None of these appeal to a woman. I don't want to be any of these bugs. Maybe you could consider adding a ladybug and butterfly or even a dragonfly. I would choose ladybug if I had the choice.
Story Mistress,
This is absolutely AMAZING!! And, very exciting. I definitely want to order something...but, I've got to choose if I want to order a set for the Deadly Deceit competition that will kick off most likely the second week of October, OR, if I should plan to order a set for a competition I'm trying to plan out for December/January which has yet to have a name or theme yet lol. I can already see so much potential with these personalized awardicon sets! I have a feeling they will catch on quickly once you release this idea to the public.
Sincerely,
Tina
This is a very informative essay that makes very good points. I like the matter of fact tone and the pace of the essay. It looks to have been very well edited, as nothing amiss seemed to pop out at me.
I would like to make a few suggestions, which is just that. Only suggestions. First, your essay appears as one very long, chunky block and is a bit daunting at first. I would suggest breaking your paragraphs by double spacing them, so your text appears less chunky and has a bit of visual space to break it up. Another thing I would suggest is adding a quote or cite where you get some of your information. For example, you state 1.7% of the population can claim to be born as intersex or hermaphrodite. It would lend credit and weight to that statistic if you could site where you read that.
Over all, it was a good essy that made strong points.
What a lovely memory, even if it is about the loss of someone. One of the very first prayers I was taught to pray ended in "And please let Aunt Ruthie come live with you." I was five and had no concept of what I was actually praying for and to my knowledge, I never met Aunt Ruthie. She was my Grandmother's Sister and at the end of her life, I learned later she struggled with a lot of pain and suffering. Later, when I was old enough to understand, I was always taught death (for a Christian) was a time to rejoice and be happy. Yes, we would miss the one who died, but they were now in heaven with Jesus and we had the assurance we would see them again, as long as we held true to Jesus and his teachings. It is only a time to mourn and be sad when we are not sure or we are pretty sure the one who died did so without the salvation of our Lord. Then, it was a time of great sorrow. I am so thankful I belong to Jesus!
Happy WDC Anniversary! Yes, it's that time again and in honor of your special day, I've come for a visit to your Portfolio.
This essay touches on the very dilemma I have wrestled with off and on for years. I am a born again Pentecostal that has often wondered long and hard at the conflicting actions of many churches and Christians. Yes, of course, we get the fire and brimstone preaching to and it's obvious we should leave the doors to the dark side alone. But these same people so adamant about right and wrong, heaven and hell play a very dangerous game. Oh, they don't CALL it what it is. They call it Harvest Festivals, or Fall HayRides or they use Biblical themes such as everyone dressing as Noah's ark characters...rather than demons, witches, and goblins. But, a rose is still a rose, even if it's called something else and so is celebrating Halloween, even if it's called something else!
There are years when I've shrugged and decided it was harmless! It is all in how you look at it, approach it, and what you do with it. You can choose to use this celebration for good or for evil.
Still, other years, I've looked at it and all I could see was the danger. The dark evil that stood to wait for the door to open was clear and the warning signs evident. Each year finds me with a new perspective or thought about this particular holiday. But then, ALL holidays bring forth contradictory thoughts and wondering. I am glad to see I am not the only one who feels like we should at the very least, give this some serious thought and reflection.
I like your matte of fact, direct tone, and how you say it. It is clear and concise without beating around the bush, yet is also done in a non-judgemental or condemning way. It encourages the reader to look into themselves and think for themselves. Very well done.
I look forward to reading more of your writings. Again, Happy WDC anniversary!
Tina
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Happy WDC Anniversary! In honor of your special day, I chose Entry of a Pocketwatch to read and review.
A somewhat bittersweet story of a watch handed down through several generations within a family. I liked how you took an item that was initially purchased with an intent to signify status and importance and turned it into a plaything that was used to amuse the youngest of the family. It's value changed, but I would think, also increased as time and sentiment were added to it. Very well written. I hope to read more of your stories very soon.
Again, Happy WDC Anniversary!
Tina
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Happy WDC Anniversary! In honor of your WDC birthday, I have given you a review. I love reading inspirational, faith-filled works and I was excited to find your short snippets.
I read this and your short story Cowboy. They are both inspiring and both bring to light very good proverb type messages for the reader. Both inspiring and motivating both of these short pieces are very well written. Your characters are very lifelike, and you expressed their emotions very well.
May the Lord continue to bless you and your writing talents,
Sincerely,
Tina
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This was a fun, feel-good type story that had me laughing and smiling. You are very talented with short stories! I am way too wordy to tell the kind of stories you do, with so few words. You, however, make it seem so easy! Your characters are always so lifelike and well rounded. They pop off the page and I find myself wanting to read MORE about them. I have truly enjoyed exploring your portfolio and reviewing your short stores.
This captivated my attention from the first sentence. Richard, you really are a talented writer! I've always hated snow since I lived in Wisconsin and got my first taste of REAL snow. It is beautiful to look at from behind a window or on tv. But, not pretty at ALL if your knee-deep in the stuff trying to unbury your car!
You really did an awesome job grabbing the reader's emotions, giving just enough hope to hook them, then, at the very end, lowered the boom. You ignited my anger at the lazy Ranger who couldn't be bothered to go take a look. Help was so close, yet not close enough. I liked how you personified Snow and brought it to life. Giving it a will of its own. Very creative. Very emotional and powerful! I can see why it has such a pretty ribbon gracing it's cover!
Not such a far fetched story as some might think! I loved your detective character, who for some reason made me think of Colombo...? I'm not sure why. You described everything so well, it was easy to visualize the story taking place. The ending is a bit of a cliffhanger, leaving me wanting to know what really was going on and how the "voices" would have answered his questions. Makes me hope there might be a part two at some point.
First I'd like to congratulate you on your WDC anniversary! This review is in honor of your special day.
You did a really good job of drawing me into the emotional rollercoaster of a teenage girl. The emotions expressed were so easy to understand and share with you (the character). Then, you showed vividly the mood change as she went from lonely and determined to beyond pissed, hurt, and wanting to lash out. Afterward, the uncertainty, the self-doubt, the lingering shadows of love, it is all expressed eloquently and openly for the reader. It is easy to see you paid attention to detail and put 100% of yourself into what you wrote. At the end, it just made me, the reader want to hug you, the character and tell you everything would be OK.
Write on, and again, Happy Anniversary!
Tina
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I read and enjoyed your poem about the heart and the Spirit's call. I enjoyed your use of sharp imagery and descriptions. Will be looking forward to reading more of your work soon.
Just to let you know, the Newsfeed is a great place to get to know others, find out about current events like contests, challenges, and other activities or to find something interesting to read or write about.
I hope to see you around the community.
Sincerely,
Tina
What a lovely, inspirational essay on Hope. It is beautifully written and you not only describe hope perfectly, you inspire motivation and drive in the reader as well. I am sure anyone reading this will feel uplifted and ready to give life a second chance. Very well done!
I could not agree with you more! Shopping can also become addictive and out of control easily, which would also lead to an unhealthy lifestyle. You make some really good points here in this essay. I would love to see you write more on this subject. Welcome to WDC by the way!
This essay makes very good points and you use very good persuasive information. You are right in all these aspects you point out. I would encourage you to edit a little more, and maybe consider adding a source or two to back up those wonderful points you make. I enjoyed reading this very much.
What a wonderful story! I loved your vivid details and you captured the precociousness of the girls perfectly. It was so easy to see the story play out in my mind. I could practically hear the waves of the water. This would be perfect to read to a child who gets lonely or one who has an imaginary friend and gets teased. I enjoyed reading this very much.
This has a very sad, empty feel to it. While on the surface, one might think wow, the trampoline is well-liked, what kid doesn't like jumping on one? But, if you look closer, you see it is only being used as a toy, not a companion or friend. Interesting comparison.
Isn't it amazing how the seemingly simple things are what sticks with us as we get older and start that tendency to meander down memory lane? Our Thanksgivings meant people were always going to be showing up at our place, Mom refused to travel during holidays. There was the time when all us kids were nine and under..it was raining and we were in south texas...so that particular Thanksgiving it was HOT outside and even hotter inside with all the cooking going on. We wanted to play outside and Mom said NO, don't get your clothes all dirty. Well, next thing ya know, Mom hears her house guest laughing like crazy. She walks in to see her children and the other children butt naked playing out in the rain! Splashing in the mud puddles! Our excuse? Mom, you didn't say we couldn't go out and play, you said, don't get your clothes dirty! There was the time, my mom had the kitchen window wide open to let the heat out of the kitchen. The window was right above the sink. She walks in and screams...there with his head stuck as far in as possible was my sister's horse, helping himself to the salads and pies Mom had left on the counter!
Yep, you sure can't beat those memories with family and holidays lol
This gave me goosebumps reading it. You hooked me quickly and kept me nibbling at the bait til the very end. It was dramatic and fast-paced with plenty of good descriptions. At some point, I believe we all get that moment when we have to choose if we take that offered second chance or not. Where we have to choose to either stand up and confront a fear or let it control us.
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Beautiful! I am so glad I saw this! You use such wonderful and vivid imagery, it's like everything pops to life and I can see everything as it happens. It stirs the reader's emotions. I hope you write many more poems and stories! Happy Armed FOrces Day 2020!
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