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Title: We knew we were getting a cowboy from the prompt - so a romp in the hay is in order. Title fits the theme.
Premise / Plot / Theme: A seemingly out of place stranger in a coffee shop and the discovery of country in the city.
Prompt there was a prompt for this contest that was a pic of a cowboy even us guys have confess was just too dang hot.
What I liked: Well mostly, it was the discovery that there really are ranches in New York. Actually, I liked the transition of setting. Moving logically from one setting to another in a contest with limitations like this one can often end up spending too many of your precious words. This writer was able to make it believable with only two or three sentences. It was a good way to slide into the prompt.
Grabber: It's not really dramatic His hair was loose and he was shirtless but since the female character took note of the shirtless, we knew we were on our way to something.
Characters and Imagery: I might have liked to know a bit more about the female - we know she's a city girl but I never got a sense if this horseback on the ranch thing was out of the envelope for her. We know he's the hottest thing ever but we didn't get to form a picture. I was also a bit confused and found myself wondering about his hair being loose but he was wearing a hat. I know he could have long hair but I got hung up on trying to decide.
Sizzle: I liked the brief encounter on the horse - nicely done, even though I could not imagine him getting her to that position. The scene in the barn felt right and had a natural flow, with the exception that we never read of her losing anything but her shirt. When one gets to that point, it's a bit of a jolt to have to back and see if you missed something.
Spelling, Punctuation, Grammar and format: I promise I'm not making fun, but this one stands out for me. I had a vision of him smacking her into the horse's rump and then riding away. I think maybe it should be "On the back of the horse" instead of "at the back of the horse". "grabbed her with one hand, threw her at the back of the horse and rode away."
What I had some issue with: I understand the intent of the writer, but I most often have difficulty with biggest, best, hottest and all that. I tend to want to either see that for myself or find my characters not quite so perfect. As in the following two examples.
most fabulous looking man she'd ever beheld"
... and superhuman strength I also felt I was told a great deal the would have felt better to visualize. Here is one example "and she gasped as it flew across the field" If her shirt blew across the field, it would have been a great opportunity for us to watch it happen. Something like watching the wind carry it fluttering across a meadow of wild flowers or something.
General Impressions: The writer indicates that this is a first ever post. Whether or not that means writing is a new endeavor, I found it to be a good effort. I enjoyed the short piece and how it worked in the contest prompt. I would encourage this writer to keep posting and polishing.