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Review of Terror in White  
Review by Ladybug
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi Diane,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your wee poem, Terror in White. I really liked reading this.

*UmbrellaP*APPEAL: Those who like to read about ghost shall love this poem.

*UmbrellaP*WHAT I LIKED: The images the words create.

*UmbrellaP*HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL: A wee bit scared.

*UmbrellaP*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale/poem was about.

*UmbrellaP*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*UmbrellaP*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*UmbrellaP*GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Seems to be alright.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review by Ladybug
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi DragonWrites~The Fire Faerie~,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

Love your user name.

I just took a peek at your images and signatures, and decided to take a peek at Flight of Fancy Signature.

*UmbrellaP*WHAT I LIKED:

*UmbrellaP*APPEAL: Those who like

*UmbrellaP*The image matches the title quite well.
*UmbrellaP*The colors used are eye catching and appealing.
*UmbrellaP*The words stand out nicely against the background and do not block the image.
*UmbrellaP*The image is easy to see and I know what this signature is.
*UmbrellaP*You gave credit to the person who designed this signature.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review of Ben  
Review by Ladybug
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi The Storymaster,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just took a peek at your images and signatures, and decided to take a peek at Ben. What a handsome fellow.

*UmbrellaP*WHAT I LIKED: Ben is a beautiful silver tabby cat. I love cats. And your Ben reminds me of my beloved Nova who recently died. She was a sweet wee cat and who loved rubbing against you.

*UmbrellaP*APPEAL: Those who like

*UmbrellaP*The image matches the title quite well.
*UmbrellaP*The colors used are eye catching and appealing.
*UmbrellaP*The image is easy to see and I know what this signature is.
*UmbrellaP*You gave credit to the person who designed this signature.

*UmbrellaP*WHAT I DIDN’T LIKE: Absolutely nothing.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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for entry "Lesson 001 Outline" 
Review by Ladybug
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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'The CSFS WDC is 12 Celebration Raid!'

Hi the last cicada,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your outline for wee tale, Dragons Beneath My Feet .

*UmbrellaP*APPEAL: Those who like to read about dragons will find this interesting.

*UmbrellaP*WHAT I LIKED: It‘s about dragons, one of my favorite fantasy cretures.

*UmbrellaP*HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL:
A bit confuse. I’m not sure what‘s going on. Events seems to be out of order.

*UmbrellaP*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale/poem was about.

*UmbrellaP*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*UmbrellaP*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*UmbrellaP*GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

OOPS!
Often they are No Drop Zones. -- I think they should be there.

Significant Event 009:

Middle Brother doesn’t do much with Ugor. Plays with Ugor occasionally. -- Question: Is this a new Ugor?

*UmbrellaP*DIALOGUE: The dialogue sounds natural. I know who is speaking without the overuse of dialogue.

*UmbrellaP*POINT OF VIEW: I know who's point of view I’m in.

*UmbrellaP*OTHER SUGGESTIONS: Your Significant Events seem to be out of order. You have Ugor dying then a few significant events later, Ugor is still alive.

*UmbrellaP*WHAT I DIDN’T LIKE: This outline is a bit confusing.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review by Ladybug
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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'The CSFS WDC is 12 Celebration Raid!'

Hi Adelie,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your wee tale, More Than You Know.

*UmbrellaP*APPEAL: Those who like to read about government conspiracies shall love this wee tale.

*UmbrellaP*WHAT I LIKED: This tale sets up a mystery to be solve. Just what is The Project and what is it suppose to do?

*UmbrellaP*HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL: Intrigued. Wanting to know more.

*UmbrellaP*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale/poem was about.

*UmbrellaP*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*UmbrellaP*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*UmbrellaP*PLOT: Your have an interesting plot with just enough details to keep the reader reading.

*UmbrellaP*GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Seems to be alright.

*UmbrellaP*DIALOGUE: The dialogue sounds natural. I know who is speaking without the overuse of dialogue.

*UmbrellaP*POINT OF VIEW: I know who's point of view I’m in.

*UmbrellaP*OTHER SUGGESTIONS:

*UmbrellaP*WHAT I DIDN’T LIKE: That it ended and I don’t know if they got away with killing Alex and what The Project is?

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review by Ladybug
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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'The CSFS WDC is 12 Celebration Raid!'

Hi Jimmy,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

*Key*Chapter: I just read chapter 2 & 3 of your novel, The Bifrost Bridge.

*Key*Title: The Bifrost Bridge

*Key*Author: JimmyC

*UmbrellaP*APPEAL: Those who like to read about fairy tales or Norse myths shall like this novel.

*UmbrellaP*WHAT I LIKED: The novel is advancing in a logical manner giving the reader a bit more detail.

*Key*Plot:
*Paw*I’m still not sure what this novel is going to be about.

*Key*Style & Voice:
*Paw*This tale is being told from Hanne’s point and view and stays there during these chapters.

*Key*Referencing:
*Paw*It’s written about Norway during Viking times and the story bares this out.


*Key*Scene/Setting:
*Paw*You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.


*Key*DIALOGUE: The dialogue sounds natural. I know who is speaking without the overuse of dialogue.

*Key*POINT OF VIEW: I know who's point of view I’m in.

*Key*Characters:
*Paw*Hanne and Silje come across as normal ten-year-olds.
*Paw*The few minor characters name help move the tale along and don’t take away from the main characters.

*Paw*Grammar: What to Comment on: Some of you aren't strong in this area and others... WOWIE! But that's what's so great about these forums. You may not be able to comment on a lot of the grammar issues, but you can certainly comment on other things. What you will miss, others will not. Just do what you can and what you know.

My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

OOPS!
1. Hanne had just turned ten years old, but he could see the striking woman she would be become. -- you added an extra that’s not needed. Remove be.


2. “How wonderful! What did you name him?” asked Silje.

“Solskin,” said Hanne. “I named him that because his golden coat and his fluffy white mane made me think of the sun. Wait until you see him! He has grown so much, and she has magic horseshoes now.” -- which gender is Solskin? Silje says he, then Hanne says she.

3. “I have a new horse too. Her name is Draumur. I saw her in a dream before I got him, so that is how she got her name. -- same problem here. What gender is the horse?

4. “But you’re only ten years old!” exclaimed Silje. -- How old is Hanne. In chapter 2 it says she’s 10, then toward the beginning of chapter 3 Silje mentions Hanne is 11, and this sentence says she’s 10.

*UmbrellaP*OTHER SUGGESTIONS: to go a viking for booty -- for those who don’t know much about Norway, you might want to explain it. I know going a Viking for booty means they went raiding for treasure, crops and animals, even women and children.

You might want to place chapter 3 in its own file so there‘s not so much to read for those reviewing this novel.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review by Ladybug
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Renée,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your wee poem, Death of a Unicorn.

*UmbrellaP*APPEAL: Those who like to read about unicorns shall like this wee poem.

*UmbrellaP*WHAT I LIKED: It‘s anout one of my favorite mystical creatures, a unicorn.

*UmbrellaP*HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL: Sad at the death of such a beautiful magical creature.

*UmbrellaP*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale/poem was about.

*UmbrellaP*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand. The blue grabs the reader‘s eyes and those few words in black stand out, catching the reader‘s eye, too.

*UmbrellaP*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*UmbrellaP*GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Seems to be alright.

*UmbrellaP*WHAT I DIDN’T LIKE: Nothing.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review of KITTENS  
Review by Ladybug
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Itchy Water,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your wee poem, KITTENS.

*UmbrellaP*APPEAL: Those who like to read about kittens will find this a delightful poem to read.

*UmbrellaP*WHAT I LIKED: The poem is about kittens and I love cats. Plus you gave a brief explantation of what a Janaku poem is.

*UmbrellaP*HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL: a wee bit sad that only two of the kittens made it.

*UmbrellaP*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale/poem was about.

*UmbrellaP*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*UmbrellaP*GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Seems to be alright.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review by Ladybug
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Maryann,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just took a peek at your images and signatures, and decided to take a peek at Holiday Auction Image.

*UmbrellaP*WHAT I LIKED: Two of the wee elves are dancing on the book while the other one sits and enjoys the fun.

*UmbrellaP*APPEAL: Those who like elves will love this image.

*UmbrellaP*The image matches the title quite well.
*UmbrellaP*The colors used are eye catching and appealing.
*UmbrellaP*The words stand out nicely against the background and do not block the image.
*UmbrellaP*The image is easy to see and I know what this signature is.
*UmbrellaP*You gave credit to the person who designed this signature.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review by Ladybug
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi S. R. Hawkins,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your wee poem, Friend I Have In You. WOW!

*UmbrellaP*APPEAL: Those who like to read about their relationship with their mothers will find this wee poem heart warming, and full of love and respect.

*UmbrellaP*WHAT I LIKED: It‘s about a mother‘s love and understanding for her child.

*UmbrellaP*HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL: Sad and it brought tears.

*UmbrellaP*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale/poem was about.

*UmbrellaP*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*UmbrellaP*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*UmbrellaP*GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Seems to be alright.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review of Beastly Lessons  
Review by Ladybug
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi Pennywise,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your wee tale, Beastly Lessons.

*UmbrellaP*APPEAL: Those who like to read about demons shall like this wee tale.

*UmbrellaP*WHAT I LIKED: How the tale suggests a demon until the very end when it‘s revealed it‘s the anti-Christ.

*UmbrellaP*HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL: A bit unnerved.

*UmbrellaP*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale/poem was about.

*UmbrellaP*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*UmbrellaP*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*UmbrellaP*GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

OOPS!
His hand caressed the mop of hair on the boys head. -- boys should be boy’s.

*UmbrellaP*DIALOGUE: The dialogue sounds natural. I know who is speaking without the overuse of dialogue.

*UmbrellaP*POINT OF VIEW: I know who's point of view I’m in.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review by Ladybug
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi StephB,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just took a peek at your images and signatures, and decided to take a peek at Bard's Hall Journal Image.

*UmbrellaP*WHAT I LIKED: I love the ladybugs.

*UmbrellaP*APPEAL: Those who like ladybugs shall love this wee image.

*UmbrellaP*The image matches the title quite well.
*UmbrellaP*The colors used are eye catching and appealing.
*UmbrellaP*The words stand out nicely against the background and do not block the image.
*UmbrellaP*The image is easy to see and I know what this signature is.


*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review by Ladybug
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi SoCalScribe,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your wee poem, Baking Aspirations.

*UmbrellaP*APPEAL: Those who like to read rhyming poetry shall love this wee poem.


*UmbrellaP*WHAT I LIKED: Its rhyme reminds me of a nursery rhyme.

*UmbrellaP*HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL: Full of energy.

*UmbrellaP*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale/poem was about.

*UmbrellaP*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*UmbrellaP*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*UmbrellaP*GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Seems to be alright.


*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review of Black Rose  
Review by Ladybug
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Hi magdaleine,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your wee poem, Black Rose.

*UmbrellaP*APPEAL: Those who like to read about faith in God or roses shall find this an interesting poem to read.

*UmbrellaP*WHAT I LIKED: The images your words paint.

*UmbrellaP*HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL: A bit sad.

*UmbrellaP*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale/poem was about.

*UmbrellaP*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*UmbrellaP*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*UmbrellaP*GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Seems to be alright.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review of The Detective  
Review by Ladybug
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi BeckyL,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your wee poem, The Detective.

*UmbrellaP*APPEAL: Those who like to read about detectives who protect and serve will enjoy reading this poem.

*UmbrellaP*WHAT I LIKED: The way it made me feel.

*UmbrellaP*HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL: A bit scared. A poor woman was viciously attack and may lose her loving heart to bitterness.

*UmbrellaP*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this poem was about.

*UmbrellaP*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand. The large font and a space and a half between the lines made it easy on my old eyes to read.

*UmbrellaP*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*UmbrellaP*GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Seems to be alright.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review by Ladybug
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hi Hektor,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your wee tale, The Eve of all Hollows (Introduction). That first paragraph grabs the attention.

*UmbrellaP*APPEAL: Those who like to read about meeting mysterious stranger shall find this an interesting wee tale to read.

*UmbrellaP*WHAT I LIKED: It sets up a mystery to be solve.

*UmbrellaP*HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL: Curious to learn more.

*UmbrellaP*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale was about.

*UmbrellaP*NAMES: Lord Dollfus Baffle pot -- I love this name. It brings a rather odd fellow to mind.

*UmbrellaP*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand. Did you intend for this to be centered?

*UmbrellaP*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*UmbrellaP*GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Seems to be alright.
Yet I found the following sentence a bit confusing. -- The well respected English lord had become the laughing stock among his colleagues, which now far from respect him.

I think respect needs an “ed” at the end, too.

*UmbrellaP*POINT OF VIEW: I know who's point of view I’m in.

*UmbrellaP*OTHER SUGGESTIONS: Please continue this tale. I would love to know what happens next.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review by Ladybug
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Pat,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just took a peek at your images and signatures, and decided to take a peek at Bear with Bouquet and Pink Butterflies.

*UmbrellaP*WHAT I LIKED: The innocent look on the bear‘s face. He looks a wee bit shy.

*UmbrellaP*APPEAL: Those who love teddy bears and flowers will love this image.

*UmbrellaP*The image matches the title quite well.
*UmbrellaP*The colors used are eye catching and appealing.
*UmbrellaP*The words stand out nicely against the background and do not block the image.
*UmbrellaP*The image is easy to see and I know what this signature is.


*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review by Ladybug
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Jimmy C,


Hi ,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read chapter 1 of The Bifrost Bridge.

*UmbrellaP*APPEAL: Those who like to read fairy tales may find this interesting.

*UmbrellaP*HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL: A bit confused.

*UmbrellaP*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale was about.

*UmbrellaP*NAMES: You used a variety of names for your character making it easy to keep track of who is who.

*UmbrellaP*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*UmbrellaP*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*UmbrellaP*DESCRIPTIONS/DETAILS: Silje comes across as a typical child, doing things when she knows better, then when they get into trouble run home for Mom and Dad to rescue them.

*UmbrellaP*LENGTH: This first seems to be the right length, yet it seems my like a stand alone story than the first chapter of a novel.

*UmbrellaP*PLOT: I’m not really sure what this fairy tale is suppose to be about. Toward the very end Molock says he’s going to get revenge on the kingdom for giving him a bath and fish to eat. Is this the story plot? What is this novel going to be about if it’s not about revenge?

*UmbrellaP*GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Seems to be alright.

*UmbrellaP*DIALOGUE: The dialogue sounds natural. I know who is speaking without the overuse of dialogue.

*UmbrellaP*POINT OF VIEW: I know who's point of view I’m in.

*UmbrellaP*OTHER SUGGESTIONS:
*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Jace,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your wee tale, The Accidental Visit.

*UmbrellaP*APPEAL: Those who like to read about making new friends will love this wee tale.

*UmbrellaP*WHAT I LIKED: The kindness shown to a total stranger.

*UmbrellaP*HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL: A wee bit sad for the Cedric who lost his wife. That brought a wee tears.

*UmbrellaP*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale was about.

*UmbrellaP*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*UmbrellaP*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*UmbrellaP*GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Seems to be alright.

*UmbrellaP*DIALOGUE: The dialogue sounds natural. I know who is speaking without the overuse of dialogue.

*UmbrellaP*POINT OF VIEW: I know who's point of view I’m in.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review of The Chanters  
Review by Ladybug
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi Gothic Angel,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your wee poem, The Chanters.

*UmbrellaP*APPEAL: Those who like to read about voices whispering to one shall love this wee poem.

*UmbrellaP*WHAT I LIKED: The question at the end.

*UmbrellaP*HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL: It made me smile.

*UmbrellaP*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale/poem was about.

*UmbrellaP*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*UmbrellaP*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*UmbrellaP*GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Seems to be alright.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review of In Dreams  
Review by Ladybug
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
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Hi Max,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your wee tale, In Dreams.

*UmbrellaP*APPEAL: Those who like to read about death and murder shall find this an interesting wee tale to read.

*UmbrellaP*WHAT I LIKED: The way the words paint a vivid picture.

*UmbrellaP*HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL: A bit sad at the lost of love between the couple.

*UmbrellaP*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale/poem was about.

*UmbrellaP*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*UmbrellaP*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*UmbrellaP*GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Seems to be alright.

*UmbrellaP*POINT OF VIEW: I know who's point of view I’m in.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review of A Sig for Sandman  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Central Bank  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Voxxylady,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just took a peek at your images and signatures, and decided to take a peek at A Sig for Sandman.

*UmbrellaP*WHAT I LIKED: The sig is a castle and makes the romantic in me wonder who lives within this magical place.

*UmbrellaP*APPEAL: Those who like castles will love this sig.

*UmbrellaP*The image matches the title quite well.
*UmbrellaP*The colors used are eye catching and appealing.
*UmbrellaP*The words stand out nicely against the background and do not block the image.
*UmbrellaP*The image is easy to see and I know what this signature is.
*UmbrellaP*You gave credit to the person who designed this signature.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with TGDI Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Dr M C Gupta,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your wee poem, MEMORIES.

*UmbrellaP*APPEAL: Those who like to read about remembering love ones shall love this wee poem.

*UmbrellaP*WHAT I LIKED: This poem reminds us to pay more attention to our loved ones who are still here and that it is good to remember those who passed.

*UmbrellaP*HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL: A wee bit sad. This poem brought a few tears as I read it.

*UmbrellaP*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale/poem was about.

*UmbrellaP*GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Seems to be alright.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review of Retribution  
Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with TGDI Group  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Hi Moriarty,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your wee tale, Retribution.

*UmbrellaP*APPEAL: Those who like to read about evil souls getting what they deserve shall like this wee tale.

*UmbrellaP*WHAT I LIKED: That the evil one got what was coming to him.

*UmbrellaP*HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL: Glad the victims got their revenge.

*UmbrellaP*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale was about.

*UmbrellaP*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*UmbrellaP*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*UmbrellaP*GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

OOPS!

He saw his own image and in its raised hands was the same axe he used to behead his innocent victims before he peeled of their skins. -- I believe you wanted off their skins.

*UmbrellaP*DIALOGUE: The dialogue sounds natural. I know who is speaking without the overuse of dialogue.

*UmbrellaP*POINT OF VIEW: I know who's point of view I’m in.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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Review by Ladybug
In affiliation with The Coffee Shop for the Fantas...  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi Kristi,

This review is just my humble opinion and is meant to be helpful, not discouraging.

I just read your wee poem, Concluding Thought.

*UmbrellaP*APPEAL: Those who like to read about losing a grandparent shall find this heart warming and touching.

*UmbrellaP*WHAT I LIKED: It‘s a tribute to your grandmother.

*UmbrellaP*HOW THIS TALE OR POEM MADE ME FEEL: Sad. It brought tears.

*UmbrellaP*TITLE: Your title caught my attention and drew me in. It made me curious to discover what this tale/poem was about.

*UmbrellaP*FORMAT: This is easy to read and understand.

*UmbrellaP*SETTING: You used a nice balance of imagery and well written words that made me feel as if I am there.

*UmbrellaP*GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION: My editing skills are not the best in the world, yet I try my best to let the author know if something looks out of place, misspelled or missing.

Seems to be alright.

*ThumbsUp*Great job.

*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams -- Eleanor Roosevelt

Keep unleashing your imagination and let it fly where it wishes! -- Janet Novak*ConfettiV* *ConfettiP* *ConfettiB*

Ladybug

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