Title: I like that the title didn't tell what the poem was about, that there were a million possibilities and I had no clue what to expect. Style: Each line break was in the perfect spot, making each word and line stand out. Central Idea: Very touching, very beautiful. I could definitely relate to this, which is an added bonus. I love the way you showed the desert/heaven differences. It was all very touching. "Samantha" is a very lucky girl. Ending: Put a smile on my face. So beautiful and loving. It tied everything together and flowed nicely. Wonderful! Favorite Line: to the desert of the soul you cast me --very powerful line, I thought. Suggestions: none. Final Thoughts: The repeated lines didn't bother me, which is surprising, but you used them so well. I loved this poem! Thank you for sharing this with us.
Title: Fits the poem and caught my attention, so it definitely did its job. Style: The [lack of] style worked well with your words and kept everything flowing beautifully. Central Idea: You captured it! You captured the feeling of listening to music beautifully and brought me to a place of sitting alone listening to Mozart or Tchaikovsky! You gave a truly beautiful description and wrote it in such a touching way that I really don't know what I can really say about it...it's just beautiful! Ending: Like the ending of a song, it was very powerful and left a mark of its own! Favorite Line: In the virtuoso's gentle hand. --Something about it stuck out in my mind. Well said. Suggestions: only one (typo): Line 6: rhythyms should be rhythms. Final Thoughts: I don't think there is anything left to say! This was a beautiful poem and I loved reading it!
Title: The title you choce worked well and had so many possibilities that I had to look into it, so it worked perfectly.
Style: the style you chose definitely worked well with your words. The short lines made each and every line stand out a little longer in my mind.
Central Idea: Although I am not a very religious person, I was very touched by this poem. It gave me a feeling of peace and serenity, a feeling of being innocent.
Ending: The ending definitely gave a final blast of emotion and left me feeling like we will all be saved one day no matter what we do. It gave me a feeling of hope and peace, which is always a great thing.
Favorite Line: I really cannot pick just one. The whole poem was just so beautiful and touching, that I cannot single out just one piece.
Suggestions: none.
Final Thoughts: Aboslutely beautiful! Thank you for sharing this with us...I think it was definitely the perfect poem for me to read today. Thank you and keep writing!!
Title: Suits the poem without being the obvious choice. It was a bit misleading....I was really expecting something different, but I was very happy with what I found, so, I think you made the right choice with the title, though I wonder how many people have passed over it, expecting something completely different.
Style: I think the style you chose really helped the flow of your words. Usually, a repititious line bothers me a little bit, but it worked so well in this piece, that I definitely feel it helped more than hurt.
Central Idea: I think that just about every person here on WDC relate to this poem, or, at least, think back to a time when they could --which I think is a wonderful thing because it strikes a reader when they can actually relate to your words (I think...).
Ending: I like the change in style and loss of repitition. You ended it perfectly, changing it and getting your point across. Until the second-to-last stanza, I really thought the poem was going in a different direction and I really loved the surprise of where it went.
Favorite Line: The second-to-last line really struck a chord in me. I really felt it.
Suggestions: Just one: don't change anything!!
Final Thoughts: Beautifully written and very touching. I could really feel it and I think you did an amazing job. Thank you for sharing this with the rest of us.
TITLE: Obviously, the title fit. It also kind of caught my attention because it's not a very average title to see.
ACTUAL POEM: Absolutely adorable and written perfectly! It flows so well from beginning to end and definitely showed that you have a wonderful talent. You brought me right to thinking about watching a dog scratch and bite itself and, by the end, had me scratching my arm! Aboslutely wonderful job!
ENDING: Perfect! It fits with and ties together the rest of the poem beautifully and made me giggle just one last time before it was all over.
SUGGESTIONS: The only thing I can find is in the first line of the last stanza and only a mere typo. You typed "doggies'thick." That's all. (nitpicky, I know...sorry)
Altogether, it's an adorable, wonderful piece and I loved reading it! I need a little mood lightener and I found it here. Great job! Pat yourself on the back for me (I'm too busy scratching myself...lol) and keep writing!!
Sapphire
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