|Hi The bald writer !
I'm writing you a review today for "I Write in 2018
For the Pet News Contest, you wrote a personal essay about your family dog, Lucy. It seems like the journey to adopting her into the family as well as watching her grow was quite a ride. The examples you provided of the ups and the downs in having a pet created an evocative picture. As a reader, this glimpse into her life felt all the more real for the tidbits of stories you shared.
Listed below are a few grammatical errors I found while reading. Please take whatever you feel is valid and discard anything you don't think applies.
Lucy past (passed), 2 years ago, on a warm August afternoon, on her veterinarian’s table, in Port Washington, NY.
Lucy was 15(.)
Lucy was born, in a Glen Cove Animal (S)shelter six weeks before joining our family.
“It’s too big(,) and there are too many trees. It’s scary(.)”
“I understand(,) Jason, but you can have a dog(.)”.
“Can I get a dog mom(?)”
“Please(,) can I get a dog mom,(;) dad promised(.)”
Lucy traveled to our home, sitting on my son’s lap, next to his best friend, in the back of my Mark VIII(.)
“She is friendly, smart, and very independent. Good luck(.)”
Friendly(,) she was. She loved it when people came to our home. Hated it when they left. She would let us know it(,) too. Loudly.
While I was talking, with the director of the facility, Lucy started to jump at the door (k)nob, wrapping her paws around the round (k)nob.
“Isn’t that cute”, the director said, laughing. “She thinks she is going to open the door.(")
Not on a door with a round (k)nob, at least(.)
When she waited at the window in the family room, at 3pm (how did she know?) waiting for (the) sight of the school bus, run to the front door to jump on my son, she was saying I love you.
Thank you for sharing your personal account of Lucy, and what she meant to you and your family. I'm so sorry for your loss. She sounds like she was an amazing dog.