Interesting. Below is the part I like best and found most meaningful -- simple yet eloquent, especially the last two lines.
"What do they want,
What can they bring,
Perhaps a lot, or not a thing?
Like life, sometimes,
A gentle glide upon the unseen wind,
A perfect landing,
Or, at worst,
To crash and burn, again."
A wonderful piece of magical fantasy. (Does that make me an unbeliever? --just kidding.) I enjoyed this fun piece --- the cadence of your rhythm and rhyme. Thank you for sharing it with the rest of us.
Thank you for sharing your traumatic tale of suffering... so many senseless deaths. Your story-telling creates both mystery and intrigue, captivating the reader through to each fateful event.
I appreciate your willingness to share your culture and background with those of us who are unfamiliar with such practices. I am glad they did away with the practice of Sati --- what a horrifying way to die.
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Wow... I like the way you bring the reader into this piece with easy, realistic dialog and short paragraphs.
And then with wonder and anticipation --- there in the moment --- I actually felt his dilemma, anxiety and resolve --- and wanted to shout at him, shake him, stop him... You had me on the edge of my seat right through to the end. Good job!
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You left a "p" out of the title --- s/b "Slipped Away."
This is an interesting piece, but it leaves me wondering --- Is this someone's death and dying? or someone in depression --- mental illness?
Otherwise, you held my interest all the way through to the end. I did reread this poem at least twice, maybe three times --- wondering if I missed something.
Thank you for sharing it.
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I enjoyed your unique Introduction and Terms. You've captured my interest. So, of course, I will review some of your essays.
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