This text is long and clear. The reader doesn't need to guess, what the writer says. The chapters are easy to keep apart.
You mention many goals in this text. I hope you reached them. My only goal for this year (2020) is to knit one pair of mittens and send them on their way to the new owners. I also have a secret knitting goal, but it's a secret. I don't know if it ever sees the daylight the way I'd like it to see. But I hope so. It just requires small steps. Too big leaps and the goal will run away somewhere one never reaches it.
My secret writing goal is to attack that one family of characters and determine, which of them are not part of the family A but family B instead.
It was easy to read and understand your text.
I wish you all the best with your writing!
This Japanese style is a bit complicated, but your explanation is good. One would think a dead bird flies. A physically dead bird can't fly. Or then a branch is dead.
You can paint a complicated picture with very little words. That is something not everyone can do.
Keep up the good work!
The 1st sentence was a little difficult to understand. After that, the story grabbed me and flowed like a river. You can paint images with words. I saw the woman and felt her pain.
You have a talent! Keep writing!
This is very beautifully written. I thought it told about your marriage, but the green text proved me wrong. You can describe emotions. And as you said, there is always a start to something. Keep up the great writing!
Sadness,anxiety, giving up. All those feelings I am able to read from this text. Those feelings have become familiar to myself too. You wrote them very well. Life is not always sugar and spice and everything nice. Sometimes it's very dark.
Keep up the great work!
Very interesting! First I thought this would be fiction. It still may be that. Then I thought it's a story from your school years. A story based on true events.
The length is OK. But one could think this could be a first chapter of something. I do not know what. The end of this piece made me think in such a way.
Whatever this is (true / fiction), it is easy to read. You can write! Keep up e good work!
Very touching! Some lines could be straight from my keyboard. Like "I am not the woman I thought I was". That feeling is very familiar to me. And the last part of your poem is touching too. You have a talent! Keep up the great work.