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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, blurtic
I'm sending this review as part of the Super Power Review Raid

I found this poem by clicking the Read & Review button, so here is my review *Smile*

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
What a lovely, sad little poem. I have experienced very similar things in life, so I can relate to this. I love the line, "until you deem yourself worthy enough to accept my galaxy." Very powerful. Nicely done!

*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
You are only using the Romance/Love genre for this, but I suggest using all three genre slots allowed to make this poem more searchable. Maybe use "relationship," or "emotional" as genres as well.

*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
Everything looked good here.

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
I'm giving this a 5, as I enjoyed reading it and am glad I stumbled upon it. Good job!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Tim Chiu
I'm sending this review as part of the Super Power Reviewers Raid.

I found this poem by clicking the Read & Review button, so here is my review *Smile*

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
What a lovely poem filled with beautiful nature imagery! I love the line, "Nature plays host to a decor of colorful plant life;"


*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
No suggestions for the poem itself, but a lovely nature-themed cover picture would look lovely on this *Smile*

*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything here. Looked good!

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
It's a 5 from me. A very enjoyable poem. Nicely done!

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Review of Bernard  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Nani - Blessed Indeed !
I'm sending this review as part of the Super Power Reviewer's Review Raid.

I found this: by clicking the Read & Review button, so here's my review *Smile*

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
I love that you included the instructions for this contest, so I could understand the complication of such a poem. This whimsical, somewhat nonsensical poem did not disappoint. I loved the beautiful flow and rhythm of this fun poem and enjoyed reading about this unusual frog.

*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
I suggest using all three genre slots for this to make it more viewable in searches. A nice frog-related cover image would be great, too!

*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything.

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
This is a 5 from me. I really enjoyed reading it!

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Review of Gibble  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello, Laurie Razor
I'm sending this review as part of the Super Power Reviewer's Review Raid.

I found this: by clicking the Read & Review button, so here is my review!

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
I love the setting and the dialogue of this chilling story. I was a little confused by the language in parts of this, though, and I wasn't sure what things like: arrafet, cavarted illau, and Qad-Raj," are. I was also a bit confused by the ending. I'm not sure what's happening here.


*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
I would suggest easing up on some of the alien language and maybe fleshing out the second half of the story for clarity. This was a screams entry, so I totally understand having to work with those darn word limits.


*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything here.

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
I'm giving this a 4.5 because it could use a little work, but it has great potential, and as I said earlier, the dialogue is very well written. Nicely done!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Bella Bunny
I'm sending this review as part of the Super Power Reviewer's Review Raid.

I found this: by searching for birthday-themed items.

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
I like that you wrote separate poems for dog birthdays and cat birthdays. Between the two of them, I think I preferred the dog one as it seemed to have a more natural rhyme, but they were both cute. I could imagine people actually buying cards for their pets with these exact poems inside. Very nicely done!


*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
I think this would be really cute with a dog/cat cover image, but either way it's still a couple of cute poems!

*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything here.

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
I love pets, poetry, comedy, and satire, so obviously, this gets a 5 from me!

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Review of Tomorrow...  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello, Gwyneth
I'm sending this review as part of the SuperPower Reviewer's Review Raid.

I found this: by searching for birthday items.

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
These are some very grown-up thoughts about childishness. I'm 38, and I can still relate. I remember the day before my 18th birthday and it is sort of a staggering thought. Today I'm a child, tomorrow I'll be an adult. Mind-blowing. Though I'm old enough to have kids and a mortgage, I still love SpongeBob, and who doesn't like to color with crayons once in awhile?


*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
I can't think of anything to suggest.


*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything here either. Looks good!

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
These are some very deep and reflective thoughts from an almost adult. I was both entertained, and it made me think. I give this a 5. Nicely done!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Writer_Mike

I found this when I clicked the Read & Review button. I'm glad I did!

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
This is a very nice tribute to soldiers for the Honoring our Vets contest. I also entered...it's nice to read a fellow writer's entry. I like the overall message here, but also the reminder to pray for our soldiers and vets.


*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
No suggestions. You are using all three genre slots and you have a very nice cover photo here. Those are two things I look for aside from the item itself.

*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
Everything looks good here.

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
I'm giving this a 5 because I liked the repetition, rhythm and rhyme of this lovely poem. A great tribute piece! I'm glad I stumbled upon it,

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Review of Stalk Home  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello, abaru
I'm sending this review because Bubblegum Jones asked me to review it. So, here's the review *Smile*

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
I think this is an interesting story. I would like to see it written from Braxton's head. This was more third-person, focused on Braxton but from a narrator. The story was told to us by a narrator, but we never got to be in the story. The story itself is passive and largely narrative. To make the story more exciting, it would help to cut the passive voice and get inside Braxton's head. What are his thoughts? What does He see and observe?


*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
It took a really long time to learn why Braxton is obsessed with Azaria. I think this is information that the reader needs much sooner.


*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
In this sentence: "This gave Braxton the freedom to choose which tables he looks after, what coffees he personally makes, and the flavors of tea that the customers would sample." The tense changes from past to present. It should be in the same tense throughout.

The last line, "The rest, as they say, is history." Is very cliched.


I think you have a good draft here. The bones are strong. Thank you for sharing and welcome to Writing.com!

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, ruwth
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019. You posted before me, so here is my review.

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
I enjoyed this fictional narrative from John. The gospel of John is a very powerful book, and insight into John and the person he was, is always of interest.


*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
I would have liked to see a little more story here. It's over 3k words of narrative, which was still interesting, but it was a second-hand retelling of events that we're all familiar with from the Bible. The decision to make this a present-tense story was bold, but I think it helps the reader in their journey back through time. It's almost as though we are there seated beside John as he's speaking. This, in my opinion, is the real gem of the story, though it would be nice to see some more personal insights from John. How he felt, specific things he remembers that aren't in the Bible. Conversations he might have had with Jesus, or the other disciples.


*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything.


Thank you for sharing your story. Good luck in the contest!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Tinker
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019. You posted before me, so here's my review *Smile*

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
This is a lovely little poem. I love the language and imagery here, especially with lines like: "the glitter of the golden sun peeks through the lacy canopy to eavesdrop."

I also really liked the idea of the flowers "chattering" in the windstorm. The leaves rustling in the wind is a conversation. Nicely done!


*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
I have no suggestions for the poem itself, I think it's great, but I think if you used all of the genre slots for this more people would be able to see it. I do really like the cover image for this book item though.


*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything.


*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
Great imagery with a bit of playful whimsy. I give this a 5.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Paul
I'm sending this review as part of "Give Me Something To READ!" I'm sorry it took so long for me to send this review.

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
This is quite a tear jerker! A sweet, but sad little tale.


*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
I'm not sure if this is so much a suggestion as it is an observation. This is a first person story that switches point of view at the end. I found the switch a little distracting, and it pulled me out of the story. I'm not sure what could be done to remedy this, as putting it in third person would make it less personal, and would take away some of the sweet/sad moments. It does break a rule as-is, but the story was still effective, so even though it pulled me momentarily out of the story, I still enjoyed the read.


*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything.


*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
This is a heartbreaking tale of loss and love. I'm giving this a 5 because I found it engaging and I had to reach for the tissues. Nicely done!

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Review of James James  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Beholden , forgive me for just now getting around to sending this review as part of "Give Me Something to READ."

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
This is a clever and cute little story written in a similar style to those of A.A. Milne who is quoted beforehand. Although I wonder why the main character has so many names, and two of them are repetitious, I think it makes for a wonderfully unique character. I LOVE that James James believes that he controls his mother and thinks himself to be terribly clever when I'm guessing it's his mother that is really the brains of the operation. I like that he meets a new friend that he can have adventures with. Nicely done!


*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
Only one suggestion. This little story would really stand out in your portfolio if it had a cover image. You can use a photo you already have, OR use one of the stock photos on writing.com.


*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
The only thing I noticed isn't technically incorrect, I think it's a regional thing. I've noticed some parts of the world use "towards" instead of "toward." To me, "towards" looks wrong, but I think both are technically correct.


*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
I really enjoyed this little story. I'm giving this a 5. Thanks again for sharing it with me.

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for entry "2019 #30" 
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Tinker
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019. I posted after you, so here is my review.

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
A lovely haiku. It's one of my favorite forms...of course, the subject matter is not my favorite (spiders, icky *Smile* I like the little spider web in the first line. Clever, and nicely done. Good luck in the contest.


*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
I just wanted to point out that your second line only has 6 syllables, not 7. I'm pretty sure that this contest isn't particular about syllable count, though. I thought it also might be kind of cute to put water drops after the third line, like this: *WaterDrop**WaterDrop*


*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
Didn't notice anything, but with such a short piece, I think I would have noticed if something were wrong.


*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
I like this cute little poem. I'm giving it a 5 *Smile* Nice job!

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Review of Mr. Nosy Neighbor  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Angus
I'm sending this review as the judge of SugarCube's Weekly Random Contest. Congrats on the first place win!

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
I liked that you included yourself in the article and that you made it interesting. I got the impression that this may have been written about a real neighbor? I also liked the author's note and found the story about the glove interesting. That's cool that your article about it is in a museum. I used to work at a newspaper and got to write some of the articles. It was a fantastic job...then the newspaper went out of business.


*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
A cover photo always makes a piece pop, but that's my only suggestion.


*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything.


*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
You kept me entertained, with both the article and the author's note, and you won first place, so I give this a 5. Congrats again, thanks for entering and for your continued support of my contest.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Sumojo
I'm sending this review as the judge of SugarCube's Weekly Random Contest. Congrats on the 2nd place win!!

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
I liked that you crafted an interesting article in a few words. I too live in a farming town where water is very important.


*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
At first, I thought the last part was an author's note, but it looks like you included it in your word count, so I suggest not saying "This is my hometown..." you should never include yourself in a newspaper article. Maybe also mention the town at the beginning, instead of the last half. The most important information should always come first.

*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything here.


*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*

Your article kept me interested, I didn't spot any grammatical errors, and it won second place. I only had one small suggestion, so I'm giving this a 4.5. Congrats again, and thanks for entering my contest!

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for entry "Phoenix" 
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, 🌕 HuntersMoon
I'm sending this review as the judge of SugarCube's Weekly Random Contest. Congratulations on your second place win this week!

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
This was a fantastic piece of visual poetry. The language and descriptive words made this poem stand out to me. You made good use of the shadorma form, and I like that you extended it, making your poem with three shadormas.

Your award icon will arrive as soon as the 14 days are up for Community Recognition.

*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
No suggestions from me.


*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
It all looked good to me!

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
This flaming pile of awesome gets a 5 from me. Thank you for your continued support of my contest, and for sharing this poem with me. Congrats again on the win!

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Review of Me and Binky  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, Dave
I'm sending this review as the judge of the Fundraiser Flash Fiction Contest. I have chosen three stories to move on to the final round of judging, and this story is one of them. Congrats!

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
I liked the "voice" of this story and really felt like this character was relatable. Maybe not exactly likable, but he was tangible and I know people like him. I was also surprised by the ending. Nicely done!


*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
I only have one suggestion, but it won't affect the judging at all either way. I love to see cover images on items, and this doesn't have one. Of course, it's up to you whether you add one...and it won't affect the judging.


*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything besides what is supposed to be there.


*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
This gets a 5 from me. Nice job! I should be announcing the winner soon! Good luck!

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Review of Rugged  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, Laurie Razor
I'm sending this review as the judge of the Fundraiser Flash Fiction Contest. Thank you for your entries. I am sending this review to let you know how much I enjoyed this story, but also to let you know that I have selected three of the stories entered to move on to the final round of judging. This is one of those three stories. So, whether you win or not, congrats on getting this far!

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
If I remember right, you wrote this for the PersonItfication contest. I didn't read it at the time, but I think it won...right? I can see why. This is very well written, and what I really liked was that even though the contest had a photo prompt, it's not important for the reader to see that photo to be able to understand and enjoy this tale. This is perfectly creepy and original. Very nicely done!


*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
I only have two suggestions, though neither is important for the judging. I think more people would be able to see this story if you used all three of the genre slots for this, instead of using "other." Also, a cover image would add some visual appeal. Again, neither suggestion will impact the judging at all.


*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything.


*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
This is getting a 5 from me. A very good piece of writing!


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for entry "One Hell of a Ride!" 
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, 🌕 HuntersMoon !
I'm sending this review as the judge of SugarCube's contest. Congratulations on your first place win!


*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
I loved this. The rhyme scheme and rhythm of this poem made it a pleasure to read. I liked your song choice and just really really liked this entry. Thank you for entering and sharing this poem with me!


*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
I like that you made a book item in your port for my contest entries, but I would suggest using all of the genre spots...it will make your book easier to find. Unless of course, you don't mind if it doesn't get seen, in that case, ignore that *Smile*


*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
Everything looked good to me.


*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
This gets a 5 from me. It's just a darn good piece of poetry. Thank you for your continued support of my contest, and congrats again on the win!

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Review of Come Travel  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Detective
I'm sending this review as part of I Write in 2019

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
This is a lovely poem with very nice imagery. I love to travel, so this poem really speaks to me. I like the details here, especially the scent of peppermint (which has a nice bit of rhyme to it) drifts through the warm summer air. Also, the currency measured by courage. Very nicely done!


*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
I only have two suggestions. I would recommend adding a cover picture to this and using all three of the genre slots. You are only using two. Using all of them helps your item get seen by more people.


*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
This isn't a big deal, my writing software does the same thing, but all of the words that begin a new line start with an uppercase letter. I would consider making any of them lowercase that do not begin a new sentence.


*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
I really like this. I'm giving a 5 for originality and awesome imagery. Nicely done!

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Review of A letter home  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings, Sumojo
I'm sending this review as the judge of SugarCube's Weekly Random Contest. Congrats on your 2nd place win!

I really enjoyed this story, in the form of a letter home from a soldier to his father. I found this to be a very touching piece, and I loved the detail you put into it. This read, to me, like a real letter. I liked that the writer of the letter did not pile on a bunch of emotion, but instead stated the facts of his situation, and left the "feeling" up to the reader. It really came across well and is an effective piece. Plus, adding the thank you at the end for the socks that his parents sent him added to the realism. Thank you for entering this into my contest, and I hope that you will continue to enter. Congrats again on the win.

This gets a 5 from me *Smile*

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Review of Left Alone  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, AgentPebbles and welcome to writing.com!

I found this when I clicked the "read & review" button.

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
This is a sad story of lost friendship. I've had a few of those in my life. This is a well-written poem, and I hope to see you joining some of the many contests here.

*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
I recommend using all three genre tags for this maybe use the "friendship" tag or "experience." I wouldn't use "writing" because it's not a piece about writing. I would also increase the font size a little bit. It's a tad on the small side and would be easier to read if bigger.

*FlowerP*Grammar/Punctuation/Usage*FlowerP*
I didn't notice anything here.

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
I'm giving you a 5 for your lovely poem. Again, welcome to writing.com and I look forward to reading more of your stuff!

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Review of Corrupt-A-Wish  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, hcb88
I'm sending this review as part of the Super Power Review Raid. Congratulations on the Quills Nomination!

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
This is such a clever, awesome idea! I read pretty far into this and the corrupted wishes were so creatively thought out, this activity inspires much thought and I was impressed with the responses. I'm glad I stumbled upon this gem because it's been a joy to read. Nicely done!

*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
No suggestions here. This is just great, and I look forward to reading more!

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
For the sheer creativity and fun of this, I'm giving it a 5. I can see why this was nominated for a Quill award.

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Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello, Princess Megan Rose GOT Fox
I'm sending this review as part of the Super Power Review Raid. Congratulations on the Quills Nomination!

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
This is a fun and clever campfire. I love reading about the various movies and TV shows, and it's cool to see the interaction between two friends. I had honestly never thought to use a campfire in this way before, it gives me a few ideas. I love it!

*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
No suggestions. I think this is just great the way it is.

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
This gets a 5 from me. I look forward to reading more of this rather lengthy campfire. Very nicely done, and again congrats on the nomination!

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Review of Daily Snapshot  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Genipher !
I'm sending this review as part of the Super Power Review Raid. Congratulations on the Quills Nomination!

*FlowerP*My Impression*FlowerP*
What a clever idea for an In&Out! I've made sure to favorite it so that when it becomes active again I can participate. I love how simple the activity is, that it doesn't require an item or bitem link (great for those with free memberships) and is a judged contest, but also a weekly merit badge drawing. Awesome!

*FlowerP*Suggestions*FlowerP*
No suggestions. I think it's a great addition to the Writing.Com community!

*FlowerP*Rating Explanation*FlowerP*
This awesome In&Out gets a 5 from me. It's a clever, creative activity. Again, congrats on the Quills nomination! It's truly a WDC gem!

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