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Review of Lost in my Mind  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
There is some sound advice in this piece. The thing the author appears to be focused on is the uncontrolled intrusive type of memor that comes with post traumatic stress disorder. Sometimes when it isn't too severe this advice might be enough but if ptsd is too severe then therapy and or medication might be required.
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Review of Thanksgiving Wish  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a rather sensible thanksgiving wish. The problem is the reality of family is that strife is rife among families. there are always sides to arguments and lines being drawn. Even in the choice of what family to have the celebratory meal with. But here's to hoping...
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Review of Crawl Back Inside  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Interesting poem. I wonder what the subject of the poem is or has done that they must be enjoined to withdraw from the world like this. It is probably the inherent wrongness of the world view that is to be avoided. Pulling away from the world like this takes as special kind of courage that not enough have. And in truth the fruit of this strategy may or may not be borne out in this lifetime.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Cool poem. I love the part of tea time turns to pee time. Such a hilariously cute observation that few would be bold enough to use. It just sounds so silly in a poem but this wasn't meant to be one of those stoic solid meaning filled poems anyway and sometimes I think the world forgets that we need the literary equivalent of popcorn or cotton candy too.
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Review of The Mulch of Time  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This trillogy of Haiku really work together to present the image of clocks as leaves of fallen time. The author instructs the reader to select the best of the three as their official entry but I think it is the sum of the three that makes for the best possible entry in this contest.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem seems to be a very light interpretation of the picture of a girl's ghost sitting on a park bench. It is full of optimism for the future and doesn't focus exclusively on the girls sad past ending with her death and separation from her lover. The speaker takes strength from their time together and moves through the present into the future with the specter's help.
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Review of Canto XIII  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
THis poem takes the image of a forest of trees surrounded by the faces of clocks all bearing different times as a consequence of suicide. the clocks show the times of death of all the people who took their own lives prematurely...The subject of the poems has become one of the trees and stares down at all the clocks knowing that one of them was his own.
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Review of Nocturne  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
THis version of the poem seems to end with the bench phantom finally finding her love. the other poems inspired by this prompt are not half as optimistic. though having the lover die and join her isn't the most optimistic situation. I mean with him dying and all.
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Review of Waiting for me  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
In this reaction to a translucent girl sitting on a bench, the author takes the voice of the parent of a missing child. they question what happened to the girl, was she teased away by some sadistic person. Did they hurt her. Did she cry for her parent? The poem beggs the child to remain on the bench until the parent can come to find her.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
THis seems to treat the forest of clocks as an army bent on tormenting people both in their sleep and out of it. They seem to revel in making people late and allowing them to sleep in for important meeting times. the wild timepieces can't be trusted in the least and there seems to be no law among them as they run fast or slow.
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Review of Time Bound  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
THis poem attacks time as a dominatrix, whipping at all her supplicants. SHe rules with an unkind hand and demeans the living and the dying with her stern and irrevocable wrath. Her victims beg and bargain for more of her attention just to have that sliver more of life but she denys them every...time.
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Review of The Ghost Of Me  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
THis is an interesting take on the prompt. It isn't about a lover in any way for this poet. It is about a ghost of self, youth versus age and truth versus fiction. The author refers to the speaker of the poem as much as a ghost as the image of the girl on the bench and I have to wonder what kind of afterlife this really is.
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Review of Fading Memories  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This poet sees the scene from the point of view of the girl's lover and I really hadn't thought of it that way. She becomes a ghost of a memory rather than a literal spirit. It has been so long since the lover saw her that the bench in the memory has broken and begun to decay as has the memory itself. I love it.
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Review of Fields of Time  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I love the title and the poem that has sprung from it or did it spring from the poem? I never know for sure but they go together perfectly. The idea that each clock represents a life is an image I didn't see in the picture and I really admire the author's creative sight.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
So far so good, I like the way you are revealing her to be a very powerful witch without just saying so. I also love the wedding bells being the worst thing she could imagine. I think her imagination on that account will be enlarged quite a bit when she discovers what she is capable of. as to structure and grammar, I suck at those but the creativity and flow of this are perfect to my eyes. I would keep going.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Might you mean vigilance instead of vigilant inches second to last stanza? I could be wrong it just sounded wrong to me the way you put it. I totally embrace the likelihood that I am wrong. Other than that spot I really enjoyed this poem. It is highly patriotic and gives the creator the proper reverence for his role in our success as a nation
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Review of Ride Smart  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a gruesome psa encouraging the use of a bicycle helmet. It is brief but frighteningly severe discussion of what could happen to someone if they ignore the suggestion that they wear a helmet when they ride. That said it isn't exactly explicit about the consequences of ignoring basic safety guidelines.
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Review of The Shadow Hunter  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This sounds like a good poem when I read it aloud, but I feel like the wording makes it less accessible or understandable. A simpler vocabulary might serve the message better. Just because you know a word doesn't mean that you have to use it. One or two strong words can replace half a page of obscure description that trips over itself.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a nice poem. I like the way it describes royalty especially of the hereditary kind. This golden princess is a strong and confident individual but I have to wonder how much of that is because of her inherited power and how much history do with who she is as a person.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a sad poem. The sentiment shared in it are like a knife to your guts. It has to hurt to love someone that much and not even be seen by them any more. It is like the setup for an 80s romantic comedy where the hero ultimately convince their crush that they are meant to be together. Unfortunately I don't think that is what the subject of this poem can look forward to.
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Review of Mr. Snood  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hilarious, but a little disgusting, to think he would have a turkey part grafted to his body. One problem, the turkeys would need to be dispatched at some point and I think in this day and age housewives lack the skill and more importantly the will to manage that. You can't cook a turkey, guts and all. Things have to be removed before roasting. and the turkey has to die for that. I doubt any amount of hypnotism is going to keep a turkey still while being gutted. But I am just nitpicking. Cool story.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a good letter to encourage a younger self. It reminds me of a letter of encouragement I wrote to my present self when I was much younger. Before I knew that crap enthusiastically liked hitting fans. Before I lost my smile. It helped to remind me what a smile was so I recognized it again after I found my soul mate.
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Review of Heat Exchange  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh yeah. Perfect description of a change in season. I liked the way you peeled August away as though the heat and humidity caused th calendar pages to cling together. It is a great brief scene about the shift between one month and the next. I wonder how you would animate the shift from autumn to winter.
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Review of A Year's End  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
The story is told we'll. I like the characters and I am even okay with the tiny bit of head hopping on the beach. Usually that kind of thing Jenks me out of the story but you did it smoothly enough I didn't mind too much. I kind of wish they could hook up but I am more glad that they didn't it would just be a raspy rebound relationship if they did.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (4.5)
If there is a part two might I suggest you edit this and add part two directly to the end because this poem seems incomplete, it would also make it easier for the reader to experience the whole piece. I am not sure why the poet is so obsessed with Lora, Linda, and Libra. You could make that a little clearer too.
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