Plot and Content: This was an interesting post-apocolyptic cautionary tale, stories like this teach people to think about what we are doing to our world.
Errors/Suggestions: You started a sentence in the second paragraph with a lower-case letter, the first letter of the first woerd must be capitalized: he was called God In this sentence in the second paragraph, you're missing an apostrophe in the first word of the sentence: Lets leave this place, In the last sentence of the third paragraph, the first word of the sentence is missing an apostrophe, and the sentence doesn't end with a period, and needs one: Lets move on In the fourth paragraph, the first word of the sentence needs an apostrophe: Its a stroller, There were numerous other errors, you need to go through and edit this story exstensively.
What I liked: I enjoyed the message of this story, that humans could destroy their world if they don't shape up.
Plot and Content: This was an interesting poem that followed the Bible chronologically from the dawn of creation to the second coming of Christ. I found this poem uplifting, and the theme was of personal interest to me.
Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.
What I liked: I like how you explained at the bottom of the page what kind of poem this is, most people don't bother to do this, but I feel that it is of interest to readers to learn the technical aspects of what type of poem was written by the poet.
Plot and Content: This was a nice homage to Winter, I enjoyed the scenes I visualized through your poem. I live in California, so I enjoy reading about snowy winters elsewhere in the country.
Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.
What I liked: I liked the Winter scenery you described!
Plot and Content: This was a bitter-sweet poem about a graveyard and pondering the people who lie in the graves. I've done that myself, so I can personally relate to the theme of this poem. Some people might say this is spooky, but I enjoy pondering what the people named on the gravestones were really like before they died.
Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.
What I liked: I enjoyed how you breathed life into the people whose names were on the graves, you made them seem interesting.
Plot and Content: This was a nicely written ghost story, I knew something had to be going on when the man was looking for his name on the memorial. Spooky, but not too scary, I liked that!
Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.
What I liked: I like ghost stories like this that have a happy ending, rather than being the type of story that is meant to scare people.
Plot and Content: This was an above average poem that I thoroughly enjoyed, the topic and subject of the poem was interesting to me because I'm 40, so part of the poem relates to me. Thank you for such an enjoyable read!
Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.
What I liked: I enjoyed the subject of this poem and the theme, especially since I could relate to and benefit from the advice in this poem. It's nice to know that I have some extra years to look forward to!
Plot and Content: This was a beautiful poem, I like the structure of it and the topic.
Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.
What I liked: I'm glad you mentioned what kind of a sonnet this is, most people don't take the time to share information like this, but I think it helps and enlightens the reader.
Plot and Content: I like poems that tell a cohesive story, and you've done an exceptional job of accomplishing that with this storoem. You've managed to weave a story that engages the reader and generates emotions, I felt myself rooting for the dog during the fire scene.
Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.
What I liked: I like the theme of this story, that the dog was sent by heaven.
Plot and Content: This was an interesting love poem, looking at various people who are in love. I stayed interested through each example, this was well-written.
Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical erors of any kind.
What I liked: I enjoyed the contrast between the young couple who were recently married, and the older couple who had been married a long time.
Plot and Content: I liked the theme of this piece, Christmas is a good subject to write about. I think you chose a unique perspective to write about how the animals react to Christmas, I've never seen it done this way before.
Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.
What I liked: I liked the theme and I also liked the illustrations that accompanied the text.
Plot and Content: This was an endearing account of your relationship with your service animal. You must have a lot of love for this dog.
Errors/Suggestions: I saw no technical errors of any kind, but I'm curious about what disability you have that requires you to need the skills of a service dog.
What I liked: I like how personal this account is, it sounds like you really love this dog!
Plot and Content: This was a 55-word story written for a contest, and the thing that struck me was how difficult it is to write shorter stories, and the skill with which this story was written. I've tried writing 55 word stories before for a writing contest in San Luis Obispo, and I found it very hard. Congratulations for writing a story with s setting, a plot, and a conclusion with so few words.
Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.
What I liked: I liked how you were able to show a plot and a conclusion with so few words!
Plot and Content: This was an interesting story of people in a rural area and a child's lost animal that had been assumed to be lost forever. These people were interesting and their situation had me interested enough in them to keep reading to find out more.
Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.
What I liked: I really liked the surprise happy ending! I'm glad Poor Poet was okay!
Plot and Content: I usually have trouble interpreting poetry, but this poem of yours was easy for me to comprehend, and I loved it. You brought up great points about life and the universe.
Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.
What I liked: I enjoyed the examples you used in this poem, I was able to visualize the things you wrote about.
Plot and Content: This was a well-written horror story, it has a good Halloween vibe to it. I thought it was interesting that the mother was able to sense the evil being in her child's room, that made this seem more plausible to me for some reason. Women seem to have an intuitive sense for those kinds of things.
Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.
What I liked: I liked the surprise ending, I never would've thought that the boy wasn't as innocent as he seemed.
Plot and Content: This was an imaginative work of fiction, but I couldn't tell if you were talking about people metaphorically, or anthropomorphic animals.
Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors, but you might want to give credit to the artist who made those animated dancing chicks, or mention what website you got them from or who supplied them. As an artist, that information is important to me, and I'm sure it would be important to others, too.
What I liked: I really liked the animated images of the dancing chicks.
Plot and Content: This poem made me visualize a peaceful place, the garden you described sounded beautiful. I've heard of feng shui, I didn't realize it could apply to a garden.
Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.
What I liked: I liked the overall composition and the scene I was able to visualize in my mind from reading this. I would sure love to visit this garden you described!
Plot and Content: This was an interesting tale made more realistic by showing us what a day in the life of a clown really is like, including how stressful it can be. This was a very creative story!
Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.
What I liked: I liked the surprise ending, where it all turned out to be the clown's imagination.
Plot and Content: I like love poems about destiny, and yours was well-written and the cadence flowed well. Rhyming poems and love poems are my favorite types of poems, and you have those bases covered with this piece. You did a good job of conveying your love for the person you wrote about, and you did a good job of delivering your message to your readers.
Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.
What I liked: I like love poems about destiny, the topic and theme of this poem were well chosen!
Plot and Content: This was an interesting poem, I'm sure all of us have thought of changing the past at one time or another, I know I have. You did a good job of dealing with this issue, I think this was a well-written poem with an interesting theme.
Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.
What I liked: I liked the theme or "message" of this poem, that we must not dwell on re-living the past and sieze hold of the present.
Plot and Content: This was an interesting approach to a poem, by patterning it after a song. I like the theme of the poem, I liked the cadence and the lyrics made it seem like a real song.
Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.
What I liked: I liked the fact that at the end of the poem you told us what song inspired this poem, it helps the readers to understand the poem a little better.
Plot and Content: I found this item by using the dice on the left side of the screen, the Simply Positive group normally has five items to review each week, but two of them are set to private, so I chose to review your poem instead. Poems aren't my strong point, so bear with me; I'm not a poet so I have difficulty interpreting poetry. From what I can gather, this was a nice poem about hospitality among guests and friends who are at someone's house. You used symbolism in this poem that I was unsure of; you spoke of others sitting on a throne, I was unsure what you meant by that. The overall theme seemed to be that you would show others kindness even when they don't show kindness to you.
Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind. As a suggestion, you mentioned a mouse at one point, and it seemed that this word was inserted because it rhymed, but I couldn't see how it related to the rest of the poem. My advice would be to re-write that section of the poem and use a different word that is more relevant to the rest of the poem. I hope you don't think I'm being too hard on you, I liked your poem overall, I'm just picking out minor things I had a problem with.
What I liked: This poem had a nice cadence, it had the right feel for a poem. I liked the theme of showing kindness when you can't expect it in return.
Plot and Content: You wrote an honest introduction that was to the point, and I think you got your point across. Honesty is a good thing to have with your readers if you want to cultivate a following behind your writing.
Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind, but a suggestion would be to go into more detail about your other account. Have you lost track of your other account, and you need someone to help you find it? Or do you know of your other account, and you are having a contest to see who can find it first? You need to make that more clear, because the way you've written it, either scenario could be a possibility. Let me remind you that you can only have one account here at Writing.com unless you pay to have an authorized secondary account.
What I liked: I liked your honesty and sincerity, though you are young you took an assertive approach to introducing yourself to your readers.
Plot and Content: This was an intereting post-apocolyptic story of survival after a nuclear war. It was vivid and realistic, and frightening. I think you did a good job of describing your world, and the repitition technique you used added to the composition in a complementary way.
Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.
What I liked: I liked the chilling surprise ending.
Plot and Content: You made a valid point here, if people review and point out the negative qualities without pointing out any of the positive attributes, then that is just mean and inappropriate.
Errors/Suggestions: I didn't spot any technical errors of any kind.
What I liked: I like how you took your anger and channeled it constructively to write this poem.
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