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I look for a good hook at the beginning and like stories that "hit the ground running". Good plots with a theme, strong characters with an emotional impact, moving dialogue, sensory descriptions, clear communication and words with a purpose are strong points of a good story.
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knowing a good story when I read one. I like to read as much as I like to write, maybe more. I will let you know when a sentence just does not make sense to me, and I will try to give you my opinion on how to make it better.
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biographical, family, drama, mystery, comedy, nature, young adult
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sci-fi, erotica, fantasy, mythology
Favorite Item Types
short stories, essays, fiction & non-fiction
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novels...sorry, no time
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Review of Annie of the Sea  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi Luna,

Welcome to WDC. I found your story interesting. It held my attention until almost the last paragraph, specifically, when Annie slapped Beau. My mind started wandering here because it wasn't clear why she did this. Was she thinking he was going to kidnap her into time travel. This was all I could come up with but it was too fast, jolting to me.

Other than that, I loved the plot line and began to root for Annie to succeed.

Thanks for sharing and keep writing.

Connie
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Gency,

Congrats on your Cramp win! I think you've not only written a good story but you have a good idea too. Folks are too interested in griping to find alternatives when they are faced with doing without something they think they must have.

Thanks for sharing your thoughts and solutions and please keep on writing. One suggestion from an oldster...leave at least one blank line between your paragraphs. The white space makes for easier reading. *Smile*

Connie
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello,

I'm glad you had some happy things on your birthday. I think that was a nice surprise party.

A Halloween birthday must be something like a Christmas birthday, the birthday never quite gets to center stage because the day is associated with something else. The spiders would have freaked me out too. But, wow, that was a lot of sweaters.

Thanks for sharing the events of one of the most special days in your life...and keep writing.

Connie
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Review of Passing the Test  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Jacky,

I see this is for a contest...hope you won.

Your story just goes to show that when you have enough incentive, you can do anything. And so much better if you do it honestly. There is no feeling like that of accomplishment and, of course, being able to shop for the car helped a lot too. I think all of us have something in our memories to which we can relate.

It was a pleasure to read your well-written, thoroughly believable tale, and do keep writing.

Connie
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Good Morning,

Your poem came up on the read and review page, and I love it. I can see country neighbors visiting, carrying gifts, eager to arrive yet enjoying the moment of starlight and dusty roads. It is so straight-forward but says so much about interaction of friends and how things should be. It made me want to be there.

Thanks for sharing it and please keep writing.

Connie
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Review of Stranded  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Chris,

Cute story and a good fit for the Cramp prompt. Poor John. He can't do anything without getting caught. But then, he shouldn't have bragged so much and maybe his friends would have been easier on him. Don't brag. That's a lesson he can learn from his unresolute resolution.

Thanks for sharing your writing and good luck with the Cramp.

Connie
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello,

I share your opinion of A Street Cat Named Bob. I have a cat, Mopsy, who is almost 16, and she is as much a part of my family as any family member.

Bob and James have some real adventures and always leave me feeling good. And my daughter has a ginger who is almost 18. His name is Oliver, but all his friends call him Ollie.

Thanks for sharing.

Connie
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Review of The scarf  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello,

Firs, let me congratulate you on your Cramp win. This is a lovely children's story (grownups may benefit by readying it, too).

I'm confidant that Sara grew up to be the best person ever and what a role model she could be for children everywhere.

Thanks for sharing this and I hope it turns into more than a Cramp win.

Connie
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Review of An Autumn Walk  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Elle,

I love this story and wouldn't change a thing. Your descriptions are like a painting and put me into the midst of the action. They are non-intrusive and seem to be a natural part of the story.

Good luck with the contest and thanks for sharing.

Connie
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Review of The Fairy Woods  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello,

I found your short story on the read and review page. It's a wonderful thing to have animals for friends, and your story reinforces that message. We only have to stop and listen.

I like the way your character does not question but follows advice blindly. Sometimes faith is what it takes to know the right path.

Thanks for sharing.

Connie
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello,

I found your short story on the read and review page. I don't know if this story is based on someone's actual life, but if so, he certainly had a full and productive year. You include several conflicts and resolutions in your story to keep the reader interested in Edward's journey. And of course in the end, he was the hero. The only thing lacking was dialogue and perhaps more information on the location. The only unresolved problem was finding Edward's brother. Perhaps that can be another story. Well done.

Connie
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Review of The End  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello,

Well, it would surely kill me! I'm afraid of heights. This must be the bungee jumping New River Gorge Bridge in West Virginia. My husband was born and raised near there but never had the desire to try it. Thankfully.

I love the storyline and the love the old couple shared. They had a good idea but I guess it just wasn't their time.

Thanks for sharing your story.

Connie
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello,

I found your short story on the read and review page, and it was a good one. I felt sorry for Pat and her dilemma, and was a touch disappointed when she lied. I expected the box she picked to be the right one, but she never gave that a chance, lying instead to protect her "perfect" record.

This is a well-written story, easy to read, and conveys a very clear message. Thanks for sharing.

Connie
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Review of In Plain Sight  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello,

Congratulations on your Cramp win. This is a good story and raises some interesting questions for daydreaming. I like your theories on mannequins *Smile*.

The only problem I had reading your tale was keeping track of which 'quin was speaking, but I sort of ad-libbed it and went on.

Thanks for sharing your story.

Connie
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello,

I found your essay on the read and review page, and although it's short and just a few of your thoughts, I can feel your angst and confusion and maybe just a little disgust at the nature of humans.

Sometimes I find it helps to write things down and release them from our minds. I hope this helped you and I hope that other's bad thoughts don't jade yours.

Good luck with your writing.

Connie
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Review of I Write In 2018  
for entry "Father's Day Finds" 
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi there,

I found your short story in the Daily Flash entries. Good luck.

You've done an excellent job incorporating the given words into your tale plus making it work for today's holiday as well. And it sounds so believable.

Thanks for sharing.

Connie
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Good Morning,

I caught your entry in today's Cramp and wondered how someone would respond to the prompt. At first glance, it seemed impossible to turn the story of Goldilocks and the Three Bears into a tale about inappropriate crochet and knitting, but you have risen to the task. Well done. I applaud your ingenuity and resourcefulness. Good luck with the contest.

Connie
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Good Morning Harry,

I love this free-style story poem and the message it conveys. It made me feel like the world could be a better place if only everyone believed in love. Your descriptions and imagery were excellent evoking the emotion you intended. Yes, it is a shame that love is not something tangible to be held in one's hand.

Thanks for sharing.

Connie
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Review of Lemonade  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello,

I found your short story on the read and review page. You succeed in showing how quickly a child can disappear almost before one's very eyes. And how desperate parents become in minutes doing things they would never have done otherwise.

I'm glad in this story all turned out well, but sad that many do not. Thanks for sharing your writing.

Connie
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Review of Wizm, the Car  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello,

I found your delightful poem on the read and review page. I can imagine lots and lots of people have had favorite old cars that they just hated to get rid of, me included. I certainly could relate to your poem through a 1982 Honda Accord that finally gave up the ghost in 2007. I still think of it fondly, almost like a family member.

Thanks for sharing this well-rhyming and rhythmic ode to the trusty automobile.

Connie
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Review of Maui Wowie  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello,

I found your "pre-travel story" on the read and review page, and it sounds like the on line class was worth it and more. I imagine both your hearts did flip flops at the misspelled name. I'm glad you got it all straightened out, finally arriving on Maui on another flight.

A Hawaiian luau for Thanksgiving dinner! Wow that had to be a memorable experience. Thanks for sharing.

Connie
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Review of Wings Chapter One  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello,

I found your Chapter One on the read and review page. It's an interesting beginning to a story but I had a lot of trouble reading it because of the font. I realize you may think the font matches the tale but still it is difficult to read and you may want to rethink it.

Is mythology an actual subject taught in high school? I think that's great if it is. In your third line I would change the verb "are" to "is" to agree with the singular subject.

I thought male witches were warlocks or maybe Reese is a woman who dresses in pants and tie. I like the cat and the guardian and hope you write more.

Connie
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello,

I found your short story on the read and review page, and the title interested me. I was expecting something on the Blue Angels or the Thunderbirds like we have here in the U.S.

You sound like a read airplane buff and I'm sorry the show turned out to be a flop in your area. You apparently just caught the edge of a fast fly-by. Maybe there will be another and you can attend.

Thanks for sharing your writing.

Connie
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello,

I came across your short article on the read and review page and found it interesting.

I haven't seen the movie but I am familiar with the news story and how gloriously hailed Captain Sullenberg became. I didn't follow the subsequent inquiry.

I'm sure his only thoughts were to safely land the plane and he did that by instinct and training and was successful. But, yes, if he hadn't been, we would have heard a much different story from the news media. Luckily, his instincts were right.

That is generally what happens to all of us. We win some and we lose some and we must accept the consequences of our actions.

Thanks for the thoughtful article and keep writing.

Connie
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Neva,

I found your short story on the read and review page, and I never could resist a cat story. I love the name, Vashtie.

My kitty, spayed as well, does the same thing. She cannot tolerate another cat in the yard, and when she sees one, she runs from porch to window to window, tracking its every move until it's gone.

I'm sorry about your scratches but I'm sure it comes with the territory, the kitty, that is. I've had several mishaps, scratches only.

Thanks for sharing your cat experiences.

Connie
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