Hi Have a sunshiny day!
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First thoughts: Today, we get to choose which people we review from our list, so I've chosen to review this short story of yours. My first thought, as I read through, was how sad this story is. The ending was definitely unexpected. I thought Marjorie would have a heart attack. Maybe she did. It's a really moving story.
Plot/Story: Marjorie is elderly, and not in the best of health. Her daughter, Nancy, is having her third round of chemo, and not doing so well. When Marjorie gets a letter from her son-in-law, she knows it's not going to be good news. So she plugs in the electric teapot, and its down to read. The news isn't good. The next scene we see is the fire crew who were called out to Nancy's house. They reflect on how sad it is, that the old lady probably plugged in the electric teapot, and forgot about it. That's just so sad. I wanted Marjorie to be able to see her daughter one more time. That said, it is a clever ending, because it's completely unexpected. There were hints that Marjorie may die, but of a heart attack, not fire. I wonder whether the news was too much for her heart, and that's what killed her, then the house caught on fire.
What I love about this story is how invested I was in it, despite its short length. I could picture Marjorie, all alone, getting the letter, and my heart went out to her. You did a really great job here.
Characterisation: Marjorie is wonderful. The reader has so much compassion for her. She's not well, she's living on her own, and her daughter is dying. I can only imagine how much she would have wanted to be with her. How much she would have wanted to take all her daughter's pain away. It's really moving.
What I Liked: The tenderness with which you wrote Marjorie's character. Also love the twist at the end, where we find that the consequence of stress, in this instance, is house fire. At least Marjorie isn't suffering, or worrying about her daughter, any more.
Parting Comments: I really enjoyed this short story. It's well written, and shows great compassion and tenderness for your character. It's a lovely story.
Lady Purple, House Stark
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