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Review of So Alone  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. It sounds like you were deeply in love with someone you lost, my advice is to try to move on to someone new. I know it can be difficult, but the worst thing you can do is try to love someone you can't have.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like that I can kind of relate to this, I've been deeply in love before, so I know it can be painful to move on.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. You hit on something that affected all of us at least once in our lives, we've all had a night when we thought we heard something that was or wasn't there.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like how you explain what a monotetra is, I always like it when a poet takes the time to explain what type of poem he or she wrote to educate the readers. I don't know much about poetry, but I like learning more about it.
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Review of Daffodils  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I liked this poem, it was short and sweet. I like the cadence, the way you made it rhyme.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't catch any technical errors of any kind, good job!

What I liked: I liked the illustration that accompanied the poem, it was nicely done and had a charm all it's own. I never knew daffodils were orange and yellow, so I learned something.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. If this was based on reality, I'm astonished. The ending of this was like a bombshell. If this was fiction, you did an excellent job of weaving together a good story with a catchy ending! This story definitely deserves five stars!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind. Good job!

What I liked: I liked how everything came full circle, and the protagonist's boyfriend had a connection to the man on the plane. It was a really intense coincidence, but truth can be stranger than fiction, I'm sure something like this could happen in real life.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. This was an interesting concept, a lighthouse keeper slowly losing his mind until he makes a drastic decision, but I felt you could've gone more into the mind of the man and what was going on in his head, what he was felling, that caused him to make the jump.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind, other than the suggestion I made in the plot and content section.

What I liked: I liked the way you made us feel the protagonist's loneliness up in the lighthouse for all that time, anyone would go crazy in that situation!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I think it's great that you chose to have some New Year's resolutions, but as a former smoker my advice is to try to quit or cut down before January 1st, if quitting in January is your goal. I quit on November 1st, 2007 and I had tried to quit several times prior to that, unsuccessfully. If you aren't able to quit completely in January, then pick other times to quit throughout the year until you're successful. I quit by cutting down to two cigarettes a day for the week before I actually quit.

Also, if you want to quit Mountain Dew, I would suggest buying those pack of 8 sugar free drink mixes for 99 cents from the 99 Cents Only stores, if they have one in your area. They're great at killing a craving for soft drinks.

Let me know how successful you were!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the determination you have for living a healthier lifestyle. Keep it up! Also, you don't have to wait until New Year's to start living healthy, you can start that any time of the year.
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Review of Wildflower  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I liked this poem, I learned a new word (to me) with Sweet Alyssum, I had to look that word up while I was reading. You really showed a lot of passion for your lady love, and you used the metaphor of the wildflower effectively.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like the way you used a wildflower as a metaphor to describe the woman you love. You found so many ways to utilize that metaphor without overdoing it, good job!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I enjoyed this, it sounds like you remained a kid at heart. Some of the musicals you mentioned I've never seen, but I've seen Mary Poppins and Bedknobs and Broomsticks.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't catch any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the innocence of your way of looking at life. Too many of us get caught up in the bad things of life and only look at the negative aspects of life, but you seem to have found a way to stay young at heart. Others can learn from your example.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I found it interesting that you would choose to take a positive look at spiders, that's an interesting perspective.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind, but I noticed you said the spiders devour the insects at their leisure. Don't they drink the blood of the insects they capture? I guess devour sounds better in the poem, but isn't it kind of inaccurate? Since I'm not completely sure myself, I'm not deducting any points.

What I liked: I like how you covered so much ground with so few words. You some of the varied sizes of different spiders, their poison and eggs, I feel you did a good job.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. This was a cute item, I didn't see that ending coming. The 1950's has always fascinated me, and being born in the 1970's that makes any record of that time of interest to me, since I didn't experience it myself.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked reading about life in the 1950's! The ending was cute, too!
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Review of Siren Song  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. This was a nice attempt at writing a song, and the subject is something so many of us can relate to, losing the woman we love.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked it when you mentioned the 101, I lived in San Luis Obispo county for 20 years, and the 101 freeway runs through that county.
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Review of Against the Fence  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I thought you developed an interesting way for a leaf from a tree to look at life, to not be envious of the new leaves on the tree because they too will be in his place one day.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like the way you twisted the ending around and told the story from the perspective of one of the leaves on the tree.
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Review of Tempest  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. It's interesting that you took a woman's emotions and used them as a metaphor for a thunderstorm.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like the way you chose to follow the prompt in your own unique way, and I like the way you used humor in this poem.
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Review of Pills For Pain  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. This was a very realistic and plausible account of someone undergoing addiction to pain medication. I could understand your character's point of view, even though this hasn't happened to me personally.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the strong sense of realism in this piece.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. This is an interesting start to your Nano novel, you have an interesting point of view for your main characters. We think of them as terrorists, but you have made us understand their reasoning. You helped us get inside their minds.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I enjoyed this brief glimpse into the mind of someone I hadn't really thought long and deep about. You made a compelling argument for Islam!
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Review of Reflections  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. This was a beautifully written poem, I enjoyed it. It's Autumn right now, so it's the right time of year to read this poem.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: You taught me a new word, "dun" was something I had to look up in my dictionary. Thanks for expanding my vocabulary! I also liked the photo that accompanied the poem.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. You did a good job of following the prompt. You came up with a good reason for the protagonist not to go into the water.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors.

What I liked: I like that you included the prompt that inspired this poem/story. That way, the reader has an idea of how you came to write this.
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Review of Black Roses  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. This was a sad but realistic story, he died bravely serving his country. I feel bad for the young woman, but a lot of women have to go through this kind of thing these days. It was ironic he died on his way back home.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind, good job!

What I liked: I liked the stark realism of this story, it rings too true to current events.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. This was a sad story, I too have found dead baby birds before, and it always makes me sad. Since you couldn't help the bird or bring it back to life, at least you wrote a poem about it to honor its memory.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind, good job!

What I liked: I liked that you had enough of a heart to write a poem about this baby bird that you cared about.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I enjoyed this poem, I like poetry that explores the meaning of life. You listed several different sources of pleasure, and found each of them wanting.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind, good job!

What I liked: I liked the solution to the question you posed, that the answer lies within the human heart.
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Review of Yesterday  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. This was an excellent look at the human condition. You dealt with death, which is something we all have to face. This seemed very vivid and realistic.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind, good job!

What I liked: I liked how the man faced death without a lot of fear, he just accepted it.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. This was a cute little story, I think average young couples can relate to this.

Errors/Suggestions: I found this error: "It sinks mom, "sinks" should be changed to "stinks"

I found another error: adjust to one of the riggers of married life. I believe "riggers" is spelled "rigors," at least, that is how I've seen it spelled.

Another mistake: I was loosing my mind. "loosing" should be changed to "losing"

Another mistake: as hard as the tablets that Mosses brought down from Mt. Sinai. You misspelled Moses, you have three "S" and there should only be two.

What I liked: I liked the funny ending, and the scenario was realistic.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. I found the personality of the female reporter who supposedly wrote this piece to be charming. If she were a real person, I would hope that she would win the favor of Mr. Stone and marry him. She definitely seems motivated to start a relationship with him, I like that kind of spark in a woman.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind, good job!

What I liked: I like the personality of the reporter and her motivation to marry the archaeologist Mr. Stone. I like her spark! I wish a woman were that motivated to marry me!
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Review of String  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. This was a cute poem that seemed to be written from the perspective of a cat. The words flowed together nicely, I really enjoyed this.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like how cute it was that it seemed like a cat wrote this poem! I also like your extensive vocabulary.
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Review of Mommy, I'm Home  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I found this item with the random review tool. This was a scary story that was almost believable, the personality of the dead girl seemed realistic and plausible. The afterlife you described was frightening, and the ending caight me by surprise.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind. Good job! The only suggestion I would make is to explain why a child would be punished in the afterlife, in most religions children automatically go to Heaven because they are innocent. I'm not deducting points for that, because with such a size limiation you probably don't need a detail like that, and it isn't crucial to the story.

What I liked: For such a short story, this really packed a punch! This story reminded me of something Stephen King would write.
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