This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just read your wee tale, The Shepherd. Once again you have written a great story that grabs the reader‘s attention.
APPEAL:Those who like to read about vampires will love this creepy wee tale.
WHAT I LIKED:The emotion and images your words create.
HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL:A wee bit scared.
TITLE:Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale/poem was about.
FORMAT:This is easy to read and understand.
SETTING:You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION:My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.
Seems to be alright.
DIALOGUE:The dialogue sounds natural. I know who is speaking without the overuse of dialogue.
POINT OF VIEW:I know who's point of view I’m in.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just read your wee tale, The Panther In the Hall (short version). What a great picture at the top of the tale.
APPEAL:Those who like to read about
WHAT I LIKED:The way the opening paragraph grabs the reader‘s attention.
HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL:It made me laugh in places and cry in others.
TITLE:Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale/poem was about.
FORMAT:This is easy to read and understand.
SETTING:You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION:My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.
Seems to be alright.
DIALOGUE:The dialogue sounds natural. I know who is speaking without the overuse of dialogue.
POINT OF VIEW:I know who's point of view I’m in.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just read your wee poem, Unicorn's Tears.
APPEAL:Those who like to read about love shall love this wee poem.
WHAT I LIKED:The emotions it creates.
HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL:Content.
TITLE:Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this poem was about.
FORMAT:This is easy to read and understand.
SETTING:You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION:My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.
Seems to be alright.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just read your wee song, The Valiant Women of Darstarius.
APPEAL:Those who like to read about fighting back when there seems to be no hope will like this wee song.
WHAT I LIKED:The images the words created in my mind.
HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL:A bit sad at the lost.
TITLE:Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale/poem was about.
FORMAT:This is easy to read and understand.
SETTING:You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION:My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.
Seems to be alright.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just read your wee tale, The Fun House. What a menacing picture at the beginning of the story.
APPEAL:Those who like to read about Fun Houses will love this wee tale.
WHAT I LIKED:How the story grabs the reader at the beginning and doesn‘t let go until the very end.
HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL:A wee bit unnerved.
TITLE:Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale/poem was about.
FORMAT:This is easy to read and understand.
SETTING:You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION:My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.
Seems to be alright.
DIALOGUE:The dialogue sounds natural. I know who is speaking without the overuse of dialogue.
POINT OF VIEW:I know who's point of view I’m in.
OTHER SUGGESTIONS:In the future you might want to check ML Writing: Docs & Help found under Writing.com Tools so you can indent your paragraphs, plus add other things such as italic to your stories.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
Chapter:I just read chapter 1 of your novel, Entangled.
Title: Chapter 01-Entangled
Author: Max Griffin
APPEAL:Those who like to read mysterious will find this an interesting start to a novel.
WHAT I LIKED:All the questions that are popping into my head.
Plot:Kevin needs to discover why Khalid had a gun, why there’s blood on him and who the strange blonde is? The plot comes through loud and clear. Did Khadlid have a flashback to when he was in the military causing him to freak out and pull the gun? Where did the gun come from? Was Khalid trying to rob the bank? Stop the protesters? How did Kevin get blood on himself? Who’s the blonde lady saying that her husband and her would take care of Kevin?
Style & Voice:All the characters mentioned so far are coming through strong. All the characters mentioned seem to be needed to answer all the questions chapter 1 brings up. Their voice are clear.
Referencing:Tale seems to be set in modern day.
Scene/Setting:You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.
DIALOGUE:The dialogue sounds natural. I know who is speaking without the overuse of dialogue.
POINT OF VIEW:I know who's point of view I’m in.
Characters: The characters come across as believable. Kevin seems like an ordinary college age guy, who’s in love. I feel sorry for Kevin at this point because his lover was just shot and killed right in front of him. I know what it feels like to loose someone you love, whether it be a brother, mother or lover. Kevin’s voice is coming through loud and clear.
Grammar:My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.
Everything seems to be alright.
Showing vs. Telling:You did a good job with the showing vs. telling. You used the right balance to make the story flow smoothly.
Just My Personal Opinion:This first chapter has piqued my curiosity and I can’t wait to read more of this tale.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just read your wee poem, Unicorn Tears.
APPEAL:Those who like to read about unicorns and wizards will love this wee poem.
WHAT I LIKED:The touching scene the words paint.
HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL:Encouraged that kindness still exists in this world.
TITLE:Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this poem was about.
FORMAT:This is easy to read and understand.
SETTING:You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION:My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.
Seems to be alright.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just read your wee poem, The Dream.
APPEAL:Those who like to read about dreams will love this wee poem.
WHAT I LIKED:The fantasy world dreams create in our minds.
HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL:Happy. It made me smile.
TITLE:Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale/poem was about.
FORMAT:This is easy to read and understand.
SETTING:You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION:My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.
Seems to be alright.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just read your wee tale, Blood.
APPEAL:Those who like to read about unruly plants shall like this wee horror tale.
WHAT I LIKED:That you chose an unlikely plant to create your horror with.
HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL:A wee be afraid. Some plants are carnivorous and eat meat such as a Venus Fly Trap.
TITLE:Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale was about.
FORMAT:This is easy to read and understand.
SETTING:You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION:My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.
Seems to be alright.
DIALOGUE:The dialogue sounds natural. I know who is speaking without the overuse of dialogue.
POINT OF VIEW:I know who's point of view I’m in.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just read your wee poem, Night Song.
APPEAL:Those who like to read about fairy and magic shall love this wee poem.
WHAT I LIKED:The emotions it stirred within.
HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL:Happy to be alive.
TITLE:Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale/poem was about.
FORMAT:This is easy to read and understand. The pumpkin orange sure grabs the reader‘s attention.
SETTING:You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION:My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.
Seems to be alright.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just read your wee , tale To My Lost Mystery.
APPEAL:Those who like to read about lost love or a love that can never be shall love this wee tale.
WHAT I LIKED:The emotion behind the words.
HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL:A wee bit sad at the lost of a love.
TITLE:Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale was about.
FORMAT:This is easy to read and understand.
SETTING:You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION:My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.
Seems to be alright.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just read your wee tale, Bitter Dreams.
APPEAL:Those who like to read about death and lost shall like this wee tale.
WHAT I LIKED:The images the words invoke.
HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL:Sad at how lost this soul felt.
TITLE:Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale was about.
FORMAT:This is easy to read and understand.
SETTING:You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION:My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.
Seems to be alright.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just read your wee poem, Black Rain.
APPEAL:Those who like to read about lost shall like this poem.
WHAT I LIKED:The images the words invoke.
HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL:A wee bit sad.
TITLE:Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this poem was about.
FORMAT:This is easy to read and understand.
SETTING:You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION:My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.
Seems to be alright.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just read your wee tale, The White House on the Hill.
APPEAL:Those who like to read about ghost and getting even will like this wee tale.
WHAT I LIKED:The lady and her children punished their attacker.
HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL:Sad. No one should have to live in fear of losing their life.
TITLE:Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale/poem was about.
FORMAT:This is easy to read and understand.
SETTING:You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION:My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.
Seems to be alright.
DIALOGUE:The dialogue sounds natural. I know who is speaking without the overuse of dialogue.
POINT OF VIEW:I know who's point of view I’m in.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just read your wee poem, Ivan and His Sword.
APPEAL:Those who like to read about magical weapons will love this wee poem.
WHAT I LIKED:The twist at the end.
HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL:Surprised.
TITLE:Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this poem was about.
FORMAT:This is easy to read and understand.
SETTING:You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION:My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.
Seems to be alright.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just read your wee poem, Falling.
APPEAL:Those who like to read poetry will find this an interesting poem to read.
WHAT I LIKED:The iamges the words invoke.
HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL:I‘m not sure.
TITLE:Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale/poem was about.
FORMAT:This is easy to read and understand. The spacing grabs the reader‘s attention.
SETTING:You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION:My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.
Seems to be alright.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just read your wee poem, Red Dragon.
APPEAL:Those who like to read about slaying dragons shall love this wee poem.
WHAT I LIKED:The imagination that comes across.
HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL:A wee bit sad that the dragon had to die.
TITLE:Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale/poem was about.
FORMAT:This is easy to read and understand.
DESCRIPTIONS/DETAILS:Your choice of words brought this poem to life.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION:My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.
Seems to be alright.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just read your wee poem. Halloween Horror.
APPEAL:Those who like to read about Halloween shall like this wee poem.
WHAT I LIKED:AAThe images your words created.
HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL:A wee bit scared.
TITLE:Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale/poem was about.
FORMAT:This is easy to read and understand.
SETTING:You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION:My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.
Seems to be alright.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just took a peek at your images and signatures, and decided to take a peek at Dozen Delights Image.
WHAT I LIKED:Its bright colors and happy theme.
APPEAL:Those who like bears, balloons, presents and birthdays shall love this signautre.
The image matches the title quite well.
The colors used are eye catching and appealing.
The words stand out nicely against the background and do not block the image.
The image is easy to see and I know what this signature is.
You gave credit to the person who designed this signature.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just read your wee poem, The Paper Garden.
APPEAL:Those who like to read about lost love shall like this poem.
WHAT I LIKED:The picture the words painted.
HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL:Sad.
TITLE:Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale/poem was about.
FORMAT:This is easy to read and understand.
SETTING:You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION:My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.
Seems to be alright.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just read your wee poem, Blood and Petals.
APPEAL:Those who like to read about death shall find this an interesting poem to read.
WHAT I LIKED:The details that describe what‘s happening.
HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL:A bit unnerved.
TITLE:Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale/poem was about.
FORMAT:This is easy to read and understand.
SETTING:You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION:My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.
Seems to be alright.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just read your Chapter 4 of your novel, The Bifrost Bridge.
APPEAL:Those who like to read fairy tales and Norse mythology shall find this an interesting novel.
WHAT I LIKED:Chapter 4 moves the story along and has added a major problem that needs to be solved.
HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL:Curious to see where this shall lead.
TITLE:Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale/poem was about.
FORMAT:This is easy to read and understand.
SETTING:You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION:My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.
OOPS!
“Hermod, please tell the guards to open the gate so we can go!” said -- You left Silje out.
“I brought something I want to share with you” Hanne told her cousin at length. -- the comma is missing.
DIALOGUE:The dialogue sounds natural. I know who is speaking without the overuse of dialogue.
POINT OF VIEW:I know who's point of view I’m in.
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Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just read your wee poem, Territory.
APPEAL:Those who like to read about fighting a losing battle shall find this intriguing.
WHAT I LIKED:Flowers were turned into warriors to fight for control of a lawn.
HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL:It made me smile.
TITLE:Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this poem was about.
FORMAT:This is easy to read and understand.
SETTING:You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION:My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.
Seems to be alright.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just read your wee tale, Dagera.
APPEAL:Those who like to read about archaeologists and what they find shall like this wee tale.
WHAT I LIKED:The way Earth is described without saying Earth is the planet under archaeology survey.
HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL:It made me smile.
TITLE:Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale was about.
FORMAT:This is easy to read and understand.
SETTING:You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION:My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.
Seems to be alright.
DIALOGUE:The dialogue sounds natural. I know who is speaking without the overuse of dialogue.
POINT OF VIEW:I know who's point of view I’m in.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.
I just read your wee poem, Soul of Blood.
APPEAL:Those who like to read about death & the grim reaper shall like this wee poem.
WHAT I LIKED:The rhyme.
HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL:A wee bit scared.
TITLE:Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale/poem was about.
FORMAT:This is easy to read and understand. The spacing gives it a bit of an unique shape that adds character to the words.
GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION:My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.
Seems to be alright.
Great job.
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt
Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak
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