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Review of A Wretch Like Me  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a beautiful twist on a great song. You've made it personal. I can relate. Thank you so much for sharing this.
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Review of Dead Eyes Alive  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Wow, you have a lot to say... I enjoy reading your work. One can't help but be provoked --- to think about what you're saying and to almost study while reading it.

Thank you for sharing with us... your heart and soul.

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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (5.0)
Well, I found this very deep --- a little too deep for me; yet I enjoyed the reading of it, the flow of your words and the pictures they paint.

As a writer, I found this very solemn.

Thank you for sharing this...

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Review of Opposites  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (4.5)
I bet this was great fun to write!

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Review of Faith's Path  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome words for this weary traveller. I enjoyed the reading of this immensely.

Your words are nicely poetic, as well as focused and clear. Each line feels appropriately in its place and balanced within the whole.

Thank you.

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Review of Tibby  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
TIBBY is a wonderful story, and you convey it with heart-felt passion and compassion.

The story progresses nicely, flows smoothly and has a nice melancholy tone throughout, which I found both captivating and embracing. (I was there.)

Also, I found this both thoughtful and thought-provoking. I couldn't help but think about the beloved pets I've known throughout my life.

Thank you for sharing this awesome story.

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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
The indent feature might make for a better presentation of your work here. When you post or edit your work, there is a place just above the posting place in blue, click on it and you will find you can change the font type, size, indent, underline, italicize, etc., all of which are very useful.

Here: "to far down the path of death." "To" s/b "too."

Here: "even though she couldn't se it, she knew it was there and that it was real." You accidently left an "e" out of the word "see."

Here: "Niveus, snow, his name, it fit him so well, so perfectly. So cold." Is his last name "Snow?" If so, you don't need the comma after "Niveus" and "Snow" should begin with a capital letter.

Here: "Was their time out already?" I'm not sure "out" is the best word ---- it seems a little out of context with the other wording used throughout. You might rethink your word usage here. I would suggest maybe "Was their time over already?"

I'm cutting this short because my cable is going out...

Welcome to writing.com











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Review of keys to the known  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (4.0)
I found this piece interesting..., yet a little difficult to understand.

Your rhythm and pace flowed smoothly throughout, and you captured and held my attention.

In your last line "lyes" s/b "lies."

Welcome to writing.com!


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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (4.5)
It sounds like basketball maybe?

Interesting and passionate piece of poetry. I sense a strong competitive spirit mixed with sadness over defeat.

After reading your poem, I'm provoked to encourage you not to be so hard on yourself. Remember to have fun... =)
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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (4.5)
A very meaningful piece and the metered rhythm and rhyme flows nicely too.
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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is interesting to know... Thanks for asking.
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Review of Cemetery  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (5.0)
Lovely. This is easy to understand... God bless you!

[I posted links for both CEMETERY and THE INVITATION on my site. I hope you don't mind.]
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Review of Funeral March  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (4.0)
Here: "...like the shadows under the oak tree;" maybe remove "the" before "shadows."

Here: "As I place the wreath
upon the cold, heartless gravestone
and forcing my dejected feet
to lead me away..."
I think you missed something in editing. I believe the "and" before the word "forcing" should be removed.

I believe if you take another look and tighten this up a bit, removing unnecessary words, this piece would have greater impact.

Very nicely done. You capture the reader with your vivid descriptions.
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Review of Hope  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (4.0)
"A secret strategy for keeping a balance." I wonder if you meant to say "keeping balance," here.

I'm sure there is a lot of depth to this piece; but it's hard to grasp. If your intent/meaning was clearer, I would have enjoyed it more.
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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I enjoyed your poetry here. Nice rhythm and rhyme cadence without monotony --- smooth flow throughout. You grabbed and held my attention through to the end.

Thank you.
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Review of Abstract Blue  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (4.5)
"The cold, monotonous shades of blue I paint remind me that always." You need an "of" after "me," before "that always..." for clarity.

"Bombs were dropped down..." Here the word "down" is unnecessary because it is understood. "Dropped" implies down due to the laws of gravity.

Here: "Slowly, I drag my feet along the ground, barefooted." "Barefooted" should be simply "barefoot;" the "-ed" is unnecessary.

Here: "The rhythm of the dark, dazzling blue waves beckons to me..." the word "to" is unnecessary.

Here: "It is as terrified as those of a cornered rat, brimming with tears." This sentence lacks clarity, seems a little misplaced. As the reader, I wonder whose eyes?
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The storyline and focus of ABSTRACT BLUE is clear, captivating and easily followed. Your words flow in a soft rhythmic pattern --- gentle as a flag blowing in a soft breeze.

Nice work!











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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
In my opinion, the first three lines are great --- your conversational tone gives this piece strong impact.

The next two lines follow well; then the rhythm and rhyme (maybe too much of it) seems to overtake and detract somewhat --- at least for me.

I found the substance here phenomenal. Thank you!
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Review of Only A Memory  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (4.0)
The ending was too abrupt and came too quickly for me. It needs a smoother transition.

Otherwise, the writing here is believable and sad. I felt your hurt, your pain --- its intensity. I found your writing focused and flowing smoothly (until the last three lines).

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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I believe we can all understand your feelings here. The poetry is clear and concise, and (more importantly) captivating. There was a nice rhythmic cadence.

Your writing is focused and easy to follow.

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Review of A shopping bag  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed reading this sad, but hopeful story.

It flowed quite nicely and didn't seem contrived at any point. Your choice of words held my interest to the end.

Thank you.

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Review of Ode to Coffee  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (4.0)
I enjoyed your ODE TO COFFEE... Starbucks is a favorite of mine. My car takes me there most mornings.

"Making my thoughts soaring for its delight..." "Soaring" should be "soar" here.

Otherwise maybe leave out the word "making," and simply say... "and my thoughts soar for its delight..."
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Review of WHEN DEATH CALLS  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
You captured and held my attention with this light-hearted piece about death... a friendly twist on a dark subject. Your rhythm and rhyme gave a nice cadence without being overdone. "Reality" was the only thing lacking... but that was intentional.

Getting older, we have a tendency to contemplate death as we watch ourselves age and frailties increase. (A good subject for a blog, I think.)
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Review of Buffer (ver2)  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Thank you for sharing this brush of reality... reflections of an encounter with a homeless man. Your descriptive use of words, along with realistic dialog, makes the scene quite clear---without being excessive or overly dramatic.
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Review of Cruel World  
Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (3.5)
"Crule" should be "Cruel."

"...can stop my want to flee." I think you meant to say "...can stop my WANTING to flee."

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Otherwise, I'm sure most of us can relate to this at one time (or one day) or another in our lives...

=)
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Review by Maria Mize
Rated: E | (4.5)
This piece reminds me of a journal... both introspective and philosphical. Real.

I've never looked for beach glass... only shells and sharks' teeth.

I enjoyed your reflections on colored glass and people. I found this well written and interesting. Thank you.
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