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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: Interesting story of betrayal and redemption. This story rings so true to reality, things like this have happened to people in real life.

Errors/Suggestions: This would only be a mistake if you live in the United States, but you spelled the word "color" with a "u" the way they do in Britain. If you are British or Canadian, then ignore this.

What I liked: I like the way the woman was dedicated to her husband, even after his death. She still felt guilty about her affair many years later, a lot of people wouldn't show that much loyalty.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a well-written poem about a slave girl in the old South. Her struggle is described, and her desire to be free. I'm glad there is a light at the end of the tunnel for her.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind. Good job!

What I liked: I like how you wrote about giving hope to someone who is in a horrible situation. I've had hard times in life, so I can relate somewhat to the life of a slave, I'm glad she is going to be free.
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Review of Dear Me  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting concept, a letter to yourself. I liked how it seemed that two personalities were debating. You really went into depth for a contest prompt, most people wouldn't have written something so elaborate. I felt you did a superior job with this!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the concept of two personalities waging war within your consciousness, but the stronger personality prevailed.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a beautiful yet sad love poem about a lost love, you did a good job of conveying your grief and your undying love for your dearly departed.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind, good job!

What I liked: I liked how dedicated to your loved one you are despite your loss.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a somewhat informative piece about a mammal, I was tantalized with curiosity trying to figure out what animal this was. You gave out a lot of information, but I still couldn't guess what it was.

Errors/Suggestions: I feel more information could've been given about the exact animal you were writing about, at first I thought it was a horse, but then I realized it was an aquatic mammal in Africa. In the title or description I think you should mention the name of this animal so people know.


What I liked: I kind of liked the guesswork involved in wondering what animal this was. I guess I'll just have to Google "river horse" to find out. Sometimes, being tantalized can be fun.
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Review of Glory and Honor?  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a beautifully written short story about war in the future. It reminded me of "Starship Troopers" by Robert Heinlein. I thought it was creative the way you built the universe or "world" that your characters live in, everything seemed plausible within the context of this story.

Errors/Suggestions: You have the word "ordinance" and that is misspelled; the word you wanted was "ordnace" with no "i" in the word. The version you have means a law or rule, but ordnance means artillery from the enemy.

What I liked: I liked the universe you set this story in, good job!
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Review of Lovesong  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an enjoyable love poem, it had a really personal feeling to it. If you were writing about a real person, I hope you get to be with that person.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked it when you mentioned "the moons of Mars," that's a reference I've never encountered in a poem before, and it is of interest to me personally, because I'm into science and science fiction.
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Review of Sparrow  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I enjoyed this poem about a bird, usually I find some difficulty interpreting some poetry because I'm not a poet myself, but this poem was easy for me to understand.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like how you were able to tell a complete story in the form of a poem.
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Review of How can this be?  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I tried to absorb the meaning of your philosophical musings, but I'm afraid it went over my head. I guess I just don't have a mind for this kind of stuff. I'd be interested in having you reply to this review and explain to me the meaning of what you wrote with this essay.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: It was interesting to read something philosophical for a change, what you wrote wasn't typical.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting account of your childhood, and the benefits you learned when your mother was raising you. I'm glad you were able to apply that knowledge to raising your own kids.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I think it is awesome that your mother took you to museums when you were a kid, that sounds like a great childhood!
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Review of Christmas Eve  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I really enjoyed this poem, I liked the topic and the cadence flowed smoothly. Poems about Christ interest me because I am a believer, and this poem was a cut above the average Christmas poem.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I enjoyed the message of this poem about why Christ was here and what we can receive from worshiping him, and I enjoyed the smooth flow of the cadence of the rhyming lines.
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Review of In Elysian Fields  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I recognized Shadowfax as Gandalf's horse from Lord of the Rings, and Pegasus from Greek mythology. The subject of this poem interested me, and the cadence was put together very nicely. I read a lot of poems where one line doesn't seem to have as many syllables as the line before it, but with this poem each line matched seemingly perfectly.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I enjoyed that you made characters out of two horses from mythology and literature, and I enjoyed the cadence of this poem. Great job!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting self-empowering poem on the part of the author about being in an abusive relationship; I hope you broke up with this person and moved on with your life.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like how every other line rhymed with each other, lines A and C rhymed with each other, and lines B and D rhymed with each other. I also like the fact that you had the courage to write about this, and that you are now hopefully experiencing a new happier chapter in your life.
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Review of Lurking Raven  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I enjoyed this poem, the idea of Death personified is a recurring concept that I have always enjoyed, much like episodes of the old black and white Twilight Zone television show. This was a well-written poem, and I learned two new words as I read it and looked the words up.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: There were several things I liked about this. I had to look up a couple of words, quiescent and harbinger; I like it when I see a word I don't know or that I can't pronounce, because I go to an online dictionary and look it up, and I learn something. I also enjoyed the sense of an afterlife, with the soul and body being separated at death. I also like the idea of Death personified as a living being, you did a good job with that.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This is a helpful article written for newbies, I like it when someone goes out of their way to try to teach the new people who are eager to learn. It's good that you mentioned Storymistress and Storymaster, they are very helpful and newbies should get to know who they are. You gave some good advice!

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind, but as a suggestion you might mention how long you've been on this site and how long it took you to get to know your way around.

What I liked: I liked the positive intentions behind this article, the desire to help newbies!
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This is a heart-breaking story of children suffering at the hands of irresponsible parents. I feel bad that this is a true story, I wish something could be done to help you when you were going through this. I suffered a different form of child abuse, I was beaten, but what you went through seems much worse.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like the honesty of this poem, and the courage you showed in sharing this with us.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: Some poems go over my head because I have difficulty interpreting them, and this is one of those poems. It seems to take place in Autumn, the author is longing for December. The words were beautifully placed, despite the fact that I didn't completely understand the poem.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the font you used, it was really beautiful. I also appreciate that you mentioned what type of poem this is, that is helpful to your readers.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting story of revenge and justice, it was enjoyable to see a rape victim get her revenge, and to see the aggressor get what was coming to him.

Errors/Suggestions: In this sentence, there is one too many "n's" in happened: Then something incredible happenned.

What I liked: I like the fantasy element, and I liked seeing the victim get her revenge. I also felt that Brazil was an interesting setting for a story. Not all fantastic events would take place in the United States!
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Review of Vlad's Wife  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an action-packed story from beginning to end, and all based on historical events. Well done! I enjoyed this, and I remember learning about the Ottoman Empire in my art history class in college.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I enjoyed the drama you managed to create from a historical event, this was as action-packed as a television show or a movie!
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Review of Morning Brew  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: I was an avid coffee drinker before I had to stop drinking caffeine because it reacts to my high blood pressure medication, so I know how important that morning cup of Joe can be to a person. I don't blame you for writing a poem dedicated to your favorite drink.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I like that you took the time to explain what a Cinquain is, that was helpful to me and I'm sure it was of interest to your readers. I also like the illustration that accompanied the text.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a beautiful poem with a positive message. I enjoyed it. I live in a house with a 6-year-old, and he brings me a lot of joy, so your words ring true.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't encounter any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked how true your poem is, and I enjoyed the positive message.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting poem, the angst and eloquence reminds me a little of Edgar Allan Poe. Usually I have trouble interpreting most poetry, but I like poems like this because I can get a grip on what the author is trying to say.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: terms like "stygian depths" and "vault" seemed appropriate for this type of poem, some might say those words are too over the top or expected in a poem like this, but I thought you inserted them nicely into this piece. I also liked the fact that you took the time to explain what prompted this poem to be written, and what kind of poem it is, because this information is of interest to your readers.
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Review of LED BY A STAR  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This is a beautifully rendered poem about the three wise men and the birth of Christ. It really makes you stop and think about what this season is really about.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: In addition to the poem itself, I enjoyed the colors you used, the green and red really gave this poem a festive feeling, just in time for Christmas!
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Review of Why Am I?  
Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was an interesting poem about a man questioning God about his own existence. Some of it went right over my head, but the discussion your character was having with God seemed deep and thought-provoking.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I liked the general theme of a man questioning man's existence to God, this is something I'm sure many of us have pondered during our lifetime.
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Review by Riverd0g
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Plot and Content: This was a cute story, your personality shined through in this. I enjoyed it, and I think this is the first poem I have read in this type of style. I guess I would label it as a "cute" style.

Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.

What I liked: I enjoyed the personality of the writer shining through on this poem, I hope to read more poetry like this in the futrure!
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