This is a wistful lil' dude Monty and as usual is nicely penned. I hope the feelings expressed are only poetic fictions, tho' I think there is truth in every poem to some extent. I like to think that I can perceive much from a person's writing. If there wasn't a tad of truth in our poetry why would we feel the need to express and share it?
I stand in awe of poets who can write to certain forms and standards. I wish I could do that as effortlessly as you seem to do. I love the form while realizing I could never do this myself. You keep me humble (which is a good thing)
Rhyssa I liked this very much (somber tho' it is). I like the repetition of some lines and the slightly archaic feel. My personal preference would be to place the repeated lines at the 2nd and last place in the stanzas. The poem overall has exceptionally good rhythm (not easily done!) A fine write!
Everything spot on Monty (as usual). Good flow and rhyme. Nicely done seasonal write.For some reason tthere's no place to rate it, so I'll just give it my own rating of 5 stars until I can find the proper place to rate it.
Well Sean, your skill at rhyme is displayed to it's fullest here and I do admire rhyme, but the poem itself kinda went over my head. I think it's more my inability to grasp things and themes that are a bit abstract (perhaps due to my advanced age) than anything else. All the technical requisites are fully and well met here. You are obviously a good writer. Well written!
Judi,Judi,Judi! Only good things to say about this nicely flowing, well rhymed, bit of prose. Just the right amount of repetition and alliteration. Shorter poems are what I prefer over the long, rambling type. Short and to the point! Well writ!
Susan, even with all the awesome alliteration gone amok, This was done so well that all I can say is ALLRIGHT! Truly well done. I was delighted with it! Maybe it's just me, but I tend to give poetry a gender quality and I, without seeing your name would have said "this was written be a woman." Women poets (the good ones at least) seem to have a certain sensitivity that male writers are unable to achieve. At least most of them and that includes me. Very deserving of 5 stars. I enjoyed reading it!
I found much to like in this JUDI and much that I (and most serious poets) CAN WELL RELATE TO. I HAVE NOW GRADUATED FROM NAPKINS,TISSUE, NEWSPAPER AND POSTIT PADS TO A 2 IN 1 COMPUTER THAT ELIMINATES ALL THAT CLUTTER, THOUGH THERE ARE STILL TIMES OF ENVELOPES AND PAPER SCRAPS. THIS IS THE BEST WRITTEN AND MOST RELATABLE I'VE READ SO FAR. GOOD LUCK, DAVID O