. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression:
I thought this was a great start to a story that left the reader begging for more. The writer was very descriptive about his flowers. It was genius and a little humerous how he labeled his flowers with personalities. I wondered if he was a florist himself. I liked the reference to old people liking classic flowers (red/white), and young people leaning toward optimistic flowers. I thought that took a lot of imagination to think of. I felt like I could walk into that flower shop and feel like I had actually been there before.
{Plot:
There didn't seem to be a definite plot but there were several things in the story that kept the reader wondering. Would he sell his shop, and to whom? Would he be happy if he did sell it at what the new owners might do with it? When the petunia woman came into the shop, I started to wonder if there would be a romance blossoming out of the visit. The collapse of Liam was totally unexpected; which is a good thing.
Characters:
The characters were depicted well. Liam seemed to be a finicky, OCD type of person. The young couple was sweet, and the petunia lady mysterious.
Dialogue:
There wasn't a lot of dialogue in the story but when there was, I felt it was believable.
Grammar:
There were only a couple of things that I noticed. Forgive me if I misinterpreted. 3rd Paragraph: overtime (I believe this should be two words) Sentence: I wonder what's the occasion? Liam thought to himself (I wondered if Liam should start a new sentence here)
Suggestions:
The only suggestion I have is this: Give us more!!!!!
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Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This is so familiar to me, hearing a song, and then having it stuck in your head the entire day.
I felt the poem had humor and an air of reality to it.
Rhyme & Meter:
I believe this was a free verse poem?
Grammar/Spelling:
I did not find any grammar or spelling errors. I thought the couple lines of dialogue were good.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful!.....Espero
Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I thought that this was an accurate way to portray a poet. The writer states that a poet lifts up those who are downtrodden, relieves the sick, scolds the putrid, leads the lost, and more. I think that sums up a poet very well.
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Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I actually thought that this was a cute poem. It seems to be a very simple poem and yet it's complex.
Rhyme & Meter:
I think the meter of the poem was good.
Grammar/Spelling:
I did not find any errors in the poem
Suggestions:
I don't know if the writer has written other poems but I would suggest that she/he continues doing so.
I like the poem.
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. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression:
The writer was able to relate the loneliness and isolation she was feeling in her life. It was obvious that this was a good person who just didn't have the self confidence to take that 'leap of faith' to make friends. It was unfortunate that her family didn't realize this and make a stronger effort to keep in touch with her. I was happy to see that she was smart enough to realize what she needed to do on her own and finally reach out and find a new, happier life for herself.
Grammar:
Just a couple of things I noticed.
Sentence: clueless as to how to go about it (maybe: clueless as how to go about it)
Sentence: they would be the perfect people let the wall (doesn't make sense to me)
Suggestions:
I think the writer has an uninhibited way of writing. Not afraid to let her feelings show. I think she should pursue more writing if this is something she likes to do. If this is a true story, writing can also be very therapeutic.
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Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
Very honest strong poem bringing the reader into a world he may not have experienced in his own life. I can only imagine the suffering that a person in this realm must face every day of their life. It is impossible to judge a life like this when you have not experienced the same anxiety.
Rhyme & Meter:
I am not familiar with this type of poem but it seemed to flow and read well.
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Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I liked this poem but I wasn't entirely sure what the writer was trying to say. What I got out of it was that we shouldn't put all of our stock into the wealth we have accumulated and neglect the health and well being of our soul.
Rhyme & Meter:
I thought the rhyme and meter of the poem flowed well.
Grammar/Spelling:
There were no apparent errors in grammar or spelling that I could find.
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Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
This was a cute introspective little poem. I like the second verse where you question what would happen if we didn't stay up til' midnight.
Rhyme & Meter:
The poem seemed to flow well as I read it out loud.
Grammar/Spelling:
I couldn't find anything wrong with the poem.
Suggestions:
I think it was perfect the way it is.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression:
This is a very in-depth article and it's obvious the writer has done his homework on the subject. I was a little confused at first, not understanding exactly what 'dramatic irony' was (ok, I'm slow) but the writer continued with example after example which cleared up any confusion I had. I was impressed and I really learned a lot from the article.
Suggestions:
Only one thing I saw that I may have misinterpreted.
3rd Line: is taking step
I thought maybe it should be: is taking steps OR is taking a step???
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. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression
I wasn't sure where the story was going, then I was suspicious, but you cleverly held the suspense to the end; sad as it was.
{Plot
There was a plot to the story, a very sick one. I did wonder at the end how the mother had really died and if the step-father may have murdered her.
Scene Setting
I felt as though you set the scenes well.
Characters
I felt a sadness in the girl and a manipulative character in the step-dad.
Grammar & Mechanics
The grammar and mechanics of the story seemed to flow nicely. I liked how you named the horse Crumbles because the colors crumbled together; it was picturesque.
Suggestions
I couldn't suggest a better way of approaching this subject. In the last paragraph you hinted at what was happening to the poor girl without having to get into the graphics of the sordid story. One would hope that this was not based on a true story but I'm afraid it probably does happen one too many times.
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Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
The writer states very clearly his views on past wars.
Artistic Voice & Imagery:
The poem has a sad note to it, unfortunately because it is all true.
Grammar, Spelling & Mechanics:
I found nothing to critique here.
Suggestions:
The only question I had was in the title Life. Did you mean to put Live?
The last two lines really hit home because it's not just about those fighting. Those at home are suffering too. You are so right, if everything could be solved with words we would have no more war.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression
Story seemed authentic to the times it was portraying, even the speech of the characters.
{Plot
There was a good plot, kept reader wondering what was going to happen.
Scene Setting
I think the scene was set well and was descriptive.
Characters
The characters personalities came across well.
Grammar:
I couldn't find anything wrong with the grammar.
Suggestions
The only thing I questioned was that it seemed at times the character was in the first person and toward the end in the 3rd person. I think this could be expanded to a very good novel. I would like to know more.
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Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
I thought it was a cute little poem. You show a caring for the horse even thought it just dumped you off.
Form, Format, Rhyme & Meter:
I don't know what form it is but it made sense to me.
Grammar, Spelling & Mechanics:
I couldn't find anything wrong with the spelling and I'm not familiar with the mechanics of a poem.
Suggestions:
I can't suggest anything that would improve your poem. I liked it.
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Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
Very loving and emotional.
Form, Format, Rhyme & Meter:
I am not sure what type of poem this would be as far as format, but it worked for me.
Artistic Voice & Imagery:
Very artistic and imaginative, lots of descriptive and poetic words.
Grammar, Spelling & Mechanics:
3rd stanza: apart
I think should be a part
Suggestions:
Only the 2nd stanza. You say sweetly about and then sweetly asleep. Maybe use another word so you're not using sweetly twice? Only a suggestion. I love the last 4 lines the most.
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Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
Very sad but true.
Form, Format, Rhyme & Meter:
You said this was tetrameter. I believe you. I write a lot of poetry myself but am ashamed to say I don't know the different forms, I need to learn. I know that your poem flowed well as I read it.
Artistic Voice & Imagery:
I think it was artistic and thoughtful.
Grammar, Spelling & Mechanics:
I did not find anything wrong with the spelling or mechanics.
. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. .......espero.
Overall Impression
I felt as though you had researched your subject very well and had an informative and interesting
perspective on Mark Twain and his writing.
{Plot
You seemed to capture the reason behind The Aged Pilot Man poem.
Style & Voice
You analyzed the writing style very well. It was clear that you really studied his work.
Scene Setting
You gave a little bit of his life without going on and on. Let's face it, Mark Twain wrote and traveled extensively.
Dialogue
I think you have a very good writing style, stating things in a way that the reader can understand what you mean easily.
Grammar & Mechanics
I could find nothing to critique with either your grammar or mechanics.
Hi: I am sending you a review of your story {item 2083173}. This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert by any means. I hope you find this review helpful. You were able to show the personalities of your characters very well. The wife seemed to be indifferent to the husband and he seemed to be accommodating towards her. She referred to a secret early on which kept the interest of the reader. I thought the dialogue between the couple was written well. You had another sub-plot going which wasn't evident but it seemed the husband was up to something. The insertion of the white leaves into the story made her appear to be delusional but it seems she got the best of him in the end. I think you would make a good mystery writer. I noticed a couple of things. It seemed that there were a few . missing at the end of some sentences and I wondered if you should have had an extra space between a few paragraphs.Other than that, I enjoyed it very much! {cd:plum}A Rising Star's M2M Review
Hello! I am sending you a review of your story "Invalid Item" . This review reflects my opinion only, I am not a writing expert. I hope you find this review helpful. I am writing it for a Rising Star Review Contest. Your story had me interested from the first paragraph. It was intriguing, what was the woman doing there and why was she dressed like that? Throughout the story you cleverly added humor. I found the dialogue to be very realistic, not forced. I wondered if the rift with the father had come from a real life experience, I could feel the hurt. You brought out the personalities of the main character and the sister so well; both very different from each other. The story had a message that was finally revealed at the end by Queen Anne. I might mention that the clothing and phrasing of the Queen seemed very authentic to me. The only thing I noticed, and forgive me if I misinterpreted, was the 16th paragraph. You wrote: dare turn stand in my way. I took it as perhaps dare to stand in my way. You make me want to go to Google myself and look up the history of Queen Anne. A Rising Star's M2M Review
I thought this was a cute poem. I wondered if the "we're trumped" was a clever way of referring to D Trump. Perfect entry for Halloween and timing of the upcoming election.
I was interested in this story as I read along and then was left wondering what in the heck was it that David did now. Was he some kind of greenhouse worker? I didn't understand or perhaps missed something. I liked the historical reference to San Francisco earthquake as I am a historical fiction fan. Your writing is really good and keeps the reader interested. I noticed one little typo that you might want to fix 1) 1st paragraph: and the I didn't laugh
This is a heart warming story. I can feel the love you have for your church and the work that is being done in it. My favorite pieces are biographical and historical. Grace House Farm sounds like a lovely setting, it's easy to see where harmony would exist in this environment. I love that you are bringing love, happiness and even humor into lives of those who may otherwise have dismal ones. You should be commended for caring so much about others.I noticed a few errors in the piece that you may want to correct at some point but they do not distract from your overall message. 1) camp over for the that 2) an clever idea 3) let to center. Thank you for sharing.
You definitely have a knock for words. I feel the deep devotion this person has for the character he/she is writing about. The phrase "chocolate and tears" is genius. I think there needs to be some work on the punctuation (I also struggle with this) and capitalization. You have the gift of a writer, it just needs a little tweaking in my opinion.
So true and yet so sad. I hope this is not something the writer experienced and yet I feel it may be. I wish no one had to go through something like this. I felt the HOPE but I also felt the disappointment. I am not sure if this is a form of poetry or if it is verse but I do think the writer will capture the reader and make them feel what he/she is feeling.
There is a lot of action and interaction going on here. I wondered as I read it if this was written for a short story with limited words as the sentences seem to be short and to the point without a lot of description. You state that this is an outline and if that is the case then your story will tell a lot more. I'm interested to know more about the characters; more descriptions and emotions. As an outline, I think this will make for a good thriller. A couple of typos I noticed: 1) encounter with is 2)ran off the road (I think it should be run, not sure) 3) with is partner.
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3rd Paragraph: overtime (I believe this should be two words)
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