I like this poem a lot. I love the imagery here. I have never flown in an airplane, but I can imagine this clearly. Very nicely done . Have you entered any contests? I highly recommend them! I look forward to reading more of your items. Have a good day!!
Oooh, I love this one! A very worshipful, powerful poem. I needed this one today. I love the natural rhythm and flow of this piece, and the rhymes come easily, without force. Kudos for a well-written, awesome poem.
I enjoyed this story. Sort of like the tortoise and the hare, but with brothers. Siblings can be so competitive, and meddlesome. I really liked the descriptions, especially in the first scene, at the coffee shop. The worn coat, the spectacle on the street with the limo. I really felt like I was there.
Nice! I love how it rhymes and totally reminds me of an open mic situation where the performer recited the same poem for at least twenty minutes...and seemed to be making up half of it on the spot. Definitely a ramble, for sure. Look at me, I'm doing the same thing. Anyway, nice entry for the contest. Best of luck to you!
A lovely entry for the contest! This brings such poignant imagery of war and heartache. Good luck to you in the contest. I have such a hard time with the unique words chosen for the prompt each day. I always have to google what they mean. Good job to you!
Wow, you did a great job with this prompt! I found this week's prompt to be pretty tough. I love the mood of this, and even though this could very well take place in any time period, I get an old-timey sort of vibe from it. Good luck in the contest, but I don't think you'll need it. Nicely done.
Cleverly written! I loved the ending to this. I noticed a couple little things, such as "only sounds he could he hear" and there's a reference to "tribesman" in the plural sense. Should it be "tribesmen?" I'm not entirely sure, to be honest. Anyway, those are just tiny details. The overall story is a winner, for sure!
That was fun! Thanks for giving me something to do. If I could make one small correction, the Bible never says how many wise men there were...just that there were 3 gifts. So, no one knows the number of wise men. Thanks for the fun trivia! Merry Christmas!
A lovely romantic poem! I like how you changed the color of "together, love, United, and devoted" to red. Those words sum up the work nicely. Was it written for a contest? The form is interesting. Thanks for sharing it. Have a good evening,
A very nice poem! I was just about to recommend the lighthouse poetry contest before seeing it referenced at the bottom. This is a very sincere, honest and lovely piece. Thank you for sharing it. I look forward to seeing more of your work. Have a nice day,
Lol, a funny, engaging story. Do you ever submit to the daily flash fiction contest? It's a lot of fun over there. Anyway, I loved this piece. Thank you for sharing it. I'm just curious if this is a true story or fiction? Anyway, have a nice day.
A lovely poem. It's interesting that the form is named after an instrument because it has a very strong, musical quality. Very rhythmic and mellow, yet melancholy and sad. Just wonderful. Thank you for sharing. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Very useful advice on reviewing! Thank you for writing this! One technical thing I noticed is that you use the phrase "in my case" twice in the last paragraph. Otherwise, a very nice piece. Thank you for sharing it.I have noticed that reviewing does get easier. Have a nice night,
Thank you for this informative poem. Yes, many today deny the severity of that horrible time, and some even go so far as to say it never happened at all! Good job for speaking out, and spreading some knowledge. It's important that we never forget the past.
A cute, clever poem. Santa sounds like a fun guy to hang out with! Nicely done. Thanks for the author's note at the bottom. The extra explanation was helpful to those non-military types like me. Thanks for sharing this fun, festive poem.
A lovely poem about teachers. As the wife of a teacher, I appreciate all the hard work they put in each and every day. This is a very nice acrostic poem with great sentiment. Thank you for writing and sharing. Have a nice evening.
Wow, this reads a lot like a rap song...at least that's how I read it in my head. I agree with the basic sentiment here and believe that the world is pretty messed up. I enjoyed reading this. Thank you for sharing. Don't lose hope.
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