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Review of The Bridge  
Review by Devil's Del...
In affiliation with Unofficial Erotica Newsletter ...  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Lol, I get such pleasure from reading your stories. *Wink*

You always write so well, with that touch of humour. Your double entendre in this was brilliant, starting with their names ! You must have had such fun writing it.

A definite contender for the contest - mine is like a fairy tale compared to yours.

But I have to say it - yours was a treat! *Bigsmile*

Regards
Cherry-Anne
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Review of The Nut Tree  
Review by Devil's Del...
Rated: E | (5.0)

*RainbowL*Hello from the "Simply Positive Review Forum "  [E]!!!*RainbowR*


Hi there. This came up as a random read, so here I am. *Smile*


*ButterflyO*Form & Flow:

Your words flowed smoothly and eloquently, and your rhyme was great.

*ButterflyG*Imagery & Emotion:

The imagery was wonderful here - very visual

*ButterflyB*Suggestions & Typos:

I couldn't see anything that needed correcting.

*ButterflyV*Overall Thoughts & Rating:

A wonderful poem, great rhyme, (I love poems that rhyme) and lots of talent
Write on!

Regards
Cherry-Anne


*RainbowL*Write On!*RainbowR*



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Review by Devil's Del...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there,

Lol, this poem is gorgeous !

The little kitten is so cute and so appropriate for this poem.

I liked your use of smitten - you can just picture this little kitten licking its lips with contentment - like the veritable cat and cream.

A really great poem to read on a cold and wet morning, where I am. Cheered up my day. *Smile*

Regards
Cherry-Anne
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Review of Ode to Coffee  
Review by Devil's Del...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)

*RainbowL*Hello from the "Simply Positive Review Forum "  [E]!!!*RainbowR*


Hi there,

thought I would return the favor and review a poem of yours. *Smile*

*ButterflyR*Narrative & Dialogue:

I liked the way you wrote this - for some reason it seemed as if it was written from a male's POV

*ButterflyO*Form & Flow:

The flow was smooth, like the coffee.

*ButterflyG*Imagery & Emotion:

The imagery was great - your desciption of both the man waiting and the coffee itself was very visual.

*ButterflyB*Suggestions & Typos:

You had one fullstop and one comma. Most poetry should either have all the punctuation or none.

*ButterflyV*Overall Thoughts & Rating:

I really enjoyed this poem about a regular cup of coffee, and how much we all enjoy it on an every day basis.... except I prefer mine white. *Wink*

Regards
Cherry-Anne


*RainbowL*Write On!*RainbowR*



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Review by Devil's Del...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi there,

This was a great story, told from a completely different perspective! A heartfelt story of domestic violence and abuse that happens far too often.

And in a way, the way that you told it gave a happy ending, even though it ws a sad one, if that makes sense. *Smile*

I can see why you were the winner of the contest you entered - congratulations !

Write on!
Regards
Cherry-Anne
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Review of Weather Cat  
Review by Devil's Del...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Lol, I loved this !

I thought I would pop into your port and pay a visit and then couldnt resist a cat poem. I'm a huge cat lover!

This was so funny - very creative and very visual.

They say you can tell the weather by the length of your cat - if it's going to be cold - your cat will be curled up, and it it's a hot day, it will be stretched out.*Smile*

I'm still smiling.
Write on!
Regards
Cherry-Anne
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Review of You are beautiful  
Review by Devil's Del...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)


*RainbowL*Hello from the "Simply Positive Review Forum "  [E]!!!*RainbowR*

Hi there, I thought I would pop into your port, returning the favor.

*ButterflyR*Narrative & Dialogue:

This is a gorgeous poem to your daughter. Written from the heart, and very sincere.

*ButterflyO*Form & Flow:

Your words were good, and your words appear to have been chosen well, and flowed smoothly.

*ButterflyG*Imagery & Emotion:

Your imagery was amazing. Great choice of words.

*ButterflyB*Suggestions & Typos:

I noticed in some lines you used punctuation and in others you didn't. It's always better to use one or the other....and if you use punctuation, to keep it consistent throughout.

*ButterflyV*Overall Thoughts & Rating:

A lovely poem that shows your feelings for your daugher. Funnily enough I have also written some about mine, so clearly the love of our daughters instills in us a need to get that love down on paper. *Smile*


Regards
Cherry-Anne


*RainbowL*Write On!*RainbowR*



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Review by Devil's Del...
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi there,

I read your story and this was is vastly different from your others.

A more serious side to jakrebs. The humour was still there, underneath this darker, scarier story. I felt it left me feeling slightly uneasy - which I suppose is a good thing.

Your characteristion in your stories is really good and you manage to make them seem so real !

I'm enjoying my meandering through your port. I see you have a good many awards. Well done! *Smile*

Great read - thanks !
Cherry-Anne
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Review by Devil's Del...
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I'm supposed to be writing ! - not sitting here cuddled up on the couch, drinking cold coffee and reading your story !

I chose this one to read, because there is a prompt on one of the contests about the supernatural and so I wanted to find out more about it

It kept me riveted. My coffee was hot to begin with. Your characters are so well defined, your bacground and the setting of the scene so clear, and the plot was so different.

Somehow I don't think I'll be writing that story for that contest - so thanks for clearing that up for me.

Brilliant!
I will pop in again - minus the coffee next time.
Regards
Cherry-Anne
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Review of The Ring  
Review by Devil's Del...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)

*RainbowL*Hello from the "Simply Positive Review Forum "  [E]!!!*RainbowR*


*ButterflyR*Narrative & Dialogue:

The narrative of this story was good - very natural, and I enjoyed your talking to your cat. *Smile*


*ButterflyO*The storyline:

You told a tale of your missing ring and showed the emotion of your character's fear very clearly.


*ButterflyB*Suggestions & Typos:

I would say " she left it on the dresser " - active vs passive voice

It’s going to be hard to make one without the ring,she thought.
(you have used surmised,racking her brain etc, so "she thought" keeps it consistent).

not sure if she is saying or thinking - oh crap I forgot to feed you. Maybe add inverted commas here.


*ButterflyV*Overall Thoughts & Rating:

Overall this was a sweet short story for flash fiction.

I enjoyed it. *Smile*

*RainbowL*Write On!*RainbowR*




Regards
Cherry-Anne
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Review by Devil's Del...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi there,

Your story was great! Funny and different, and so readable.

I found your characters so believable and I could relate to all of them.

Dialogue between the two omain characters was well balanced with each of them having their own voice.

Three little errors I noticed...

breathe should be breath
Well, I’m probably to only man you’ve played - should be the only man
“I hope not Jessica. I’ll try my best not to. - close quotes.

I really liked this story. *Smile* A definite contender for contest. Good luck.

Regards
Cherry-Anne
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Review by Devil's Del...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I don't want to review this. *Sad*

I want to read more! *Smile* Now ! *Bigsmile*

My only recommendation at this point is to include somewhere near the beginning the relationship between that of Kara and the two brothers, Nathan and Caleb. I initially thought cousins, then friends and I'm still not really sure. And although we know what happened to her mom, we dont know where her dad is, or was. If Caleb is now 26 and her mom died 7 years before, that would have made him 19, when he got custodianship of her, it that's what it is. If you could get the history out of the way, It would help us to focus on the balance of the story.

Please let me know when you write more of this story - and I will give it a more detailed review.

Regards
Cherry-Anne
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Review of The Dark Horror  
Review by Devil's Del...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hi there,

I read your story because the heading and the little blurb beneath it made me want to see what your story was about, so well done for that part. *Smile* Good hook.

However, on reading the story, I cannot see what her mistake was, what she had done wrong, and what the consequence was. *Blush*

I was really drawn into the story, and would have loved to have known the rest of it, but it just seemed to end mid-way through the story.*Confused*

Please can you complete the story, - if it in fact it isn't complete, because I would love to complete the review.

Thank you.
Regards
Cherry-Anne
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Review of Feelings  
Review by Devil's Del...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem is so beautiful. *Smile*

I love the flow, the clarity, the questions you are asking yourself. I really liked the way you repeated a word from one line to the next line - is this a type of form?

Delight of the “high” I constantly feel. This was my favorite sentence, and if this is the way you feel, then go for it! Life is short, and we must live it while we can. *Smile*

Write on!

Regards
Cherry-Anne
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Review of A Shadow of Guilt  
Review by Devil's Del...
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I so enjoy reading your stories. I savor them, and try to absorb the way you write.

You take a horror story, and still make it about the smells and sounds and scenery along the way.

Your wording is always so smooth and exact with just the right amount of verbs and adverbs. *Smile*

This story of a man tortured was so well written, I was right there with him.

Kudos to you as always.

Regards
Cherry-Anne
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Review by Devil's Del...
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
hi there,

I really enjoyed this story. I have never written Flash Fiction before and so I thought I would take a look at yours and see what it was all about.

You did a damn good job. Punchy, interesting, good flow that had the reader knowing something was coming, but not quite sure what.

With a clever little twist at the end.*Bigsmile*
Well done!
Regards

Cherry-Anne
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Review of Pop Dolls  
Review by Devil's Del...
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Wow,

Harsh but so true!

Is this the future we face - I hope not. And yet you have nailed it! As far as so many of the young models, singers, and many girls of today, the effect factor is what counts.

This must have taken you a while to write, because each description is so eerily visual.

I found your request on the Horror Depot Request Reviews where I have posted one of mine. Hopefully, you will review mine in return. If you do, I will have a look in your port.

Thanks so much.
Regards
Cherry-Anne
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Review of Mistaken  
Review by Devil's Del...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Wow !

I have never had a problem with spiders - until now!

This was really spellbinding - it fascinated and repelled me all at the same time. I'm sure I still have a look of horror on my face! The spider was bad enough without Simon becoming Simon-Spider! I also really enjoyed the story within a story.

This was so well written, that it makes it easy to understand why you are a master of your trade

All I can say is well done!

Regards
Cherry-Anne
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Review of ~Awakening~  
Review by Devil's Del...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
This was a lovely poem - it gave me goosebumps.

This must be the most dreadful disease, and my sympathies go out to all of those that suffer with it, and to their families.

Your rhythm in your first, second and fourth verses were wonderful, and yet someone it wasn't quite there in the middle one - maybe this was intentional? Maybe look at continuing the rhyme through the poem.

This is just my suggestion though, and I am just one person.

It's still a lovely poem. *Smile*

Regards
Cherry-Anne
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Review of Metric Time  
Review by Devil's Del...
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Lol, this was good !

I enjoyed the story, and you were very effective in showing us how Bill was taken in.
It's amazing how gullible people can be, and if the story is made believable, as yours
was, they fall for it, hook, line and sinker. *Bigsmile*

Ending was superb !

Well done.
Keep writing.
Regards
Cherry-Anne
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Review of Compulsion  
Review by Devil's Del...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
This was a very thought provoking and insightful look into the life of a soldier, and his subsequent drinking problem. It didn't really come across as a story, and possibly you didn't mean it to be. But it is a very good, detailed account of a man whose soldiering experiences forever stained the rest of his life.

How his endeavours to escape those nightmares, ended up being blotted out only at the end of a bottle of alcohol. And his slow but relentless recovery.

Good to know that the "healing continues."

Keep writing.
Regards
Cherry-Anne
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Review of A Mother's Regret  
Review by Devil's Del...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Wow, I really enjoyed your story, though I'm not sure the correct word is ''enjoyed.'' Enthralled would probably be a better word. *Smile*

It was really well written - no flaws that I could see, and kept my attention from the very beginning. A real horror story - you had me there in the house with her, in the kitchen, the dining room, the basement. I loved the twist towards the end, and can see why this was a winner. *Smile*

Well done! These are the kind of stories that inspire me to keep on writing. *Smile*

Kind regards
Cherry-Anne
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Review of I Have  
Review by Devil's Del...
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I really enjoyed that this poem came straight from your heart. It shows introspection, and understanding - of who you once were and who you are now. There are not a lot of people who can realise that with such clarity.

My favourite part was
" Take a look at my life then
And take a look at my life now!
Don't you dare!
Tell me MY GOD ain't real!!"

Well done! And keep on writing!

Regards
Cherry-Anne
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Review by Devil's Del...
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Lol, a really interesting read! I enjoyed every moment of it and it kept my attention all the way through. I had a premonition that the old lady might get lucky and I loved the way it ended. A total surprise. -ll pop in to see more of your work

I thoroughly enjoyed it.

Write on!
Cherry-Anne
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Review of Hourglass  
Review by Devil's Del...
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there,

I really enjoyed this poem. I enjoy shape poetry, and you have very cleverly used the form to portray even more so the meaning behind your words.

The first half of the poem is kind of sad, and yet the second half is so uplifting - it's true, we should hold on to every grain of sand.... every grain is a memory.

I love poetry that is thought provoking, and this one certainly is.*Smile*

Regards
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