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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the writer's newsletter. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: I can see why this has an impressive number of reviews. This is pretty helpful. I probably need to get some more of these. It is the path to serious writing. The Power of Positive Thinking by Peale was rejected 40 times and it is one of the best selling books of all times

Grammatical and spelling errors: No obvious errors.

What I liked?*Smile* You sound like you know quite a bit of what you are talking about. My favorite is about the editors that went to a delicatesant and the editors all agreed that the baloney was excellent. Nobody on the planet likes getting these.. You included links and honestly tried to help those who might be getting such letters

What I disliked*Idea* Can't think of anything.

How the piece made me feel This is well thought out and honest.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I like essays. I have been a healthcare worker for 35 years. I have relatives in Canada who dearly love their healthcare.

Overall impression of piece This is an impressive piece of writing. The facts are all there. I can sense the thoughts behind them. It is a pivotal issue for our times

Grammatical and spelling errors: No obvious errors

What I liked?*Smile* You have all the right factors. Healthcare in this country is twice as expensive as anywhere else and the results are not as good.

What I disliked*Idea*: I would keep the main objective in mind in developing this. Health care costs too much. Our people and country are going broke. Your writing style and personal history don't really add to the argument

How the piece made me feel Our medical field is desperately out of touch with treating disease in an efficient manner. We do need more patient focused treatment. There is a huge risk and fight against a litigious society. Legal is not as important as right. I am not sure how we fix this.

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Review of A Fond Farewell  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I kind of like essays. I review a lot of them

Overall impression of piece: This was kind of a trip down memory lane. Rene Dubos would say, our buildings form us. This sounds like a shining example.

Grammatical and spelling errors: No obvious errors

What I liked?*Smile* You talked about the emotional attachment to the place. Change is never easy. Your descriptions brought back a lot of old memories. I remember seeing movies for a quarter on Saturday. Parents sent their kids and no one worried.

What I disliked*Idea* Saying goodbye to an old friend is self-explanatory. Several old friends is not immediately obvious. We need a little clarification. Are you talking old movies? Etched in our memories is bordering on cliche

How the piece made me feel We have movie theaters that have gone through many owners and two different stores afterwards. Still remember the theater. It was a focal point

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the Newbie newsletter

Overall impression of piece. You do have evocative imagery. I can't say you have copied anything. It is original

Grammatical and spelling errors Lack of punctuation hinders.

What I liked?*Smile* The images are very powerful. I especially like, "use my brain like buttons."

What I disliked*Idea* Without punctuation, this is hard to read. Feathers and a miasmatic anal wind is a little hard to get to be understanding

How the piece made me feel You do have a voice. I am not sure if we totally connected

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Review of Spitfire Man  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I was intrigued enough from the first piece, that I thought I would try another

Overall impression of piece: I am kind of a history buff. I think you caught the tenor of the times well

Grammatical and spelling errors: No errors. Reads well.

What I liked?*Smile* Your images are pretty graphic and easy to see. You have visceral, smell and sight images all engaged.

What I disliked*Idea* I have no idea about cordite. A footnote may be in order. This is kind of a poem and an essay all put together. It is kind of confusing

How the piece made me feel I think a lot of people ask the "Why me" question. Maybe there never is an answer.

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Review of The Tree  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece In the Newbie newsletter

Overall impression of piece: I really like this. I live in a house built in 1953 when the area was just agricultural fields. Old farmhouses had a lot of trees to break the wind

Grammatical and spelling errors Starting sentences with a conjunction really doesn't add anything, especially when you have another but in the sentence. Otherwise, pretty good.

What I liked?*Smile* The things these trees have seen. My trees have been around for about 70 years--maybe longer. I think as a society we tend to ignore them. Then, the fall down and make a big mess.

What I disliked*Idea* No real problems. I congratulate you on your goals. I spent time in the US Navy

How the piece made me feel This is a kind of trees eye view of the world. You are right. We tend to mow them down and put in parking lots for convenience.

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Review of Farm Life  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the Newbie newsletter.

Overall impression of piece: This experience obviously meant something to you

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* You have for sure been on a farm. You do know what is going on. I see sights and sounds

What I disliked*Idea* You've put punctuation in and it helps in the reading. A lot of the sentences don't really read as sentences. I think you have kind of over rhymed this. Pig slop and rabbit hop don't seem to go together and are kind of contrived. I would rhyme no more than 2 of four lines

How the piece made me feel I don't get a good feeling about who you are. You talk about the farmer, but your role is kind of vague. I am not sure if most farm folks are alarmed at snakes

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is a requested review

Overall impression of piece. There is a lot going on here. It is amazing that a teenager wrestles with stuff such as this. Welcome to Wdc. In essence, you are asking a couple of really pertinent questions: 1. Can we change things on a spiritual plane. 2. Is our future alterable

Grammatical and spelling errors

What I liked?*Smile* Such serious questions are dealt with in a remnant of a nursery rhyme. Seems fitting somehow. Your picture is quite illustrative of how annoying medicine can be. I believe it to be a breast cyst aspiration

What I disliked*Idea* Enemy isn't really defined. It kind of slips in there in the end. I am not sure if anybody on the planet can answer the two questions in the beginning of the review.

How the piece made me feel I am never sure how you stand in all of this. We make a difference in what way? At least the nurses are pretty and smell good. Keep writing. You do have a lot of evocative imagery here. It can be used and polished.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Writing Drivel  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the Newbie newsletter. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: This is a personal essay. There is a lot of personality here.

Grammatical and spelling errors New Years both with caps

What I liked?*Smile* You do write in an erudite way. The words are well put together. I think there is a certain zaniness in the whole procedure.

What I disliked*Idea* This is both a comedy and has a certain degree of pathos in it, all at once. I am not sure how you feel about this or how I am to take it.

How the piece made me feel No herb gardens for me. I only have a shower.

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Review of Medical Model  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the Newbie newsletter. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece : I have never reviewed a mermaid before. I do volunteer at an aquarium and we do have one. People communicate with her by shell phone. Loved your port picture. This piece was fun

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* You certainly have the medical lingo down pretty good. I had a career there. I also am older so I know about natural reluctance to new things

What I disliked*Idea* Pills mix the poison of booze and comfort food. Really? What are you taking?

How the piece made me feel In your own flippant way, you have hit upon what is really wrong with medicine today. We treat parts of a person--not the whole being. I think most of our ailments are spiritual and until that is healed, nothing gets any better. I think we as indivduals are looking for rebirth as is our society

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this in essays. I have a family section where I jump into somethings too

Overall impression of piece Why do we hurt the one's we love. It is a curious paradox. There is purpose by families and purpose behind individuals. Sometimes they line up. Sometimes the do not.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems intact.

What I liked?*Smile* I kind of like the general direction you take this. I think families are the building blocks of society and of individuals. The conclusion is right on.

What I disliked*Idea* I don't really have a clear indication of why we hurt families. I gave you my spin. I need explanations as to security

How the piece made me feelWe have tense work situations sometimes because there is no hierarchy and we are not accountable to anyone but ourselves

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Review of A Plea  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this on a side panel. I get this

Overall impression of piece I have never heard that phrase before but it is probably apt. Depressed people have a higher rate of Alzheimer's.

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors.

What I liked?*Smile* This is honest and forthright. I can tell you feel all these things

What I disliked*Idea* I am not sure from reading this whether you really want to solve this problem. It is more of a lament. Come suffer with me is not much of a plan to entice a reader. You have a lot of telling to tell your story. Imagery to evoke those emotions is better.

How the piece made me feel We are such a chasm of conflicting emotions and experience. It is like looking over the edge of the Grand Canyon and expecting to see everything. I don't think it is possible. I think you are struggling to define yourself. You must know others to help in the process.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this in a newbie newsletter. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece

Grammatical and spelling errors . Conceived and misspelt. Persuer is pursuer

What I liked?*Smile* You have a lot of the business jargon down pretty well. How else would he end a business deal in jeopardy? Sufferin succotash! Your unlikely scenario seems reasonably ok.

How the piece made me feel Not really a feeling piece, but it did bring up old memories. This was fun.

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Review of Flight Risks  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the Newbie newsletter

Overall impression of piece. This is an interesting piece on distress and eustress. Not all stress in bad for you. We actually can't live without it.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* You have a lot of good action imagery. There is a pretty god visceral component to this

What I disliked*Idea* Bog us down os bordering on cliche as is bring us to our knees. I would like more on the difference between regrets and risks

How the piece made me feel Couldn't we fly in a light ethereal atmosphere? I think we could. I think the real question is, would we want to? What makes our hearts take wing?

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the spiritual newsletter. I know about disconnect.

Overall impression of piece

Grammatical and spelling errors Period always ends a sentence-- no spaces. enslaved me has a space.. Last sentence is without a period.

What I liked?*Smile* It is an idea as old as time. We all know about this type of reality. This seems pretty honest and heartfelt.

What I disliked*Idea* This is such a big idea that I, as a reader need to know exactly what the particulars are. How do you feel? I always love brevity, but this is missing the things that would orient me as a reader.

How the piece made me feel I think our own perceptions are what enslaves. us. How many say, "No one loves me?" There are always connections out there. We all have our own particular blindness.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I always love essays. I frequent them a lot. Part of the author's newsletter.

Overall impression of piece I don't think many could argue against your English professor.. This is very succinct and actually covers a lot of points

Grammatical and spelling errors: No errors

What I liked?*Smile* All your points are pretty well stated and succinct. Some of them like putting a piece of yourself forward, I would not have expected.

What I disliked*Idea* This kind of looks pulled from other sources and doesn't have much about what you think. It is missing examples. As a reader, we want to know what you think and how you use these.

How the piece made me feel How did your characters change from receiving the information? This is missing an of the "I" component. Readers would reflect and say, "Maybe I can do that too."

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Review of I am  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This was advertised on a side panel. Welcome back to WDC

Overall impression of piece: It is always kind of fun to look at what you haven't reviewed anytime recently

Grammatical and spelling errors

What I liked?*Smile* I think you know these things personally and know what they look like. What we see, is not generally what really is. These are hard discrepancies

What I disliked*Idea*. I am reality... Now what? Things are really kind of left open-ended.

How the piece made me feel I am that I am is also the name of God in the old Testament. It is considered a Holy name. I am sure it caused a lot of terror in its day

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Review of Listen  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is part of the spiritual newsletter. I review a lot of the submissions

Overall impression of piece: I love getting the actual prompt that this was written for.

Grammatical and spelling errors: No errors

What I liked?*Smile* This reads well. There is progression in the faith as we know him better. Your rhyming of second and third lines help make this more readable.

What I disliked*Idea* I am weak and you are strong is pretty close to cliche. Changing unsure to insecure is a clever way to get a rhyme, but isn't the most sensible in terms of meaning.

How the piece made me feel Following and pleasing the Lord is a process. You don't just wake up one morning and start doing it. I like how you have gone past present and future. Can you obey without believing? I wonder about that. Obedience is kind of an end product. Following God is for thrill seekers. I guess I can buy that.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of The Write Life  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece

Overall impression of piece

Grammatical and spelling errors One in one must right starts lower case. getting ready eagerly is not a complete sentence so a semicoln is not appropriate.

What I liked?*Smile* Regardless of any critique, this open and honest writing. I totally believe that you believe each and everything.

What I disliked*Idea* Set yourself free is borderline cliche. Consider another phrase. Same with in the zone and some other things

How the piece made me feel Maybe it's kind of like Frankenstein's monster. It is a new life, but until it's been revised, it is kind of funny looking. Passion is what causes things to happen. Do birds have a passion to fly? I think we, in general, do try to edit ourselves. Mostly, it is unwarranted.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of The Gift.  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is a return of review. I looked at your port and found we had things in common. I too like guitar. Alright, I am 20 years older

Overall impression of piece: This is a well-crafted piece. It is structured with a lot of nuances that make it easy to read.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* There is a lot here. The rhymes are well thought out and no strained to make them rhyme

What I disliked*Idea* Maybe a comma after deed. Maybe a comma after so low.

How the piece made me feelThis seems personal out of the knowledge that you personally know. That is what works the best. We are to be the best we can be of ourselves, personally.

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Review of Craftmanship  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up for me on a random review. It is not generally my genre, but I kind of liked it.

Overall impression of piece: It is a kind of funny thing happened on the way home from the auction

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok

What I liked?*Smile* Dialogue is quite clever. I can really two the two people involved. It is easy to follow. Story line is quite easy to follow. The mirror swallowed her up.

What I disliked*Idea* This kind of varies in point of view. Parts of it are from Doris' perspective and the end come from Carl. I think it would have been better from one point of view.

How the piece made me feel You are what you associate with. Be careful what you play with.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This was in a newsletter. I found it interesting, so I bookmarked it

Overall impression of piece: I get the comedy. I see a fair amount of validity here.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok

What I liked?*Smile* Any work, creative or otherwise is work. It will cost you something. The work is part of the creative process.

What I disliked*Idea* Sinister is a root for evil, or left handed. Creative people are supposed to be different, but not necessarily sinister--unless they work for the government

How the piece made me feel Can muses work to our timetable? I haven't noted that to be true. O am not sure we should let them run about the house freely

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Yellow light  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up from reading a newsletter. It interested me.

Overall impression of piece: You have written about one of the basic conundrums of being human in two rather short paragraphs

Grammatical and spelling errors: Well, Today, What, I will. I needs a capital

What I liked?*Smile* There is a lot here. You have used an analogy to show what you mean and how we feel. It is used pretty well

What I disliked*Idea* Maybe being loved would feel like. It is written as a letter/memo but we don't know to whom.

How the piece made me feel I think humans have a natural reticence in matters of the heart. That is where all the significant matters of life happen and we kind of hold back. Love is always a gamble and there is a risk

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Review of All these words  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This was in a newsletter. Welcome to WDC, again

Overall impression of piece This is a pretty highly crafted piece. Rhythm and rhyme seem to work, predominantly

Grammatical and spelling errors Periods seem to be optional. You have some but leave others out. It does read pretty well

What I liked?*Smile* Most of the rhyming is pretty good and not strained. The words and sentiments seem to be extremely honest and open

What I disliked*Idea* All these words are poetry. I assume it is the poem itself. I think you are talking about words to heal--to make a new connection in mind and soul. There is more here. Perhaps the rhyme became more important

How the piece made me feel Should we long to be cold and callous like someone else? Is it the way of the world? Is it our way?

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Review of HUMAN MACHINE  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece I got referred to your piece from another I liked

Overall impression of piece: You listed cultural emotional and experience. It kind of delves into spiritual. Are we spiritual beings having a human experience or vice versa.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems ok. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* Rhyme here is very clever and works well. I like you putting down what your format is. I do sense the rhythm. This is very thought provoking

What I disliked*Idea* It almost seems there is a difficulty between deciding about mind and spirit.

How the piece made me feel Can spirit be free in a human form? I would believe it can. Otherwise, how can we make decisions based on our creator's design. Power is in the Spirit--not the machine

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