This is something I have to practice. I seem to be vague in reviewing if fear of insulting anyone. I tend to give only positive feed back. I guess it goes with practice. As I see my own writing being reviewed I am now getting a feel for a more enhanced reviewing process.
This is a great way to help me get a true feel for reviewing in the best positive way.
Title: I expected something of the nature in which you wrote your story. No issues there.
What I liked: The idea of hitting a body and the unknown. I felt the suspense. The description of the fogging windows.
What I was confused by was the character Alex. If he was the driver. Why would he be angry at Kate when the car veered off the road. I think maybe you should have started the story by introducing Kate as just getting out of the hospital and then Alex. Just to clarify the characters.
This is a great story !! So do not take my word on anything. There are some little changes that can be use tweaking. I have a few to do myself. All in all it is a good story.
First of all, this is my first review request. Thank you for that. So because I have not done this very much, and yourself being a preferred author; take what I have to say with a grain of salt.
I loved this story very much. The blinding man being so thankful for what he receives on a daily basis is a true and heart warming character. I see him as an angel.
I so no issues with grammar or punctuation.
I think the only problem I have is the Title.
There is so much more to this story than just a Flautist in a subway.
The title didn't grab me. I guess the blinding flautist didn't grab the attention of many
being poorly and begging. He is more than that, as you describe him. I think the story
deserves a more meaningful title.
A heartwarming story that left me believing in angels.
This is a great piece of work, considering it is your first story I presume.
I love how you described Devin. I had a real visual on his looks.
You spaced your story well, making it easier to read.
I am not certain of where your story is going but continue!
It sounds like a great story.
I did not read this fully, because it was very hard to read.
You should put any dialogue in italics.
Spacing dialogue between paragraphs.
Shorten your paragraphs so it is easier for the reader.
Just a few suggestions to get people to read it.
Very sweet poem.
Friends are so important.
You have a nice flow to your poem.
my suggestion would be to break up your two last lines
and make your last stance with jus the two.
In all honesty, you are not alone. People judge! That is what they do. Society has lost empathy.
If everyone just did one good deed and pushed it forward, maybe eyes would open to what we have created. I think you can make this piece a little longer and with words that the reader can relate to.
It is a good write ! Keep writing.
Nicely done!
Ever since I watched "Blood Diamond"
My accomplished treasures have changed.
Not sure if you ever watched that movie, but it is an opener.
I love the poem.
When I read this I think of the movie "Blood Diamond"
Heart wrenching movie but it is so true. A horrible true story happening every day.
Thanks for the reminder of how lucky we are to be able to raise our kids in a safe environment.
Trials and tribulations are for sure lessons learnt.
although you are right most question is they would do it again.
You made a great point using words that are expressive.
I enjoyed this poem
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