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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this in the spiritual newsletter. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: This is simple and direct. Most good thoughts are.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile*Interesting internal rhyme within your lines. Kind of reminiscent of the Dear Me contest. Certainly one of the most direct and to the point pieces

What I disliked*Idea* Moralizing to yourself seems a bit artificial. Polonius in Hamlet would say, To thine own self be true and He was known as a fool

How the piece made me feel We are all strange I think, especially to yourself.

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Review of The Printed WORD  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I am familiar with Azusa Street revival. It is pretty cool to know people with first-hand knowledge

Overall impression of piece: You have done a lot to put this together. You definitely do have all the facts right

Grammatical and spelling errors: No errors seen

What I liked?*Smile* Nothing can contain the word of God and His Kingdom. Circumstances are definitely not the issue. I love all the particulars about this. It shows first-hand knowledge

What I disliked*Idea* This is a case of examples being needed to prove your point. This seems to be centered on the printed word, and I either need examples or change things. I feel that people got to know the Lord first hand. That is indeed powerful

How the piece made me feel Did you prove how important publications are? I am not sure if you did. I love the evangelism on a butcher's product.

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Review of My Enemy  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece Requested review

Overall impression of piece: I certainly know the feeling. I do wrestle with some of these issues.

Grammatical and spelling errors No punctuation to direct how to read this

What I liked?*Smile* Interesting rhyme in the first stanza. I appreciate this being give a `13 + rating

What I disliked*Idea* There seems little way out of this. A lot of people feel like this. There has to be healing in some way shape or form

How the piece made me feel I almost didn't review this because of a lack of biographical stuff. I am hoping I will not offend. We all do feel our own pain. I hammer myself and it hurts. What do we do with it? That might be the more pertinent question. Living is not for the faint of heart.

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Review of True North  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This is a requested review

Overall impression of piece: This is personal. There is a hometown crowd.

Grammatical and spelling errors Dashes are two hyphens put together--then the parenthetical thought. I only know one person in the room is missing a period. You are using block formatting. Generally, people do leave a line in between. Maybe used dashes a bit too much

What I liked?*Smile* I can sense the fondness of the place. I get some of the idea of the struggle of becoming. It is never easy

What I disliked*Idea* Who this is addressed to is a little vague. You do have a lot of initials that classically would need to be defined, or made fun of with a receptive audience The idea of finding true North can come out more. Slaves followed the "Drinking Gourd to find True North." I would identify the school better.

How the piece made me feel This could be better. The basics are there.

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Review of A Hopeful Day  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece This was part of the spiritual newsletter

Overall impression of piece: This is a very disciplined piece of work. There is a lot of details written here in an almost song-like pattern

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* The rhythm here makes this very readable. I appreciate the rhyme scheme put in. Hope is what life is all about. We can't live without it

What I disliked*Idea* Can't think of anything.

How the piece made me feel I think we all need to be fired and inspired. It is often a lacking thing

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Review of " Morning"  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is part of the spiritual newsletter.

Overall impression of piece Short. Direct and to the point.

Grammatical and spelling errors Should there be an exclamation point after what a morning?

What I liked?*Smile* This is personable and believable. The spiritual world has very real underpinnings. I felt I was there with you.

What I disliked*Idea*awkened to what may bring seems like there should be an object to this. Why are you awakened?

How the piece made me feel The Father is as close as we can imagine. Perhaps we don't have the best imagination.

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Review of The Trip  
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I found this on the left column under newbies

Overall impression of piece: This is very prosey. I could see and feel this

Grammatical and spelling errors I suspect you mean vial not vile. Dashes are two hypens and no spaces--just the parenthetical thought. A yearning... is not a sentence. I would attach it to another

What I liked?*Smile* This is quite a trip. I have to believe this to be pretty realistic. I have never done acid, but it reminded me of similar things

What I disliked*Idea* I am not sure what swallowing the button is all about

How the piece made me feel It is helpful to put something about who you are on the port. It helps reviewers.

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Review of The Baby Husband  
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Rated: E | (2.5)
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Why I chose this piece This was part of the nonfiction section. It is an area I am intensely interested in and have been married for 43 years

Overall impression of piece: It is what everyone wants. You should write a book. Obviously, you have.

Grammatical and spelling errors No errors.

What I liked?*Smile* No one goes into this knowing everything they need to

What I disliked*Idea*. This should be a promotional piece. I read your port. You are obviously a very brilliant man and impressive. Why should I read this? Where can I get a copy? We need more--much more. Are you married?

How the piece made me feelThere is obviously some passion about this. Don't be afraid to let it out. You wrote a book about it.

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Review of My Life's Musings  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I was gandering through essays

Overall impression of piece I was taken by your picture. I have been married to a blond gal for 42 years. She is even more beautiful today

Grammatical and spelling errors No errors

What I liked?*Smile* I still remember some of my memories. Finding my Santa Present under my parents bed and then having to act surprised. As you get more senior, you do lose more people. We live on a 1.25 acre old farm house

What I disliked*Idea* WDC power reviewers seems to be tied to this kind of abruptly. Maybe there could be more of a tie in. The pece tends to ramble a bit without an organizing theme

How the piece made me feel I've hit most of this

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Review of Compare  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece We are doing Newbie reviews this weekend. I am also a spiritual writer.

Overall impression of piece: No one with any of the tenents of the faith can argue any of this

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads ok. No errors. Well punctuated.

What I liked?*Smile* You have every tenant of the Christian faith in four lines.

What I disliked*Idea* I am not sure why we would want to stay on Earth. I am ready Now. It would be best if you could show the reader what this means, instead of just telling them

How the piece made me feel Not really poetry. Kind of preachy.

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Review of Rise and Shine  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece. I am doing newbie reviews for a raid my group is doing

Overall impression of piece: I really appreciate you telling me what this is for. It helps in the review process.

Grammatical and spelling errors No obvious errors

What I liked?*Smile*: You seem to have teenage pater down pretty well. A lot of it is kind of non-verbal. This is a story that is way to common

What I disliked*Idea* There is more drama, but you had a word limit. A lot of this is non-verbal and visceral

How the piece made me feel: People are different and will always grate on each other. That was handled well

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Review of Lies  
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Our group is doing Newbie reviews. I do a lot of them anyway

Overall impression of piece This is evocative. It sounds and feels like today

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* Interesting rhymes like heard and disturbed. We do live in an age that has all kind of media but never sees a thing. Most of our on-air conversations seem like a cockfight.

What I disliked*Idea* Not really given identity to I and to the window gazers

How the piece made me feel I believe we have all kinds of truth outside our windows--truth we rarely see. My faith says, "The truth will set you free." We are a very untrue people

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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of a newbie raid by our group

Overall impression of piece: This is certainly filled with evocative imagery. I see it and feel it

Grammatical and spelling errors Punctuation would make it read better.

What I liked?*Smile* This is evocative and personal. There is very little telling.

What I disliked*Idea* You go from past tense to present in a very short time. I prefer punctuation. These are meant to be read. Blood kind of gives images of sacrifice to me. Blood heals tears. I need a bit more to go on

How the piece made me feel: Speaking of more to go on, reviewers need info in the ports to know who they are talking to.

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Rated: E | (2.5)
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Why I chose this piece Part of a power raid for newbie authors. Welcome to wdc.

Overall impression of piece: An age-old dilemma

Grammatical and spelling errors When it comes to love needs a comma. Same with a comma after rough. I will ask should probably be in quotes with the first part of the quote a capital

What I liked?*Smile* Treasure and weather are an interesting rhyme.

What I disliked*Idea* No idea what kicks are. Amplifying things really helps. This is a pretty old idea. There is a classic song like this. Look at https://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/shewantsrevenge/sh...

How the piece made me feel Just a little bit tired .

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This is part of our Newbie review raid. I think encouraging beginners is a prime thing to do anyway. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece Flight is pretty universal and we have admired it since the dawn of time

Grammatical and spelling errors: No errors. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* These three really go together. The Wright brother's father (a clergyman) said if man were built to fly, he would have wings.

What I disliked*Idea* Haiku generally has a bit more mystery than this. This is pretty logical and natural

How the piece made me feel I kind of wonder about metaphysical wings. We have people who challenge bondaries all the time

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This is part of a Newbie Power raid. I review a lot of newbies anyway, so this is right up my alley. Welcome to WDC.

Overall impression of piece: We are a little out of what is being talked about. Obviously, it is pretty important.

Grammatical and spelling errors: No obvious grammatical errors. Your block formatting needs a line in between paragraphs. It is hard to read on the screen

What I liked?*Smile* You do have postive reasons for backing your own proposal.

What I disliked*Idea* I am missing the examples on how this works. In my era, it was love, peace dope. We did grow beyond that. Thank goodness! Give specifics so we as readers can see this

How the piece made me feel: We make choices all the time and we are incredibly biased. I pretty much get that. However, I think most of life is learning how to become focused so that our true potential can come out. That means decisions. You will meet all the diverse people anyway. It is a given. I didn't see much in your port about who you are. It really helps us as reviewers to know where the writer is coming from

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is part of the spiritual newsletter. I have felt similar things.

Overall impression of piece

Grammatical and spelling errors: Semicolon kind is a replacement for and in a sentence. Perhaps a colon would be better as you are listing things Next sentence isn't one. Where not even is a clause

What I liked?*Smile* I kind of get this. It is definitely a poetic type of thought. Your format implies some need for grammar

What I disliked*Idea* You are taking me into innermost thoughts, but you haven't really developed any of this. I write short myself, but this needs some amplification

How the piece made me feel Thank goodness winter is coming to an end where I live. I feel kind of a slow-motion death. Say more about yourself. It really helps us as reviewers.

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Review of Rain  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This was part of the spiritual newsletter. I write in a similar vein

Overall impression of piece No one can disagree with your thought. It is simple and well put

Grammatical and spelling errors: Hearts is not a possessive. It is a plural

What I liked?*Smile*> Hearts be showers of love. I like that. I think we are a part of creation too.

What I disliked*Idea* God and Father are kind of redundant. Maybe as Father. I am not sure how rain and bountiful heart go together, If it is a list, there should be a comma. There is a lot of telling in this. It would be better to show what souls look like

How the piece made me feel Simple and direct.

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this in non-fiction. I kind of tend towards these things

Overall impression of piece: This is not how most people saw the Christmas story, but it certainly could have been

Grammatical and spelling errors Period after should be. Block formatting leave a line in between paragraphs

What I liked?*Smile* This is definitely a unique perspective. Thanks for sharing

What I disliked*Idea* I think we could have a little more of the backstory. It seemed kind of short and I am not sure that any change occurred. What about "Glory to God in the highest"

How the piece made me feelInns weren't actually very private and definitely not luxurious

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Review of COME  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I like this sort of thing. In the nonfiction category

Overall impression of piece: This is short, direct and to the point

Grammatical and spelling errors: Decention could not find. ?Descension. Prayers is a possessive and probably shouldn't be/ ?. probably isn't right

What I liked?*Smile* You have a lot of good theology in here. Many I could give chapter and verse

What I disliked*Idea* To love ?Him and his world?

How the piece made me feel I do believe He does shout. Luckily, He doesn't get tired.

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Review of The Goatman  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I was perusing non-fiction and found this. We have had goats. I have never heard of goatman

Overall impression of piece: This is a wild memory that needs to be spoken

Grammatical and spelling errors: Block formatting means there should be a line in between. It is hard to read on a screen

What I liked?*Smile* You have a lot going on here. It certainly is colorful

What I disliked*Idea* Some of this is in first person. Some of it is third. It makes point of view hard to track. Whose story is it? Legend is unclear as to was it named that after the evening or before. Some of the sentences are kind of convoluted and hard to follow

How the piece made me feel I grew up in the Bullwinkle generation (along with Rocky the squirrel and Boris Bedenough)

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Review of Craving Cuffs  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the Newbie newsletter. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece I can see this. I feel some of it

Grammatical and spelling errors And doesn't really add anything in the line

What I liked?*Smile* I like the unexpected twist at the end. I wasn't thinking dice games

What I disliked*Idea* I would kind of meld the casino into the situation earlier. Noisy rooms, people talking, bent over gambler

How the piece made me feel Inspirational seems a bit of a stretch. Gambling is a slavery

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the author's newsletter.

Overall impression of piece: I am definitely a Zig Zigglar fan

Grammatical and spelling errors: None seen

What I liked?*Smile* The example given is epic and unforgettable. I wonder if Beverly Hillbillies used that.

What I disliked*Idea* You have taken a specific example and kind of hinted that it applies to everyone. I think we need more tie in with more examples. Most overnight successes are really hard work

How the piece made me feel In terms of the world, he became an overnight millionaire. It is kind of a matter of perspective. I am not sure why we don't look for hidden riches

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Review of Doubt vs Faith  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This was part of a spiritual newsletter

Overall impression of piece: It is an admirable piece on the most important things we can think about

Grammatical and spelling errors: No overt errors

What I liked?*Smile* Nice quote at the end. Your piece is methodical and easy to follow, I think you have hit most of all the stumbling blocks

What I disliked*Idea* Word and Bible are not synonymous to new believers. I think there is a call towards holiness as the Holy Spirit remakes us. There are ups and downs. We are human, but we are born again. It is a process. We are following our Lord and giver of Life.

How the piece made me feel Maybe a bit too mechanical. It is logical and sequential, but personal feelings are often what changes people.. The Lord is alive and is very real.

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Review of Doubt  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is what I like to read. I am familiar with your work. I applaud you as a brother in Christ.

Overall impression of piece: Who doesn't struggle with this one? How do we find our center in order to figure out where we are going?

Grammatical and spelling errors" No errors

What I liked?*Smile* I just wrote on this verse for my church and the New Year. Transform is the same word in Greek that we get our word metamorphosis

What I disliked*Idea* This could be more about doubt than it is. You have talked about more of the solution than the problem. I am learning to define myself as God does. We live in a society intensely plagued by doubt.

How the piece made me feel Who are we as the "King's kids? It ought to mean everything

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