AAAH! You described the coffee experience perfectly.
The rhyme and flow are excellent, propelling you from the slow start right up to the cheery enthusiasm to face the day that is provided by this heavenly elixir.
Mistakes? Nope. This piece is as refreshing as that first cup in the morning!
This poem makes me want to give you a hug. It does a good job of stirring up emotions. All poems stir some kind of emotions to a point. But this one gets in there and yanks on them till they have to move.
I have a hard time reading sad poetry, however, you did a wonderful job with this. I didn't notice mistakes.
I agree with you. I have always tried to steer clear of whiners and complainers. Griping without following up with a solution has been one of my pet peeves. So has only being Christ-like while you're in church on Sunday.
I like that your article addresses a well rounded assortment of issues. It gives you a lot to think about.
Isn't it wonderful to be assured that we are ready for the day we get to meet our God. The simple, exquisite pleasures that God sends must pale in comparison to what is waiting for us on the other side.
I like the way you combined the singing of the bird and the bell. And yes, it is the grandest music we can listen to.
This is a good poem. I like the rhyming pattern. I have been thinking about using something like it myself. I think the imagery and descriptions are wonderful. The words keep you guessing right up to the end. However, even though I fully appreciate God's nature, I am a child of Eve and hate those snakes!
Keep on writing, Am sending your gift points back to you for a job well done Mrs.H
Hi, I like your poem. It expresses the idea that God is a loving Father, not a vengeful God. I'm glad to find someone who thinks like me. My writings also reflect the loving side of God.
If you could work on the rhythm a little this would be a perfect poem.
I'm new to WDC. This piece is very informative. It has helped me want to really get into reviewing. I am beginning to understand the reason for this writers site. I can feel the kinship that develops among writers as they share their work. I like that you could say what needs to be said in just a few words.
As the saying goes,"Write On!"
Mrs. H
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