I like the poem and I have to be contented with the flow although there is something lacking which I can't pinpoint at this point but all in all I can understand well the emotions displayed in this poem.
I like sonnets as a whole they are very expressive bet shakespeare was one of the author's inspirations here. sometimes we dreamt of people we have never seen or met but still they captured our interest inspire us and most of the time we are obsessed by just knowing who that person is. very well written i should say. keep it up
I like the poem very much maybe because until now I can consider myself a child at heart. i still play with my favorite toys from time to time because you were right in saying that is a sanctuary from the grown ups who look down and click their tongues who ignore the care- free mind of a child.
I like the poem i believe it will never be too late for a person to tell someone how precious they are even after death because I know she had heard and felt it from you. i am so sorry but life will always be like that a cycle of life and death and nothing in between. This is a good poem
The plot is good. It is a good theme for a twelve year old eager to experiment teenage and adult life. I like the characters named after chocolate bars they make me laugh. Some words need to be altered and the grammar is somewhat lopsided but all in all it is an interesting chapter. for a suggestion try to focus on one character first than describing the whole appleby clan. I like the family dining hour and the food they consume every night try to dwell on it more since your title expounds more on the bakery as business. Elaborate on the blood oath why caramel and mary anne did it and how it will affect caramel if she does not go with the plan. Emphasize more on caramel's character and her relationship with her twin. I find it really interesting.
I like the piece it deals with heartbreak and how to deal with it in a positive way. I like the usage of words and the rhyme it has but most of all I can understand the emotion displayed by the poet that of trying to venge its anger at the tree but after the rage passed by he can see the strength possessed by the tree and that is what he needs at the time to mend a broken heart.
Please be careful with your spelling and your choice of words. I could not compare life with a black rose though how cynical I could be maybe a wilted one will do ok. but still it is one unique piece I should say.
I find this piece very touching about the wife's role in a double standard society such as ours. We have our roles to play and most of the time it is sacrifice for us because we are molded to be like that but still men can't find satisfaction in that, they all take the credit and let us fail. But gone were the days like this, we must learn to fight if we know we are on the right track.
I think his love and respect for his wife who is now departed is truly emotional. But I can sense incompleteness in this story it should be elaborated further but still all i can say it can touch a person' s heart especially if you really miss this person.
Having a very special friend is one in a million chance especially today. How I understand her grief of having lose someone so close to her heart. I just hope she can move on and try to make new friendships again.
I was already forming vivid images in my mind on what the climax of the story will be and then suddenly just the thought of the great love parents can have for their children that protecting them is the only thing that matters. The story intrigued me at first but towards the middle it stopped coz I was expecting a little more but still there is effort displayed here so all in all it is a nice work