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Review of THE CLIFF  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Some of the word choices were awkward. I am not thinking the nor's fit in the last two stanzas. The first stanza could be reworked too. It reads like roses are red violets are blue- too trite for such a serious subject. it seems off key. It doesn't follow the rest of the poem it sets up expectations that thankfully arent filled by the rest of the poem.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Whoa, this is a well-thought-out parody! You went the whole distance. You could have stopped with the first stanza and I would have been impressed, but you went the whole distance!!! I love most of the word choices a couple of the rhymes are a bit of a stretch but it is perfectly acceptable given the power of the poem.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a very interesting poem with a strong rhyme scheme that makes perfect sense when you get to the last line. I like the way it builds to that twist of an ending. It made me chuckle when I got there and also made me wonder if I could write a similar poem about ruby red squirt.
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for entry "~ Two Hugs ~" 
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
My sister and I are fairly poorly estranged too. She is a strict bible belting Christian and I am in a same-sex marriage. SHe won't really bend to meet me halfway she doesn't even bother to try to save my soul anymore. I hate to hear when other people have such a rift in their families, I know how much it hurts.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a beautiful picture and an even more beautiful memory shared. I wish the world were more like this picture. Smiles, because of diversity not in spite of it. Nobody accusing anybody else of prejudices just because of how they look. Nobody judging anybody else. Just happy honest smiles. That is what we need more of...
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
We lost teenie this last october. She was a rescue and had a hard life in her ten or more years before us. We made her last five as good as we could but things had caught up to her and she just didn't need to be in so much pain anymore. Her meds stopped working and she couldn't get around anymore. Losing a pet is hard.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I like the message of this poem but some of the rhymes were a bit of a stretch they require a suspension of grammar that's okay though I like the message don't give up. first the poem describes the depression point of giving up then it gives reasons you shouldn't.
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Review of ARE YOU A TEEN?  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
this is an interesting poem about the teenage years in the first stanza I feared it was just going to go stereotyping them but through the poem it made note of just how different teens could be from shy to mean, bullies to artistic or the bullied. I like the poem and feel it is just the right length.
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Review of A Mask to Wear  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a good story explaining why masks are important. It is written well, but it seems like it is for a more adult audience. Billy's voice and character are conflictingly both too mature for the argument to work and naive enough to accept what little argument is presented to him. I really couldn't place this at an audience level.


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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Needs run through a grammar checker. I like the story so far but some of the minor grammatical mistakes did distract me. I think something like Grammarly could catch them for you and it would help a lot. I like the characters. You could do a little more to set the scenes off separately a little better and clarify the pov character a little better.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Lovely poem I think it is a pretty good example of the form, slightly mutated of course. The refrain brings literal images to my mind and I can see the scenes described because of it. I think the form and subject of the poem really go well together.
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Review of Stick  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
What a wonderful story of a life spent together. I like the way gifts are personal and handmade. That's how we do it too. It is going to be twelve years for us in January. it takes a lot to keep things together that long, congratulations.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This story of the nativity takes it from a slightly different angle than I have heard, read, or seen before. It asks how mary felt first holding her son, the messiah. I hadn't thought about it but she had been told who her son was ahead of time so... yeah I think she would be a little anxious about her responsibilities.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
It is a beautiful word picture. I can see it very clearly. I feel the crispness of the air. The silence of nature is a natural Christmas carol. I love the way nature has its own Christmas celebration. The purity of the snow is a perfect embodiment of the Christmas idea.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I heard you were fourteen. This doesn't read like a teenaged expression of self. This reads like someone who has put a lot of effort and time into discovering themselves than that. The formatting does show youth a little and definite inexperience with WDC methods of posting. I think this piece could be divided into three distinct paragraphs and I recommend putting extra returns between them for ease of reading. So break your arguments into your main points and organize the paragraphs around those points and you'll have a really powerful and convincingly written essay. Remember to pound home your conclusion in the final paragraph.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I love this playful rendition of a rainstorm. It screams spring and is overall highly enjoyable. It is also very passionate and romantic I like the line
Aroused drops tango on the window pane,
it has an energy and a flow and a rhythmic pattern just like a spring rainstorm for me.

By the way, congratulations on being my 1000th public review.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I love the contrast of the two sisters I like that the white one doesn't sleep at night does that mean she sleeps through the day. is she there to protect us from her sister's dark nature at night or does her sister stay awake all day? interesting form as well.
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Review of Finally Free  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
spiritual freedom isn't always something people find. spirituality really does mean more to one when you come to it on your own rather than having it forced down your throat with your mother's milk. You most likely will believe like your parents do, but you shouldn't have to. How do you know when you find truth if you aren't allowed to examine what you have found.
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Review of His Song  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Good start to something though is there a better way to introduce the changes in time and setting? Something a little more show and a lot less tell? That is the main thing that leaped out at me. Maybe put in scene dividers and then show how much time has passed from things that have changed?
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Review of Distant  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a very sad very descriptive poem about a solid mind falling apart. I have seen it happen to others and it is like a slow death that doesn't take the body with it. You are left staring into empty eyes wondering what is life like for them now? Is it worth it to keep living?
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Review of Giving Thanks  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a strong poem offering gratitude as a solution not just an element of thankfulness. I suppose if you can't feel thankful it makes it hard to place value on any element of your life. and a life without value is a life without happiness. Thank you for writing this poem and getting me to think about things.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
It can be hard fitting into a new place especially when you have it locked in your brain that being there means you have somehow failed. I have been to several mental health day centers and between medication and overall disorders, they are hard places to be.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Lovely flow and following of the form. Thank you for the description of the form, though it might not be as distracting from the piece if you put it in a drop note or a pop note. They are fun and clean up the page a bit another thing perhaps consider increasing the font size for easier reading?
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Review of sick pigeon  
Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: E | (4.0)
the world is full of pigeons, even the least pigeonlike of us is a pigeon about at least a small part of ourselves. Self insight is not a common trait in the human species. It is the part of the writer to try to get us to see around the dark corner of ourselves to evict our personal pigeons.
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Review by Spring in my Sox
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
What a sad way to put a failed relationship. The repetition of what's knit can always be unknit. It is always sad when relationships fall apart this makes it sadder because it is the deconstruction of something strong and beautiful that leaves the parts scarred.
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