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I'll give a quick summary of your item. Afterwards, I'll talk about your characters, any Spelling or Grammar issues, and perhaps suggest some things, like adding the item to a Genre that it would fit into.
I'm good at...
Speed Reading/reviewing- 1000 word story won't even take me five minutes to read, and you'll get a review within 10 minutes of me reading it. As it is, my reviews are usually around 300 Characters- minus my Review Sig. However, sometimes they'll reach the 1,000 Character mark. Depends on the Story/item. *Bigsmile*
Favorite Genres
Fantasy, Sci-Fi, Animal
Least Favorite Genres
Can't think of any I don't like.
Favorite Item Types
I like them all.
Least Favorite Item Types
I've yet to not like any item types. Of course, images can be tricky- hard to correct Spelling and Grammar on those. *Bigsmile*
I will not review...
Interactives that don't have an actual story started - Give me some meat to eat there before you ask me to look at it, with at least one thread being at least 10 chapters long, and not just choices that aren't even developed, preferably written by your own hand. Books - well, not through a Review Request page anyways, as I'd would have to review the book itself and not the Chapter, in order to get paid, but I will review them if you ask me in an email. Anything that doesn't allow reviews. *Bigsmile*
Public Reviews
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is a Review you Requested. Enjoy.

Well, this is an interesting beginning to what seems to be a good story. You have a teacher of magic arriving at the school, as a new branch was created for him. However, he gets a letter, that is very strange, and his fellow teachers are strange indeed. I hope to read more.

Characters
Some description would be useful.

Spelling and Grammar
I don't see any problems with spelling or grammar.

Suggestions
You might want to add this to the Genres Action/Adventure and perhaps Sci-Fi or Mythology.

Well, this is the BIG BAD WOLF, and I howl at the moon every night.
HOWLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Review of Soul Broker  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Well, this is an interesting story. You've got a young man who has made a lot of money, but it seems to do so, he made a deal with the Devil, and sold his soul to them. The young man tries to get it back, and thinks he has found a way. Very interesting.

Characters
A little bit of description would help - I mean, what do they look like?

Spelling and Grammar
I don't see any problems with spelling or grammar, but you might want to work on spacing for paragraphs.

Well, this is the BIG BAD WOLF, and I howl at the moon every night.
HOWLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is your Review for your participation in "Save My Membership Auction - Closed" . Enjoy.

Well, this is very nice to know - a link to the NaNoWriMo website, which a good number of people disappear to during the month of November, when they are challenged to write a Novel containing fifty - thousand words or more. I thought about doing it once, but I've long lost that fire, and I deal with shorter things these days, mostly. That being said, it's nice to find a link to the site.

Spelling and Grammar
No problems with spelling or grammar.

Suggestions
You might want to put this under Computers, Community, and How-to/Advice in terms of Genres. Also, given that this is basically just a link to a site, you might want to make this under Review Only or Item Doesn't Accept Reviews. Just my opinion of course.

Well, this is the BIG BAD WOLF, and I howl at the moon every night.
HOWLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Well, this is a nice item to read. it seems to be a brief intro to the site, perhaps even a bit of an advertisement. Basically, you seem to be trying to attract people to the site, and perhaps join.

Spelling and Grammar
I don't see any problems with spelling and grammar.

Suggestions
You might want to discuss the features of the site - you mentioned writing and reviewing, but you don't talk about it. You might want to give out more of a description, like saying that one can write about anything, from silly little kid things, all the way up to hard-core adult things. Just an idea.

Well, this is the BIG BAD WOLF, and I howl at the moon every night.
HOWLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is your review for your participation in "Save My Membership Auction - Closed" . I hope that you enjoy it.

Well, this is an interesting poem. It seems to be from the point of view of a female werewolf, who seems to enjoy being in her wolf form, as it frees here from the various constraints imposed upon her when she is in her human form. Very interesting.

Opinion
Very interesting - I haven't seen many poems from a werewolf's point of view.

Spelling and Grammar
I don't see any problems with spelling or grammar.

Well, this is the BIG BAD WOLF, and I howl at the moon every night.
HOWLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Review of Writing.Com 101  
for entry "Item Statistics" 
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a nice page in Writing 101 to look at. It explains how to read the Statistics on a person's Items. By looking at this, people can understand what groups of people are reading their items, Male or Female, along with other classifications, so that they can tweak the item to get the desired audience.

Thoughts
Very useful. Written clearly. Understandable.

Spelling and Grammar
I don't see any problems with spelling or grammar.

Well, this is the BIG BAD WOLF, and I howl at the moon every night.
HOWLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is your Fifth and Final review won from "Invalid Item" . Enjoy.

Well, this is an interesting story. A young woman, who is contemplating committing suicide, walks in on an armed robbery, and for the first time in her life, ends up being very important.

Characters
You could describe the characters better - I mean, do the bank robbers have tattoos or some such thing?

Spelling and Grammar
I don't see any problems with spelling or grammar.

Well, this is the BIG BAD WOLF, and I howl at the moon every night.
HOWLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is your Fourth of Five reviews won from "Invalid Item" . Enjoy.

Well, this is a curious way to wake up. A woman, with mysterious scars, wakes up to find some very strange things in her home, and apparently, a message from herself. Makes you wonder what's going on.

Characters
I wonder what's going on here.

Spelling and Grammar
I don't see any problems with spelling or grammar.

Well, this is the BIG BAD WOLF, and I howl at the moon every night.
HOWLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is your Third of Five reviews won from "Invalid Item" . Enjoy.

This looks like the start of an interesting story. Shortly after a party with friends, a woman heads for home. However, it seems that someone didn't want her to make it home. I wonder why.

Characters
Not much is known about the woman. However, that's to be expected at the beginning of a story.

Spelling and Grammar
I don't see any problems with spelling or grammar.

Well, this is the BIG BAD WOLF, and I howl at the moon every night.
HOWLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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In affiliation with Sisco's Good Deed Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is the Second of Five reviews won from "Invalid Item" . Enjoy.

Our one Princess is off questing to find her missing Twin, with the help of the Castle Mage's assistant, who seems to have the ability to survive in the Light and Dark, just like the Princesses. But fist things first, they've got to get out of a force field that surrounds them.

Characters
It's good to know that the Assistant has the ability to survive in the Light and Dark, as that will prove very useful.

Spelling and Grammar
I don't see any problems with spelling or grammar.

Well, this is the BIG BAD WOLF, and I howl at the moon every night.
HOWLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Review of Ebony and Ivory  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is your first of five reviews won from "Invalid Item" . Enjoy.

You have created what looks to be the start of an interesting Fantasy/Sci-Fi story. You have created a world that is half covered in Light, and half covered in Dark, and those who are from one side can't live on the other, except for the boundary between the sides, known as the Gray. This is where the Royal family lives, as the King is from the Dark side, and the Queen is from the Light. One day, one of their children goes missing, and they must find them. Looks good so far.

Characters
So far, your characters look interesting. Of course, I wouldn't mind knowing a little bit about the armors the soldiers wear - do those from the Dark wear Black, with those from the Light wearing White, or some such thing? *Bigsmile*

Spelling and Grammar
In the ninth paragraph from the bottom, you have part of the sentence connected to the next one. A space there might help. *Bigsmile*

Well, this is the BIG BAD WOLF, and I howl at the moon every night.
HOWLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Review of The Woods  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Well, this is an interesting story. You have three young people out hiking in the woods, in honor of a late friend, when strange things begin to happen, like with the three of them getting lost, and then seeing things. Very scary.

Characters
The characters are very interesting, though a little bit of description would be useful.

Spelling and Grammar
You might want to have space between the paragraphs, as this would make things easier for readers, as well as to point out possible errors- there's one in here but I can't locate it.

Well, this is the BIG BAD WOLF, and I howl at the moon every night.
HOWLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
This is a Review Request.

Well, this looks like the start of a very interesting story. You have an Inspired-Writer-To-Be trying to research material for a book, specifically the part of a chef, but it seems that most of the locals don't want to hire out their chefs for research. However, fate has a funny sense of humor when he gets a job at a restaurant, only to find an alien from outer space at the place.

Characters
The three characters are interesting, but they could use some description- like hair color and such.

Spelling and Grammar
I don't see any problems with spelling or grammar.

Well, this is the BIG BAD WOLF, and I howl at the moon every night.
HOWLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Review of NIRIAN  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is a Review Request that you asked me to do. Enjoy{/i}

Well, this is an interesting story. You have a young woman, who seems to have the unique ability to teleport herself to another location. However, it seems that this ability comes with a price, as the local police/military forces are hunting for her, because of her ability.

Characters
So far, your characters are very interesting. I wonder what developments will occure to them.

Spelling and Grammar
I don't see any problems with spelling or grammar.

Suggestions
I think that you might want to remove the big question marks, as they serve to dstract, instead of showing that time has passed.

Well, this is the BIG BAD WOLF, and I howl at the moon every night.
HOWLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Well, this is a nice little item to find. It tells what the site's doing for its birthday, and who all's celebrating. It's always good to get into the spirit of things, because it's at this time of year that practically everyone, who can, is hosting contests, auctions, raffles, and just plainly giving out Gifts of Gift Points, Awardicons, Merit Badges, perhaps some Memberships, and a whole host of other things. One has to love this time of year, especially on this site.

Originality
I doubt I'll see many items like this, especially for the whole site.

Spelling and Grammar
I don't see any problems with spelling or grammar.

Happy (Number of Years) Birthday!

Well, this is the BIG BAD WOLF, and I howl at the moon every night.
HOWLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Review of Weekly Goals  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Now this is a fun little place. This Forum is set up for people to write their goals in, be it to write so many reviews, make so many additions to a book, or interactive, or even more personal goals, like buying a diamond ring for a certain girl, or filling in the thousand and one potholes in the driveway. In any case, be nice and descriptive about your goals, and you're practically guarantied a prize of 1000GPs on Monday when you tell your goal, and another 1KGPs when you come back on Friday to say how well you did.

Originality
I've never seen another forum quite like this.

Spelling and Grammar
I don't see any problems with spelling or grammar.

Best of luck with this Forum. May many people tell you their goals, and may many be successful at them.

Well, this is the BIG BAD WOLF, and I howl at the moon every night.
HOWLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Review of Deserted island  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
This is your Fifth and Final Review from "Invalid Item" . Enjoy.

A mall group of friends decide to vacation on a remote and deserted island. They spend their time fishing and enjoying the campfire. Then they turn on one of their radios, and the news isn't good.

Characters
Interesting.

Spelling and Grammar
I don't see any problems with spelling or grammar.

Well, this is the BIG BAD WOLF, and I howl at the moon every night.
HOWLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
This is your Forth of Five reviews from "Invalid Item" . Enjoy.

Well, this is a cute little item. Admittedly, it's a little outdated, but I have to admire how you'd handle things; Hawaiian shirts, Bar-BQs and Macarena dances. *Laugh* *Bigsmile* A real hoot.

Spelling and Grammar
I don't see any problems with spelling or grammar.

Well, this is the BIG BAD WOLF, and I howl at the moon every night.
HOWLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
This is your Third of Five reviews from "Invalid Item" . Enjoy.

A group of girls set up a detective agency in the form of a lemonade stand. Their job; find a missing stuffed teddy bear. They question all who come by, and something is discovered along the way.

Characters
Interesting.

Spelling and Grammar
I don't see any problems with spelling or grammar.

Well, this is the BIG BAD WOLF, and I howl at the moon every night.
HOWLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
This is your Second of Five reviews from "Invalid Item" . Enjoy.

This is about a woman from an island in the Pacific. In order to marry the man she loves, she goes to the New World (California) to buy some medicinal items. While there, she sees many strange and wonderful things.

Characters
Interesting.

Spelling and Grammar
I don't see any problems with spelling or grammar.

Well, this is the BIG BAD WOLF, and I howl at the moon every night.
HOWLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
This is your First of Five reviews ordered by a friend from "Invalid Item" . Enjoy.

Well, this is an interesting remake of Hansel and Gretel. A boy and his sister go into the woods and end up encountering an alien that wants their life force. Thank goodness for sunflower seeds. *Laugh* *Bigsmile*

Characters
Kids will be kids.

Spelling and Grammar
I don't see any problems with spelling and grammar.

Well, this is the BIG BAD WOLF, and I howl at the moon every night.
HOWLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Review of new life  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is your Fifth and Final review from "Invalid Item" . Enjoy.

Sometimes we have to sit down, and enjoy life. One must take the time, and perhaps watch a cicada emerge from hiding. Nothing quite like it.

Spelling and Grammar
I don't see any problems with spelling and grammar.

Well, this is the BIG BAD WOLF, and I howl at the moon every night.
HOWLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Interesting little story. A young catgirl and her friends go to a dance, where they find the girl's elderly grandfather. The elder encourages her to go and have fun, that there'd be time to talk later. However, time seems to have ended for the grandfather, as tragedy occurs.

Characters
You could describe them better, for those who don't follow your stories.

Spelling and Grammar
Some commas could be used when describing the girl's friends.

Well, this is the BIG BAD WOLF, and I howl at the moon every night.
HOWLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Review of Draco's story  
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Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
This is a Review you Requested from me.

You have what looks to be the start of an interesting interactive. You have a young man, who has these great powers, being placed into one battle after another. He seems to have some friends/allies who help out during this quest. I hope to see more people add to it.

Characters
Sometimes less is more. More often than not, a brief description of a person can go a long way- For instance, if you have a wolf character, you can mention the color of their fur, and if they have a scar over their eye, but don't say who put the scar there until an appropriate point in the story.

Spelling and Grammar
There are areas that could use improvement. Having spaces for paragraphs can help, and break up big blocks of text.

Other Suggestions
I'd add this to the Genres Fantasy and Fanfiction, if this is based off of a game/TV series.

Work on these areas, and perhaps I'll give this item a re-review.

Well, this is the BIG BAD WOLF, and I howl at the moon every night.
HOWLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Review of The Nightmare  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is your February entry to my contest, "Invalid Item" . However, since this is a poem, and not a short story, it has been disqualified, but you still get a review.

This an interesting little poem. A man dreams that he's married to a woman, but a monster tries to keep them apart at night.

Characters
Interesting.

Spelling and Grammar
I don't see any problems with spelling or grammar.

Suggestions
Next time you enter this contest, enter a story instead of a poem.

Well, this is the BIG BAD WOLF, and I howl at the moon every night.
HOWLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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