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Review of heavenly angel  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello xyxe,
You are so blessed to have the heavenly angel in your life.
This poem is so full of love and dedication to someone very special.
Thank you for sharing and for the opportunity for me to read your work.
Keep writing and keep posting.
MERRY CHRISTMAS !
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Review of Today  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello enn,
The last stanza is so intriguing and philosophical yet very artistic.The caption below the title makes your readers read more and more of your work.
Inspiring and interesting words like this
Who has the key with a question mark.
Yes, Today is a new beginning.
Thank you for the read.
Write On.
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Review of A Smilerise  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Mrs. V,
Interesting title and interesting lines that completed this poetry.
It expresses hope, inspiration and a wonderful experience.
Nice as it is.
I like it., especially the first stanza.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings to you annalea,
I like the presentation as well as the rhyme.
The sad story behind the poetry is also well explained in an artistic way.
Every line is my favorite line, emotional and mesmerizing.
Wonderful conclusion.
Thank you for the read.
Write On.
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Review of Love  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Kaitlyn,
I LIKE THE TITLE AND I LIKE THE POEM.
A short poem with the message so clear.
There is one word that needs to be changed....
your freind forever..........please change the word freind to ..friend
Keep loving, keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of Rain  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Cassandra Ann,
The title reminds me of a very sad love song.
The poem has a wisdom to share and that wisdom is about the inner strength in this particular experience.
Possibly you may improve the presentation of this poem and this will
come out as a very wonderful work so full of deep emotion.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On!
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Greetings !
A love story with a sad ending. A relationship that was not meant to be from the very start, that fits with the given caption below the title.
I admire the creativeness.
My suggestion:
This line :
"And anger raged throughout.........."
Please delete the first word "And " .
You may start the paragraph with "Anger raged throughout......."
Thank you for sharing and for the read.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of True Friends  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings Patricia,
The title is captivating, as I always treasure my friends, the old as well as the new ones.
I am so happy for you to gain a true treasure of your heart and that is your "Best friend".
Far or near, once a friend always a friend, is the wonderful message I read in this very meaningful poem.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of A Different World  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello desdomonad,
Your honesty of letting your readers know that "I know Nothing about poetry" made me admire your work more.
When one has to write from the heart expressing thoughts that freely flowing is truly a work of art, as far as I am concerned.
A free-verse and I have nothing to add and nothing to correct.
The chosen words fit for the given title.
Thank you for the read.
WRITE ON.
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Review of R.S.V.P.  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Bear,
The captivating title reminds me of many events that needs a prompt reply during those times when I was active in the corporate world.
This is well-written and the lines fit for the subject matter.
The last stanza? Oh...
A poem so perfect as it is !
Thank you for another worthwhile read.
Write On.
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Review of My Best Friend  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello saundra,
A lovely tribute to a best friend.
I enjoy reading this poem with a good flow and with a good rhyme.
It makes your readers smile .
The sincerity and the love matters so much in this work.
This proves once again that dog is truly a man's best friend.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On.
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello haless,
A love poetry and I love the given title. It can also be a beautiful love song.
There is a good flow.
My suggestion:
After the last word , "I love you."
The words Comment, ratee up and the semi-colon below, please delete them all.
It looks like a continuation of the poem and it lessens the value of the presentation.
Also, you may try presenting it by making three or four stanzas.
SUGGESTION ONLY.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
WRITE ON.
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Review of Memories of Love  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Jonalyn,
A love story. The "Memories of Love" that lingers on and on.
There were some funny parts, there were somejoyful and exciting parts, there were some nasty parts, there were some crazy parts, and yet LOVE overrules.
A sad and a happy ending at the same time.
My suggestion:
"i just heard
i don't know"
Please capitalize the letter I
"when I did'nt help him"
Please change this to:
if I didn't help him
"to be wear in meetings abroad"
Please change this to:
to be used in meetings abroad.
"my two favorite song"
Please change this to:
my two favorite songs
Thank you for sharing your work.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of His Body  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello mkm91,
An emotional piece as it described death of a family member.
Sad as it always be when one of our dear ones passed away.
My suggestion :
"Your joyfull heart...."
Please change the word joyfull to .....joyful
Also you may check with the last line, possibly you may change it.
SUGGESTION ONLY.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On.
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Review of Love  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello HUNZA,
A love story and you wrote it in such a unique way that it looks like a beautiful prose.
The story of two people destined to be husband and wife and their story is one of the beautiful love stories that I was able to know, and to read.
My suggestion is about the presentation., especially the last two lines. Also you may put a space in every paragraph.
All in one , this is fascinating.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of ---  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello TomorrowsFootsteps,
Wonderful, beautiful prose...as wonderful and as beautiful with the background music.
The presentation is great and all about this well-written "Tracks in the Rain" is truly impressive.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of God  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello sunitha,
A poem as well as a prayer.
It speaks of faith and a complete surrender to the MOST HIGH.
My suggestion:
"Not able to see Gods hands........."
Please put an apostrophe in the word God's
"Holyspirit"
Please change this to ....."Holy Spirit"
Thank you for sharing this very meaningful work.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Alarissa,
Love is overflowing in this work. A very special dedication to a dearest sister.
"A love that let's her big heart soar"
Please delete the apostrophe of the word "lets"
A love that lets her big heart soar.
Thank you for sharing your beautiful"My little sister is an angel"
WRITE ON.
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Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Tim Chiu,
The athlete and the poet shares once again a very inspiring poetry.
The poem has a good flow and has a good rhyme.
The title is very convincing.
A poem with a message that says "Go ! Go ! Go !"
So full of life.Thank you for another worthwhile read.
Write On.
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Review of Fluffy the Dragon  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello again judity,
I wonder what will it be ? WHEW ! Maybe anaconda....WHEW !
This is for a contest and there is a combination of suspense and the horrifying moments of the people who probably saw a dragon for the first time in their lives. I can imagine myself screaming if I see it with my very own eyes at our house. Maybe our 9 cats would run away forever.
The story has a good flow and I wish you luck for the contest.
Thank you for sharing "Fluffy the Dragon"
Write On.
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello judity,
The modern day world and all the advancement of technology. There are many advantages and there are also a lot of people who take advantage of the internet users by using so many incredible convincing tactics to win the trust and confidence of the users, only to be victimized by their modus. But I also believe that some are legitimate and truly helping for the advancement of a better life or tomorrow.
There must be no IMPULSIVE decisions. One has to check and double check and never hesitate to ask questions to the more knowledgeable of this field of high technology, especially when it is about financial situation and all the hard-earned money will be in jeopardy, so check and check, so no regrets after all.
This is a very interesting topic that you share to all of us and you did it so well.
Thank you for another educational read.
See you again in this awesome community.
Write On and GOD BLESS.
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Review of Enlightened  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello lee0047,
A poem with a good rhyme and the message truly gives an enlightenment.
I have a suggestion, it is minimal but of great importance.
The title, "Elightened"
Please change this to : Enlightened
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello again,
A chef , a writer....makes a wonderful combination.
This folder contains a treasure and I am so glad to explore such a great talent to share in this awesome community.
Life is so beautiful with these fantastic recipes .
Thank you for the very fruitful read.
Write On.
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Review of I'm here  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Daniel,
A short poem with a message of war with a supernatural power or whatever.
I believe that there is a continuation for this or possibly you allow the readers to make the final conclusion of whoever wins.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep positng.
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Review of Hope  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Branwen,
I love this poem.
In life, we face some struggles as we continue our journey, some are too heavy for us to carry, but as long as there is hope and faith in our hearts, surely there is ONE UP THERE who carry our burdens and lightens our load as well as brightens our road.
That is the precious message in this poem.
My suggestion in this work :
The presentation. Possibly you may divide this beautiful, realistic poem into three or four stanzas:

"Darkness surrounds her
As she tries to figure out life
It's been years !
When will this turmoil cease ?"

Then you may go on and on with the following stanzas.
SUGGESTION ONLY.
Thank you for the read.
Write On.
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