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Your story starts off as a journal and then goes into a story. The story keeps jumping back and forth. Really good ideas, explanations of thoughts, as well as concepts. If you could gather like thoughts/explanations/ideas/concepts within itself, then blend them, it would read much easier.
Chapter 5 - Technology upticks and my role clarifies
So much has occurred as the human diaspora journeys to our new homes on immense arkships. It took over a decade, and the assistance of other intelligent life, to execute this plan. This is my journal documenting the momentous undertaking to save humanity and evacuate the planet. As I look back upon our species grand adventure, I find it easier to encapsulate our story as a summary of each year that the planet’s evacuation unfolded. Our story advances a year in this chapter, to 2013.
(I would mark each section, as you stated, as a journal entry, ie “2013, Day One, or Week One or Month One, The beginning, I was selected”, next entry “Day Two, Week Two, or month two......”)
I was selected. I was one of many (maybe: students in Gaia and not “on”, since it's a place not a planet?) on Gaia, our earth school, (a place) whose genetics allowed consciousness to expand. (the first part of the next sentence is an interesting concept but there's no connection between this sentence and the previous or following sentences. What wording might be added to connect it?) Transcending limited religious dogmas that stunt morality, another form of mental addiction developing souls used as a crutch in their growth, (maybe move that statement somewhere else and continue with the rest?) I was one who found a path through many lifetimes to learn how to open awareness beyond the five senses, to be open to higher vibrations of consciousness. That was enough to be selected to help our species survive. Among many humans who were to serve in an ambassadorial role, I was to assist in the coordination which would occur for our region.
(Journal entry Day ?, Week ?, or Month ?)
The earth school is a powerful teacher. Little did I know that the struggles in the various chapters of my life would serve to grow my consciousness. Some of those struggles (maybe were instead of meant?) meant physically moving to new locations. A chapter of living in Southern California came to a close, which allowed me to move to Seattle. (why did closing the Southern California chapter allow you to move to Seattle? And why was it considered a struggle?) The chapter of life in that big city ended to allow me the opportunity to move to the mountains outside of urbanity. (Again, why and how did the ending of those chapters allow you the move? Or are you still talking about Southern California?)
(maybe: Once in the mountains of Seattle, we built a guest ranch, open to the public and it began gaining lots of notice.) It was here that a Melchizedek took notice and tuned into my intuition and intention. They were looking for such humans as myself. Always, The Melchizedek assisted from the side, helping build my skills and fortifying our mountain ranch.
(maybe consider entering a paragraph describing what a Melchizedek is/was?) (Also, who is the “we”, “our”, since the narrator has only said “I” so far. If the “our” is the “I” and the Melchizedek, then maybe adding a sentences describing the unification?)
It was going to be the spot which humanity would funnel, in order to disembark this planet. (Next sentence, a thought, a goal or the current reality? Because of the Melchizedek or the school or on your own?) I was preparing for a (or the) mountain ranch to become a space port. (The following, how was it all revealed to you?) The anomalies around the sun were revealed to me as humanity’s interim home. Vast ark ships, some as large as a moon, contained entire ecologies which would house the various groups of humanity. An exodus from this planet was coming, and we would need to get as many of us humans, along with a sampling of land masses, up to those ships. Our timeline to do so had been expedited. To make this evacuation happen, much needed to change on Earth, and it needed a catalyst to accelerate that change; to quicken the breaking of power structures that would only limit humanity’s progress.
(Journal entry Day ?, Week ?, or Month ?)
The dismantling of elite power continued in 2013, when the United Nations declared this the year of the ‘selfie’. It was an amazing nod to how quickly new technologies were being adopted by the global population. The Melchizedeks, beings of pure consciousness, with no need for a biological vessel to contain their energies, were actively engaged in bringing humanity a technological quickening that would be of great aid in the coming exodus. (Not sure how a declaration of the year of the 'selfie', the dismantling and the Melchizedeks being of pure consciousness connect here. They all seem like different ideas that are not connected)
(In reading the rest of the story, I no longer have a feel as though it were something written in a journal. Writing is good, story line is good, concept is good. Again, it's more of a story than a journal.)
These beings, appearing as a ball of light, have a decade to prepare us biologically based humans for an evacuation from this planet. Such is a necessity if humans, a very unique expression of consciousness, are to survive as a species.
Normally, a natural evolutionary path for humans to advance our consciousness growth, and become very similar to Melchizedeks, would take many centuries. However, our solar system got its timetable altered significantly, interrupting this often repeated pattern. The earth was currently experiencing the end of a 26,000 year cycle that sees our planet wobble on its axis, with poles reversing, an increase of teutonic activity, and major climate shifts. Our planet should have seen these events calming down. They weren’t.
Instead, the pace seemed to be increasing. Storms were intensifying, new volcanoes were surfacing, earthquakes swarming (swarming? unimaginable seismic disturbance maybe?). A celestial event that was to happen at the end of the next earth cycle, another 26,000 years in the future, had begun to unfold in our present time. Our time on this planet was suddenly limited.
Humanity as a species would be doomed if we stayed here. The Melchizedeks were concerned. The growth and expansion of consciousness was an important component to the very fabric of the universe. To lose humans, and our inherent uniqueness in growing consciousness, would be a great setback. Humans needed to be taught just how precious a species we are to the cosmos.
To teach us, the Melchizedeks influenced not only technological breakthroughs, but also leaps forward in science and physics. (to help us comprehend that) The age of understanding the quantum realm was upon us. We would quickly learn that Reality is a product of Consciousness. Meaning, or Information, could only exist when it was perceived.
This explosion in understanding would be unveiled through the study of entangled particles. We would learn that their properties were only known, once we measured them. As above, so below. The insights we would gain by studying the smallest of quanta, would directly apply to how we could, not only perceive our reality, but begin to shape it as well.
With the explosion of population growth in humanity across the globe, our influence upon this reality was undeniable. Our growth and achievements were expanding at an exponential rate, but our awareness and connection to consciousness was not keeping pace. This imbalance contributed to what can only be described as a cosmic hiccup. Humanity, unbeknownst to itself, made the cosmic record skip ahead. What was to occur at the end of the next wobble, 26,000 years in the future, was happening much sooner than projected.
As above, so below. (I see you really like that statement) Our collective consciousness was growing with the increase in our population. Without intentional intervention, the loss would be too great. Humanity would need to move and spread out. Humanity would need to seed the cosmos like dandelion seeds spread in the wind.
The pace of science and technology increased. So did the pace of telepathic communication with those humans who were ready to receive. It takes a coordinated effort to move a species and resettle them in new environments. It is even more challenging when such a move needs to be ushered in quicker than allowing a species to evolve to it at their own pace.
To get us to the ecological ark ships required huge transports that could literally lift mountains. Not only would humanity be on the move, so too would vast tracts of land along with the myriad forms of life from microbes to whales.
The valley (in which) I now lived would be cut out and lifted too! It also presented a perfect parking spot for humanity’s transport. Planning was already in the works for a unique craft that would settle upon the long mountain ridge lines to the north and south of the valley. A craft the width of the valley with a length over 50 miles would fill the sky soon for humans to board. There would be many such crafts across North America and all the other continents.
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