Disclaimer: Hopefully, you will take only what is helpful and send the rest into cyberspace. I decided to comment on each one separately, after commenting on the general form.
• A Title: Senryu are titled. Haiku are untitled; a successful haiku usually speaks for itself. Instead of using a title, try revision.
•Too Much Punctuation (both senryu and haiku): Avoid periods. Both are one moment in a continuum; a period often destroys that illusion. So may beginning with a capital letter. Other punctuation-The average haiku has one break in thought or continuity, usually at the end of line 1 or 2 (sometimes, the middle of line 2). If punctuated at all, it is usually with a colon, dash or ellipsis. An occasional dash or ellipsis may provide emphasis either before of after the final word (or phrase). In general, shy away from punctuation unless you are sure of its benefit.
•The Telegram Effect: Compress your haiku/senryu, but be sure the omission of words (especially the articles a, an & the) doesn't chop it into ungainly pieces.
• Lifeless Verbs: The is & have families result in pictureless & actionless verses. Use action verbs instead.
•Past or Future Tense: Haiku/senryu usually happen now. Past & future tenses remove us from the action & often use more words - weak ones like has, have, will.
•Adjectives and Adverbs: Use sparingly. Look for ones made from noun or verb roots. Avoid very, much, any, many, few, & all-inclusive words like every, all, always, never, everyone.
•"I": Overuse of 1st person pronouns - it's more risky in haiku than in senryu, because senryu deals with humans. Put emphasis on the image in haiku, and on the person in senryu.
• Padding: Don't throw in words just to conform to a 5-7-5 or other imagined pattern. Either revise to find 17 strong, useful syllables or go for a shorter verse.
•Redundancy: One season word is enough: "Spring blossoms" is redundant: both identify season. Let strong words do their job: "pavement wet with rain" is redundant.
•Abstractions: Not Supported by Concrete Imagery? Let imagery suggest the point; don't state it baldly. Proverbs masquerading as haiku are likely to run into trouble.
.Overall Impression:
Shoulder of the Road: Without the title, this is a good haiku. Although man is mentioned, the emphasis is on nature.
Talking to the Birds: I thought this was a well written senryu. Drop the caps and I give it a 5.0.
Blades of Grass: More action verbs needed. Like "growing" instead of "grows right." And "becoming" instead of "now becomes." Eliminate the title and caps.
She Wants To Believe: Again, without the caps, you have a keeper.
For those who do not speak Japanese fluently, the 5-7-5 syllable form works in "most" cases. When it doesn't, use less syllables.
Hopefully, you will keep writing them.
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