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I do a lot of reviews. I try to honestly assess both pluses and minuses. Not a grammar champ, but I try
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Review of Truth  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I have appreciated your support, so I am returning a review. Love forcefully is almost a mantra of our society. I too don't think it works as there has to be a meeting and accepting involved. Power doesn't associate with love (unless its paid) and then, it is fee for service

You generated a lot of thought in your 30 syllables. It could be deeper, but doesn't necessarily have to be

Michael
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Review of More Coffee?  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I spent some time in the military so I know some off humor. Navy was kind of famous for that. A lot of colorful expressions come from Navy like "Shake a leg." I like that you gave a source in your author's note. Introduction comment really set the stage.

Two major problems the main one being it really isn't very funny. It is pretty crude. You could embellish your own stories better. The fact that it is attributed to someone else
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Cool piece for 12 years old. I went through the polio attack in the 50's We were kind of dumb to know what was going on. They thought it came from bananas or stray cats.

These feelings are pretty universal in our age. I volunteered 5 places that aren't open at all. I started writed in Junior high

Thee way to make this best is to say how you personally feel. I would capitalize your I's in the sentence. Poets do pretty much whatever.

Never stop wwriting

Michael
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Review of True  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Great first line. We all make poetry and beauty, if we are open to truly hear and feel what is going on. God may have created the world originally (I am sure He did) but we continue to recreate it, Poetry is getting back to the original creator. Maybe that is the actual root you talk of.

You have got a lot of what this feels like. Maybe there is more?

Happiness does grow in relationship. Speaking of relationship, don't be afraid to fill out your bio. It helps us as reviewerss. I would guess Rocky mtn states

Michael
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Review of God's timing  
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Rated: E | (2.5)
It looks like your intro and your piece are one in the same. People have written books on the subject. Give us a lot more. You must have some real life examples. People are hurting being locked up by the virus. Of course, this is just a blip in God's time. I think it may be a time to learn to love ourselves
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Review of Marriage  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Yes, I get this. There are issues that seemingly won't go away. We're different. One is male and on is female, for starters

I have been married for 46 years. I figure that things have evolved numerous times. I want them for the better. I often don't feel that is what is happening.

We need too create relationship. We call it a marriage covenant/ That is a sacred promise before God. If you made a covenant,you sacrificed animals and burned them up saying, if I violate the covenant, this will happen to you. In Abraham's case, God burned up sacrifices on both side of the covenant while Abraham slept.

WE can't do Covenant on our own. Divorce rate is sky high. You are logical in your thinking but this kind of transcends logic

Michael
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a pretty cool piece. We have thrown out the Non essential jobs during Covid. It seems like the beurocrats should have been candidates. Who is essential. See what happens to America during a garbage strike. Actually they are pretty well paid.

You are asking some pretty vital questions here. Capitalism says we should get the most bang for our buck. It is our way. We our not a society based on social justice. Covid is about the greatest good for the biggest number. I firmly believe that.

The military has few generals and a lot of privates. Sure they're essential. Who will do the work?

Forced shut maybe shut down
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Definitely a drive down memory lane. Most of the cars were before my time

Overall impression of piece Seem to know your cars well

Grammatical and spelling errors No obvious errors

What I liked?*Smile* YOu seem to have an extensive view of cars I have never seen or thought about. My 69 Rambler seemed classic and it worked, for us

Points to Ponder:*Idea* I think the format kind of handcuffs you a bit. Poetry is good for feeling and imagery of what something looked like. This has little of that. I think Louis the fourteenth said the quote, not Degaul, but Degaul said all kinds of crazy things

How the piece made me feel You never said how you felt about them

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Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This got tied to another piece about horse riding

Overall impression of piece: This piece is quite bearable

Grammatical and spelling errors No errors

What I liked?*Smile* You didn't set yourself up as an expert, but you obviously know quite a bit. You gave specifics, especially how big is big

Points to Ponder:*Idea* How many of us will be bear hunters? Truly, I barely hunt at all. Humor might make this more universal. Why bears? Why this piece?

How the piece made me feel Fact piece. Little feeling

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Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Valentine Flight  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I can see why this is so well reviewed and liked. Our memories are tied to smell and the visions they entail. When Sirhan Sirhan remembered killing Bobby Kennedy, he first had to be guided through the anger he felt.

It is easy to understand and feel along with you. One and being are both capitalized. Interesting. Maybe we are both Godlike. Can we be like that here on Earth?

I liked coming full circle to jumping off the picnic table. A lot of us remember stuff like this. (I polevaulted off a building) The flight was good but the landing was a bit harsh
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Review of Whisked Away  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow. This is fun. We are created to be something. Like eggs,we nurture ourselves and others. Who knows what will come out? Have you seen me cook? It can be ingeneous.

To do lists will wait, but are we defined by what we do?Is the story the story without a narrative plot where things happen?. I live with an extreme introvert.

Who isn't waiting for an adventure? The Fantastics musical has a line that says "Celebrate adventure. You've been there. You remember. That secret place where you hid away from the tyranny of time and life was sweeter than the berries or the stinging taste of mint."

Favorite play. Yours is pretty excellent too.

Michael
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Thank you for writing something worth reviewing> I like thoughtful pieces

Overall impression of piece You obviously did a lot of introspection to come up with this. Frost would write about the Road not taken. Crisis means a dangerous opportunity. Covid has brought up certain strengths I have kind of left dormant

Grammatical and spelling errors: Starting a sentence with And generally not helpful

What I liked?*Smile*This is a life long process. We have a hidden giant inside of us, waiting to get lose. We hold ourselves back

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Never really talked about the cloud of self pity. Probably a lot of folks do. Antinurturing of my upbringing is interesting. Perhaps we prefer to be like Peter Pan

How the piece made me feel Wow. We are all works in progress. I am not too sure that anyone has ever fully arrived. My career ended after 35 years. It was my definition. It shouldn't have been that way. A hope you sent Albert a copy of this or his family. Are we our education or something else?

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Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of Weight of War  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Welcome to WDC
Why I chose this piece This is a real treat to read.

Overall impression of piece: Wow. This is a battle. We like to think it isn't and that we are in control. We are not.

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads very well. No errors.

What I liked?*Smile* This is very picturesque. I can't say you have not seen things well

Points to Ponder:*Idea* You have got lots of questions. The serious side of this is answers. We have power of and in the third day. The same power that resurrected Jesus is available to us as believers. We aren't taught to live in this power. Why is that?

How the piece made me feel You have a lot to offer. Don't hold back

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Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of One Voice, God's  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this advertised.


Overall impression of piece: This is good

Grammatical and spelling errors: Punctuation is a bit erratic. One verse has none

What I liked?*Smile* You didn't steal from the Bible, but just about everything here is in the Bible in some form. You put your own beautiful spin on it and it works

Points to Ponder:*Idea* If it is so obvious, everyone should look around and say, isn't He glorious. We are a tough bunch

How the piece made me feel The evidence is there. It is talked about, alot. We need to open our spirtual eyes and see it as it really is.

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Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I too grew up Catholic. Mom was catholic and Dad was Lutheran. He had to make concessions. I found I didn't really believe what Catholics believed so now I am something else.

This is very personal and thought provoking. Liberation starts at the Salvation experience, but there is sizable upkeep that is necessary. I tried to see where you were going with this. Even your site was pretty blank. Spirtually I think someone is trying to say, this is where I am at; how about you?

This is important enough to write about. It is entertaining, which kept me reading
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Review of Just A Baby  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
You have watched these babies. They are all looking for the same things if they are 2 or 22. I think that even as adults, we take hesitating kind of steps forward. What if I am wrong? What if I fall down. This isn't easy

You've got this. I can tell by the numerous reviews and the high star value. I see it too. It is easys to see and relate to.
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Review of Sensory Overload  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: There is no doubt about how you feel. I am glad I am older and don't get hooked into as much

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well No errors

What I liked?*Smile* This seems like an anxiety attach. Buddha said (not a fan) humans have 3000 thoughts per second. You have described it well.

Points to Ponder:*Idea* There seems no way out. I think we all can find a quiet place. Baby's breathe from their diaphagm. No chest breathing. We learn to speed things up

How the piece made me feel All the time that people waste on social media would be enough to run the three largest companies

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Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (3.0)
A prologue is set up to get people to read something. This has got certain things on the human interest portion. We are all strange--even 68 year old reviewers. You need to entice us to read the story. Why does he have a core personality. Is there something mysterious about the Hubb? Why should I read the story? Style is kind of old fashioned like referring to the author as interacting. Let your hero interact, if only on a limited manner. What is he like?
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Thought I'd look at one of your pieces for your generosity in rewarding my reviews. This raises some interesting questions. Apparent is an interesting word. What do we know without further insight? Can true love ever be rigid. In North American culture, we might say, "My way or the highway." That seldom works out. Is there room to grow?
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Rated: E | (4.5)
They were amazed with Jesus during his own day. They had heard nothing like that out of the regulated Jewish faith. He spoke as one who had authority. Today's authorities tend to waffle a bit.

This is kind of a "Magical Mystery Tour of religion. It is isn't pertinent, than it is not worth knowing.

Sagan, of note was kind of a Godless one. Everything was science and God meant nothing. Most of our Godliness is how we treat others

Picky point: Book titles are underlined

Keep on writing. This is cool stuff.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece +I saw this advertised and have written similar pieces

Overall impression of piece: This is a pretty cogent piece. They do kind of sneak up on us. No one plans a crisis

Grammatical and spelling errors In most cases, in without a cap

What I liked?*Smile* Good advice about taking emotion out of the scenario. Suggestions are logical and sequential

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Never answered what is a crisis. Perhaps it is anything that takes us out of our daily rituals and routines

How the piece made me feelI think there are general rules for crisis management. Maybe we could teach our governments> Covid pieces are highlighted in my port

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Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Review of That Night  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece Newbie review. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. Simple numbers like three spelled out.

What I liked?*Smile* I could see the place and time. I could sense some of the feelings

Points to Ponder:*Idea* To much telling. The poetic outlook often focuses on description and feelings, not telling. There is a lot of telling. Perhaps not the best format. Maybe prose?

How the piece made me feel Kind of like our Covid 19 living. I have felt some of this. Tell us more of yourself in your bio. You are "Grey storm" will a blue logo

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Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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Why I chose this piece Previous reviewed a piece

Overall impression of piece Before the last days, there will be plagues. Could this be a precursor, or the warm up act.

Grammatical and spelling errors; Seems intact

What I liked?*Smile* We too have seen increased numbers. We have spent money to keep our pathways open. Nobody knows how long

Points to Ponder:*Idea* Beginning and end seem like a scripture. Note what it is. God is a relational God. These truths have been along for a while. He needs His people to form relationships in His name

How the piece made me feel You seem to be using numbers to justify your position. We need to change culture, not just have more friends on facebook. I like the review only selection

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Peace and beauty in freefall
MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Cool deal. This is probably stuff I should know but don't. I know most of it exists, but as to a timeline, not so much
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Rated: E | (5.0)
You know things, if it seems that you were there with the author. Most new parents have felt this way. Not familiar with the Book of Mormon story, but I get the gist. New mothers look at every aspect of the newborn, including smell. If they don't pray, they certainly should. They will later.
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