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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is an area that actively interests me. I was delighted to see your piece

Overall impression of piece: You have this in interesting genres and folders.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* Science and spirituality should play roles together. I am not much on religion, even though I have been in a major church for decades. I am not sure if that is where things are at

What I disliked*Idea* This is sound and logical language. It is something that is not generally in this sort of discussion. That is pretty cool, actually. I think it might be best shown in a more poetic form. Sound logical inquiries have shown how spiritual concerns influence medical outcome and they are probably better at it than this form

How the piece made me feel: You could show me more of what this process looks like

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Review of The Silent Song  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this in a newbie newsletter. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece We all know about personal songs and strain to hear them

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads reasonably well

What I liked?*Smile* We are all looking for that internal song, that we sing both to yourself and the world. This is done with a lot of imagery that shows what you are talking about instead of just telling

What I disliked*Idea* No punctuation to speak of. It is really helpful to read it like you would do it. Some is pushing cliche like deepest place in the heart and whispers of silence

How the piece made me feel Tell us more about yourself. It really helps us as reviewers. This is a very confusing world when it comes to songs. We hear often what is being sold, but not true personality and spirit. I'd like to teach the world to sing was a coke commercial

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Review of Inevitabe  
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This is definitely different and evocative. I bookmarked it to come back to

Overall impression of piece: Personal, dark and death. Maybe not the best thing to review before bed, but I see something here. You have tried to make this personal

Grammatical and spelling errors: Several of the sentences are missing verbs. Ing forms are not verbs, A lot of commas are missing from clauses> I kind of like grammarly on my computer to help out

What I liked?*Smile* I got a lot of this. Sometimes I feel I just have to do something to get out of the doldrums of my life

What I disliked*Idea* It might read better as poetry. The grammar is much easier to overlook as discussing grammar with a poet generally isn't helpful. Perhaps this should be first person. That would make things much more personal

How the piece made me feel This is about mental illness. I get that. There is a struggle here and it is very hard to see and feel a way out. Things are kind of disjointed here without real good sentences

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Review of The Train Home  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this as interesting. I am pretty well read in history and have written some of it myself. We live pretty close to Minedoka in Idaho

Overall impression of piece: You have captured the time pretty well. Train culture was decidedly different. We were pretty biased against them

Grammatical and spelling errors Americans isn't a possessive. It is just a plural

What I liked?*Smile* This is a very thoughtful portrayal of what happened. I like that you used trains. Trains were everything. It kind of tells what should have happened without being too preachy. Japanese forces in American ranks were some of the bravest.

What I disliked*Idea* As the station started to vibrate is a little problematic. I am not sure what that is

How the piece made me feel This was one of the more disgraceful times of our history. There was flaming antijapanese feeling. It did color what happened.

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Review of Lost Love Found  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I like essays and nature both. You seem to capture the human condition

Overall impression of piece: It is pretty believable. It has a nice feel to it

Grammatical and spelling errors: Well, we found needs a comma. Well is kind of a filler

What I liked?*Smile* I get the contentment about being out alone in the wilderness. There are a lot of poetic elements here, like the rhythm of the Earth. Your explanations of the separation make reasonably good sense. People are kind of that way

What I disliked*Idea* She knew him. I think there needs to be more recognition here.

How the piece made me feel We think we do things for the right reasons, but often, maybe not.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Saw this in a spiritual newsletter. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece

Grammatical and spelling errors: Missing commas after clauses. Sleeping needs a comma after. One after breath. I use grammarly on my computer as a free download. Bronchi no capital. Divine is a quote so it needs a comma before it.

What I liked?*Smile* I like the allusion of bronchi as an upside down tree.

What I disliked*Idea* Pretty much commented on above.

How the piece made me feel Our primitive brain tends to fire and give all sorts of spurious thoughts. Ritalin actual speed the remainder of the brain to catch up to these distractions. I can see a place for focused breathing too

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Review of The Poet's Pain  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the Newbie review newsletter.

Overall impression of piece: This is impressive. It is a sonnet, and it is still reasonably personal.

Grammatical and spelling errors: I could use some punctuation. You need to tell us how you would read this

What I liked?*Smile* It is kind of an inside view on what goes on in sonnet writing. I am not nearly so disciplined (or at least disciplined in a different way.) Love that you listed the contest. It is obviously well deserving of the honor.

What I disliked*Idea* Just as mentioned under grammar.

How the piece made me feel Loved your post in your bio. It makes what you wrote even more impressive.

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Review of They sing for us  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the spiritual newsletter. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: You do have a good caress of the sea's poetry

Grammatical and spelling errors Flukes would make people think parasitic worms. I realize it can be a type of fish. I do aquarium and had to look it up. Timeous is kind of archaic. Timely might be better. Slake is pretty archaic. Perhaps another word

What I liked?*Smile* There is a lot of biology here. Although it is metaphoric and not exact. I get where you are coming from

What I disliked*Idea* Mainly in the word usage as listed above.

How the piece made me feel You took us kind of deeply into this, but with imagery. Very nice.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the spiritual newsletter. No reviews for this piece. Welcome to Wdc

Overall impression of piece Interesting thoughts and ideas

Grammatical and spelling errors: Holy Spirit is a proper name. Both need to start with a capital

What I liked?*Smile* We do have marching orders. You have dealt with them pretty well. Our faith is what we do

What I disliked*Idea* {eace that passes understanding is pushing cliche. (eventhough it is biblical) This might be more personal in first person. Imagery makes this the best poem and it is kind of lacking. It could be an essay and read about the same

How the piece made me feel We are inhabited by fear. It is like an evil spirit. Love comes from God. Fear does not.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Thought I would return a review

Overall impression of piece: This did bring back some memories. I think every kid on the planet is accident prone. Guardian Angels work overtime.

Grammatical and spelling errors

What I liked?*Smile* This is personal and heartfelt. Buble wrap image is kept up pretty well. Cuz is informal usage but works in context.

What I disliked*Idea* Thoughts are a little undeveloped. I know the Israelites had protection, but they also had hard times. Most of our pain is self-inflicted.

How the piece made me feel Especially as you age--I saw your picture--pain gets more prevalent and we aren't always protected. Look at the story of Joseph. He was wrongly accused and languished in jail. Joseph would say to his brother, you meant it for evil, but God meant it for good. He prospered would be the watchword. He takes us through our pain

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Review of Whisper Her Name  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I was looking through spiritual pieces and found this one

Overall impression of piece: I liked this. How come we always want to learn on dark and stormy nights? I just know it is true

Grammatical and spelling errors You really need some punctuation in here. This is written to be read and would read better if we had more of a map

What I liked?*Smile* Interesting rhythm and rhyme

What I disliked*Idea* Gives us something more about this. It looks like you had dividends for reaching out. We generally do. A continued sentences often goes better in lower case as you start a new line

How the piece made me feel We have so much and the world is blessed by so little. We are the ones who get the most.

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Review of I am a Runner  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this as interesting. I was a runner in my younger days

Overall impression of piece

Grammatical and spelling errors I am a runner. This statement are two sentences,. to have my mind in the clouds is not a sentence. Clauses appear to be missing commas. My grammarly program really lit up with this. You can download it on your computer for free. To appear humanness should probably be human

What I liked?*Smile* We are all weird and all very different. I like capsulizing things with a simple statement. You tell us how this feels and people can look and feel if this might be true for them. This is almost surreal which makes it interesting

What I disliked*Idea* Grammar problems make this hard to read. There are grammar courses on the site.. (horizon academy

How the piece made me feel“ Some are destined to march to a different drummer. I get that. I thrive at not being
normal. Give us a little more in your bio
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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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Why I chose this piece This is a requested review. It is an honor to do this one.

Overall impression of piece: We often remember things by what we were feeling at the time. Most often, they never go away.

Grammatical and spelling errors Dashes are two hyphens and no spaces--then comes the parenthetical though

What I liked?*Smile* This is as much a poem as it is an essay. I applaud that. I couldn't imagine giving up a relationship with a daughter, but often it is the best thing. I love the running images of satin that unites the whole piece.

What I disliked*Idea* Can't think of anything.

How the piece made me feel New relationships are coming for you. There will be new pieces of satin to hold on to. It is exciting and this is an adventure. I think sometimes it just takes time to realize what is going on. Life is not easy, but it more than often works out.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the Newbie Newsletter.

Overall impression of piece: I am not an alcoholic, but human nature does tell lies.

Grammatical and spelling errors: My wife, Caroline, and I would make more sense. Comma after lighter. This is in bock format so a line inbetween paragraphs is needed. It also makes it easier to read on screen. Five years is not actually a sentence

What I liked?*Smile* I like to the two different colors of font. It is kind of the rest of the story. This is pretty honest. It is genuinely the way people think. Really good conclusison

What I disliked*Idea* Alcoholics don't get transplants. It is a waste of a liver. I have worked in transplants at University of Nebraska

How the piece made me feel Paul Harvey, in my era, would say, "Now you know the rest of the story."

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this in a spiritual newsletter.

Overall impression of piece This is a beautiful sentiment

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors. Well punctuated.

What I liked?*Smile* This has a very clear rhythm and rhyme pattern to it. I like things relating to God being capitalized. Do I believe it? Yes. Is it scripture? Definitely

What I disliked*Idea* I don't get any feeling or emotion behind any of this. It is well done in form. I think most poetry is done to try and get the reader to identify with the same feeling

How the piece made me feel Form may have triumphed over heart here.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Once upon a time there was a lonely Sasquatch, living in the backwood counties of mountain-bound Washington. Everyday,_she remembered the proud race to which she had belonged. No one knew them anymore and in fact, were a little afraid of them. One day, she found an I phone deep in the forest. She had heard of online dating and figured, there was nothing to lose. Because of that, there was a plethora of young ambitious suitors in her forest. Until finally, she had enough and had to pull the add. Love is great, but so is privacy.

Mike Swenson
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I really do like essays. It is kind of my thing.

Overall impression of piece: This made me think of my home

Grammatical and spelling errors: One capital I missing

What I liked?*Smile* This is kind of a blow-by0blow account of your storm. Those are the best descriptions. Having any kind of trees of the desert is the ultimate in optimism

What I disliked*Idea* Lost in the storm isn't really tied to anything. I assume it was the tree. Maybe a colon after tree?

How the piece made me feel I am with you. We have a desert where we live and about 50 trees. Keeping them irrigated is a struggle. We lost a 75-year-old mulberry last year. There is no replacement for that except we won't have any loss of life when it crashed. My old house was a farmhouse and they undoubtedly put up a windbreak around it.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Life and Time.  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this as interesting. You have a very consistent and identifiable point of view

Overall impression of piece: This is a very sweet piece. It makes me think that you are young, but your thoughts do show a lot of maturity

Grammatical and spelling errors: life is ravishing to admire. Ravishing is almost a verb form here and doesn't quite make sense. I would go Life too ravishing to admire or (not to admire)

What I liked?*Smile* I felt the poem. You had images that were evocative and you weren't just telling me things. I could feel them too

What I disliked*Idea* A lot of poets will leave a continued sentence on the next line to start with a lower case.

How the piece made me feel People can cherish each moment, but often they do not. It kind of takes effort and concentration to make that happen. I trust you did pretty well on your project.

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Review of Spirit Animal  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece Your poem interested me as well as your port. Spirit animals are a big part of our Indian culture

Overall impression of piece. There are a lot of basic things that are well delineated.

Grammatical and spelling errors Seems ok

What I liked?*Smile* I think a tortoise does have something to say if we are willing to wait.

What I disliked*Idea* Turtles are more aquatic. Tortoises are more land animals. I need a lot more development on this.

How the piece made me feel Most of us would not go with a tortoise. We don't have a culture that will wait for it
If you are a tortoise, it is about the journey, not the speed record.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review. I don't believe I have reviewed your work yet.

Overall impression of piece: This bleeds and feels. It feels real

Grammatical and spelling errors: Maybe start with a quote. It sounds like you are saying that. It is a common lament of mankind in general. One I is not capitalized

What I liked?*Smile* I get this. It is hard to be real before anyone. It is a life-long struggle. I like that you punctuated this as you would read it. It is really hard to guess. Your images are sinewy with scars and I can really feel them

What I disliked*Idea* Mostly format things as listed above.

How the piece made me feel You are a little sketchy on your port history. I think there is more to know. Why write? Reviewers love that sort of thing. These are things that real people deal with. Most folks do not.

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Review of Carve Me  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I was reviewing non-fiction. I read the piece and thought it interesting. This rarely happens at my house

Overall impression of piece

Grammatical and spelling errors I woke up is pretty much a run on sentence. You could use a semicolon after holding a knife but would still need to end the sentence after stab me.

What I liked?*Smile* I am generally not a scary fan, but this was interesting. It certainly is dark. I won't be coming to your house to trick-or-treat.

What I disliked*Idea* Hit on the head needs a little more of a build up. Bludgeoned is putting everything in one word. You want to make this even more memorable.

How the piece made me feel I suspect you might have cut this short for a word limit. I would go for it

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of What is science?  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece I have a special place for a non-fiction writer. I also had 35 years in Pathology and love to teach

Overall impression of piece I certainly can't say that your heart is not in the right place. You might look at my site for science articles

Grammatical and spelling errors: You have a lot of clauses, that need to be set off by commas. I use grammarly on my computer to mark things for me. It is a free download. You are using a block format to set up your piece. There generally is a line in between paragraphs. It is really hard to read on the screen

What I liked?*Smile* I have worked in labs most of my life. It would be home for me. You are trying to convey a love for science

What I disliked*Idea* This is kind of general. It is kind of a generic lab. We are studying everything from protons, to viruses to nutrinos. You are wanting them to dream. Most kids would know the general info.

How the piece made me feel

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Review of Rough days  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the newbie's newsletter. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece

Grammatical and spelling errors: There are lots of things here that a grammar catcher should pick up. I's aren't capitalized. Apostrophes are missing. Two periods after different way. Ellipses are three dots. Good news, there are ways. There is misspelled.

What I liked?*Smile* This is open, somewhat gritty and honest. I think this can be helpful to know from a first hand experience

What I disliked*Idea* You could put grammarly on your computer. It is free to download. Even words spell and grammar check will get most of this

How the piece made me feel Everyone has anxiety to some extent. I believe you are talking about panic attacks

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Review of Realms of Love!  
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this in a newsletter. I am a Christian and have been married for 43 years

Overall impression of piece This is commitment. Very rarely do the feelings come all the time like this, but they are to be applauded

Grammatical and spelling errors: No errors. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* This is kind of triumphant and heroic. I am not sure if my spouse has seen me as Caesar (except in bad times). This reads well. Rhyme is not obtrusive

What I disliked*Idea* There is a feeling here that seems somewhat incomplete--see below

How the piece made me feel My spouse does not have to jump through hoops for me all the time. When she does, it is spectacular, even after 43 years. There is a certain amount of hanging in there in hard times. Covenant has little to do with feeling. Do it, and the feeling comes

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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece Ths is a requested review. I often review spiritual things

Overall impression of piece: I know most of these. I also write in similar veins. You certainly have an extensive array of scripture here. I can see some of the reasons for perhaps their choice.

Grammatical and spelling errors: No obvious errors

What I liked?*Smile* Most of your scriptures have a leading title. It helps to know where you are going with these. There is no way I can say you are wrong. I know the author. They all pretty much address man's need for significance and to find their God

What I disliked*Idea* You do kind of copyright this at the bottom. I have to admit; I have heard this before. Most of us really do a lot more scripture than we think we do. What is really needful is for someone to give a personal depth and testimony to the words. These words obviously mean something or they wouldn't be in the best selling book on the planet. What do they mean to you?

How the piece made me feel You can write something meaningful about one or two verses. I would rather do one thing well, than have folks wonder what is being said.

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