It is me again, I just could not stay away from your portfolio. Oh my goodness and this time, I laughed so hard my husband had to ask what the heck I was reading! He and I both grew up having guinea pigs, rabbits, and hamsters. No snakes. Every parent needs this story in their arsenal of parenting tools. How many kids worldwide beg for pets then, do exactly this, forget to feed them!? If only parents could just pull this out and tell them to read it and keep a straight face!
Ohh and what a wicked, mischievous Grandpa! Telling such a story right at bedtime, and while camping no less. What a hoot!
I am a member of a review group called Positive Heart Reviews and we give positive, honest reviews. I was looking for something to review and came across your brilliant story.
This is a delightful story! At first, I felt a bit of dread, not knowing which direction this story was going to turn. You did a nice job capturing the bottled up feelings inside of the little girl and they rang very true. I love that the frog didn't do anything outrageous, there was no long drawn out conversation between her and the frog, it left the reader wonder a bit. Did she ever see the frog again? Did it ever speak to her? It lets the reader's mind conjure up so many questions, and for me, that is brilliant writing. Not everything is completely laid out, there is something left for the reader to ponder. You captured the little girl so sweetly, she just popped of the page and I could almost hear that slap-slap of the screen door with my own ears.
Hello, I am giving this review in association with the Positive Hearts Group. The reason I am telling you this is because my logo doesn't seem to always work!
Your article is inspiring. I am also a southern woman and I lived in GA for several years, near Tallapoosa and Cedartown. Oh I do remember a lot of talk about roots and the little old lady I took care of, (I was a caregiver) was raised and grew up in the mountains. And mountain folks have their own set of beliefs. Your article makes a very strong point that all Christians need to be aware of on a daily basis, and that is to not let ANYTHING separate them from God's love. A lot of times our own lack of faith can hinder the works God wants to do in our lives. But also sin or something else can also block us from what God desires to do for us. God desires to only give us the good stuff. The blessings. It is so easy to let things slip in between us and God's love, so we should be ever vigilant. Thank you for your well written, inspiring article and the reminder to never let anything separate me from God's Love.
Aww, she was a gorgous kitty and I know she will forever live in your heart, stories and memory. As a cat lover, I have an even dozen right now. A few are babies and will be adopted out when they are old enough. Thank you for the lovely trinket. Here is a little something for you or your group or however you wish to use it.
You do bring up a valid point. There comes a time when what we think must be met with actions. You can think positively all day, every day but until you get off your behind, pick up the tools needed for the job and DO something to achieve what you want, well, then, it won't ever get done. Mindset, I think is really the very first step, but by no means is the last step. Very good point.
I've had some pretty memorable vehicles in my life over the years. Some, I'll never forget. It's funny how a car or truck can become so much a part of our lives, we don't even know it as it is happening. I'm sorry about the fate of your Lada and that you had to leave it behind.
This is so sweet and touching. There is nothing like the love and companionship of a dog. When life hurts and does its damages, nothing heals us quite like the lick of a furry friend! I always say DOG is God spelled backward because only a dog loves as unconditionally and wholeheartedly as God himself! Its as if God put all his infinite love and patience into a package and gift wrapped it with fur. I really enjoyed reading about how you and Arie met and became friends.
Cute! As the Mom of four dogs, I can relate to this short story very well! Your little pup sounds delightful when he's not high as a kite. In just a few words you bring him to life and make him pop off the page!
This is a heart twisting story that keeps the reader on the edge of their seat. So many twists and turns, and I really liked that it was fast-paced but didn't feel rushed. It is a very tragic story.
Now, that has some vivid imagery! It took me a little while to get drawn into the story, but once I did, I couldn't stop reading. It has an old-world feel about it. I also liked that it was fast-paced without being rushed.
This is a delightful children's story. It makes a point about obeying rules to avoid potentially dangerous situations without being preachy or bossy. Black Wolf and Corn Fed Jim share an unlikely and unusual friendship, which helps encourage children to do the same, I think. I had to laugh when I read the part about the calf and wolf both going into the Giant's house. That drew a vivid image of a baby calf and wolf playing around in a living room. lol, The story is fast-paced but has lots of wonderful details children are apt to notice.
I don't have a catchy review group or anything but you won a bid over at the Deadly Deceptions Auction and you won 5 reviews from me.
Right away I can tell your port is something special. The fun, creative way you introduce yourself, instead of the typical bio says it all. Let me admit, right now that I am not very knowledgable about poetry technicalities. So If it is ok with you, I'll focus on other elements.
From your quick-witted intro, I learn you are creative. You probably have a southern boy lurking in you somewhere...as a born and raised Texan, country boys are easy for me to spot, twang or not! You take your poetry and writing seriously and have hopes of being published. In a not very long poem, you make every word count and tell more about you than most would think. You also kinda like playing with people's minds! I'm gonna have to keep my eye on you while I'm poking around this port of yours!
Hello, you won a review from Me! ( I don't have a catchy review group name or anything, but you won a bid over at the Deadly Deception Auction. Don't worry, I promise my review won't kill you.)
I was hesitant to choose this item for your first review because romance type stories are not my "thing". But, if we don't take a chance and try new things once in a while how do we ever find progress? I am so glad I took a chance!
This had a unique type of intro and that held my attention. I liked the contrast you used with the wet, rainy, grey day and the bright colored umbrella of the hot dog stand and the "brightness" of the woman. Vivid imagery always captures my attention.
Things moved quickly and in an unexpected/predicted direction. I really kinda feel sorry for the poor cop, even as I'm laughing at the humor of the whole situation. It is very easy to relate to your character because haven't we all been in a highly embarrassing situation of our own making a time or two? Especially in the romance/love department.
As you wrap up your story and they come to a satisfying resolution it leaves the reader feeling pretty good about the whole thing. Now, if more romance stories were like this, I might be more prone to reading them. I'm really looking forward to exploring your port more! You can look for four more reviews from me over the next few days!
None of these appeal to a woman. I don't want to be any of these bugs. Maybe you could consider adding a ladybug and butterfly or even a dragonfly. I would choose ladybug if I had the choice.
Story Mistress,
This is absolutely AMAZING!! And, very exciting. I definitely want to order something...but, I've got to choose if I want to order a set for the Deadly Deceit competition that will kick off most likely the second week of October, OR, if I should plan to order a set for a competition I'm trying to plan out for December/January which has yet to have a name or theme yet lol. I can already see so much potential with these personalized awardicon sets! I have a feeling they will catch on quickly once you release this idea to the public.
Sincerely,
Tina
This is a very informative essay that makes very good points. I like the matter of fact tone and the pace of the essay. It looks to have been very well edited, as nothing amiss seemed to pop out at me.
I would like to make a few suggestions, which is just that. Only suggestions. First, your essay appears as one very long, chunky block and is a bit daunting at first. I would suggest breaking your paragraphs by double spacing them, so your text appears less chunky and has a bit of visual space to break it up. Another thing I would suggest is adding a quote or cite where you get some of your information. For example, you state 1.7% of the population can claim to be born as intersex or hermaphrodite. It would lend credit and weight to that statistic if you could site where you read that.
Over all, it was a good essy that made strong points.
What a lovely memory, even if it is about the loss of someone. One of the very first prayers I was taught to pray ended in "And please let Aunt Ruthie come live with you." I was five and had no concept of what I was actually praying for and to my knowledge, I never met Aunt Ruthie. She was my Grandmother's Sister and at the end of her life, I learned later she struggled with a lot of pain and suffering. Later, when I was old enough to understand, I was always taught death (for a Christian) was a time to rejoice and be happy. Yes, we would miss the one who died, but they were now in heaven with Jesus and we had the assurance we would see them again, as long as we held true to Jesus and his teachings. It is only a time to mourn and be sad when we are not sure or we are pretty sure the one who died did so without the salvation of our Lord. Then, it was a time of great sorrow. I am so thankful I belong to Jesus!
Happy WDC Anniversary! Yes, it's that time again and in honor of your special day, I've come for a visit to your Portfolio.
This essay touches on the very dilemma I have wrestled with off and on for years. I am a born again Pentecostal that has often wondered long and hard at the conflicting actions of many churches and Christians. Yes, of course, we get the fire and brimstone preaching to and it's obvious we should leave the doors to the dark side alone. But these same people so adamant about right and wrong, heaven and hell play a very dangerous game. Oh, they don't CALL it what it is. They call it Harvest Festivals, or Fall HayRides or they use Biblical themes such as everyone dressing as Noah's ark characters...rather than demons, witches, and goblins. But, a rose is still a rose, even if it's called something else and so is celebrating Halloween, even if it's called something else!
There are years when I've shrugged and decided it was harmless! It is all in how you look at it, approach it, and what you do with it. You can choose to use this celebration for good or for evil.
Still, other years, I've looked at it and all I could see was the danger. The dark evil that stood to wait for the door to open was clear and the warning signs evident. Each year finds me with a new perspective or thought about this particular holiday. But then, ALL holidays bring forth contradictory thoughts and wondering. I am glad to see I am not the only one who feels like we should at the very least, give this some serious thought and reflection.
I like your matte of fact, direct tone, and how you say it. It is clear and concise without beating around the bush, yet is also done in a non-judgemental or condemning way. It encourages the reader to look into themselves and think for themselves. Very well done.
I look forward to reading more of your writings. Again, Happy WDC anniversary!
Tina
Happy WDC Anniversary! In honor of your special day, I chose Entry of a Pocketwatch to read and review.
A somewhat bittersweet story of a watch handed down through several generations within a family. I liked how you took an item that was initially purchased with an intent to signify status and importance and turned it into a plaything that was used to amuse the youngest of the family. It's value changed, but I would think, also increased as time and sentiment were added to it. Very well written. I hope to read more of your stories very soon.
Happy WDC Anniversary! In honor of your WDC birthday, I have given you a review. I love reading inspirational, faith-filled works and I was excited to find your short snippets.
I read this and your short story Cowboy. They are both inspiring and both bring to light very good proverb type messages for the reader. Both inspiring and motivating both of these short pieces are very well written. Your characters are very lifelike, and you expressed their emotions very well.
May the Lord continue to bless you and your writing talents,
Sincerely,
Tina
This was a fun, feel-good type story that had me laughing and smiling. You are very talented with short stories! I am way too wordy to tell the kind of stories you do, with so few words. You, however, make it seem so easy! Your characters are always so lifelike and well rounded. They pop off the page and I find myself wanting to read MORE about them. I have truly enjoyed exploring your portfolio and reviewing your short stores.
This captivated my attention from the first sentence. Richard, you really are a talented writer! I've always hated snow since I lived in Wisconsin and got my first taste of REAL snow. It is beautiful to look at from behind a window or on tv. But, not pretty at ALL if your knee-deep in the stuff trying to unbury your car!
You really did an awesome job grabbing the reader's emotions, giving just enough hope to hook them, then, at the very end, lowered the boom. You ignited my anger at the lazy Ranger who couldn't be bothered to go take a look. Help was so close, yet not close enough. I liked how you personified Snow and brought it to life. Giving it a will of its own. Very creative. Very emotional and powerful! I can see why it has such a pretty ribbon gracing it's cover!
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