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Review of You Are There  
Review by tsurtidogni
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Inspire Hope,
I like your pen name. It offers a brighter tomorrow.
I like the chosen words that completed this poetry, it expresses a great faith in God.
My suggestion.....
Possibly you can divide this into four stanzas using four lines in every stanza and the last one line as conclusion.
Suggestion only.
Thank you for sharing your poem with a very powerful message.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of The Haircut  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello DiamondGirl,
Oh....What a story, so real, so sad, so very sad that it gives a very BIG IMPACT n my reading time. How many thoughtless mother in the world doing that to their children.
The ending... I agree with the narrator of this story. This is really an awakening to all the parents especially the mothers that they have to consider the emotional effect of their children with their unpleasant actions.
I admire your very impressive story.
Short and direct to the point and yet so convincing, so well..written.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
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Review of Respect  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello dogwood,
A poetry straight from the heart with a very straightforward message.
The title is captivating knowing and believing how important it is in our everyday existence.
The presentation is wonderful.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of Apple  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello Bellafulks,
I was thinking differently while reading the title that makes me crave for the very tasty fruit.
Hmmmmm......
Reading between the lines, I must say Ouch....the pain that this poetry conveys..
It has a good lesson, I believe so.
Philosophical love poetry.
Very Nice !
Thank you for the read...
Write On !
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Review of The Garden  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello sunrise,
The poem is descriptive of what a beautiful garden is.Inviting.....
The last stanzas are more on philosophical words that describes what this garden is.
Mesmerizing and makes me feel like to be with my garden once again anytime today after writing some reviews.
Thank you for sharing.
Write On.
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Review of Memory  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello flamefighter,
Memories, and full of action that made this short story.
Like the past events keep flashing on...
My suggestion....
There coming Sir what do .......
Please change it to ......They are coming Sir what do ...
Sir your ok, I am a paramedic, your ok.
Please change this to .....
Sir are you okay, I am a paramedic, are you okay ...with a question mark.
The conclusion or the last line explained it all.
Thank you for sharing you work.
WRITE ON !
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello ikiyasama,
Highly educational. The instructions are clear and easy to understand although I must admit that doing this is my weakest point as far as my computer knowledge is concerned. But I also believe that if I put my heart into it I can do it.
Your article makes Writing.Com. so awesome moment to moment, in every wonderful stay of this great community because it is composed of awesome authors and moderators like you.
I SALUTE YOU !
My best regards and GOD BLESS !
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Review of Miami  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Greetings Senita,
Captivating title.
Actually I have not been there in Miami. I have seen it only in TV series MIAMI VICE.
I am happy for you that you are now at the Miami University.
Back to your article.
My suggestion....
Please divide this into three paragraphs and we will see how it appears as a better and nicer presentation.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep the thoughts flowing, keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of यादें  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Greetings saksham,
Oh ! What writings are these ...what language, what country, this is very artistic.
I wish you can have an English translation to this so all of us here in this awesome community can appreciate more of your art.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
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Review of In God We Trust  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Bikerider,
A fiction that seems like a non=fiction. So real, so convincing like a movie that can never be erased from the mind.
Great story. Great presentation. Great and captivating title.
Historical as it is.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Great Job !
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of untitled  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello liveloud,
I wish you can have a title of this poem soon.
Dark and it is like a bad dream.
I appreciate your creativeness.
The last line....the word greave.....Please change it to grieve. Suggestion only.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of RIP  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello princess,
A poem expressing the pain of your aunt on the death of your uncle.
I admire your creativeness and your concern for your aunt.
My suggestion......
The caption below the title...
wat my aunty was feeling.......please change this to......what my auntie as feeling
A poem so full of longing and so full of love.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Write On !
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Review of ONE DAY, ONE PAGE  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings !
The title is captivating.
The writings are biblical and the message is clear that this shows your great faith and reverence for the Lord.
I am happy for you...and yes! In Jesus Book of Life, may your name be forever written
in gold.
Thank you for sharing your wisdom.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of Las Vegas  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Carolyn,
A poem or a prose or a short story and you made me laughed reading the last line.
My suggestion.....
Possibly you can make this into four stanzas using four lines in every stanza.
Suggestion only for the poem to have a more appealing presentation.
Thank you for sharing Las Vegas ....
Write On.
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello less than three,
This is deeply emotional pierching my heart as I read every line, every stanza.
Sad and so sad.
The feelings are thoroughly expressed in every chosen words that releases all the pain
and I hope and pray that by doing or by writing this, the healing begins.
A poem that leaves a great impact in my reading time.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of Oh the Cost  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Greetings alockwood1,
A loving tribute to the soldiers who fight for liberty.
The presentation is great and the poem itself is great !
Touching and so true as it expresses the braveness and the courageousness of the men and women who died for the freedom of their nativeland.
This is so precious in all aspects.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
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Review of War!  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings tbeshers,
I was curious by just reading the title. I always love Haiku poetry. It is always inspiring to note that this awesome community has many talented poets who can create wonderfully a Haiku poetry and you are one of them.
Thank you for the read.
WRITE ON.
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Review of This Moment  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello turtlemoon,
Wow !
I wanted to sing along with the wonderful lyrics that completed this song that you created,
Lovely. I wish I can hear your very own tune.
Every chosen word is great and pleasing.
Thank you for sharing your work, your music.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Greetings motwnbro,
The title is fascinating. It offers cheers and happy moments.
The story is presented in a poetry form and I consider it unique, not the standard way of writing a story.
This is like a lyrics of a song.
for many reason.........Please change this to....for many reasons
Thak you for sharing your fun and happy writings through
....ching a ling......
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
There is one line....
He grabbed the womens oversized shoulder...
Please change it to
He grabbed the womans oversized shoulder ...with an apostrophe after the letter n of the word womans
NOTE ......My keyboard has no apostrophe sign......Sorry for it...
Check your manners young lady ! I like this line....Very powerful and so unforgettable.
See you until the end of this wonderful book.
WRITE ON..
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Yes !
The Journey Begins.....fits for this chapter where the characters of the story are now leading on to their respective call on duty.
I am so happy for you that you can write so well....so very well.
I salute you for your great talent.
See you again....
WRITE ON !
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
There is a line.....
I can not let his death be in vein....did you mean...be in vain ...
There are more characters added here and more dialogue too.
I like the twists and turns of your story.
More adventure and suspense....
Thank you for the read.
See you again..
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for entry "Chapter IV-The Loss" 
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello again,
The end of Kyle ..........No I do not think so... Shelby so sad and making her so angry I suppose so.
This is a long chapter to write.
Now, going back to the main title, The Hereos....is this the modern names or the fantasy names of The Heroes .....
I truly admire your imagination and your flow of thoughts.
Truly ....you are blessed..
See you again..
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Greetings !
Kyle, one of the main characters in this story has the will to live and to tell you the truth,
I feel like I am watching a movie and I do not even want to blink for a moment.
Great storyline.
Convincing..Penetrating..Deep action..Suspense..
I wish to read more of this..
Thank you..
See you next chapter..
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello again,
Interesting prologue.
I am getting to know the characters of the story here as well as the setting.
Hmmmmm...Interesting..I can sense the suspense reading the last line.
See you next chapter or see you chapter 1..
Thank you for the read.
Write On..
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