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Review by Paul D
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: I enjoyed this tale very much.

*NoteO* Characters: interesting characters that move the story along.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: more info could be added to setting.

*NoteW* Emotion, Mood & Atmosphere: this is well done.

*Note* Dialogue: good use of dialogue to advance the story.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy to read and engages the reader.


*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review of Talent  
Review by Paul D
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: this story made me smile. Great ending.

*NoteO* Characters: the characters are enjoyable and engaging.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: good details are added to bring the setting to life.

*NoteB* Writing Style: the story flows well.

*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review of An old basement  
Review by Paul D
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: I enjoyed the story, but it feels unfinished to me.

*NoteO* Characters: I like the characters; they are interesting and engaging; there is good interaction between them.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: good use of detail to bring the setting to life.

*Note* Dialogue:te dialogue helps to advance the story.

*NoteB* Writing Style: the story flows well.


*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review of In Her Hands  
Review by Paul D
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: I enjoyed the poem about the Earth and te conflict with man.

*NoteO* Characters: the struggles of the Earth are well portrayed, bringing the reader into the poem.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: good work here in detailing the struggles.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy to read and understand. Good use of free verse.

*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review by Paul D
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: I enjoyed this account. It was interesting and fun to read.

*NoteO* Characters: the narrator carries the story well.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: this is one of the strengths of the story. There is a lot of detail which brings the story to life.

*Note* Dialogue: good use of dialogue to advance the story.

*NoteB* Writing Style: the story flows well.

*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review of Abyss  
Review by Paul D
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: a story of conflict and character revealed in a realistic way.

*NoteO* Characters: the characters are revealed in their interaction - well done.

*Note* Dialogue: this is a dialogue driven story, ann the dialogue is used effectively.

*NoteB* Writing Style: the story flows well.

*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review of Vampire Lost  
Review by Paul D
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: I found this an interesting tale of a vampire.

*NoteO* Characters:Rystyk is a well developed character. His interactions with other people moves the story right along.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: good work here to give the story enough detail that it comes to life.

*NoteW* Emotion, Mood & Atmosphere: there is a dark mood here that gives the reader the creeps.

*Note* Dialogue: good use of dialogue to advance the story.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy to read style.

*NoteG* Overall Impression & Conclusion: as the first chapter of a longer story, this captures the reader's attention, so they will continue to read.


*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review by Paul D
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction:I enjoyed the story and the positive message it presented.

*NoteO* Characters: the characters are clear and their interaction is well done.
*Note* Dialogue: god use of dialogue to advance the story.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy reading style.

*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review of Orbitian  
Review by Paul D
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction:I enjoyed this until near the end where unexplained elements were introduced.

*NoteO* Characters: the characters are likeable and interesting. More development is needed.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: this can be improved upon with more detail.
*Note* Dialogue: the dialogue helped to advance the story.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy to read style.

*NoteG* Overall Impression & Conclusion: "I'll grant you one wish – story becomes strange because of no context. I think that with added background and more details, the story will be much improved.



*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review of Merry Chrismouse!  
Review by Paul D
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: good humor and lots of action make for a fun story.

*NoteO* Characters: I enjoyed the mouse and the main character; their interaction is well done.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: the setting in the story was used effectively.
*Note* Dialogue: good use of dialogue to advance the story.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy to read and follow.

*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review by Paul D
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: excellent use of dialogue to tell a story.

*NoteO* Characters: the characters are well defined, and their interaction is very good.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: good work here to bring the setting alive.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy to read and follow.

*NoteG* Overall Impression & Conclusion: I like this a lot.


*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review of The Valkyrie War  
Review by Paul D
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: I enjoyed this story. The action kept me interested.

*NoteO* Characters: the characters are interesting, and their interaction moved the story along at a good pace.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: good use if description to bring the story to life.

*Note* Dialogue: the dialogure sounded realistic and advanced the story.

*NoteB* Writing Style: east to read style.

*NoteG* Overall Impression & Conclusion: This is a stoy that should be continued. Good work here.


*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review of The Elven King  
Review by Paul D
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: excellent work here. I enjoyed this story very much.

*NoteO* Characters: interesting characters that engage the reader and advance the story.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: good descriptive writing brings the story to life.

*Note* Dialogue: good use of dialogue to advance the story.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy to read.

*NoteG* Overall Impression & Conclusion: this would be a story to expand.


*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review by Paul D
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: I found this story interesting. Using conversation to tell a story is not easy, but this one is well done.

*NoteO* Characters: the characters are clearly defined, and their interaction is interesting and advances the story.

*Note* Dialogue: the dialogue is a strong component of this story, and it is used effectively.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy to read style.

*NoteG* Overall Impression & Conclusion: this first chapter of a longer story will capture the reader's attention and cause them to continue reading.


*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review by Paul D
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: I enjoyed this story very much. Strong action sequences that keep the reader engaged.

*NoteO* Characters: the characters come across as realistic and their interaction is well done.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: good descriptions bring the story to life.

*Note* Dialogue: the dialogue sounds natural and advances the story.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy to read style.

*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review by Paul D
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: I enjoyed this story. The action keeps the reader engaged.

*NoteO* Characters: the characters are interesting, and their interaction is well done.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: there are some good sci-fi elements. I would suggest to take a look at some of the technology innovations and incorporate even more sci-fi.

*Note* Dialogue: good use of dialogue to advance the story.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy to read style.

*NoteG* Overall Impression & Conclusion: this story's ending will cause readers to want to continue to read in the series.


*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review by Paul D
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: Bravo! The descriptive writing leaps off the page and drives the reader eagerly to the finish line.

*NoteO* Characters: the characters are mysterious and interesting.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: exceptional work here. the descriptive writing brings the story to life.

*NoteW* Emotion, Mood & Atmosphere: there is an air of mystery and dread.

*Note* Dialogue: brief but useful.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy to read style.

*NoteG* Overall Impression & Conclusion: as the first part of a longer story, this works very well to draw the reader's attention. They will want to know what happens next.


*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review by Paul D
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: this story has a mystery I find interesting.

*NoteO* Characters: the characters are unusual. Their interaction is well done.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: good work on this - the descriptions bring the story to life.

*Note* Dialogue: good use of dialogue to advance the story.

*NoteG* Overall Impression & Conclusion: work on punctuation and editing.


*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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for entry "Prologue
Review by Paul D
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: I like this story. I think it is realistic to how a child would act.

*NoteO* Characters: the character is interesting and believable.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: good work here - good descriptions bring the story to life.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy to read story.

*NoteG* Overall Impression & Conclusion: this works well for the start of a longer story. The reader is engaged and will want to keep reading.


*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review of The Sword of Elam  
for entry "The Mask
Review by Paul D
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: I like this story that engages the reader's interest from start to finish.

*NoteO* Characters: there is a good mix of characters. Their interaction is well done.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: good work here to bring the story to life.

*Note* Dialogue: good use of dialogue to advance the story.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy to read story.

*NoteG* Overall Impression & Conclusion: this first chapter works well to capture the reader's interest.


*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review by Paul D
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon! *BalloonR*


Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: I liked this story. It holds the reader's attention from start to end.

*NoteO* Characters: the main character is well done, and the interaction between the characters makes the story interesting.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: good descriptions brings the reader into the story.

*Note* Dialogue: good use of dialogue to advance the story.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy to read story.

*NoteG* Overall Impression & Conclusion: this is a good kick off to a longer story. The reader will want to continue reading.


*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review of Impious Hearts  
Review by Paul D
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon! *BalloonR*


Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: good story. I liked it a lot.

*NoteO* Characters: the characters are well done and their interaction makes the story interesting.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: the descriptions bring the story to life.

*Note* Dialogue: good use of dialogue to advance the story.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy to read story.

*NoteG* Overall Impression & Conclusion: this is a story that should be continued.


*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review of Out Of the Woods  
Review by Paul D
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*BalloonR* Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon! *BalloonR*


Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: I like this story a lot. It has a mysterious tension that builds slowly.

*NoteO* Characters: the characters are interesting and engaging. Their interaction is well done.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: good work here. The descriptions bring the reader into the story.

*NoteW* Emotion, Mood & Atmosphere: there is an eerie feel - well done.

*Note* Dialogue: good use of dialogue to advance the story.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy to read style.

*NoteG* Overall Impression & Conclusion: this works great as the first part of a longer story. It engages the reader and entices them to continue.


*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review by Paul D
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: I enjoyed this story a lot. It moves along at a quick pace. The reader is pulled into the story and held there to the end.

*NoteO* Characters:the ain character is very well done. The descriptions are well worked into the story. I thought the 'alienness' was well done.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: this is one of the strengths of the story. The descriptions bring the story to life.

*Note* Dialogue: effective use of dialogue to advance the story.

*NoteB* Writing Style: smooth flowing story.

*NoteG* Overall Impression & Conclusion: I didn't see any errors, so congrats on excellent writing. I liked the ending.


*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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Review by Paul D
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

*NoteB* General Comments & Reader Reaction: I like this story a lot I look forward to reading more.

*NoteO* Characters: The main character is interesting and engaging.

*NoteR* Setting & Imagery: good descriptions bring the story to life.

*Note* Dialogue: good use of dialogue to advance the story.

*NoteB* Writing Style: easy reading style.

*NoteG* Overall Impression & Conclusion: lots of exciting action.


*NoteO* Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes

*StarO* WRITE ON! *StarO*
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