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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (4.0)
The melody of this piece flows nicely but its a little too mysterious for this reader.

Otherwise, I found a few grammatical/punctuation errors you may want to correct, noted below.

"There’s places in the sun" s/b There are places in the sun.

"And time tick’s away." s/b ...time ticks away (not possessive).

"And you realise that’s it’s no game." s/b ...realize that it's no game.




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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (4.5)
I found your piece inspirational and thought provoking...

It was good of you to give an explanation after apparently having been misunderstood.
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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (4.5)
Nice, I enjoyed this piece --- nice flow of rhythm and rhyme without being excessive. Nice message as well.
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Review of Paper Airplanes  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (4.0)
Interesting. Below is the part I like best and found most meaningful -- simple yet eloquent, especially the last two lines.

"What do they want,
What can they bring,
Perhaps a lot, or not a thing?
Like life, sometimes,
A gentle glide upon the unseen wind,
A perfect landing,
Or, at worst,
To crash and burn, again."
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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Cute.
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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (4.5)
Cute, with a nice cadence of rhythm and rhyme.
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Review of Squish!  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (4.5)
A wonderful piece of magical fantasy. (Does that make me an unbeliever? --just kidding.) I enjoyed this fun piece --- the cadence of your rhythm and rhyme. Thank you for sharing it with the rest of us.
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Review of The Lost Puppet  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a nice, honest, yet very sad piece. =(

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Review of register  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (3.5)
I this piece both interesting and unusual. Thank you for sharing it.
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Review of The Tides Of Life  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Thank you for sharing your traumatic tale of suffering... so many senseless deaths. Your story-telling creates both mystery and intrigue, captivating the reader through to each fateful event.

I appreciate your willingness to share your culture and background with those of us who are unfamiliar with such practices. I am glad they did away with the practice of Sati --- what a horrifying way to die.

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Review of Grace.  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (4.5)
I like the simplicity and clarity with which you convey and define grace and also your use of rhythm and rhyme.

Thank you.

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Review of Blackbird Trapped  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This is an unusual, yet interesting piece. Thank you for sharing it.

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Review of Screaming Kettles  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wow... I like the way you bring the reader into this piece with easy, realistic dialog and short paragraphs.

And then with wonder and anticipation --- there in the moment --- I actually felt his dilemma, anxiety and resolve --- and wanted to shout at him, shake him, stop him... You had me on the edge of my seat right through to the end. Good job!

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Review of Sliped Away  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
You left a "p" out of the title --- s/b "Slipped Away."

This is an interesting piece, but it leaves me wondering --- Is this someone's death and dying? or someone in depression --- mental illness?

Otherwise, you held my interest all the way through to the end. I did reread this poem at least twice, maybe three times --- wondering if I missed something.

Thank you for sharing it.

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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (4.0)
I like your very original style in this piece. Thank you for sharing it.
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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Interesting piece.
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Review of The Ghost Dancers  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (5.0)
Beautiful. The story is told well in a short rhythmic format that keeps you interested through to the end. Thank you!
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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Wow, that was a nice eulogy. And it sounds like you had a very special grandpa. Thanks for sharing this.
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Review of An Embedded Poll?  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (5.0)
Love the site. Good work!
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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (4.5)
I thought this was great --- the clarity, conciseness, rhythm and rhyme. I also enjoyed the substance of the message. I enjoyed reading it.
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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (4.5)
Very fine work, though a little wordy for my liking. Thank you for sharing this.
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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (4.5)
Check wording here: “Frog-Kissing” is helping people to see themselves in a better light and helping THEM USE THEM USE their improved... (Check the capitalized words.)

I enjoyed your unique Introduction and Terms. You've captured my interest. So, of course, I will review some of your essays.
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Review of The Ghost Horse  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (4.0)
Very interesting tale. Thank you.
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Review of My Love  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (3.5)
Short but sweet.
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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (4.5)
I enjoyed this poem. I haven't read many poems of this type and you describe the beauty and wonder with such clarity... Thank you.
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