I must agree, I love plants and flowers of all shapes, sizes and colors! IF someone asks me my favorite flower, I insist ALL of them, cos I can't pick just one. I enjoyed your word search puzzle and found the smaller four-letter words to be the hardest ones to find. Ivy, pots, mums were the last ones to be found.
This was a lovely tribute to Breast Cancer awareness. It was fund and actually challenging. Pink and Strength were the words that took me the longest to find. I thought it amusing that nearly ALL the letters were highlighted by the end of the challenge!
This made me laugh! For such a short story, it grabs the reader almost instantly and builds up a rather dramatic sense of anticipation. Then, you have the reader on the edge of their seat as they anticipate what is going to happen to the General. Then you brilliantly spring the truth upon the reader. This is not, as first guess a war story...but a story about a boy and his toy soldiers! I loved this. You used vivid imagery.
This is a very remarkable and well-presented essay. I really like how it is laid out in an easy to read format and large chunks of text is broken up into smaller chunks by using not one, but several methods. I am also delightfully pleased that you actually site several different references, and provide them to the reader for further exploration, should the reader feel the desire to do so. I think it lends a great deal of professionalism and polish to your essay. You not only provide facts, but you back them up. This is a great essay for anyone interested in learning more about Hinduism and the many aspects that make it what it is. Excellent job!
This is a very emotionally driven poem. You evoke very strong emotions without saying what they are outright. It also feels very bittersweet and hopefully, gets your readers to stop and reflect a bit before going on. Very well written.
Wow! This is a very deeply emotional story that captures the character's feelings graphicly well. From the onset, we sense the character's anxiety and as we realize the character's intent to deceive the interviewers, the tension builds. Fantastic job hooking the reader! I love how as the story unfolds, you add layer upon layer to the anxiety and by the time we get near the climax, we are gripping the edge of our seats. The ending is profound and even as the reader feels the depressing let down of the character, it resonates with our HUMAN nature when despite it all, the seed of rebellious tenaciousness rears up and we know the character has had a majorly crushing set back, they are not beaten by any means and they will not give up. Awesome work!
This poem very well conveys strong emotions by both parties. The imagery is vivid and while the pace is fast, it is still full of details. While the poem stirs strong empathy towards Miss Henrietta, as so many I am sure can relate to her, you do a great job of making the reader dread what is going to happen. You almost want to reach out and stop her from such a foolish act...but are helpless to stop it. That keeps the reader on the edge of their seat. In the end, it conveys several important lessons every reader should take heed to. Very well done!
This is a fun and unique story! I've honestly never read anything like it. It is vibrant with imagery that pops off the page and I love how fast-paced it is. The characters are so well developed, you get to know them very well. The story hooked me right away, you don't have to be a gamer to get hooked and enjoy it. Excellent job and thank you for the cute trinket.
First off, I must say how talented and skilled you are at writing dialog. I am simply amazed; it's so natural and relaxed. It's not just chatter either, your dialog actually helps move the story along. I need to learn this!
Your story grabs me right from the first few paragraphs. I like how you paced the story. It was fast-paced, but still had vivid imagery and lots of details.
The characters are amazing. So well rounded and lifelike...they just seem to jump off the page. I think my favorite descriptive was when the waitress didn't just motion to the back where the door was, but she pointed a plastic fingernail...that was great!
I really enjoyed this story and hope to read some more of your writings very soon.
That was an exhilarating peep into the mind of a young child and how they sometimes view the grownup world. Have to admit, those auto flushing toilets CAN seem a might loud and scary. I liked your use of vivid descriptive words and that the pace of the story was as fast-paced as his urgent little need to relieve himself. I enjoyed reading this!
The story hooked me and reeled me in right away. At first, I thought it was an ER waiting room, then perhaps for a job. Nice twist at the end. You did a great job expressing the man's anxiety and forced patience but injected just the right amount of humor. I think the majority of readers could identify with how the man was feeling.
Just one itsy bitsy minor thing I want to point out. The third sentence from the last, it says, You're anxious to please, yet anxious [ot] be your own man.
I just think its a wee tiny typo and you meant "to". That is the only thing I'd point out. Delightful story!
I was very impressed with this story. You captured the little girl so completely and the characters were very lifelike and well rounded. I especially liked your vivid imagery and that the story, while very detailed and colorful was fast-paced and flowed smoothly. The very end, I must admit confuses me and I don't really understand how it ties in with the first part of the story. Just a suggestion, but maybe you could consider some sort of transition to prepare the reader? I have no idea who Hector or Madelyn is. They just kind of appear out of nowhere. That is my only suggestion. Otherwise, it is a very delightful story!
Hello, I found this subject of great interest, as I have worked in customer service for many years both for other companies and for my own business ventures as well. This article is very well written and gives very well thought out points and backs them up.
When first looking at the article, it is slightly overwhelming to see such a massive block of text and some readers might be intimidated and it might cause some to only skim or skip reading it. A suggestion would be to double space your paragraphs. Adding sub-headlines and bulleting a few of your points to draw closer attention to them. This would help break up the one very large block of text and make it visually more appealing and would not change any of the information presented.
Another suggestion would be changing the size of the font for your sub-titles, using a bold or italic script when you want to emphasize something. Don't overdo it, but strategically place these suggestions.
Customer service is one of those areas where every company, large or small can always seek to improve and articles like yours are much needed and in demand.
Insightful into the mind of males. Women should read this lol. Great use of vivid imagery, it's easy to imagine the grins and facial expressions of the men as they go about on such wild adventures. I think, perhaps, you really ARE a poet.
I love that! My cell phone has been activated for many years now, but for a long time I had it on mute I think. I've found God loves it when his children ask questions and he is always happy to answer.
A real tooth clencher, you had me hanging on the edge of my seat. I loved the tone and writing style. You kept the pace fast and moving right along with flawless transitions. I could visualize this being aired on a famous International News Broadcast. In the end, it leaves me wanting more and I'm betting spurs many readers to google drop bears!
You picked a really good topic, one that is near and dear to my heart. In your article, you make some very good points. But, that is one very long, intimidating block of writing. Some of your points get lost and it can discourage readers from reading through the whole thing. There is a "tool" box at the top that allows you to change text size, colors, fonts, etc...Breaking this huge box of text into maybe a few subtitles would help break it up. You can also add bullets to help add interest. By breaking it up, it will help you highlight your points, add interest and make it easier to read. When I use Bible verses in stuff I write, I like to use a colored font and put it in italics or bold to emphasize that it is important. These are just my suggestions and opinion. Great information and view point tho.
This was definitely unique! I'm an 80's child and love video games, so reading this was a no brainer. Great hook and drawing me, the reader into the story. I liked the fast pace and tight wording. I'm wondering though, what would happen should the player NOT adhere to the prompts. Say, for instance, in your last example of the homes. What if a player did NOT maintain their home, dailies or fitness? What if the player falls short of their quest?
You end nicely, and the reader is left with a mild cliffhanger. Does he accept the quest or not?
That was a very appropriate read on this special day. It is very clear you have mastered the fine art of imagery. The reader doesn't even know they are being hooked until too late. By the time they realize they are hooked they have already been teleported into the flood of sensations you evoke by your carefully chosen words. By the end of the piece, not only have you dazzled the reader with vibrant imagery, you've awoken their sense of smell, taste, and I bet conjured up memories of their own when "tasting" the flavors so well described. Sigh...now, I have an overwhelming craving for a box of chocolates.
That is a very unique story. Great hook, it drew me right into the action. The pace was fast but did not feel rushed. Great job with the vivid imagery and the surprise twist and unexpected injection of humor at the end. I really enjoyed reading this.
Oh my gosh, you left me hanging! I really wanna know what happens next! You easily hooked me and your characters pop and come to life. I laughed several times. Please be sure to let me know when this is updated, I don't want to miss a thing.
I think that is a wonderful memory to carry with you into eternity. It is remarkable how your Grandfather was given the "idea" to search for you in the fridge. It also impresses on me the miracle of how God shielded you from what could have been a terrifying experience.
You could have become very afraid if you had discovered you could not open the door. By simply allowing you to sleep...the trusting sleep that only a child can have...you never really understood the mortal danger you were in. Not until, perhaps after you were rescued. How amazing is our God?!
You really made that whole scene pop and come alive! I loved your imagery and the pace of the story. It was chilling, and hooked me right away. The twist of humor at the end was great!
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