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Review of Special  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the newbie reviews advertised.

Overall impression of piece: Nothing like a mysterious five year old already more mysterious than we might imagine.

Grammatical and spelling errors

What I liked?*Smile* Kids growing up are unbelievably stressful. We think we have things all figured out and most often, we are terribly mistaken. It seems there is a family curse here that she has broken. That is kind of intriguing

What I disliked*Idea* What is her special ability? You never really say. Why does she have to be locked up? This seems like the ultimate, "Timeout." I am pretty lost here. I need a lot more to go on. Who is Iris? I think this would be better as first person. Most stories are in the details.

How the piece made me feelWe all have special abilities

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Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Starting Over  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the author's newsletter.

Overall impression of piece It is kind of a piece of, "You wonder how these things get started."

Grammatical and spelling errors Continued quotes with a capital to start. Most simple numbers are spelled out. Perhaps the creative one as an appositive construction to the previous sentence.

What I liked?*Smile* I like the personality evoked here. Everyone who has ever written has felt this, to a point. There are interesting images in here, like the marble floor. Editors do slice things to near oblivion.

What I disliked*Idea* General comments about your writing and what editors thought could use a little more explanation. They are a bit too general

How the piece made me feel I pretty much get this. With all that collaboration, the writing would have seemed to have been by committee. Committees don't do anything original. This is open and honest.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of The Waiting Room  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Your work was featured in a newbie newsletter. I found this interesting so I chose to comment

Overall impression of piece: I like this. Death must be both disconcerting and reassuring. By Earth standards, this is a conundrum.

Grammatical and spelling errors You didn't punctuate this. Many poets do not. It makes things much easier to read.

What I liked?*Smile* There is a lot of reassurance and maturity in these words. I am sure there is much more of a story here. You have put imagery here to show things like acceptance to heaven. That is much more effective than just telling us

What I disliked*Idea* Maybe there should be quotes in here, especially from Gabrielle. When he spoke, it was always a big deal


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Review of Pain of the Heart  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece A newbie review. Welcome to WDC. Advertised on a side panel

Overall impression of piece: You know a fair amount of the human condition

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads very well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* This is succinct and to the point. We really are this way. I can't disagree with anything you say.

What I disliked*Idea* There is a lot of telling things about how things are and how they should be. The best approach is to induce an emotion that makes us feel how you feel

How the piece made me feel Put something in your port as to who you are. It really helps us as reviewers

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece A newbie review

Grammatical and spelling errors: 12:00 with a colon. Wincers with a cap(proper noun). Two is spelled out

What I liked?*Smile* You felt this. I think that is what it pretty effective. I suspect you know something of hospitals. Your post op sequence seems kind of realistic

What I disliked*Idea* I don't see the tie in between day one and two. Being remodelled and a robot on the inside doesn't sound like any of today's technology

How the piece made me feel I am not sure how I am expected to take this. It could be more directed.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Confused  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece A newbie review off a side panel

Overall impression of piece

Grammatical and spelling errors: Don't really follow any grammar per se, but poets often do this

What I liked?*Smile*This is direct language of the heart. I think it is more prevalent than mostly understood. Most folks try to self analyze when the problem may not be them. What a great description!

What I disliked*Idea* I have no idea of free as a though. It looks like you are halfway between prose and poetry

How the piece made me feel We are caged. We have boundaries often put on us by others.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This was on the review list. No reviews? I love a challenge.

Overall impression of piece This is quite good. I think we do have a tendency to create our own realities. Walter Mitty adventures kind of showed this

Grammatical and spelling errors No errors. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* You know your science well. I was going to be an ecologist way back when. That didn't work out. I have spent time in Medicine and have worked as a zoo and aquarium volunteer. I know what the deep jungle looks like. You have characterized it well

What I disliked*Idea* Blink of an eye is bordering on cliche. Class is over would be equally as abrupt and unexpected. Your transitions in and out of your daydream seem a bit abrupt. I have no idea what rafflesia is. A footnote?

How the piece made me feel Your lectures words had become real. The ones who have really explored these things can tell of their experience. We may do things in our imaginations first. I kind of identified with the writing. Perhaps you would like some things on my port?

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Review of Unexpected Grace  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this in the spiritual newsletter. It intrigued me.

Overall impression of piece: This is very good. Rhyme does show a lot of structure and thought

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors.

What I liked?*Smile* I like the rhyming. It is not forced or artificial. I like how you changed the patterns of rhyme. I think you did speak to the human condition

What I disliked*Idea* I think the last two lines almost cry out for a rhyming couplet. Birth might work really well there. The world is continually being reborn

How the piece made me feel There is order in the universe. I think it is a microcosm of heaven. Heaven must be really grand.

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Review of The Shipped Girl  
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Rated: E | (2.5)
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Why I chose this piece Newbie article advertised on a side panel

Overall impression of piece

Grammatical and spelling errors: Suburban as an adjective

What I liked?*Smile* Fiction likes this type of story. You do have a point of origin.

What I disliked*Idea* Most stories have to have a conflict and at least, some movement to resolution. There has to be some reason to commit this to words. Detail makes this. it needs a lot more. How were they shipped?

How the piece made me feel In the South, during slavery days, shipping themselves to freedom was not unheard of.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of What can you do  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is a newbie review. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: This is unique and pretty well crafted.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* We are formed by our choices. Most never figure this out. We live in a culture where bad choices are the new norm

What I disliked*Idea* It is a bit too over rhymed Some seem a little forced. News giving way to shoes seems a bit much. The most clever of these rhymes is the last couplet, but it is easy to overlook it because of all the other ones

How the piece made me feel I am not sure if others help us see. I think we generally see when we are ready to do so. Often, we like blindness.

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Review of Truth  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece A newbie review. Welcome to WDC. I love when people try to actually say something

Overall impression of piece: This is worth reading. What is truth? Why is it important?

Grammatical and spelling errors Block type of formatting has a line in between paragraphs. Not having it makes it hard to read on screen

What I liked?*Smile* You are right. Look at the ways we talk about things in the media. Nobody agrees on much of anything. I am not sure if should be that way

What I disliked*Idea* First paragraph is pretty weak/ You repeated the title and really didn't have something to grab me and make me want to read on. I read this and kept kind of looking of why this is important to me about truth as a reader and didn't really find it.

How the piece made me feel Truth is relative, so why bother looking for it? Perhaps, you are saying that it is personal? If it is personal, then communication and essays may be counterintuitive. I believe that truth is much more universal, even if you don't have my belief system. I am not saying you are wrong.

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Review of GRIN & BEAR IT  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the author's newsletter.

Overall impression of piece: This is classic. It is more than bearable.

Grammatical and spelling errors: No errors

What I liked?*Smile*: I love your brief intro. The picture too is indeed classic. All our different faiths definitely have a definite way about them. Progression is logical. Jewish lingo is classic and well done. It is appropriately rated. I found nothing in here offensive. The humor is adult, but still within reason

What I disliked*Idea* Can;t think of anything

How the piece made me feel This is imaginative and classic. You obviously did have parameters which you followed quite well

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I am not sure how this popped up. It looked interesting

Overall impression of piece: I havaen't seen this much of an animal story since reading, "The Tales of Archie and Mehitabel." You might like it. Archie is a cockroach who is a reincarnated free verse poet.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Simple numbers like nine and four are spelled out. As I wrapped it in a paper towel is really part of the quote that came before.

What I liked?*Smile* This is personal and there is obviously a relationship between all of these participants. You have an animal thing. We know what that is at our house.

What I disliked*Idea* Point of view is kind of unclear. We have someone driving a bus and animals with a love life that seems rather personal. The fact really doesn't appear to tie into much. This story doesn't really appear to reolve any conflicts so it is a little obscure.

How the piece made me feel I see relationship. I see warmth. There are elements here that can make this good.

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Review of post card  
Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece

Overall impression of piece: You definitely have ap poet's eye when writing this.

Grammatical and spelling errors Block formatting requires a line in between paragraphs. It is particularly hard to read on screen. I am not sure what pasting is. Also I think you mean sense instead of scene

What I liked?*Smile* I get a bit of a visceral feel about what this might have been like. It makes me think of terra cotta soldeirs buried there

What I disliked*Idea* I need to know more of your attachment to the country and why you feel this way. As a Westerner, I could use more detail. I know nothing of millions of millions dying; why not be specific?

How the piece made me feel A little bit in your bio would help us know more about you and help us reviewers

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Late  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece

Overall impression of piece. Intriguing and interesting

Grammatical and spelling errors: Some I's aren't capitalized. A lot of clauses are missing commas. This will be the last time is a different sentence and is a run-on sentence. Two spaces after a period.


What I liked?*Smile* I have known people who would be late for their own funerals. It is kind of a surprise ending, but then again, life often is. I do get the feeling of climbing into a casket--although I have never done such

What I disliked*Idea* Watch your grammar. People often won't review things like this.

How the piece made me feel Genres seem appropriate.

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Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece This was part of the author's newsletter. We have just about everything here. Pets for me are an acquired taste.

Overall impression of piece: Who can't love this piece. It is personal. I get to know a lot about the author and your family. I too spent time in the Navy. I also got married soon after.

Grammatical and spelling errors No errors

What I liked?*Smile* The picture is too cute for words. A picture is really worth a lot of words. These feelings are pretty common and easy to identify with. We have had two girls at our house and innumerable dogs, cats, chickens, ducks, goats, etc

What I disliked*Idea* Can't think of anything.

How the piece made me feel I think it was interesting that you named it after your daughter. If you can't have kids at home, get a puppy. Try putting a child in a kennel

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Saw this in the spiritual newsletter

Overall impression of piece: This is a cool piece. I saw the before and after pictures from looking at your site. We all do have an impact.

Grammatical and spelling errors Seems ok. Reads well.

What I liked?*Smile* I think even the non-coffee people can get this. It is visceral and sensory and we know what it is like

What I disliked*Idea* Overfloweth seems a little on the stilted side

How the piece made me feel You obviously got this pretty early on. Sometimes even tragedy has some blessings.
We don't realize what our words mean.


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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the spiritual newsletter. I love the topic of the meaning of life.

Overall impression of piece: This is quite good. Spring is a miracle. The Earth was seemingly dead and comes back to life.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* I love the extended image of the flower. Maybe you got this from somewhere. If you did, you need a footnote. I love that you put all the parameters of the piece.. You did quite a job.

What I disliked*Idea*: There are a lot of injunctions against magic in the New Testament. You are right. There is a mystery here. Life itself is pretty mysterious. You have told us a lot of how things are. I think there could be more description

How the piece made me feel I think all of Earthly life is a reflection of Christ. We don't do perfection. Christ is the only source.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the spiritual newsletter. I am very familiar with your work

Overall impression of piece: This was an interesting event. Jesus' death was obviously an eclipse. Book of Revelation seems to have them too

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* This is very matter-of-fact and well put. Many kind of look at these in dread. It seems kind of matter of fact. There are many more of these than we realize. They often have taken place over water.

What I disliked*Idea* Chills running down my spine is bordering on cliche and doesn't add much

How the piece made me feel This might be better as a prose type piece. the poetic form really doesn't add much. I feel the event shows how little we are in control of anything

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Meaning of Life  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this in the spiritual newsletter. Who doesn't want to know the meaning of life?

Overall impression of piece: I applaud your work in English. My language of the Indian subcontinent would not be good.

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads incredibly well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* Rhymes are pretty well done. They are not too predictable

What I disliked*Idea* I have to kind of go with this from the English point of view. This has a lot of cliches: Life has ups and downs, not a bed of roses, don't chase money. They are good from a moral point of view (like Aesop) but these are hardly new and don't tell me what you think and feel

How the piece made me feel The facts are here. I am not sure how to process the feelings. I think that is what most have trouble with

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This was kind of tied to one of my pieces, Creation's fire. It is lengthy with no pictures--if interested.

Overall impression of piece: This has a lot of merit. It has rhythm and rhyme. The picture helps it a lot.
Grammatical and spelling errors

What I liked?*Smile*Why not do something big. It is when all of this originated. What did they have in mind? I love cosmic latent hologram. It was all of one creation. You are star-stuff. You do have a nice couplet on the end. I love that you labelled the picture.

What I disliked*Idea* I had to look up akashic. At least give a footnote. Most of us do not know Sanskrit. I never get a picture of what the Master Key is

How the piece made me feel This is big. It could be nothing else.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the plug page. I like history and current events. It certainly is in the news.

Overall impression of piece I could write a whole page perhaps on this thought-provoking piece. (Maybe I will or maybe I won't

Grammatical and spelling errors: No errors

What I liked?*Smile* You ask some very pertinent questions here. Do we have to fight the Civil War all over again to be socially correct? The whole concept is definitely ludicrous as we lost more folks in that war than all the wars up to Vietnam. I certainly can not invalidate your premise.

What I disliked*Idea*What changed in the aftermath of the Civil War? In terms of the actual living, I would say little changed. We enacted amendments which would be important. There was blood and fire on our streets in the 60's that told us we needed to take this seriously.

How the piece made me feel America became a country after the Civil War. They would say that the United state are a great country. I think true change takes time and, a lot of patience. North and South soldiers come in the same bag now. They didn't use to. Of course they all come from China

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this advertised on a side panel. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: I like free verse too. Imagery and feeling are much more important than rhyme

Grammatical and spelling errors Can't see past it; would be better. Those are two complete sentences

What I liked?*Smile* This is open and honest. It is hard for anyone to get through this. You have images of smell. They are powerful because they are visceral You gave us enough background to place the poem

What I disliked*Idea* I really like punctuation in the poem. It helps us know how to read it. The questions are really vital. In fact, it is what the piece is about.

How the piece made me feel Put something on your port about you. I think you are better than you give yourself credit.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the Newbie newsletter. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: A tale probably as old as time. We can never seem to get away from ourself

Grammatical and spelling errors suspect theirs might be there's. Its is it's as in it is. Too much pain. I would capitalize I, but would acquiesce to poetic voice.

What I liked?*Smile* We do think that things are all new when reality says, they are not. You seem to have a voice that catches the human condition.

What I disliked*Idea*: This seems a bit over rhymed. Perhaps three lines of a stanza seems a bit artificial

How the piece made me feel

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the newbie newsletter. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece This does ask an interesting question. Can love stop war? I am not sure if we have seen it in our lifetimes.

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* You have real imagery here without much telling as to what you mean

What I disliked*Idea* War has different meanings and But love lines are more telling. I am not exactly sure what the last three lines mean. I don't exactly have to know but I need more of a hint to decipher this

How the piece made me feel First four lines seem they are in the midst of things. They are quite good. Tell us something about yourself in your port. It really helps us as reviewers.

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