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Review of In the Trenches  
Review by David O'Hao...
Rated: E | (4.5)
I found much to like in this JUDI and much that I (and most serious poets) CAN WELL RELATE TO. I HAVE NOW GRADUATED FROM NAPKINS,TISSUE, NEWSPAPER AND POSTIT PADS TO A 2 IN 1 COMPUTER THAT ELIMINATES ALL THAT CLUTTER, THOUGH THERE ARE STILL TIMES OF ENVELOPES AND PAPER SCRAPS. THIS IS THE BEST WRITTEN AND MOST RELATABLE I'VE READ SO FAR. GOOD LUCK, DAVID O


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Review by David O'Hao...
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Steev when I saw the title and read the description I thought "This is gonna be a bummer!" How pleasantly wrong was I. This is a really good narrative poem that ranks right up there with the best! (Think David Lewis Padgett) This one is a gem. I'm a little prejudiced against long poems but this was just right. I could list all the things right about this poem , but instead will just say "all was right and nothing wrong. Really good bit of writing!


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Review by David O'Hao...
Rated: E | (5.0)
Nicely done Rhychus! Seems almost like a non-elegy if there is such a thing. Your words were strung together nicely and the rhyme seemed impeccable. Very good choice of words. All good here!


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Review of Scars  
Review by David O'Hao...
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wow! Very impressive Hunter. Though it is for sure very dark, I found your choice of words and your rhyme extremely well done. I would have broken the lines into shorter lines and let the last four words of each verse stand alone, but that's just me and the poem is excellent just as is. I like the repetition and the emphasis given to the end of each verse. You're a very gifted writer. Well done!


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Review of Second Thoughts  
Review by David O'Hao...
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
I liked this Bruce! It tells a true story about things that many of the younger generation know nothing about. You did it in a plain straight-forward manner that goes from humorous to serious in 5 verses and the comment at the end "glad I wasn't there" ended it very nicely! Rhyme and meter all done to a T. Interesting lil' write.


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Review of NEVER GROW OLD  
Review by David O'Hao...
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Most of us can really relate to this poem. I especially like the line "I must keep my chins up." A clever play on words that I almost missed. A good solid entry Julie!


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Review of The Path  
Review by David O'Hao...
Rated: E | (5.0)
Now it's a 5!


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Review of The Path  
Review by David O'Hao...
Rated: E | (4.5)
Dave, now I know what a triquatrain is thank you very much! I admire writers like yourself who try different types of poetry and who seem to do that very well. That's something that's beyond both my skill and patience level. I would give this a 5 rating if you could clear up the word "wildemess" or is it wilderness and my ol' eyes are deceiving me? I will come back and give this a 5 if it is just my eyes or my computer. Let me know! All in all a truly impressive write!


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Review of Second Chances  
Review by David O'Hao...
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hunter you are becoming one of my most favorite poets. I like and admire pretty much everything about your poems and the way you write them. Even your brevity, to me is something to be admired. To say so much in so few words is a marvel unto it's self. A great entry!!


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Review of A Needed Friend  
Review by David O'Hao...
Rated: E | (5.0)
A great write Magoo! Lots of feeling, excellent rhythm, and outstanding rhyme. You have great ability and it shows up in this poem.


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Review by David O'Hao...
Rated: E | (4.5)
I really liked this Sharon. I think what really caught my attention was the two rhyming lines and then the third non-rhyming line in each verse which is where I tended to put the emphasis in each verse. If that's how you intended it to be read then it worked very effectively. If there was anything that seemed a bit off it was the rhyming in the fourth verse which didn't seem to match the quality of all the other verses. "classes" and "matters" seemed further apart than all the other fine rhyming. Probably just me, but you might want to give it a little thought. Again, probably just me since the poem is great just as it is. Just something to think about. I liked the way you wrote and I liked what you wrote and I think you're a gifted writer.


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Review by David O'Hao...
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Bruce your rhyming is impeccable, as is your rhythm and pacing. But what really caught my interest was the concept and the conceit of this fine write. It's the kind of poem that keeps one reading just to see how it turns out. Usually for me, patience tends to run out if the poem is very long, but this one held my interest until the very end. Your final verse says that this is true experience and if so that makes it even more admirable. Good write!


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Review of Metamorphosis  
Review by David O'Hao...
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Dave, I liked everything about this lil' poem. It's short and sweet yet is very complete. I like poems that don't adhere to the ordinary rhyme schemes. It's refreshing. The only thing that gave me pause (and it's probably just me) is the line "like butterfly escapes cocoon." That line takes on a somewhat oriental cast in the enunciation of it. Seems as if "like A butterfly" or "like butterflies escape cocoons." Again, just probably me and it's a really good poem just as it's written! Would be a 5 with a slight change.


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Review of Respect  
Review by David O'Hao...
Rated: E | (5.0)
Outstanding poem Oldwarrior! I don't often see a poem that has such a smooth flow to it. It has all the good qualities of Tennessee Honey and feels as good on the palate. You're a very accomplished writer and that shows in this piece. Great write!


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Review by David O'Hao...
Rated: E | (4.5)
Very nicely done Horse luver! It's hard enough to write a good poem, but is harder still to incorporate a personal experience and still make it poetic! All the technical aspects are done to a T here and there's nothing to fault in this fine write.


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Review of ENOUGH FOR ME  
Review by David O'Hao...
Rated: E | (5.0)
A well written piece Julie! The rhyme is without fault and the rhythm is spot on. The poem while being all about you is not self centered as many pieces are. It has a nice sentiment that is comforting: that been there, done that quality without any pretentiousness. All good, technical and otherwise. Good job! Short yet sweet!


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Review by David O'Hao...
Rated: E | (4.5)
Well Bob, the first thing I'll say is that I can relate to this poem very well, being an ol' man (76 years) much given to pondering myself. This is a nicely descriptive, well rhymed write and shows that when some faculties decline, others come to the fore and yours is the ability to express yourself very well. I hope you write as descriptively about other subjects as well as you did with this one. Good Job! Appreciate ya"


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Review of A Winter's Kiss  
Review by David O'Hao...
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Lifelessons I liked this very much. It has an easy grace that only a seasoned poet can achieve. The alliteration was used to just the right degree (not much nor too little). The pace and word choice is spot on. Short four line stanzas say a lot in just a few words. I would take from this poem that you're an accomplished writer, with most likely some (or a lot) of formal education. You write the way that I hope I also write: with brevity and feeling. Very good write. Enjoyed it very much. Appreciate ya' David O


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Review by David O'Hao...
Rated: E | (5.0)
Huntersmoon this is definitely one of the best conceived, clever and well written poems I've had the pleasure to read lately! You display a great deal of skill and craftsmanship. Me likee a lot!! Great write!


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Review of CHRISTMAS CHEER  
Review by David O'Hao...
Rated: E | (4.0)
You nailed Christmas with this write. Memories and Christmas trees and everything is right. Well done Countrymom.


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Review of Remember When  
Review by David O'Hao...
Rated: E | (4.0)
Nicely written Woodman! Your rhyme is good and unforced. Your rhythm is flawless too. I can't find a thing to nit-pick except the spelling of "rouse". Think you might want "ruse". Again, fine poem! I hope you get lots of hits, but if not, don't sweat it. Seems to me that many really good poems don't get the hits they deserve. Keep it up, You're a good writer with a lot of potential.


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Review of Equinox  
Review by David O'Hao...
Rated: E | (5.0)
Dave, by the end of the first verse I was sure I wasn't going to like this one, but by the end I had caught onto and appreciated the meter and the rhyme.In other words I did a 180. If you wrote this in a minute, you sure did a heck of a job. Excellent lil' write.


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Review of Autumn's Wither  
Review by David O'Hao...
Rated: E | (5.0)
I liked this write Fairport. It has a slightly old fashioned feel to it which compliments it's seasonal theme. This is one of those poems that I had to read several times to find and really appreciate it's rhythm. Very poetically written by someone who obviously loves to write about the seasons. You are undoubtedly a Nature lover, as am I.


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Review of The Fairy Kiss  
Review by David O'Hao...
Rated: E | (5.0)
Riss, I'm embarrassed to admit that I only read the first few stanzas of your poem before giving up. The genre is not one that appeals to me all that much. That said, I also am happy to say that what I did read was excellently worded, rhymed and written. and you are an exceptional poet and that I am definitely not in step with the times, so I know that the majority of readers are going to love this and that you're going to get (at least should get) a ton of hits. I'd like to see what you can do with other themes, since you did so well with this one. Outstanding write Riss. 5 star stuff!


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Review by David O'Hao...
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Nice Isola! A life lesson very poetically expressed! I don't know anything about you, but think you're a mature writer who's been there-done that. Am I right? Good job! Nice bit of rhyme. It's a difficult theme to be original with, but I think you pulled it off very well, and I hope it gets the hits it deserves.


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