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Review by Paul D
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: I enjoyed this well-written ghost story.

*NoteO* Characters: good work on the character, who holds the reader's interest.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: good descriptions bring the story to life.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy to read.

*NoteG* Overall Impression & Conclusion:


*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review of I'm Fine  
Review by Paul D
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: this story shows how determination and fear can push a person into a terrible situation. This story is exciting and well-written.

*NoteO* Characters: the character is interesting and holds the readers attention.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: strong description truly brings this story to life.

*Note* Dialogue: internal dialogue is used quite effectively.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy to read.


*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review of Coincidence  
Review by Paul D
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: I enjoyed this story of conflict with a co-worker.

*NoteO* Characters: the characters hold the interest of the reader. Good interaction.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: the setting is well defined.

*Note* Dialogue: excellent use of dialogue to advance the story.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy to read.


*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review by Paul D
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: I enjoy comedy, and the story had me laughing. The ending was well done. This is a story that with illustrations would be a fun one for kids. It is also well written.

*NoteO* Characters: the characters are interesting, and their interaction makes the story fun to read.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: good descriptions bring the story to life.

*Note* Dialogue: good use of dialogue to advance the story.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy to read.

*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review of Good Gold!  
Review by Paul D
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: this story has a creative idea that is expressed very well. I loved it.

*NoteO* Characters: the characters are clearly defined, and their interaction moves the story forward.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: good descriptive language brings the story to life.

*Note* Dialogue: good use of dialogue to advance the story.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy reading style.


*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review of White Leaves  
Review by Paul D
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: this story is a bit unusal with a few twists and turns and a surprise ending. Well done.

*NoteO* Characters: the characters are interesting and hold the reader's attention.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: good descriptions bring the setting to life.

*Note* Dialogue: the dialogue sounds normal and advances the story.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy to read.


*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review of Just not my day  
Review by Paul D
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: this story starts off as a typical retail event, then the action takes off for an explosive story.

*NoteO* Characters: the characters are clearly defined, and their interaction moves the story along.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: excellent use of description brings this story to life.

*Note* Dialogue: the dialogue sounds normal and is used effectively.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy writing style.

*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review by Paul D
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

Overall impression: I enjoyed this poem that tells a love story.

Structure: free verse.

Rhythm: the poem flows well and is easy to read.

Imagery: good use of descriptive words to bring the poem to life.

Area(s) for improvement: notes



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Review of Your move  
Review by Paul D
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

Overall impression: emotional poetry can be quite a challenge. This poem is well conceived and expresses the emotion very well.

Structure: free verse

Rhythm: the poem flows well and is easy to read.

Imagery: the writer's word choice conveys the emotional nature of the poem very well, which brings the poem to life.

Area(s) for improvement: notes



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Review of Crossing  
Review by Paul D
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

Overall impression: perfect. Free verse is easy to write, but it takes skill to get it right, and this poem is excellent.

Structure: there is no set structure, but the poem flows so well. Punctuation is used correctly and effectively, which makes the poem truly stand out.

Rhythm: the fluidity of the poem keeps it moving quickly from beginning to end

Imagery: flowers - so many words concerning flowers are used in an effective manner, which brings this poem to life.

Area(s) for improvement: notes



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Review by Paul D
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: this is a snippet of a story that says a lot in a few words. Good work.

*NoteO* Characters: the character is not well-defined but still holds the interest of the reader.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: strong work here; excellent use of descriptions to bring the story to life.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy to read.


*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review by Paul D
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: This is an unusual story that is well expressed.

*NoteO* Characters: the main character carries the story from beginning to end. Well done.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: excellent work here - the descriptions truly bring the story to life.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy to read .


*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review by Paul D
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: the story is unusual, which I like, and it has a very good ending.

*NoteO* Characters: the characters could use more development.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: the settinn is very clear.

*Note* Dialogue: the dialogue has some problems; it advances the story.

*NoteB* Writing Style: it is easy to read.


*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review by Paul D
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: this reminds me of a fairy tale with a bit of a dark ending.

*NoteO* Characters: the main character is well developed.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: good use of description for the setting.

*Note* Dialogue: there are some dialogue problems, but it is used well to advance the story.

*NoteB* Writing Style: this story is easy to read.


*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review by Paul D
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: I enjoyed this tale very much.

*NoteO* Characters: interesting characters that move the story along.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: more info could be added to setting.

*NoteW* Emotion, Mood & Atmosphere: this is well done.

*Note* Dialogue: good use of dialogue to advance the story.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy to read and engages the reader.


*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review of Talent  
Review by Paul D
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: this story made me smile. Great ending.

*NoteO* Characters: the characters are enjoyable and engaging.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: good details are added to bring the setting to life.

*NoteB* Writing Style: the story flows well.

*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review by Paul D
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: I like how the story starts with a bang and the details of the story are revealed a bit at a time until the end.

*NoteO* Characters: the characters are interesting, and their interaction is very well done.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: enough details are added to bring the setting to life.

*Note* Dialogue: excellent use of dialogue to advance the story.

*NoteB* Writing Style: the story flows well.

*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review by Paul D
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: This is an interesting flash story of a scene between boyfriend and girlfriend.

*NoteO* Characters: the characters are clearly defined, and the interaction between them carries the story well.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: the setting is clear and details in the story make it interesting.

*Note* Dialogue: good use of dialogue to advance the story.

*NoteB* Writing Style: the stroy flows well.

*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review by Paul D
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: I enjoyed this account. It was interesting and fun to read.

*NoteO* Characters: the narrator carries the story well.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: this is one of the strengths of the story. There is a lot of detail which brings the story to life.

*Note* Dialogue: good use of dialogue to advance the story.

*NoteB* Writing Style: the story flows well.

*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review of Abyss  
Review by Paul D
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: a story of conflict and character revealed in a realistic way.

*NoteO* Characters: the characters are revealed in their interaction - well done.

*Note* Dialogue: this is a dialogue driven story, ann the dialogue is used effectively.

*NoteB* Writing Style: the story flows well.

*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review of Vampire Lost  
Review by Paul D
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: I found this an interesting tale of a vampire.

*NoteO* Characters:Rystyk is a well developed character. His interactions with other people moves the story right along.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: good work here to give the story enough detail that it comes to life.

*NoteW* Emotion, Mood & Atmosphere: there is a dark mood here that gives the reader the creeps.

*Note* Dialogue: good use of dialogue to advance the story.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy to read style.

*NoteG* Overall Impression & Conclusion: as the first chapter of a longer story, this captures the reader's attention, so they will continue to read.


*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review by Paul D
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction:I enjoyed the story and the positive message it presented.

*NoteO* Characters: the characters are clear and their interaction is well done.
*Note* Dialogue: god use of dialogue to advance the story.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy reading style.

*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review of Orbitian  
Review by Paul D
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction:I enjoyed this until near the end where unexplained elements were introduced.

*NoteO* Characters: the characters are likeable and interesting. More development is needed.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: this can be improved upon with more detail.
*Note* Dialogue: the dialogue helped to advance the story.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy to read style.

*NoteG* Overall Impression & Conclusion: "I'll grant you one wish – story becomes strange because of no context. I think that with added background and more details, the story will be much improved.



*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review of Merry Chrismouse!  
Review by Paul D
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: good humor and lots of action make for a fun story.

*NoteO* Characters: I enjoyed the mouse and the main character; their interaction is well done.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: the setting in the story was used effectively.
*Note* Dialogue: good use of dialogue to advance the story.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy to read and follow.

*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review by Paul D
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: excellent use of dialogue to tell a story.

*NoteO* Characters: the characters are well defined, and their interaction is very good.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: good work here to bring the setting alive.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy to read and follow.

*NoteG* Overall Impression & Conclusion: I like this a lot.


*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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