You did a great job on this...would have loved to read the story that went with this...I could picture this perfectly with the imagery...I think you need to boost your're confidence, missy...I am glad you went out of your norm...so that you could give a try for this contest...Keep On Writing and Keep On helping!!!!
As usual you are always trying to have fun!!! This was a blast to do...I love doing this...I was just reading some of the reviews when I saw one for this and had to go and take a look at what you were doing...Thank you for cheering me up today already...Will let others know about this too!!! Keep On Writing...Keep On Helping...Always Have Fun!!!
Wow, Vivian this poem is powerful!!!! I love the imagery in this...I can feel the emotion that you have put in this with the descriptions as you wrote it...I can see you staring horror watching the towers go down one by one...I can picture son sobbing in pain watching as the terrorist have became our enemy and have killed some many...I love this poem!!!! Keep On Writing...
Wow that was awesome...I think that is great...I love how you all had met almost a year later and was able to meet 3 generations of your family...Did you marry Barbara or did you go back to the woman that you were getting married to in week...I sure hope that you were able to get to know your father too...and that you were able to get to know your son...I sure hope that you did marry Barbara...This story has excellant imagery...you could picture this as you read it...I could see that you were surprise to find out about your son and then more of a shock that the older man was your father!!! Keep On Writing!!!
This was grewat...I like how this went from killing his wife, and Veronica, to Timmy giving him back the viagra...which he will be having problems in the new few hours after he leaves...What happened to his dad...is this going to become a book or series of short stories? I love that you could picture all the characters in the story, the description was great and so was the imagery in this...Please let me know if you go an further with this story...since this leaves the reader wanting to continue where this left off...Keep On Writing...
This sounds like a cool activity...I love watching the amazing race every Season...infact when I am taking classes at school...I work around the evening for my evening classes so that I do not miss this one and a few others...I think that you helping other members out by having this to play...and they earn gp's and to make other friends too...Keep On Helping!!!
This is funny...thought there was going to be more into it, but the ending was better...I thought when he turned around it might have been someone he actually knew or even his wife secretly working there....But the ending was even better than that...Keep On Writing!!!
This is pretty good...I am glad that you shared this...I think that it will be a great book once you get it going...I hope to read it when you get the story going!! I think that you will get good reviews on this story as you write it out and have everyone review it for you...I am not sure why you have a lower than 4.0 for the review...Keep On Writing!!
This is so funny...Thank goodness your dad got home when he did...or everyone would have had alot more to say...and it may have gotten back at school too...I have had that happen too...It is the worst when you do start laughgin becuase it is too funny...I feel sorry for you sister since she was the one that got the pee shower...hehe...I am glad that you wrote this...and this will become a memory that is funny now or later on...Keep On Writing...
"All we had has been erased" this line is hard to read in your poem...I would either take out had or has, to make it flow better...other than that this is a great poem with lots of imagery, and wonderful descriptions through out it...I hope that this was not about anyone you knew...This is sad, but at least the fears were faced and that is all that matters...Keep On Writing...
Wow this poem is beautiful...love the imagery in it as I read the words...Love the rhythm and rhyme to this as you read it...You can picture it perfectly as the cupid is getting ready to help with Valentines day for your wife...I think that this was probably one of her best presents she received for valentines day!!! Keep On Writing...
Wow this was to the point...very powerful...great imagery and descriptions were visual!! I am so glad that I have been able to come visit your port!! You have many different pieces of poetry that I would like to read...I hope that you keep on writing and Come up with a great idea for your contest too!! Keep On Writing....
This poem could be great...the flow in it is not smooth...could go a little more smoother...It seems like it is choppy and rushed as you wrote this...other than that this is a really good poem...you do get right to the point of the poem...and the imagery is there...The description of words follow with the picture that is percieved when you read this...Keep On Writing...
I think that this is a cool for newbies to read so they can have fun learning about WDC and to explore the site too...I think that this was funny and helpful at the same time...It is useful too...I love how you added the users links to the story too...so the reader can also go visit their ports too...I hope to read more of your port...Thank you for all your help here on WDC!!!!Keep On Writing and Helping!!!
Sounds like this will be fun...Like the race contest...Would have been fun..PC problems so I was not on yesterday for most of the day, glad that you have put down that you are going to give reviews...That makes this group a better idea to join...and You have one other member that is wonderful to!! Whome and Superman will make this an awesome group!! Thank you for helping others!!! Keep On Helping!!! My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .
Thank you for letting all the members of WDC celebrate the 6 years of WDC!!! I am so glad that I was able to find this community that has helped me to gain friendships, gain writing skills, and reviewing others...I Can not wait to enter more of the birthday contests, and review as I go...Have a great B-Day week!!!
Wow you did a great job on this!!! I really enjoyed reading it...love the rhythm and rhyme...I also loved the appologie to Edgar Allen Poe...I could actually picture this poem from the keg spilling over, to the nagging alarm, and all the kids talking about the professor being a bore...The imagery was just awesome with the descriptions as you wrote this...I will be back to read more of your port!! Keep On Writing...
Sounds like this will be fun...Like the race contest...Would have been fun..PC problems so I was not on yesterday for most of the day, glad that you have put down that you are going to give reviews...That makes this group a better idea to join...and You have one other member that is wonderful to!! Whome and Superman will make this an awesome group!! Thank you for helping others!!! Keep On Helping!!! My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .
ummmm...I am not quite sure what this was about...I am guessing that the character is someone who wants to be dead...and the trucker had no idea what he ran into...I think the description of the accident was really good...imagery was vague do to the characters...Please let me know when you have revised this and I will review it again...Keep On Writing...
Wow I am in tears after reading what happened to his hand...this is an awesome story...Imagery was fantastic...I hope that you continue on to see if Johnny will be able to play the piano again and not give up...I could picture this story as I read it perfectly...I hope that this was not based on someone you knew...Dreams are so hard to get back to when something tragic happens...Keep On Writing...
Well since I have BPD I can relate to this...this was powereful...I think that everyone thinks about death, some more than others...to be heard in another problem that is not addressed so that makes you want to be dead...Personally I have tried 7 times to take my life, and apparently I am not to go...so I want you to stay too...If you need someone to talk to...I am here...I know that it is hard, I am now trying to get my self to stop with teh self harm...it is hard when you have problems and no one wants to listen so you feel like it is better to not be here...Glad you are here, especially on WDC!!! Keep ON Writing...
Wow this was very interesting to read...I think that this was pretty cool...one thing I could not picture was bobby have a baby through a vagina...Overall this an attention grabber...If you go on to make this more than a short story let me know and I will read more of this...I am so glad that the little boy had a penis and that it started the male species again...
This is a pretty poem...I love it, you can see the imagery in this as you read it...The descriptions of the poem can be pictured as you are reading it...Hope to read more from your port!!! I will be adding you to my favorite author's list too...Keep On Writing...
Wow that is a beutiful poem...I really love the imagery in this poem...I am so glad to read this since I have been divorced 2 years...and it is hard still to realize that all the years that we were together are gone...I hope that the divorce is getting better for the person that this was wrote about...Keep On Writing...
I like this alot...YOu have so much Imagery in this as you read through this...I not sure on much about Ireland...I could see the place as I am reading the descriptions...I hope to read more in your port...Keep ON Writing!!! WIll be adding you to my favorte authors list...
I think that the second ending is the best for this story...I think that this story is really cool...I think that you really made a great fairy tale for kids to enjoy...I think that the first ending would be to plain for this story...I sure hope to return to see you port...Keep On Writing...
Wow this is great poem...I hope that you placed in this poem...I love the imagery that it gives when you read the Peom...I can see the birds flying, the sandy beach and the Lemonade stand!!! I can see the children laughing...I hope that you Keep On Writing!
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