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Review of Grief Unrelenting  
Review by One More
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi there

I enjoyed the flow in this piece. But since you wrote it for a contest, you did miss the mark there. Ya gotta follow the rules. But the poem is in some trouble too, from me haha so know it is ONLY one reviewers' truth.... everything else matched until the words "as if" I was shook there and also the last line. I don't know but it just feels unfamiliar in style. or something...what do I know? It doesn't matter what I think if you like it...right. ?


Keep on writing!














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Review by One More
Rated: E | (4.5)

I enjoyed this entry. My favorite part is the way you helped us see your grandmother by Literary referencing familiar characters.
Good Job!
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Review of Tears For Two  
Review by One More
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for this read. I loved it and laughed out loud.
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Review of The Diary  
Review by One More
Rated: E | (5.0)
well written and sad. I live about 25 miles away from the slide. It is all so tragic.
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Review by One More
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
You just gave me "goosies" as Jenifer Lopez would say. I loved it. I fold my hands and nod my head to you Sister,
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Review of The Golden Pool  
Review by One More
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I loved this story. Your tale is woven well. Each stitch necessary for the tapestry.

Even this jolting part," incipient lightning—imminent hysteria" snaps in place perfectly to complete the big picture. Well done.
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Review by One More
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Lifelessons
*Heart*
What I liked: The first thing I noticed was the shape. Kind of like a
Genie Jar.

But the real treasures are the words. Your niece is very "Lucky" to have you. I love the imagery and also the dreamy feel of it. Good Job a must read I think.

KEEP ON WRITING!


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Review of To My Children  
Review by One More
Rated: E | (5.0)
That's so sweet. I loved it. You surprised me and I like that;
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Review by One More
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
OMG did you know... you wrote what I am ...That is me. Well, when I feel that way. I have a secret. I'll share with you. we are NEVER really alone. Well maybe we are. We are one.

About your poem:

I don't know a lot about poetry forms but I recognize the pattern. I loved how you pulled it all together. Excellent! Thank you for sharing. It moved me more than you know.
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Review by One More
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love you guys
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Review by One More
Rated: E | (5.0)
This would make a great picture book. I like it. It was believable and has all the elements of a story. Nice job.
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Review of I Am The One  
Review by One More
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Your poem hurts, it bleeds, it moved me.
I hope you don't REALLY feel this way.

If you do, please reach out for help. There are resources available. If you don't know where to go, you can start at Dr.Phill.com


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Review of Talking to God  
Review by One More
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi,
I am sorry for your loss. Has anyone mentioned that the format is distracting. I'm a 50s child too.
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Review of Grandfather  
Review by One More
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

I loved this. Is there more?

one thing
“Okay! Okay! I’ll go! Just let me bring my books home first, okay?”

wouldn't take be a better choice?

Anyway this is the best thing I've read in a while. LOVED IT

PLEASE keep on writing!


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Review of Divine Discords  
Review by One More
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi There Lilyx*

Bravo !

What I liked: Well the title 1st I had to check it out.



Points to ponder: conserns I didn't stop and wonder about anything, it read smoothly to me.

KEEP ON WRITING!


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Review of An Inhuman Place  
Review by One More
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi There Tyler,
What I liked: This story reminded me of a campfire ghost story of my youth. The suspense you built was awesome. Every paragraph takes the reader deeper into your mind / woven story. The first sentence ROCKS and the entire first paragraph sets the hook. Splendid!
I loved the following because they say so much with so little:
"mom could mooch off her newest boyfriends"
"heart was kicking double bass pedals"

Points to ponder: conserns When you switch the light switch....if you were telling this story you would have people yelling at you.... Harper House is old and empty


KEEP ON WRITING!
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Review by One More
Rated: E | (3.5)
*SuitHeart* Sounds Yummy!

*VinylB* Overall :


*VinylR*Area of concern:

*VinylY* Keep on writing!
*SuitHeart* I Love to eat so this was fun to get a random review for your pasta salad.

*VinylB* Overall: I liked it. I believe I could follow your directions.


*VinylR*Area of concern: Well, you did say we were stuffing the shells several times. and "I do it this or that way." A clear, more commanding voice might be better.
*VinylY* Keep on writing!


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Review of THE LEGACY  
Review by One More
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I liked this piece. It's a few years old so my guess is you cleaned up all problems. that is if you ever had any. Nice

Keep writing! Please!
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Review by One More
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Wow I really like this. Way to Go
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Review of Scruffy  
Review by One More
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hello there
I liked this cute little story. It could be a picture book if it isn't already.
I guess you may have heard by now the since it has @07 that the beginning would be better as five short sentences instead of what you have.

Thank you for the read. Keep Writing!


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Review by One More
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Well what a pleasant surprise. I loved this article. It was quite enlightening. I was going to answer yes. Guess I will. Yes.

But only on the bridge of it's nose. My Dad's cousin lived forty-years with the government mules. He loved them and said they were the best pack animals for carrying supplies up to the look-outs.

Anyway your piece is great! Keep writing.


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Review by One More
Rated: E | (2.5)
Hi Penhandle:
Well on the Genre(s) you selected "other" and none none

It read like that too. I can't tell what it is either. Maybe fiction???

I had to reread the piece several times. There are spelling and grammatical errors. In the first paragraph you typed one however; I think you meant …"on"

I love dogs too. Good luck and keep writing.

If this is the beginning of a story, you may want to write it from the view point of the dog. Just an idea.


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Review of Gift for Natalie  
Review by One More
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi so this is my first review.

I really liked the story. It feels well polished. but what did it have to do with the prompt?
I liked the twist at the end and as a good story should it made me want to read more.
Contest prompt: A black fog crept along the ground almost as if it were alive. 1030 words.



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