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Review of Poetic Tension  
Review by fyn
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Well crafted!!

'Streetwalkers of discourse' so, so, so, SO good!

Using this in this week's poetry newsletter!
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Review by fyn
Rated: E | (5.0)
Your words... sometimes I feel as if I've walked into an overhanging steel beam! (That's a good thing!)

One little suggestion. Don't negate the sheer power of your words with embellishments--underlinings, italics, bolds etc. You do not need them!!!

Using this in this week's Poetry Newsletter. ~ fyn
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Review of Truth to Oneself  
Review by fyn
Rated: E | (4.5)
There's a lot to like in this piece, but I do have some suggestions.I would suggest breaking up some of the lines and making it three verses so the part in the middle works better (when it isn't rhyming)

Also, the line needs a missing word or three-->Slowing it down for there’s things that the can be quickly passed,

If 'there's things' as several, then it would not be 'there's' <--there is but 'there are.'

Using this in this week's Poetry Newsletter! ~fyn
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Review by fyn
Rated: E | (5.0)
Excellent points. The verse about the toddlers was priceless. I'm using this piece in this week's Poetry Newsletter~ ~fyn
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Review by fyn
Rated: E | (5.0)
Loved this--it made me smile! Traveled roughly the same number of miles. Puts a new spin (ahem!) on the idea! I'm using this in this week's Fort Authors Newsletter. ~fyn
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Review by fyn
Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh, this made me smile and ... of course... it was real! *grin*

I'm using this in this week's For Authors Newsletter. ~fyn
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Review by fyn
Rated: E | (5.0)
Loved this!!! From start to finish! Well written and cannily crafted! I'm using this in this week's For Authors Newsletter! ~fyn
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Review of The Knight  
Review by fyn
Rated: E | (5.0)
Good article. I'd classify it as such rather than as a short story tho. Me, I was brought up to believe in that noble knight. They kept falling on their swords, losing their horse or failed their chivalry courses!! I did end up with my knight eventually though. His armor is battered and bent. He's rusty around the edges. But he treats me like gold, has a heart that wants to save everyone and is the reason I can believe in happily ever afters!

I'm using this in this week's For Authors Newsletter! ~fyn
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Review by fyn
Rated: E | (5.0)
Yes! Using this in this week's For Authors Newsletter!
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Review of NATURE  
Review by fyn
Rated: E | (5.0)
Yes. Using this in this week's Poetry Newsletter! ~fyn
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Review of The Snowman  
Review by fyn
Rated: E | (5.0)
Yes. This made my day!!! Using it in my newsletter this week! Even if it is the poetry one. Because, it its way, it is! ~fyn
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Review by fyn
Rated: E | (5.0)
Been there, done that. Then I raised a ruckus and least some of 'em come home for Christmas. Course, my youngest is forever young (like her mom!!!) so we have all the olden magic again! Using this in this week's Poetry Newsletter! ~fyn
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Review of Special Snowfall  
Review by fyn
Rated: E | (5.0)
I don't care how old one is, Christmas Eve snow is pure magic! Using this in this weeks Poetry newsletter. ~fyn
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Review of A Dog's Christmas  
Review by fyn
Rated: E | (5.0)
Sits here giggling! Using this in this eek's Poetry newsletter! ~fyn
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Review of Candy Cane Clouds  
Review by fyn
Rated: E | (5.0)
Nice images here, clearly seen! I'm using this in this week's Poetry newsletter!~fyn
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Review by fyn
Rated: E | (5.0)
Perfection!!!!! Using this well-crafted piece in my For Authors Newsletter this week!!! ~fyn
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Review of Smucker's Jar  
Review by fyn
Rated: E | (5.0)
This made a very tired lady smile! I'm using this in this week's For Authors Newsletter!~fyn
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Review of Twin Christmas  
Review by fyn
Rated: E | (5.0)
Great read! Great kids. Using this in this week's For Authors Newsletter ~fyn
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Review by fyn
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Initial thought---won't go where? Away--in general? Hell, no. The Corps go where they are needed. Please fill me in on what I'm missing here. If I am, (and I'm an Army veteran and a boomer) others will be too.

From the perspective of the writing, didn't see any errors etc. and it is well written.
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Review of A Love Story  
Review by fyn
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Yes!!!! LOVE THIS!!! (yeah, yelling it to the rafters!)

Using this in this week's Poetry Newsletter ~fyn
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Review by fyn
Rated: E | (5.0)
Excellent! I particularly liked the lines:
An assembly of shadows
gather to mourn the loss of realism

and

And why for this little boy
do suddenly those wooden horses
on a quiet carousel
come alive with welcoming whinny's
that only HE can hear?


Vrilliant!

Using this in this week's Poetry Newsletter! ~fyn
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Review of The Ringmaster  
Review by fyn
Rated: E | (5.0)
Excellent, as always. You never disappoint! Using this in this week's Poetry Newsletter! ~fyn
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Review by fyn
Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Excellent. Like the dark take on this! Using this in my Poetry Newsletter this week! ~fyn
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Review by fyn
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Excellent short story full of lines like: No birds sang for him this dark morning, no clouds strolled through the sky, and no hope built itself a fire in his heart.

I only wish you'd given the reason for the following: Ikaw ang puso ko.

Did I miss something??

Using this in this week's For Authors Newsletter. ~fyn
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Review by fyn
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is excellent, well-crafted writing!

Using it in this week's For Authors Newsletter.
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