliath in court.

Further Thoughts:

David is a well organized reasonable thinker looking for the truth rather than accepting policy based science that the university pushes. I applaud his character for choosing to publish his book questioning their "science" even though his job at the university was at stake.

Kudos to his lawyer wife for stepping up to help out with the lawsuit against the university.

Observation:

The prosecutor concluded his statement to the jury and sat down. John had expected the case to focus on university policy regarding conclusions, but instead, the prosecution built its case around an ad hominem attack on his personal competence and intellectual honesty.
I believe this would constitute a civil lawsuit not a criminal one, thus, there would be no prosecutor involved but Plaintiff's Lawyer or Defendant's lawyer.



Parting Thoughts:

Good use of the prompt. This was truly a David and Goliath story where the little guy wins over the giant corporation's threats to ruin him while taking away his job. So happy he got to face that "EB" and tell her what she can do with her job. Of course selling a million books did help him leave all that nasty stuff behind!

Conclusion:

Well done! *Scale1*

Until next time--write on! And, good luck with the contest! *Bigsmile*

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*

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Review of David's Obsession  
Review by Sssssh! I'm...
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Damon Nomad

I am reviewing your story as a judge for
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What a Character! : Official WDC Contest  (E)
Create a memorable character using the given prompt for huge prizes!
#1679316 by Writing.Com Support
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Thank you for entering the January What A Character contest! *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:

Your title and brief description are fine hooks to pull in the reader.I believe sometimes obsession is a perfect forewarning of things we can't quite put our finger on, yet it nags until we sort it out. So, yeah, I was curious to find out more about David.


Further Thoughts:

I like the character. David is a self-made man. He studied on his own when he couldn't fir college into his life with the great responsibilities he had taking care of his mother and earning a living for her and his own family.

Observation:

"He could not find an error or mistake"
Both words mean the same thing, thus one should be eliminated so as not to be redundant.

Parting Thoughts:

I enjoyed this story. You covered the whole person in this character. He's a man who has integrity and goes above and beyond in his work ethic. He found a huge problem that could contaminate the drinking water system affecting health and lives of those in the community. He fought the issue regardless of the warnings received from his bosses. He's unselfish and proved himself quite savvy when push came to shove.

Good man, great character!You hit this prompt's nail right on the head. *ThumbsUpGreen*

Conclusion:

You did a wonderful job with this character. *BeakerB*


Until next time--write on! And, good luck with the contest! *Bigsmile*

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*

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Review by Sssssh! I'm...
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hello PureSciFi

I am reviewing your story as a judge for
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What a Character! : Official WDC Contest  (E)
Create a memorable character using the given prompt for huge prizes!
#1679316 by Writing.Com Support
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Thank you for entering December's What A Character contest! *Bigsmile*


Initial Thoughts:

Your title and brief description caught my curiosity. There's to be a challenge both mentally and physically.
Good hook!

Further Thoughts:

The story involves a giant, Yanaka who appears every few hundred years to challenge one of the Kovinans, who were not in the same league of her giant height and girth.

You follow the David and Goliath prompt for What A Character.

You chose the Sci-Fi genre which is the genre you favor most. *Smile*

The story's plot built up as the challenge rules were battled out before the actually acceptance of the rules.

A female youngster who is Kovinan put forward the challenge and had to argue she was deserving of its acceptance even though Yanaka never accepts a challenge from a youth or a women.


Observations:

"She sat forward in the gigantic floating stone seat with armrests. she was sitting on."
No need to add those extra words since it's already clear that she was sitting when you stated "She sat forward."

“It is advancing, but that’s not what is [it's]doing here."

..."and we have given them the knowledge of the Giant Shooter. to them." No need to repeat "to them" since you say you've given them the knowledge at the start of the sentence.

"When their Watches [watchers] challenge them, they will use it to kill them too."

Parting Thoughts:

I liked the way the young girl, Thonia convinced the giant she would be facing a real challenge this time. She was quite the character!

Good for the Kovinans managing a couple hundred years of preparations to fight the giant out of the sight of the giant. Underground ... it's a good thing! *Bigsmile*

Conclusion:

Nice job! *Planet*


Until next time--write on! And, good luck with the contest! *Bigsmile*

Regards,
WebWitch} *Witch*

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Review of Silver Bells  
Review by Sssssh! I'm...
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, Prosperous Snow celebrating
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering December's Acrostic Poetry Prompt. *Bigsmile*

First Impressions:

I loved the first glimpse of your poem where the acrostic prompt Silver Bells shows clearly through with bold text.

Further Impressions:

Each line builds the reader up to the excitement of the holiday season. Snow, Santa, reindeer and sparkle! 'Tis the season for all the sparkle! *Star*


Final Thoughts:

It's beautiful how your poem blends the start of Christmastime until the New Year. In between there are lovely words of hope, joy, music, love and peace. Beautiful, beautiful peace on Earth. *Peace*

Lovely!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review by Sssssh! I'm...
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, JCosmos
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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering our Holiday Rush, Acrostic Poetry contest in December. *Bigsmile*

First Thoughts:

The title "Bah Humbug" prepared me to read about all that isn't worth celebrating during this time of year.

Further Thoughts:

I was totally surprised! *Ha*

You took a common phrase that makes us think of Scrooge, and rather than becoming grumpy about it turned the poem into one of gratitude. Now that's a poem with good attitude!

You followed the rules using the acrostic form.

Final Thoughts:

It is indeed true. "Happiness comes from within."

Nicely done!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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for entry "SILENT NIGHT" 
Review by Sssssh! I'm...
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, Dave
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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering our Holiday Rush, Acrostic Poetry prompt in December. *Bigsmile*


Initial Thoughts:

You chose Silent Night as the prompt for your acrostic. I took a quick glance and noticed strong word use jumped out at me even before reading each line. Then I knew I was in for a treat upon full reading of the poem. As with poetry itself so much is left up to personal interpretation.

Further Thoughts:

Noticed the indigo shades of font for the description of the wintry weather outdoors, and the switch to black font for inside the home, where low lighting is obvious since windows are frost covered. Also, bringing nature inside the house such a holly, mistletoe perhaps a tree, cannot compete with nature's paintbrush of the colors outdoors.

Loved these lines:

Lacy frost adorns the window pane,
Endowing us with Yuletide joy,

Inspiring indoor escape,
Garnished with holly and mistletoe,

You bring the reader from the outdoors and the wintry display of nature to indoors in the warmth and comfort of the home. And, as is the season, part of the outdoors is brought into the home in some form for decoration and celebration of the season. *Holly2*

Parting Thoughts:

Lovely imagery! It starts with the enjoyment of nature's gorgeous display, perfectly crisp and icy. It ends with the celebration of nature's beauty being borrowed and moved inside surrounded by warmth.

Good job! *Snow4*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Silent Night  
Review by Sssssh! I'm...
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, Odessa Molinari
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at the "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering our Holiday Rush, Acrostic Poetry prompt in December.

Initial Thoughts:

You chose Silent Night as your prompt. The first line gave me images of falling snow and the pale teal first initial on each line gave the reader the feeling of its cool crispness and aqua hue so often seen with with the right lighting on a blanket of snow.

Further Thoughts:

You did a lovely job of describing winter's birth.

Loved these lines:

"It lay upon the earth
Like a frosty blanket
Encasing winter's birth.

Beautifully descriptive metaphoric lines that fit different interpretations of that time of year.

Observation:

"Til the Spring" "spring" Seasons are not capitalized unless starting a sentence. They are general nouns not proper nouns.

Conclusion:

Beautiful poetry, followed the Acrostic style effortlessly.

Good job! *Snow3*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review by Sssssh! I'm...
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Angel&Witch



Hello there Anna Marie Carlson
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Review. *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering the Holiday Rush acrostic poetry prompt in December. *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:

You chose Dashing Through The Snow, which is the longest prompt to chose, so kudos for taking the challenge! *ThumbsUpL*

Further Thoughts:

I loved how you wove into the poem the need for healing, forgiveness and love and family for the season. How beautiful a message to send with your poem.

Your Acrostic followed the form with ease. No glitches in the reading other than ...

Observation:

{/:center{December 25, 2022, Christmas Day,

You have an open ML at the start, so it doesn't read smoothly when looking for the "D" in the Acrostic. It is of course, an easy fix once the contest is judged. Not a huge deal.*Wink*


Parting Thoughts:

Your poem highlighted the goodness and kindness of the season. It's a beautiful message!

Well done! *Dove*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*




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Review of SILENT NIGHT  
Review by Sssssh! I'm...
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, JustMeJayE
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review! *Angelic*

I'm also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering our Holiday Rush, Acrostic Poetry prompt! *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:

You chose Silent Night for your acrostic poem. A quick glance showed me this would be a fast-paced poem highlighting the "Rush" part of Holiday Rush. I like that! *Cool*

Further Thoughts:

Using only a few words or less per line meant that the words chosen would have to capture the reader's attentions and hold it through to the end while filling the mind's eye with imagery.

I have to say, you did that job handily! *Delight*

I loved the compact way of bundling the season and filling it with joy. Sleigh rides, eggnog, laughter, glee trimming the tree ... hit the holiday nail right on the head. *Nail**Hammer*

Conclusion:

Loved the fast-paced yet meaningful words chosen to put together a wonderful acrostic of celebrating such a joyous time of the year. *XMasTree*

Well done!

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Candles of Eight  
Review by Sssssh! I'm...
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Angel&Witch



Hello there Angelica- House Florent B & W
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review! *Angelic*

I'm also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering The Holiday Rush, Acrostic Poetry prompt in December. *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:

You chose the prompt "Candles of Eight."

I loved the story told through your poem of the celebration by sharing with the reader the that each day a candle is lit, a prayer is said. *Pray*

Further Impressions:

This line caught my interest:

"Elephant tusk decorate the table" I assume the gift of elephant tusks brings good luck to the home. What a beautiful picture of that came to my mind.

Rules Followed?

Yes. You chose from the list of prompt titles given, created an acrostic poem. You followed the acrostic form perfectly.

Other Observations:

"Over the walls and {xthrough{/x} to the ceiling" I assume you were describing the light from the candles and how they wash against the walls and hit the ceiling. I doubt if the light could go "through" the ceiling. That is how it appears to me when read.


Parting Thoughts:

I like how you took the prompt not mostly chosen on the list. You did a lovely job describing the need for prayers each day while lighting the candle.

I was amused by the ending with:
"Happy holidays full of cheer
Time to call it a long week"

A long week indeed. Holidays do take their toll on us no matter how we celebrate them. *Ha*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Ring those Bells  
Review by Sssssh! I'm...
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, AmyJo- only 2 steps behind -
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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering the Holiday Rush Acrostic Poetry Prompt in December! *Bigsmile*

First Impressions:

*Right* Strong title.

It commands the bells be rung to alert all of the beginning of the season. I like the way it pulls the reader into the poem expecting the joyful sounds of the bells to be heard through your words.

Further Impressions:

Your Acrostic was based on the "Silver Bells" prompt. You did a magnificent job of blending the lines while painting a beautiful picture of jubilant believers in the celebration of the birth of Jesus Christ.

*PaintBrush* I like that the first letter of each line is placed in bold type and the words Silver Bells pops out clearly.

Your poem flows with ease like a sweet melody of the season.

Parting Thoughts:

I saw nothing out of place to disturb the read and imagery of the joyous bells ringing in praise.

Conclusion:

Good use of the prompt. Nicely crafted lines. *Bell*

Well done!

Until next time--write on! *Star*

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review by Sssssh! I'm...
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, Penelope Moonbeam
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering our Holiday Rush, Acrostic Poetry contest in December! *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:

You chose Winter Wonderland as your prompt. My thoughts went to cool crisp, linen-like snow upon the ground. All things winter and stunningly beautiful.

Further Thoughts:

You did paint a magical picture of winter beauty with your poem.

Words I loved:

Radiant Glistening, Rolling hills, Laughing children ... This made it all come to life. Lovely! *Delight*

Observations:

"Deer will wonder (wander) about the field"

You need a space between Radiant, and glistening.

Conclusion:

You made winter beautiful with your poem!

Well done! *Snow3*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Bah Humbug  
Review by Sssssh! I'm...
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, THANKFUL SONALI 17 WDC YEARS!
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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering our Holiday Rush, Acrostic Poetry contest in December. *Delight*

First Impression:

Oh, my -- Bah Humbug was the prompt chosen. I was preparing for the humbug to shine through the lines with some Grinch-like sort of poetry. Boy was I wrong! *Shock2* So happy I was wrong. This was such a creative use of that prompt.


Further Impressions:

This acrostic was beautifully written. It was smooth and reverent. I loved how you wove in the true Christmas spirit with the title you chose. Not easy to pull that off!


Parting Thoughts:

Your poem was a joy to read, Very lyrical! It was a song within itself. Loved that, and the twist that turned Bah Humbug into Oh beautiful night of holy birth -- the miracle that is Christmas.

Conclusion:

Awesome use of the prompt! *Star*


Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Star of the Night  
Review by Sssssh! I'm...
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, KnightScribe
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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering Holiday Rush, December Acrostic poetry contest! *Bigsmile*

My Thoughts:

*StarB* Sweet as a whisper
*Star* Gentle as a spiritual breeze
*Angel*All the love could be felt through these lines.

My Surprise:

I loved how you took the song Silver Bells, a relatively benign carol heard throughout the season, yet this one brought the reader right into Bethlehem to see the babe in the manger and the glory that surrounded the birth.

You made it about the light and joy of Christmas.

Parting Thoughts:

The acrostic lines flowed like a melody. Perfect song to pen your acrostic. It really worked out well.

Conclusion:

Beautifully done. Each line told the story. And, it did so effortlessly. *Quill*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review by Sssssh! I'm...
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Steph!
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review! *Angelic*

My Thoughts:
This was a fun and relaxing word search. It took my mind away from other stuff that needed to be forgotten as Christmas approaches.

The Last hold out:

Santa Baby was the last song title on the list to be found.

The solve level:

It was not too difficult and it made me sing while solving! *Music1*

Thanks for the fun and festive distraction! *Ha*

Happy Holidays!
WebWitch *Witch*
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Review of Awaiting Sleep  
Review by Sssssh! I'm...
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello there, Schnujo is Late to Lannister
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Review!

I came across this little delight while perusing your portfolio.

I notice the words in bold which must have been part of the contest prompt. You weave those word with purposeful fluidity. They fit within the lines without appearing forced. I hate when that happens! *Laugh*

I can relate to an overactive brain at night pushing away the Sandman. *Yawn*


I want to thank you for all your Public Reviews at The Witch's House recently. A little bonus is included since it's over two weeks.

Keep on writing from the heart as you've done with this poem. I loved it, and I can relate with the words used within the lines.

Good job! *ThumbsUpGreen*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
Webbie


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Review by Sssssh! I'm...
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Angel&Witch



Hello there The Puppet Master

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Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering our October, Something Horror Quotation Prompt contest! *Bigsmile*

First Impressions:

Intriguing Title and brief description pull the reader into the story. *CheckGr*

The opening of the story solidifies that the character has a ghost living in his head.

Further Thoughts:

The character has a struggle with Bruno, the name he gave to the ghost living in his head.

You've chosen the prompt quote: "If a man harbors any sort of fear, it percolates through all his thinking, damages his personality, makes him landlord to a ghost."
- Lloyd C. Douglas

This story definitely meshes well with the quote. *CheckO*

There is real struggle of mind vs ghost in this story. The character is overrun with guilt that he will somehow kill people through illness, even though he tested negative. Bruno torments him that it's not good enough.

*Broom* I love the psychological struggle with the character. He has fallen through the holes from the fear he indeed harbors in mind and spirit. The ghost always wins in this struggle which makes him feel doomed against ridding himself of Bruno. Mentally disturbed beyond words, he tries and fails to knock out the unwanted, uninvited ghost of doom and gloom.

Observations:

I liked the story. It has that psychological thriller effect. However, I wish there were more about the character and what led to the Bruno in his brain. I want to know where he was at the time.

Conclusion:

Great use of the prompt. Rules followed, word count included. *ThumbsUpGreen*


Good job! *Web1**Web2*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Review of Contest Entries  
for entry "The Handful of Dust" 
Review by Sssssh! I'm...
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Angel&Witch



Hello there, Angelica- House Florent B & W
This is a bitem:army:review} *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering our October, Something Horror quote, contest! *Bigsmile*

First Impressions:

You chose the quote, "Prompt: 3) I will show you fear in a handful of dust." T. S. Eliot

The beginning pulls the reader into the story due to the anxiety and fear of Milly.

Further Impressions:

Milly claims she's fearless, and dust is not something she's willing to begin fearing. However, Mike insists the dust will cause her great fear.

Observations:

"Just watch the just please," Mike said with a sigh. Just watch the dust please.

Also, I think this story has some potential in the horror genre if the reader were able to feel the terror. It was difficult to relate to the characters. I believe more developing of the story's plot, scene, characters, location would have pulled the reader in right to the end.

Conclusion:

A story of fear with great potential. It just needed a bit more meat on the dusty bones. *Skull*

Until next time, write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*







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Hello there, AmyJo- only 2 steps behind -
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering our Something Horror Quotation Contest in October. *Bigsmile*

First Impression:

This is a well-constructed poem. *Swords*
interpreting the prompt: 1) O, how vain and vile a passion is this fear! What base, uncomely things it makes men do.
- Samuel Johnson

Further Impressions:

Loved this: "Fear compels action,
rather than contemplation;

Very strong opening lines for setting up fear in the poetry. It pulls the readers in, compelling them to read on.


Great word choices at the ending:
"like a rogue wave"

"Demanding its due and
Beating into submission."

Observations:

Were the Rules Followed?

1)The prompt: "Give us your best Horror/Scary/Bone-Chiller-Thriller Story all derived from one of these famous quotes:" You chose number 1, the Samuel Johnson quote

Quote was interpreted within the lines of your poem very nicely. *CheckG*

2) "Rules: Short Story based on 1 of the above quotes." Here's where you veer off the rules. As much as your poem is excellently penned, it is not a "short story" as per the rules. *Sob*


Parting Thoughts:

*NoteR* I had to change the rating on your item due to the violent content of the line "Beating into submission"

I did enjoy reading your poem. It is filled with the tension of fear that makes the quote pop out to the reader. *Grave*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Hello there, Angelica- House Florent B & W
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering our annual Cop Shop Mystery in September. *Police*

The Prompt:

Your job was to solve the mystery set out in the prompt's scenario.
The mystery solving had to be accomplished in exactly 22 sentences. *BoxCheckB*


My Observations:

Upon reading the story, it appears to be a double homicide has developed.
First,

Nancy Pringle bled to death due to a trap set up under the table by Little Robby. I feel badly about poor Nancy, but I guess she got in the way. *Cry*

Secondly, Chef Cawpa, Robby's dad, was killed. You gave a motive for that murder, so that answers the Who, and Why he was killed.

Hey, I don't mind if another character is pulled into the scenario to bring about the natural progression of the mystery to the conclusion.*PoliceCar*

Observation:

It seemed that the Chef was killed before the actually party?
There was nothing about him being found under the banquet serving table where Nancy lost her footing and fell close to the body. She seemed to be alive up to that point. Thus, her bleeding to death before the Chef's body was discovered is a little confusing.

However, the Suggestions do say to make it, fun and make it your own to solve. *BadgePolice*

Parting Thoughts:

That Robby did in fact kill his own father, the chef, due to jealousy. Poor Nancy got in the way of the trap with sharp objects. That's still a homicide, setting a trap that resulted in the death of Nancy Pringle. Yup, a double homicide not seen before in The Cop Shop Mystery scene solving. *Police*

Conclusion:

You have proved to yourself that a mystery can be solved in exactly 22 sentences! I hope to see you back next year when you get one extra sentence to solve the mystery. *Ha*

Nicely done! *SwordR*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Hello there AmyJo- only 2 steps behind -
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item as a judge at "The Bard's Hall Contest"  Thank you for entering our annual Cop Shop Mystery in September. *PoliceCar*

First Impressions:

Very interesting deduction of the crime involved. I like that there was a bit of the game "Clue" woven within. Indeed, there was no Colonel Mustard. *Laugh*

Solving the Crime:

You chose poison as the cause of death. *BoxCheckB*

Rules Followed?

Your job was to write a story to solve the mystery of the scenario written in the prompt in exactly 22 sentences.

You did indeed solve the mystery.
The Mayor is the culprit
The reason, a recipe exchange with Mrs. Mayor which really angered the mayor! *Ha*


Write a Story? *Thinker*

As much as your poem told the story, it was technically a "story." It was under the Poem Genre, as well. You solved the mystery in 22 lines. Splendidly crafted, by the way. *Bigsmile*

Conclusion:

This was an excellent attempt to solve a difficult crimes in exactly 22 sentences. You indeed solved the mystery in exactly 22 lines. Kudos! *Police*

Good job! *BadgePolice*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*


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Hello there, StephBee - House Targaryen my soul sister! *HeartO**HeartT**HeartG*

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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because I was tagged in it earlier this month when all the birthday festivities started. The month seemed to keep me busy, but I kept this little gem on my top to-do list of open-tabs. *Ha*

What Pulled me in: (Other than being tagged, that is.)
My curiosity from your brief description. Good way to hook this reader. *Bigsmile*

What kept me reading on:

I loved the way your described the years of learning, fun and sheer joy at WDC. Your gratitude really shines through as you point out who and why you came to accomplish so much with your novel writing and being published. I swear, with your schedule, I have no idea how you managed to find the time. I have read your writing and enjoyed it very much. My Kindle holds a few of your books. My first read was the Wolf's Torment. Oh, my, I loved that book!

What made me blush:

Seriously? I'm a Soul sister, amazing, imaginative, full of energy, to name a few pats on my back from you?!! *Right**Blush**Left*Thanks for that, by the way. I have also been so fortunate to be your partner at The Bard's Hall. It's been such a fun and unique group to be a part of. 17 years!!! It's older than I am in WDC years. What a marvelous creation you have started so many years ago. And that was before I got here to help you with it. *Angelic*

Parting Thoughts:

Yes, SM & SMs have been brilliant in developing this home away from home for us. They are amazing in all they do to make it a beloved spot for creative people ... the best ever actually, where we have found developed friendship bonds and have learned so much from helpful members, groups and activities, to help us grow as writers. Can't give enough kudos for all they've done.

Great tribute to a great site!

Until next time--gush-on! *Laugh* Okay, okay, just kidding...Write on! *Angelic*

Now, let's discuss next month's prompt ... *Witch*



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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello there Sumojo
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your item because it popped up on the random Read & Review. *Bigsmile*

Initial Thoughts:

I was drawn to the title and brief description. It made me curious enough to plunge right in.

Further Thoughts:

Being a mother of five and four of the five are daughters, I could feel the strong emotions you wrote about.

Daughters do have their moments. More than one daughter, it may become a competition. It seems that your daughter felt that since she was the second born girl, perhaps she didn't fit into the family unity as much as the older daughter. Also, one of the twins is a son, therefore, he's the first boy, and gets that attention.

We can only ponder about the ways one child needs more attention than another child. I think you are correct about her insecurities and that she needed to be the squeaky wheel, which she knew would get attention.

Quick Observation:

There are a couple spots with formatting issues. It breaks up the easy flow of reading. Nothing major. But otherwise, no huge grammar issues that I could spot. *Wink*


Additional Thoughts:

Mothers take on all the burdens of a child who doesn't quite get on track in life. We can't of course take on all the responsibility. Once your daughter was grown, she was an adult who could share her love with her children. Forge her own way through life with her husband and children, but still chose to cling to a part of her she could never find.

Parting Thoughts:

No matter how often our children may slip, we are mothers. We are there for them. However as you so succinctly put it, the words "I love you" melt away so much angst.

Also, it's true. Mothers can't be here forever picking up the pieces of failed choices in life. One can only pray their child finds the way out of self-inflicted misery. Your story sounds so closely related to a woman who was a dear family friend. Her daughter went down a very similar path in life.

Finally, she pulled out of the bad habits, the rehab issues, and did get back to a responsible, loving daughter who was with her mother until she passed a few years back. I'll miss that woman, but, I see her daughter has remained strong and positive in life.

*Butterfly2T* Thank you for sharing this story. I assume since it's under the sub-genre "biographical" it is based on a life experience. I love the refrain at the start and conclusion of the story. No better way to write a story of a mother's love than that.

Very touching story. You've done a great job describing the difficult subject matter of dealing with a troubled child. *HeartB*


Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch *Witch*





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Hello Dr M C Gupta
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#1188309 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen
Review! *Angelic*

I am also reviewing your poem because it popped up on the random Read & Review. *Smile*

Opening Thoughts:

The title and brief description let the readers know this is a sonnet about faith.

Further Thoughts:

I love the sonnet form, its lyrical quality and majestic flow. The story it holds here is one of deep reflection of life lived and the afterlife.

I love that it is about continuing being in the service of the Lord. Probably a thought that doesn't cross many folk's minds. Some believe to die is the end and they no longer have any jobs to do in their spiritual state. The state of the soul.

Parting Thoughts:

The poem is eloquently written and contains a very strong message about faith and looking beyond this mortal life we share as earthly human beings.

Further, the beauty of this piece is at the end, when a humble servant of the Lord asks what more can be done in His name. I'm so happy this item popped up for me to read tonight. It made me ever so thankful seeing its words and to always know who it is we serve for eternity.

Conclusion:

I found this poem to uplifting, inspirational and simply beautiful in its message.

Beautiful! *Pray*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch




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