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Rated: E | (4.5)
Great little snapshot.

Just an update, I am now back as an unofficial month host, and again, I made some pretty big changes to the format to encourage more participation. You should have a look!


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Love the spectral spiders and tiny terrors lines.

They remind me of the time we had a friend and his wife stay over night when we first bought our farm. The wife had a phobia of all insects. When they went to leave, she couldn't get to her car as they had accidentally parked on an ants nest and they were all running around near the car door (on the ground thankfully). She eventually managed to leap into her car, which was no mean feat as she was not a small lady.

My wife watched them leave commiserating on her phobia and then went inside to clean up the guest room etc. While we were outside saying goodbye, a batch of baby huntsmen spiders had hatched and were crawling everywhere in the room. On the bed. On the walls. They were dropping off the ceiling.

Rather then panic ourselves, we could only marvel at how lucky our friend was that she had left when she did, or that those tiny terrors hadn't hatched during the night while she was laying in bed!

Fourteen years later, we still have not told her of her close call.


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Awesome man. Loved it. A nice slant on the western revenge tale.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hilarious. Well done.



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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is great. Love the combination of poetry and essay. It adds gravitas.


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Review of Immortal Tear  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Mate - who gave you 3 and a half stars?

I very, very rarely give out 5 stars - and I reserve it for stories that hit me in my heart where epic stories live.

Your story is epic in scope and I loved it. I used to write/draw (and publish) comic books in my youth - and this had all the hallmarks of a great cosmic comic book narrative.

My only suggestion (and I'm not here to tackle grammar or story structure, this time) is that the ending should be more specific about how his children brought back his loved ones. Is it time travel (my vote)? Or is it ressurrection? Just a few words of specificity - and you've got something that you could build on a later date to flesh out into a longer story - or turn into a great little cosmic independent comic book story.


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello,

I'd love to participate.
I'm always dreaming of increasing my ability to actually write.
I would aim for 8 weeks
All my handles, usernames are the same: Thundersbeard


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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Great template. I wish I had noticed this sooner when I ran my own contests. Still, I know i will return here next time I get a bee in my bonnet and want to start another contest.


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Noice. Great mitre, great rhythm, great flow and a bitter sweet sentiment to go with it all.


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Review of Loving You  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Really quite a lovely poem with lots of neat little rhymes.

I'm not really sure what it's about though. I think you could have this clearer ;)

I jest. I hope the other lover in this picture perfect poem appreciated your effort.

Well done, I liked it.


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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Awesome. Reminded me of Waylander by David Gemmell. Well done. Some people will no doubt complain about the use of slang like "gonna" being out of place in that time, but you had to showcase the gritty essence of a western somehow!


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Nice job. Excellent mitre, not a single clumsy moment in the whole poem.

I particularly like the second stanza and it's sentiment that the story lives in us beyond the last page.

My favourite couplet is the last one of the first verse, "and left for dust motes to attend -- While heroes lie in mute repose." Superb imagery.

My only complaint, like all my favourite stories, it had to end ... I want more!



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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
A nice mix of the daring and dry humour associated with detective stories.

Could do with some tightening up, especially in the roof scene with the transition from going to shoot Vinny to releasing the birds. Maybe also describing the distinctive sound a flock of birds make when they are startled into flight.


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Great piece of writing, mate. Very professional. You should send that off somewhere.


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Rated: E | (4.5)
I really hope you are still working on this. Some awesome ideas in here. I'd like to see more written on the differing settings ie. Victorian or what I call Americana (wild west).

If you want to cement some of these passages into 300 word articles for The Clockwork Crier - I totally wouldn't hold it against you ;)


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Review of The Qualdratron  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
By the power invested unto me by Beck loves NaNo! to judge the "The Steampunk Authors' Guild 's sponsorship of "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge

I declare you the winner!

Great flash fiction story utilising not just the prompts required, but showcasing your knowledge of other tropes of the genre. You also demonstrated an ability to tell a complete story within the 300 words that richly showcased your characters.

Merit badge, forthwith.

I hope you will drop into our community at "The Steampunk Boiler Room and say hello. It would be great to have you along for the ride.

If you are interested the group has two new active campfire creatives: "Steampunk World and "Steampunk Character

Hope to see you there, and again, Congratulations!


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Short Review: Good job.
Long Rating: 5.


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Short post.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi,

I'm donating 50,000 GPS and a 5 star rating for the Steampunk merit badge!

TIA!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
You present your opinion well here. A few little grammarly errors , but nothing major.

And for the record, although Bruce Jenner is not biologically a woman, you cannot deny that he is a brave soul to wear a dress and wig and self identify in front of the world
He's a braver human then me or you, I suspect, and as such is a hero to many others who would like to wear their peccadillos on their blouse sleeve (as the case may be)


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Review of Twisted Mister  
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Nice rhythmn. Didn't put a step out once.


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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Flawless.


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Review of My Ex-Dog Blue  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Nice. Does need some work, in particular the 2nd stanza doesn't quite flow.

Some great lines and imagery. I found my interest piqued with each new word, wondering what the couplet would be.


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Rated: E | (4.0)
I love a sad story.

I liked this very much. I would have liked to read a more visceral description of the lovers though. Was hard to visualise, my perceptions kept changing with the descriptions.


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Review of A small rant  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Interesting. Formatting your opening paragraph into 2 separate paragraphs complete with line spacers would add to the tension/hook of your piece.

It's a little bit of a chicken/egg scenario, thoughts of suicide and selfharm.


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